Hello Frances,
There's something honest and straightforward about this piece of self revelation. The sketch you drew has the ingredients of what makes an interesting person. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congrats and have a lovely day.
I find it pretty novel to see a person who wants to be in the shadows rather than light. That contributes to being mysterious and the viewer becomes curious to know you.
What is interesting is that this "self sell" is not just about the physical appearance but it also highlights the mental side of the person.
"....great personality and a terrific sense of humor."
That should be a welcome feature for self and friends as well. What is life without humor?
Details show that you know yourself very well and that is something good to know.
Hello Sean,
night sky is an eternal conundrum. Often makes me think about what lay behind the darkness at night dotted by a billion twinkling stars and the sunlit broad light of the day. Both phases are alluring and attractive. Shade and light are the two faces of the same sky.
Your thoughts on this endless roof over the world are well composed and sound inquisitive.
" What drives your thoughts is what you want to know. The endless possibilities waiting, hiding, under the allure of those bright baubles"
I fully appreciate your wonder and your curiosity about the night sky as I too happen to be an avid star gazer and the expanding sky.
I and my life look so small before the elements of which the sky is a part. Yet, they are no threats. They help us to contemplate and wonder as to who made these beautiful eternal things of the universe.
I appreciate the prose style and imagery you have used in describing the night sky. Have a wonderful WDC Account Anniversary!
aunt Catherine appears to be kindly and hearty person. She seems human to the core judging by the portrait you painted of her.
"She gave nothing but love,
this sister of my father"
Relatives with an instinct to help are rare to come by. You have had your her in an hour of need. Such people are a real blessing to thank for.
I find it quite amazing that even in eighties, she was making "magical blankets" for the "red-haired baby boys." Quite a patient person she appears. I love the combination of color and magic you used.
I have enjoyed this well composed free verse with an unmistakable rhythm.
It looks like a haunted mansion with people who lived there a long time ago. You wove an interesting story with those prompt words (?) using the senses of seeing, hearing, and taste and the feel of fire(touch).
A clear picture of the ghostly story emerges out of those very curious sounding words. Rapacious for one, made me think of the elderly person you met and her intentions in forcing attention on you. But the cookies are inviting enough and so it didn't take long for you to break the scruples and enter a strange white mansion with no idea as to who lived there.
I find it a scary and horrible to have a fire all around you and instead of swooning away you think of the firemen. That's positive thinking in the middle of being caught in a catastrophe.
I have enjoyed this writing exercise with endless possibilities.
Have a wonderful WDC Account Anniversary, DragonWrites!
Quite an inspiring life you have had. My review of this article is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on having completed another year at the WDC. Have a great day.
It is a great metaphor of life. A busy and an active person has hardly time to complain or regret. On the contrary, he finds new challenges and new ways to learn more about the job, people and the world. There is nothing like experience which is of great value. And you seem to have it in plenty.
I appreciate your attitude to learn even at forty. Learning has no age limit. That is the beauty and novelty of learning new things. I have been learning Spanish for the last few months and I am thrilled by what I come across.
Your openness to challenges took you to heights you have never imagined. You have had the pleasure of enjoying the rewards your hard work reaped. You were indeed a "moving object".
This is an ideal life and anyone who takes a leaf out of it is definitely going to benefit.
Quite an inspiring life you have had. My review of this article is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on having completed another year at the WDC. Have a great day.
It is a great metaphor of life. A busy and an active person has hardly time to complain or regret. On the contrary, he finds new challenges and new ways to learn more about the job, people and the world. There is nothing like experience which is of great value. And you seem to have it in plenty.
I appreciate your attitude to learn even at forty. Learning has no age limit. That is the beauty and novelty of learning new things. I have been learning Spanish for the last few months and I am thrilled by what I come across.
Your openness to challenges took you to heights you have never imagined. You have had the pleasure of enjoying the rewards your hard work reaped. You were indeed a "moving object".
This is an ideal life and anyone who takes a leaf out of it is definitely going to benefit.
A poem of self discovery and a statement of the true self as viewed by the poet. The poet's multidimensional personality is shown quite clearly and emphatically. The hidden potential that women have should find the outlet.
"I have purpose, I have real worth,
Many gifts I've yet to unearth,"
Self confidence is mirrored here. The only requirement is that she needs "compassion, a soft place to land,
An open mind and gentle hand."
"I am women, strong and wild,
Inner warrior goddess and inner child."
The above lines remind me of the line " The hand that rocks the cradle, rules the world." A mother is influential in shaping the minds of her children and thus make them powerful and great.
This poem assures me that women are not meek, quiet or complacent. They do have raging minds and an unending and inexhaustible inner light and stamina.
This is quite an inspiring poem.
Rhyming and rhythm are admirable and the imagery is visual and it appeals to my mind.
I am truly impressed by this essay on writing. Writing takes time, patience and the nerve and passion to keep the fire burning.
You said something very interesting. "I did not choose writing, writing had chosen me." That means the urge to write stayed steady on your mind. Right?
Writing is an art. It takes talent and skill to become successful writer. Writing is therapeutic and a powerful medium of communication. Writing is an outlet for emotions and feelings and thoughts.
It is a proven historical fact that the pen is mightier than a sword. Almost all the rebellions and reformations are based on powerful writings.
"If you really want to be a writer you must invest in reading and writing." The more we read, the better we write. I think this is an experience with all genuine writers.
"The idea or ideas are essentials in writing." I like and agree with the opinion that it is not grammar, but the core idea that matters more. This is the reason why there many non-English speaking authors who are incredibly successful.
Writers are often very sensitive. That is the reason why they understand the emotions and feelings of others and portray them in their writings. Of course it takes imagination and the ability to probe the human psyche like Dostoevsky. They are also thinkers and philosophers.
Indeed, I am an incurable lover of both reading and writing.
Thank you for your fresh analysis of the contours of the art of writing.
it is difficult to understand why death takes those, who are very young and in full health. Its suddenness is astounding no doubt. Only the creator can understand such untimely decisions. Untimely for us, the mortals. The body mechanism so complicated and we are not aware of all implications.
We feel the loss because they are close to us. Imagine thousands upon thousands, who die everyday due to various reasons and causes.
It is a subjective poem with a perfect rhyming and rhythm.
It flows well with many memories and the painful aftermath that follows unexpected departure of friends and associates.
I can see poetry means a lot of different things to Sue.
This review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on having completed another commendable year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
Poetry is a useful expression of your feelings, both positive and otherwise. I am able to imagine the therapeutic value of doing so.
I note that writing poetry has set your goals and holds hope that you'd one day become well-known. No doubt about that.
"It lifts my spirits, sets me free."
This is well said. Nothing is more important than feeling elated and free.
It is a well narrated story of a lonely woman. Her bitterness and dislike of her husband's behaviour comes through quite clearly and visibly. The descriptive details win my praise. Attention to details like her meticulous arrangement of Valentine dinner comes through with appeal. Then her reflections of his changing ways, his gradual decrease of time spent with her and her anger a him and her planning of next step to cure her present dissatisfied life are dealt with, with an appeal.
It is the negative shade of love when she said,
"She'd just have to wait and kill him next time." The drastic twist at the end of the tale.
You do have a lot of Pride and Prejudice tucked into the story. Liz Bennett seems to be the one who is in the book store looking for a romance novel.
Clever work on your part adapting the various characters of Jane Austen's magnum opus into this flash story.
Ironic is the end, when she was given "Pride and Prejudice" in the store book store. Characters are set up against modern setting with cell phones and emails and SMS.
I enjoyed the read.
Have a wonderful WDC Account Anniversary!
Hi,
I am here to review your poem. This is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congrats on having done with another year at the WDC. Have a nice day.
You have dealt with two different things here, namely,the little girl's grave and a century old oak tree. Deaths in different ways. The tree is killed by cutting it down like a patient dying on the operating table while we do not know the cause of the girl's demise.
Their juxtaposition gives rise to various thoughts. There appears to be no disturbance for the long sleep of the girl and the tree is yet to be completely dead.
" reduced to a stump in minutes."
It is a good exercise in showing how people rest and how the trees are made to rest.
A thoughtful poem with visual imagery and a good flow.
Yes, indeed. This is what we are when emotions are blown to the extreme. On the edge of control, we stand precariously between losing sense and retaining the same.
"From the depths of one's shaken soul.
Through fear and joy; in pure pain and surprise."
Different emotions have different expressions. Taken to extreme, they could be a test to endurance and forbearance. If we lose control, we are equal to animal nature. Otherwise, man's refined ways are to be admired. So the question is why take it to the extreme?
Imagery shows different phases of extreme emotions and their impact on the those around.
Spring comes with a clarion call. The twin birds signify the arrival spring of to the vicinity.
"Spring's caress born to blossom
Love and newness set to seed"
Metaphors bring out the fragrant essence of the new blossoms.
Imagery-
Images of the song birds, new flowers, excellent view of the spring skies when the sun shines gently on the earthen creatures are brought to my mind's eye. Appealing and sensory imagery.
"Granted prowess and wizardry of the sky".
Word choices make a special impression. Rhythm is well maintained.
This is a touching poem from the remorseful heart of a mother.
My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being a dynamic member of WDC. Have a lovely delicious day!
Sentiments expressed in this fine verse apply to almost all the mothers.
Mothers are special people. They never change. But the children change. That’s in the order of things.
“ My goodness, he is almost an adult!”
Time allows no favours, would it?
I can see your attachment to his small car and bikes. The pain and misery of parting with old faithfuls are well conveyed.
The tone is one of remorse and helplessness. The step by step
description of the inevitable disappearance of the “objects of motion” coveys the deep-rooted sentiments of a mother.
The mood is one of sadness.
Another happy stage replaces childhood as you must have witnessed.
Imagery is visual and it appeals to my heart.
This excellent prose poem flows with ease and effortless rhythm.
I can certainly understand your pain. I am sure you realised it was too late to make amends of any kind.
We never think of death during life. Helen Keller, a remarkable lady with many physical disabilities, said that we should make use of our faculties as though we are going to die tomorrow. In other words, let us live wisely and with considerateness.
Many of us grieve the mistakes we commit towards others during their life time. Our limited vision and ego make our outlook narrow. Hence, we don’t easily recognise others’ merits.
Death should teach us to behave and think well of people including family members.
The essay made self search my own methods of recognition of good, not bad.
Edit-
“I wish I had went home”
(I wish I had gone home)
Use past participle after have, has, had.
I can imagine the thrill and joy of the little you learning to waltz with Daddy.
It’s not difficult to see that he was patient and gave his daughter time to teach different kinds of dancing steps.
The fragrance and feel of precious moments lend a rare charm to this flowing free style poem.
Imagery is visual and it appeals to my heart.
A beautiful tribute to dad on the honoured occasion of Father’s Day.
Congratulations on being placed First in the contest.
this four-liner has an impact on me. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing yet another year of creative writing at the WDC. Have a lovely day.
There is a kind of doubtful ambiance about the poem. Phrases like "cold eternity," "lonely sorrow" in the first two lines strike the note of despair. In the last two line there is a return to optimism and faith.
"...Providence send thee hope for tomorrow"
Trust in love and hope in Providence proved sap for strengthening love.
Personification- This literary device is finely explored with Providence.
"thy lips" "thy heart's maiden" "thine eyes" and "send thee hope" are phrases that bespeak of the poet's dependence on Providence.
Language- language of the poem is ecclesiastical. Religious and spiritual in tone and timber.
In every way, it is a powerful poem.
An appealing piece of writing. Your lines about living a life of positive attitude everyday are so true and so good for keeping fine health both physically and mentally.
Yesterday was an experience with which we can work to better our today.
"....not to take things personally, not to assume, to just do my best, and when possible to take action."
We can sail through life with great ease and joy if we have this optimistic and disciplined outlook.
I try to treat each day as a gift and try to use it that way, enjoying moments with people and with self.
"I am going to just enjoy this day and let it take shape. Who knows, it may be the best day of my life."
Inspiring lines of guidance!
Loved you informal style and fine expression of thoughts.
It hooked me on with the opening line, "I am a terrible gardener." I can understand a gardener, who had no trouble in growing weeds.
The story of lavender kept me glued till the end. Transformation from a plant that "withered on a window sill," to a large bush that that continued to "grow with a vigour" is appealingly described.
The fact of the matter is that it made a gardener of you (no longer "terrible" one, if I may say so) and your latent talent for growing plants is brought out without you being aware of it, even it is just for that one lavender bush.
I like the end result. Memories of that particular incident linger on though you shifted residence.
The use of first person point of view in this story is an effective narrative device. It lends authenticity and helps in bringing the "lavender" experience closer to the reader.
I completely understand what it means to meet a kindred spirit. My review of this very realistic poem is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have lovely day!
One would be quite fortunate if met with someone of similar frame of mind. Life becomes all the more appealing and enjoyable if that happens. Like-minded people are rare to come by. If that happens they can be inspiration and joy, discover wonders of life and share them.
"A person whose spirit draws you into fellowship;
Who is a catalyst for new ideas."
Friends sometimes bond for life and can be a great moral support in times of need.
Imagery appeals to eye and heart. Word choices fit in well.
Memories of a loved one linger on much to more grief and more longing.
My review of this very heartening poem is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being a sensitive writer at the WDC. Have a wonderful day, Cadie!
As the lines scroll down the page, I can see the sharp pain and helpless grief at the departure of a dearly loved partner. The world becomes a limbo and confusion at the sad event are clearly seen.
"It's hard to believe your gone.
Hard to believe you're
not coming back."
Edit-
"your"
(you're)
" youagain"
( you again)
End is moving and is a proof of his undying love for the family.
city life is well mirrored in this pleasantly rhyming verse. The situation on the local trains is more or less same in a number of cities over the world. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a creatively busy day!
The facts of early morning cold and discomfiture aboard the train is keenly observed and voiced well.
"Germs surf the breeze of each wet sneeze.
Are some people at death’s door?"
Doubts spring in the mind. It might be anything.
The rush to get to office and the well measured steps to avoid scuffle and fall are appealingly shown.
"Take one step up, two to the side.
It’s crush hour folks! Enjoy the ride?"
We need to enjoy it if it's an everyday grind.
It flow well with an AA BB rhyme scheme. Imagery is highly appreciable.Title is evocative.
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