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Review of I've Been  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a pretty cool poem, and it's true what you wrote about. I can relate to this poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I liked the theme of this poem. Poems with a message are one of my favorite types of poetry. It's like you're imparting your wisdom to the readers.
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Review of A Possum's Story  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a fascinating true story deserving of five stars! I live with two cats, so I can relate to your love of animals.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors.

What I liked: I love the way you developed a friendship with a wild animal; most people would be scared of it, and would try to get rid of it. This tells what kind of a person you are, you're a very special kind of person.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is the first collage poem I've ever read; I didn't know it was an art form to take clips from magazines and put them together in a new form.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I like the creativity you used to compile this poem, I normally don't "get" poetry, but I appreciate your effort with this poem.
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Review of The Beast  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a good story just in time for Halloween! I was hoping the Simply Positive group would choose some scary stories like this for the month of October, and this story didn't disappoint me.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked the ending, I didn't expect it. I also like the fact that you used only dialogue for this challenge; I think you did an excellent job!
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Review of The Teddy Bear  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a very sentimental short story, kind of sad, but I think you did a good job.

Errors/Suggestions: In the second paragraph, "mothers pain" should have an apostrophe between the "R" and "S" in mothers.

What I liked: I liked the emotions this story evoked. The young woman seemed very real, and I felt her pain. I think you did a very good job!
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Review of Ariadne  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I don't really understand poetry, but I'll try to do my best to review this poem. I thought this poem might be about a relationship. I was curious if the journey you wrote about was metaphorical, or if it was based on an actual journey.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors, but I thought you were a guy, so I was curious why you used Ariadne to represent you, since she was a female character.

What I liked: I liked a journey used as a metaphor, everyone likes to go on trips, so it's fun to think about.
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Review of To the Rescue  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was a cool story about a grandmother and her grandson. I used the new random story tool for the first time, and your story was the first story to pop up, so I'm reviewing it.

Errors/Suggestions: In paragraph 8, there's a comma that shouldn't be there. It says "Did you ever wonder, why?" and I think it should be: "Did you ever wonder why?" Also, in paragraph 19, you left out an "e" in the word someone.

What I liked: I like the fact that the faeries turn out to be real, and I love the way the grandmother is sharing her secret with her grandson. My grandmother told me stories like this when I was a boy, so I'm glad you're continuing the tradition.
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Review of Fiery Red Hair  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting piece concerning death. I didn't understand if this was the woman's fantasy, or if there was a fantasy element and something supernatural was going on, like in a Twilight Zone episode.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I liked the feelings you evoked when you wrote about that earlier time, that was an interesting period in history.
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Review of Mental Circus  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: A nice little poem, and a nice play on words. I have a little bit of difficulty reviewing poems, because I'm not into poetry, but I think I got the feel of what you were trying to say with this one. Good job!

Errors/Suggestions: I think you should make the title of this poem in bold lettering. This isn't important, but I think it is a nice little touch that would make the poem look nicer.

What I liked: I like the title, mental circus is a nice play on words.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a decent little love poem, you really show the emotion behind how you feel about the person you're writing about.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors.

What I liked: I liked the passion you showed with this poem, you must really love the person this love poem is directed to. Good job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Writing a flash fiction story is a challenge, I've written stories of less than a thousand words and had to cut the story down, so I can only imagine what it must be like to write a story of only three hundred words.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: This was a cute story, and it seemed very realistic. I think you did a good job, and you deserved to win the contest!
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Review of Thoughts on life  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem, and I found myself agreeing with the theme of this poem. Many times in my life I have strove to be something that I am not. It takes a lot of life experience to figure out what we want to be in life.

Errors/Suggestions: In line two of paragraph two, after the word growth, you have a comma that has no space after it.

What I liked: I liked the message of this poem, that we should not try to be what we are not. I like the part where you said to know your destiny is to be divine; that makes sense to me. You seem very wise!


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Review of Silent Seduction  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting love poem written from the female perspective.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: It was interesting to read a poem that shows how a female reacts to the man she loves. As a guy, it's easy for me to forget that women react differently than we do. You did a pretty good job, and I liked how you had a lot of words that started with the same letter.
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Review of Music of Love  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting love poem. I think it was well written.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors, but I was confused because your name is Nikola, but the poem was written from a female perspective. I thought Nikola was a guy's name.

What I liked: I like the mood your poem evokes; the language you used sets a very romantic scene in my mind as I read the poem. I think you did a very good job!


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute Christmas card, and it was a nice surprise at the end to find that it was written for a dog!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors in the poem, but there is an invalid item linked at the beginning of the item. I think it was a good idea that you had the photo of the dog at the end, so people understand that Gus is a dog.

What I liked: I like the fact that someone would go through so much effort for a pet they love.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Isis was a goddess in Egypt, and Egypt is in Africa, so Isis is important to African-Americans. I suppose you already knew that, but just in case, I thought I'd tell you. Isis is a very popular goddess. There was a TV show on Saturday mornings about her when I was a boy in the 1970s.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors.

What I liked: I like the way you got all of the first letters of each sentence and had them spell out Divine Mother Isis. The sentences of the poem correlated with the message of the goddess you were writing about, and it made sense.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting non-fiction story of one of your personal adventures.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any errors, but I have a suggestion: I think you should mention what state you live in, because some of the wildlife you mentioned doesn't exist where I live, in California. You did mention the clinic was in the state of New York, so that tells me you're on the East coast, but I think it would be helpful if you mentioned the state where you live, so people in other areas of the country can get an idea of the different types of wildlife in your neck of the woods.

What I liked: I liked that you went out of your way to help that animal. Most people wouldn't have gone through that much trouble if it would've inconvenienced them. You're a really good person!
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Review of Dear God  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This seemed to be a lamentation to God, and I think it was very well-done. You seemed to have it rhyme in all the right places, and the quality seemd to be equal to that of a professional writer. Greeting card companies hire people like you to write for them, and what those people do is no easy task.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors or room for improvement.

What I liked: I'm a Christian and I believe in God, so the work of any writer who assumes God is real appeals to me, because I know atheists who would try to mock me for my beliefs, so it's nice to read something from a fellow Christian.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting essay that describes the difference between the mind and the soul. I can't say I disagree with the assertions you made.

Errors/Suggestions: I'm not absolutely sure, but in the second paragraph, I think you should have "whose" where you have "who's" but I'm not an expert at grammar, so I'm not completely sure.

What I liked: I liked the fact that you mentioned God being responsible for the creation of your mind and soul, I'm a Christian and I agree with that view very strongly.
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Review of Pigeon Parade  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem about the behavior of different types of birds, and I found it interesting.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I thought it was interesting the way the fields were replaced by the shopping centers, and I also found it interesting when you described the behavior of the pigeons. I'm interested in knowing what the lesson was about the male pigeon who was dissed by a female and ten moved onto another; was it that males keep on trying and never give up?
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Review of Lavender Blue  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a fun and relaxing poem. Poetry isn't my strong point, so I don't know if there were any hidden messages in this poem, and I wasn't completely sure what you were talking about. I assumed it was about blue jeans and comfortable old clothes that were blue.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors.

What I liked: I liked the color blue you used for the letters, blue is my favorite color. Even though I wasn't sure if I interpreted this poem correctly, I still loved the poem!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You really wrote this from your heart, it made me re-think how I thought about Michael Jackson fans. Seeing how one fan felt about him was eye-opening.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked the fact that you gave the personal impact MJ's life and death had on you, it made it so much more personal than if you had tried to give a more objective overview.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poll. It caught my eye, so I had to review it.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I was about 15 or 16 when I realized I liked to write, but I had tried it at 13 and liked it, but it didn't catch on until I was 16. I read a book about writing for television when I was 15, and that's what got me into writing.


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an amazing view into a day in the life of a United States Marine. My dad was in the Marines, so I'm always curious to learn more about it.

Errors/Suggestions: I don't know if this is a rule or not, but when I write twenty-year-old, I put hyphens in. Another thing, I think you switched back and forth between past tense and present tense. That's an easy mistake to make, I had a writing teacher in college point that out to me.

What I liked: I like the way you described what the various abbreviations were, such as staff sergeant (SSgt.) and corporal (Cpl.). Most people wouldn't have taken the time to explain that to the readers.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I don't think I've ever read a poem strictly about chess yet, but there's a first time for everything. You did a good job of writing about this subject, and you were able to keep me enthralled without boring me. Great job!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked how you were able to describe chess without getting too technical. That is soemthing that's very difficult to do, because I know that if I was writing about chess, I might get carried away describing the moves in too much detail.
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