Deep down, Vets are all brothers!
What a great heartwarming story, and what a great man grandfather seems to be.
Thank you for sharing this. I wasn't expecting the ending and it came as a beautiful surprise!
Cheers Meg
Hello kv13 and a big welcome to WDC.
I enjoyed reading your heartfelt words, clearly directed at someone near and dear to you.
Live each moment with all the love you have, for tomorrow the opportunity may have slipped away.
Just a few suggestions (and they are just that - my suggestions for you to use or not -) I feel will make for smoother reading
....my fondness of you.
For in this moment I love you....
I regret nothing ,....
All the best, Keep writing and enjoy the friendships you will certainly make here.
Cheer Meg.
A touching poem, Angel, so very descriptive that the reader can imagine being there upon that small hill.
Well done!
In the first stanza, did you intend to write the word marble twice?
Last line in the second stanza, I think it should be ensured and not insured
Lovely poem to read.
Cheers Meg.
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Heartfelt words to a stranger who, I am sure, knew in his heart that he had found a new and caring friend.
Our serving men and women need letters from kind souls like yourself to boost moral and give them a sense of purpose in their situation.
When my son was in Iraq. one of my grandchildren (his nephew) rallied his school and sent hundreds of Christmas cards to Iraq.
My son had mentioned how much they all missed Vegemite, being true blue Aussies, so we also sent 1000 single serve packs of Vegemite.
This gift was truly appreciated, and brought a taste of home to our boys and girls over seas.
We may not be able to fight ourselves, but we can bring hope and some comfort to those who fight for our freedom.
Well done!
Keep writing!
Cheers Meg.
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Hi Merinda,
Living in a tropical area of Australia, I can really relate to summer rain, invincible heat and steam rising from the hot dirt.
You have painted this picture so very vividly.
Well done!
Apostrophes are tricky.....
Apostrophes are used to indicate missing letters in the case of cloud's.
This would read cloud is, which is not what you intended to say.
Hence no apostrophe is needed here.
In the last line Til is an abbreviation of Until
Therefore an apostrophe is used - 'Til - to show letters have been cropped from the word.
However, the apostrophe in the title is quite correct.
They are also used to denote ownership ... the rain belongs to Summer.
This is an enjoyable poem with a wonderful choice of words to give the reader wonderful imagery.
I especially like the colourful reference to the rainbow in the finale.
Thanks for sharing this poem with us all.
Cheers Meg.
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A rollicking ballad of bards young and old
Of the present ~ and some from the past.
I enjoyed every stanza so brilliantly told
And was sad when I came to the last!
I wondered what poets of long ago thought;
Will, Bacon, Homer and Poe.
Did any of us learn the lessons they taught?
Well...... thanks to you, now we all know!
Such an enjoyable read and so worthy of being featured in the Authors Newsletter.
Cheers Meg
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Hello jerboy.
I really get the feeling that you see everyday occurrences in so much detail.
Your words capture a graphic picture of little things you notice.
These small details are the ideas that inspire a poet to write his thoughts down and pass them on to the reader.
This is a talent in itself.
Well done!
A perfect medium for one with such insight would be a poetry contest with a picture prompt.
Keep writing.
Cheers Meg
A clever poem write, I must say, dear Sum.
Would it be right if I, too, added some?
I'm sure you won't mind if I cite just a few
As I sit by the shore and sight the great view.
Hi Sum,
Couldn't resist having a little go at this challenge!
You have done a wonderful job of working with words and keeping the story and flow of the poem tripping along nicely.
Such an enjoyable read.
Cheers Meg.
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They rest beneath a grassy plot.
A white headstone to mark each spot.
A reminder here for you and me
of the life they gave to keep us free.
I have seen so many pics of Arlington and read so much about it.
If there was just one place I could visit in the world, I think it would be here.
Cheers Meg.
Hi Sum,
Many words are written of Veterans, yet I feel poetry is the perfect medium to express the feeling and passion in the heart of a writer for a Returned Serviceman.
You certainly have captured the innermost soul of a Veteran here, and your poem has all the emotion and respect they deserve.
Somehow I have the feeling you may be a Veteran yourself.
Well done!
Many thanks to Countrymom and her Veterans contest for allowing us to express our pride for those who serve.
Congratulations Robin on a magnificent piece of work!
Your poem reads as a prayer. Just beautiful!
When poems begin their first stanza in a certain format and style, it is often difficult to keep the rythym, rhyme and honesty continuing without appearing to be forced and unnatural. Poems have a tendency to fade away towards the last few stanzas and lose their momentum and quality.
Not so with this poem!!
It has flowed throughout it's entire six stanzas with the same genuinely spiritual emotion.
This piece is a credit to you and one of which you should be immensely proud.
Thank you so much for the privilege of reading it.
All the best
Cheers Meg.
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Hi Sticktalker,
Thanks so much for this comprehensive item.
I have been away from WDC for a while and really needed a refresher course on this topic.
Full marks too for "Invalid Item"
Any group which takes the hand of a newbie and guides them through the site is invaluable.
It is rather daunting to navigate around the site for newbies and for those, like myself, who have been absent for a break.
I really feel I need to catch up with some of the information that seems to have slipped through the little cracks in my brain!
Thanks again and keep up the good work!
All the best.
Cheers Meg.
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My Dear Suzy,
I admire you so much for being able to put into words the feelings we all experience when we lose a loved one.
A wonderful Nun explained all you have outlined here to me when my husband passed away, but I feel I was too emotional, angry, and full of self pity to accept it.
Seven years on, I have a much clearer and happier outlook towards death and as you say, I hope my children will learn to understand how to accept it when my time comes.
An item such as yours should be read by all who are grieving if only to give a little comfort at a time when one feels so alone.
Thank you for sharing this.
ps. There is a silent 'T' in the very first word of this wonderful piece.
I love to read Limericks all day,
At home or at work or at play.
You can poke fun at folk
and they don't get the joke
Till you've turned and run right away.
There should be more contests involving Limericks. I think it would be a lot of fun.
Keep on writing and enjoy life.
Cheers Meg.
Hi Sophia,
How true your words ring!
Through your words and thoughts I can see you have found a friend to give you the insight into what a true friend means to you.
I hope you won't mind if I point out a few errors in your writing, dear Sophia.
As I read through from the beginning...
......out of the distress, who who will not..... delete who
......there for you always in yourthrough thick and thin..... replace in your with through
Alas some writers do not feel that plagiarism is a crime. It happens all too often, sadly.
This piece really should be read by all who join this marvellous site just as a reminder that we are here to read/review original work by talented writers.
You have made a very good point in saying how would a writer feel if his/her work was stolen and claimed by another.
Bravo! Well done!
(spelling error I picked up in the final line, Fyn...annihilated
Thank you so much for bidding in Sherri's Auction and giving me the opportunity to revisit your delightful port.
When time permits, I shall return and read /review more of your terrific writings.
Cheers Meg.
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This pot roast of words gives your poem such a delightful twist on the pleasures of cooking and eating.
(I fear a little e may have dribbled onto the page in stanza 3 ... notepade).
This is very well thought out and written for some lighthearted reading.
Most enjoyable.
Thanks for sharing this one.
A phrase or two I scoop up with my trusty knife and fork
and savour all the flavour of the beef - or is it pork?
An adjective and adverb seems to add some sweet and sour.
I could feast upon your meal of words, hour after hour.
Cheers Meg.
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Hi Fyn, At last I have been able to get back to reviewing your wonderful port.
#3 of 5 poetry reviews.
I am so pleased I came across this poem.
It is just the type of reading I love, a poem with a story to tell.
You have not forsaken your wonderful talent for descriptive verse here. I was right there with you in the treefort at the bottom of the garden.
Truly it is a matter of which side of the track you are on which determines the right or wrong side, and I think you have captured the feeling here that there really isn't much difference at all. People are the same on each side.
Great story in a lovely poem.
The rhyming is not "perfect" and the rhythm is not consistent throughout the piece, but it didn't bother me in the slightest.
I was really wrapped up in the atmosphere.
Thanks for this one, Fyn.
Cheers Meg.
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Wow! that must have been quite a fantastic poem to get you so immersed in its 'metaphorical morrasses'.
I could say the same of this piece!
You drew me into your poem and I could actually feel the emotions building.
MY emotions were emulating the emotions YOU had experienced.
That is a powerful talent to be able to pass on a feeling so well through the medium of words!
I must say that for once, the story within a poem has not been clouded by the use of too many descriptive words, they did their job admirably, and added to the excitement.
Very well done!
Cheers Meg.
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I could not resist reviewing all of the poetic doodles in this folder.
Short and sweet pieces do make for easy reading and gives one food for thought.
Looking forward to reading more of your verses.
Cheers Meg.
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Hi Fyn,
As much as I like to get up and dance, I really do prefer to sit back and watch all of the scenes on the dance floor.
Obviously this piece was written using word prompts. You have included them nicely to complete the scene.
You do have a talent for using just the right words to complement a situation.
There are many times that I cannot find "just" the right word.
Cheers Meg.
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A deep thought put into words which can be understood and hopefully heeded by all.
A clever play on the words 'peace'and 'piece' to emphasise your point of view.
I like this very much and agree wholeheartedly.
Cheers Meg.
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