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Review of My love for you  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is so sweet&romantic!
I'm impressed
Keep up the good work!
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Review of For Lily  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a nice poem.
I could really feel the emotion.
It really made me sad too.
But a happy sad in a way because the poem was so beautiful.
Good Job!
Keep up the good work your doing great so far! :)

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Review of Love Late  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Awe!!
This is such a good poem it made me so sad.
Good Job.
Keep up the good work your doing great so far!

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Review of Longing  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great poem.
I could really feel the emotion.
All you said was so true!
Good job!
Keep up the good work your doing great so far! :)

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Review of Dance  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great poem!
It made me feel all naturelike when I read it.
You have an awesome gift here.
Keep up the good work your doing good so far!
But I did find an error:
"For your are safe, my dear." it should be you not your.

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Review of What do you see?  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Awe this is a sweet little cute poem.
When I read it it made me smile.
The ending was especially great.
You are really talented.
Keep up the good work your doing fine so far!:)

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Review of Graduation  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great poem.
I really liked it.
Keep up the good work! :)


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Review of Clear  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Fantasic!
This is an awesome poem!
You really haveome skills here.
This kinda sounds like a song too.
Bravo!
Keep up the good work your doing great! :)

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Review of Confused love  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is nice poem.
Excellent!
Keep up the good work! :)

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Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love your poem!
It fantastic!
Keep up the good work!
Excellent!!!
Bravo!
Good Job! :)

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Review of Why me?  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a very interesting. story but you have so many mistakes.
Your missing comas and ending marks.
I changed somethings to give you an idea what I'm talking about.
You have some spelling errors too.

“You can never tell with Aunt Lorna.” I laughed knowing I didn’t really need all these clothes . “Right, lets go then I don’t want you late for your flight now do I?” said mum.

“Here we are.”

“Jude Cooper! You know that wont work on me.” “Do I really have to go?” I whinged

bmw you need to abbreviate bmw like B.M.W.

n11 what is that?

“Damn it! Will Henry ever learn to put things up after himself!” shouted Richard.

"Hmm who’s Henry?" I thought. This should be in italics it's a thought. You should also put it in quotation marks.

“Darling! Its so good to see you, how are you!” shouted Lorna. If she's shouting there needs to be exclamation points.

“I’m fine.” You need a period after your sentences in dialog as well.

Also you shouldn't space that much in between paragraphs it makes the story even more long. If a story is too long a reader might loose interest. So you might wanna break this into chapters.
Good Job and Continue writing!

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Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Awe.. This story is so sweet and touching.
I like that all the things your said were so true.
I worry about things like that all the time when I'm in relationships.
Like what will the future hold? yah know?
Good Job! Keep up the good work!

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Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a Fantastic poem!
I could feel the emotion in every word you said.
But, you do have a couple errors:
"But I didn't know it would hurt this badly" it should be just bad not badly. I think badly ruins the flow of the poem.
"Was that I all I ever was to you?" should be" Was that all I ever was to you?'
"I loved you and would've given everything up if you had wanted to be with me" it should be " I loved you"
Maybe you should add some comas here and there. I think it would make the poem be ever more dramatic and emotional.
Good Job! Keep up the good work!

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Review of Once Again  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a nice poem but I don't really understand what it's about.
Could you explain it too me?
Good Job!
Keep up the good work.
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Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a great poem I could feel the emotion.
But I didn't understand this line: "She may be you happy dish"
You might wanna re-phrase that.
Good Job!

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Review of Leave Me Alone  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a nice poem but I don't really understand what your trying to say.
Could you explain it to me?
Keep up the good work!
Good Job! :)

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Review of The Uniform  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (3.0)
This is a nice poem but I don't really understand what your trying to say.
Could you explain it too me?
Good Job!:)

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Review of crossroads  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a good poem.
But you have a couple grammar errors.
"Some had owns you now" doesn't sound right to me.
"when destiny tolds me" there shouldn't be a s after told
"the one born for me" you can take out the one and just put "born for me" because you put "the one" in line above.
You don't need to repeat it twice.
"Changes are times never gone" may be you should put "changes are times that are never gone" I think it makes more sense.
"dhear?" do you mean "dear?"
"starts should be start" and "ends" should be "end" no s.
Keep up the good work!


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Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a awesome poem!
I could really feel the emotion.
I think I can kinda understand what this poem is about.
Good Job! :)

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Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Great Story!
It's so good I'm speechless.
Bravo! Bravo!
You have an excellent gift here!
Keep up the good work and Keep writing!
Good Job! :)

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Review of But a kiss i ask  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Awe, this is such a cute sweet poem!
This poem made me smile when I read it.
Excellent!!
Good Job! :)

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Review of Time  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Good poem but I'm kind of lost on what your trying to say here.
I would love it if you could explain it to me.
Excellent!!
Good Job! :)

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Review of Poem for Peace.  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is such a good poem and it speaks the truth.
I wish there was peace in the world as well.
Bravo!!
Good Job! :)

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Review of The Butterfly  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a wonderful poem.
Excellent!
Keep up the good work! :)

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Review of if i ever  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This a really good poem!
Excellent!
Good Job!

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