I have come to do some reviewing for a prize-winner - iKïyå§ama - and I do love the story - I might say it reminds me of my own school days.
The descriptions of the protagonist are original and engaging and I could have read a whole book on this character. I loved it! An Easy 5 Stars for a story written for the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" - originally in 2006 & modified in 2015!
No typing or grammar errors detected and it was nicely set out on the page so the reader could distinguish between settings/time/place.
A poem written 37 years ago by Newbie to WDC, Merina - who is now undertaking the writing of her family history. I am guessing that Merina new a little something about poetry: 4 Stanzas... every second line rhyms... not that that is the only accecptable formula for writing poetry by any means, but to a novice like me, it IS a recognizable format.
Written with the 'fresh eyes' and clean heart of youth - it was also written before the advent of personal computers so I wonder how the poem was saved and later retrieved.Reading it now, in 2021 [and I think 1983 was the poem's 'Birth Year' - I was only 26] I find the poem a very pleasant 'view' of a Country we all know as Canada. I can picture the young woman aboard the bus on her way somewhere and feeling that exhilaration of youth!
"Letter To GOD" written by Sum1 created nine years ago! - After I had a look around this writer's port, I decided to check out this 'Other' genre. Well, as I'm also fond of what I call 'Communing' with the Supreme Being from time to time, I wondered how someone else might be approaching this'.
Well, the writer is somewhat more altruistic than I am... although I feel exactly the same way about the state of the planet, my communing is more 1:1 and also when I'm in an appreciating frame of mind.
Now that I've read this, I wonder what the Supreme Being does think about the state of this planet. It's a bit of a mess! I wonder if He is already sorting out the 'Wheat from the Chaff' in terms of His sentient creation and is perhaps, carefully collecting the souls and keeping them aside, as they reach their mortal ending... leaving the rest behind... ashes to ashes dust to dust....
It's past the season for Halloween but I couldn't resist a peek - I'm a sucker for Halloween stories and this tale, "The Three Jacks" written by W.D.Wilcox is a beaut!
A great story for kids with a happy ending (which, for adult stories, is not obligatory - but I always prefer it). The font and spacing on the page were also appealing and the little picture accompanying the story is great, too!
"THAT IS WHAT I AM" is written by Seabreeze and is accompanied by a great little picture of a boot. Very imaginative and quirky use of the topic in a nicely rounded story arc and a swishy finish! Well done!
"A Bee" - which is a little poem about a Bumblebee I think... written by Newbie, T. Merle - with an accompanying picture, which is gorgeous.
My mother wrote about the Bumblebee too - I found a copy in her bible - which was supposed to (and did!) - serve as a little motivating story... yes, it is too big to fly - it defies the known laws of physics... but it flies anyway ... and makes a little' honey too!
This dear little poem reminded me of that story and I love to read it... I never tire of it! Well done!
"Glitter" by NJ for DFF which stipulates that all entries must be under 300 words. This takes practice, beleive me!
This story had more of a Bewitched flavour than a Christmas one ~ but Wow! Whatever rocks your boat! Gorgeous flower, that Amarylis - I just looked it up.. what great imagination NJ - that flower certainly lends itself to morphing into a redhead ...Oops! Story Spoiler Alert!
"Morning Feeling" is a short vignette, written by Newbie, Kirple. I think we can all identify with the sentiments expressed by Kirple - but sooner or later a special chore or even per chance some interesting appointment will get me leaping out of bed and reaching for the kettle to start off a brew of hot coffee... Well done! I was captivated by your descriptions of awakening to a new day.
"The Grammar Jungle" by Newbie, Samson would be a great book for students of any age including LOTE students. It's easy to understand and gives very good examples of when and how to use simple grammar.
No errors of spelling or grammar detected and I thought it was a splendid idea!
This little poem "Childhood Memories" by Newbie, SYV was just what I needed to read! And so true! Lovely, childhood memories.. ok - yes - based on fairy tales and such but innocent and lovely-never-the less! Thankyou for providing such an enjoyable reading experience.
A story written for the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" - by Odessa Molinari Written like a mini-short story - there is no particular twist to the tale. The story has pace and generates excitement and anticipation in the reader but the end is slightly anti-climatic. Needs a punchier conclusion I think. Still, the whole story and its effect was achieved in 231 words! Well done!
Ain't love Grand! Something as simple as all that?! Well, in this case, the means justifies the end and it's the journey not the destination. I enjoyed that background knowledge exhibitied of art and painting. The descriptions of the fruit and the shadows brought a dimension to the very short story, that it might not have otherwise enjoyed.
"scarf, light, button: 215 words" written by No Sox with Sandals for the Daily Flash Fiction Contest - using 3 prompts in just over 200 words - about a year ago! By the way ~ Happy 6th Anniversary at WDC!
What a dark story, indeed! Thhe writer seems to have good knowledge of electrical current behaviour. I had to read it twice to see what was going on - that might be the hour, however, and not the complexity of the story. Well! I'm awake now! Very imaginative! Well done!
I did think that, with all those nails in your mouth when the phone rang.. might've had something to do with it... perhaps imbedded likes shark's teeth! eeeeouch!
"Grandma's Final Gift" was written by BScholl ~ A great little Flash Fiction story - and should've been listed in the mystery genre.
A very pleasing story arc and a fantastic ending! Imaginative use of the given prompts, too. But there was a clever and important piece of writing using a play on words which was central to the story's success. I really enjoyed the story.
"The Magic Paintbrush" was written for the Daily Flash Fiction forum in 2008! It's a great find! By the way, Happy 13th Anniversary at WDC!
Well written and descriptive.. the reader easily pictures what is happening and it had the feel of a Disney story. I'm so glad I discovered this little gem!
That was good Flash Fiction with a SciFi sounding scenario which led to a very normal experience - very clever use of imagination - engendering imagination - in the reader!
"Crushed" written by left17 in the Romance genre written a long time ago! December the 11th 2008! Which reminds me ~ Happy Anniversary for 12 Years at WDC!
A real teen story - and we've all been there! Never easy - hardly ever fun! Your story was one that any reader would empathise with and it was nicely told.
That might be because my legs were lead, no gold because it's heavier.
Hank: No one will forget his name I respectfully suggest
Hank turned the burner up on the stove. As it began to heat and the coil turned red Hank He... placed a tea kettle on top Hank and... sniffled and snuffed as he rubbed his puffy eyes.
What I loved
As an allergy prone human myself who also has a love - hate relationship with Spring, I thought his burgeoning appreciation of the day - particularly the Bumblebee description, was charming!
"Life Is..." written by Mariposa Created surreal images in my mind as I read through it.
The piece of writing was somewhat philosophical - a little nihilistic - but poetic, none-the-less. It resonated with the truth that life is transient and there are no guarantees for a tomorrow - for any of us.
Although the item was quite short, I thought that it had depth and explored matters we often ignore or take for granted. Quite lovely.
"Crossing Over" by Dave gained momentum as it progressed - I think - from the first line:
Beneath the silver glitter of moonlight gleaming off frost-covered trees, a scream shattered the glazed silence.
Essentially a good story which would suit a Halloween contest and was written around that time, this year. Good tension, engaging central characters and a satisfying story arc. Maybe I have a criminal mind, but I thought the ending was particulary good and constituted a happy ending.
I liked the orginal way the story was set on the page and the last line was a winner! May your winter Christmas stocking be filled with those mmissing items - and something nice!
"The Start" by Newbie HawksgrotherInfinitus has written an engaging free-verse poem on the freedom to choose one's direction in life and not be dictated by social mores.
Within the poem I could sense an adament and dogged determination - let's be clear - conformity requires these same qualities but with a much less satisfying outcome.
The writer is young, I think - with many more miles to travel - it will be a weary but valiant conquistador who meets either Satan or God at the end of his travels - only time will tell.
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The descriptions of the protagonist are original and engaging and I could have read a whole book on this character. I loved it! An Easy 5 Stars for a story written for the "
No typing or grammar errors detected and it was nicely set out on the page so the reader could distinguish between settings/time/place. 
Written with the 'fresh eyes' and clean heart of youth - it was also written before the advent of personal computers so I wonder how the poem was saved and later retrieved.Reading it now, in 2021 [and I think 1983 was the poem's 'Birth Year' - I was only 26] I find the poem a very pleasant 'view' of a Country we all know as Canada. I can picture the young woman aboard the bus on her way somewhere and feeling that exhilaration of youth!
A great story for kids with a happy ending (which, for adult stories, is not obligatory - but I always prefer it). The font and spacing on the page were also appealing and the little picture accompanying the story is great, too! 
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This dear little poem reminded me of that story and I love to read it... I never tire of it! Well done! 
NJ for DFF which stipulates that all entries must be under 300 words. This takes practice, beleive me! 
and I thought it was a splendid idea! 
Ahhh ... well, until next year! 
I liked the orginal way the story was set on the page and the last line was a winner! May your winter Christmas stocking be filled with those mmissing items - and something nice! 
Within the poem I could sense an adament and dogged determination - let's be clear - conformity requires these same qualities but with a much less satisfying outcome.