"Journal Entry #1" by Newbie, Christy Shay has shared her thoughts on beginning to write a novel. She has said that she feels overwhelmed and doesn't know where to start. This ambition is certainly daunting.
The novice journaler ought to be reassured that most stories are a compelling urge. The narrative takes shape as a synopsis -perhaps in the mind - but once the pen hits the paper, the writer is off, like a horse in a race.
I would also like to add a piece of wisdom. If the novice writer is unsure of the reception which their story might get, why not start with a short story instead? Then add to the main body of the story as comments and advice dictate.
"Lost Friends" by Newbie, leelee expresses the loss of two friends who thought that their friendship could never end ~ never be broken. Inspite of an age difference and distance apart - the friendship had endured ... until?
The writer has chosen not to disclose the reason. Perhaps the short vignette is still too painful to spell it out. Never the less, the story will resonate with any reader who has loved - and lost - a great friendship.
No spelling errors and while only short, I thought that the piece had depth and was well expressed.
"Information Warfare" by sindbad is a sincere and impassioned plea to do something substantial about terrorism. His discourse on the problems in the Jammu and Kashmir Union Territory are stated with clarity and cogent intention. The writer expresses himself in an interesting and intelligent manner to engage the reader with a propostion which appears to offer a viable solution. Below, are some excerpts which this reviewer found worthy of inclusion.
For years, media has been telling us that there are 150-200 terrorists in Kashmir.
Every year the security forces kill 150-200 terrorists. Next year, again we have a similar number joining ranks; the throughput in the system remains the same.
... We are killing terrorists, not terrorism.
... The credit belongs to the man who is actually in the arena,
whose face is marred by dust and sweat and blood;
who strives valiantly;
who errs, who comes short again and again,
because there is no effort without error and shortcoming...
Quote by: - Teddy Roosevelt
A co-winner at the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" written by QueenNormaJean Junesun24hours - who is becoming a regular winner! Congratulations Y'know, I thought it was a stunt to get out of paying the bill, but that isn't what it ended up as' - but I laughed at the audacity of the tale! Well told!
I really found this free-verse poem, "Existing" - beautiful. Written by Newbie, Charlie the Human - this item is something for all to enjoy! It is simply an example of genuine experience put down on paper. It's authentic and abundant with the experiences of the writer - and a life-lived!
Won't I leave ink and graphite? And turn to dust and breathe?
Is it not magic to leave remnants of essence lying around so a stranger may know
that this place is not untouched?
"More Than Man" is written by a Newbie to WDC - Fae - and has a genre category of sci-fi/spiritual.
What I liked
I thought the 113 word intro/synopsis was very good. A smooth read without jarring errors of grammar or punctuation.
What I think for ongoing development
Why not try this as a short story of 1000- 2000 first? That way, you garner real interest and can re-upload newer versions as the story is developed? I believe that reviewers would be more inclined to review short stories of 1000 - 1500 words when you put it up in public forums for reviews. Good luck - it's looking interesting!
"[Two Haiku Regarding Obesity]" by Newbie-just-a-few-days-ago - Anusol - technically correct - but I hope the writer is wrong - at least about the first Haiku - I am on a diet until Christmas 5 kg in 5 weeks!
What I liked
The technical correctness of the 2 Haiku's
What I think could improve it
Simply - the appearance on the page.. I'd choose green - centred with a little motif top and bottom. An attractive page can engender more interest in the choice a reviewer makes, I believe - to review a piece of writing.
"Magic of a Spider" by Newbie, Dawn M. McDonald was written just a few days ago and there are just a couple of items in their portfolio...
I hate spiders too... instant death to them if I see them in my house! However, I agree with the writer - there is still a degree of fascination which accompanies the fear... but I would rather see any spider big or small on the internet where I can exit asap
I think this needs some punctuation - either a colon: or semi-colan;
They amaze me some are poisonous and others are harmless
"Going Under" by Newbie, Kay Was quite a clever piece because I believed that the person was self-harming in the bathtub ... but in under 100 words (Flash Fiction) I've come to understand a completely different intention - and I'm glad to say - a better outcome.
not sure about this word
I feel my lungs loose air, it's such a bare to stay afloat
A very imaginative and clever piece of writing - perhaps it could be the beginning of something more?
Well, we in Victoria, Australia know how that feels... online Zoom classes and grocery shopping only (Chemists, Dr's were the exceptions) All other shops Closed! Only allowed to travel 5km from where you lived... only 1 person from the household allowed to shop for the day. It has been like a prison sentence without the crime done! ... Easing up now - slightly but still have to wear masks everywhere.
My son teaches at Uni - and I hear similar stories from him... it must be odd - but yes, its great to be still employed! Have a good week! AJBurchell- Australia OOPS! I just realised that this is a review - Oh well ...so be it! Nice Photo!
A smoothe anecdotal style of writing - it may have been a real event - it has a ring of possibility to it. Technically good with no grammar or spelling errors detected.
A well thought out plot which was carried by a balance of narration and dialogue to deliver the story arc. A good piece of Flash Fiction with a sweet ending.
QueenNormaJean Junesun24hours has written an Excellent piece of Flash Fiction! The art of this genre is to get a superb twist in the tale. Well, that’s the ultimate goal. I can honestly say that she’s nailed it! I’m writing this RV on my iPhone so it may look a little weird...Good pace & no mistakes! Well Done!
"Unmasked" by 🌖 HuntersMoon ~ written a while ago! With exactly 300 words - it's perfect Flash Fiction! Honestly! I didn't see that coming!
The narrative reinforced the compelling accord between writer and reader that the esteemed Zoro was indeed as susceptible to Amore as any other suitor! What a ride! Vive la Zoro!
"Unmasked" by huntersmmoon ~ written a while ago! With exactly 300 words - it's perfect Flash Fiction! Honestly! I didn't see that coming!
The narrative reinforced the compelling accord between writer and reader that the esteemed Zoro was indeed as susceptible to Amore as any other suitor! What a ride! Vive la Zoro!
This item will be a challenge to review however I will do my best to honor the simple Haiku titled: "Goat" by Words Whirling 'Round ~ And Happy 2nd Anniversary at WDC! by the way!
I had to do some revision:So...A Japanese poem of seventeen syllables, in three lines of five, seven, and five, traditionally evoking images of the natural world. Okay...
I was surprised at the context of the middle line.. a bit of a stretch for unimaginative me - however, it works overall in the poem's technical construction. And yes, it does evoke this lowly beast's premise. I loved the graphic!!
Three main stanzas of free verse to describe an emotional journey, really - is the way that I have interpreted it. An unfolding of quick anger to a diversion which has rescued the character and left them find ...bliss. I thought that was so well developed! Thankyou - this poem was a gem to find!
"Howling Halloween" - an acrostic created by Jezri in 2006! We should have had this out about a week ago! But since I love the genre I am happy to review it at anytime! And Happy 15th Anniversary at WDC!
A perfect acrostic which has been attentively placed on the page to show it at its best. Jezri has been clever and inventive with each word!
A Wonderful Poem ~ "Old Brighton Town" ~ by Lady Elf created in 2017. Happy 4th Anniversary ~ at WDC What a wonderful poem - I have read it a couple of times, and I really enjoyed it.
7 Stanzas with an AA BB rhyming scheme - to give a pleasing resonance, while either reading or saying it out loud, as I did. Lovely!
What does trigger My Review? Well... An interesting title for sure, next I look for a short story or poem because I always feel that these types of items present a succinct overview of the writer's quality and style . They're good for reviewers who can quickly read a complete item and give a thoughtful review.
I enjoyed your poll and it gave me a chance to relax a little and have a bit of fun as well as provide me with an opportunity to express some insight.
"Black Tinsel and Fading Lights" by nicoola was created a while ago - December 2006. Perhaps, just about a month after joining WDC in November, 2006.
This item appears to be a kind of tribute to friends who were important to the writer and I respectfully acknowledge this' as I review. Suffice to say, it was well written and would do justice to any friend.
Excerpt: A Lovely Line
And for a brief moment, as a barrage of memories played on the silver screen of her mind, she smiled, delighted by the visual splendor.
"Space Blunder" is by Light and was created in 2009! Another story which needs an airing! And by the way ~ Congratulations on 13 Years at WDC!
A sci-fi / technology story - Yes, I like those - I like writing them, too. Well... It seems that no matter how clever we get, we still have all the same weaknesses - and bungling bureaucracies!
Lots of information included by a knowledgable writer which reinforces the story's inate tension. Thankyou for a very enjoyable read!
"The Words We Never Say" written by Angels in my Ear is a traditional poem - with 10 stanzas and an AB AB rhyming scheme: written a month after the writer joined, in November, 2012. Congratulations on 8 Years at WDC!
While I am still very much a novice, I enjoy reading poetry and I think, on a quiet night, when there are no distractions I like to look for a piece to read. I enjoyed this item, which had me reflecting on a time, long ago... and I enjoyed your poem, as an agent for those memories..
But the words that I so cherish
Break like ice against your heart
They never seem important
Yet they’re tearing us apart
"In Your Eyes" written by Dr Matticakes Myra was created awhile ago - December of 2005 - so its time it had an airing! Out for an Anniversary Waltz! Congratulations on your 18 years at WDC!
I enjoyed this free verse poem - or lyrics as it is labelled in your portfolio. I wonder if you ever put it to music... I particularly liked to stanza below. I am a novice but I think that the writer has captured a particular wistfulness throughout the lyric.
Drown.
As the coolness crushes you.
Fall.
On your shattered wings.
Cry.
But remember
it's weakness in your eyes.
The tears...
Cry...
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Y'know, I thought it was a stunt to get out of paying the bill, but that isn't what it ended up as' - but I laughed at the audacity of the tale! Well told!
What I liked
What I liked
of the 2 Haiku's
I hate spiders too... instant death to them if I see them in my house! However, I agree with the writer - there is still a degree of fascination which accompanies the fear... but I would rather see any spider big or small on the internet where I can exit asap 
I think this needs some punctuation 
- either a colon: or semi-colan;
not sure about this word 
A smoothe anecdotal style of writing - it may have been a real event - it has a ring of possibility to it. Technically good with no grammar or spelling errors detected.
I went hunting for a funny item from "
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by the way! 
I had to do some revision:So...A Japanese poem of seventeen syllables, in three lines of five, seven, and five, traditionally evoking images of the natural world. 
And Happy 15th Anniversary at WDC! 
A perfect acrostic which has been attentively placed on the page to show it at its best. Jezri has been clever and inventive with each word! 
7 Stanzas with an AA BB rhyming scheme - to give a pleasing resonance, while either reading or saying it out loud, as I did. Lovely!
