"Some Times You Can’t Save Them" by Paul - I remember being a 16 and a half year old trainee nurse and looking on a male patient of the same age. He was a 'vegetable' after a motor bike accident had given him an ABI - Acquired Brain Injury. Did I learn anything from this? No... I still took driving risks, myself and yet... I remember the scene vividly.
Sometimes the lessons are very subtle - and sometimes, they're not lessons at all Just an experience to develop our own empathy - to ensure we never lose the ability to commune with one and other.
Your story was compelling and it brought recollections of my own health care experiences... so nothing is wasted. Happy Anniversary, by the way!
I don't usually review graphics but as it's an Anniversary Review Day for me, I was looking in this writer's port' and found their celebratory sig item - which I've fallen in love with! The item was created to celebrate their published work! Congratulations and Happy 17th Anniversary at WDC!
I love the way the poem/verse is set on the page and the font chosen too - a natural writer and a favourite with young kids - and old kids, like me! Happy Anniversary!
"Lost" written by RatDog - Written as a chapter in "Pass the Write-Baton" - it says. I had to read the story a couple of times, because, by the time I got to the end of it -I thought Billy was the confused person who was talking in the 'first pereson' - at the start.
It seems not - so the writer has demonstrated the confusion most likely experienced by a fading mind, really well. There is empathy and kindness, so that the story has a strange warmth. Well done and Happy Anniversary!
The Queen who normally presides over her Flash Fiction site "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" has some stories of her own! This one, for instance! "Sally" - a Supernatural tale, well told!
"Shimmy and Roscoe" A short story written in 2006 by Spring Break Adore♥ A realistic tale about having to walk the dog - unwilling and without enjoyment, something changes! Suddenly the dog and the walker are united in their quest for safety! A charming read with a satisfying ending!
just a little something ...
Shimmy just shook her head. She did not want to be out walking the him in this weather and was sure to let him know how she felt about it.
Well, NJ - You're becoming quite THE "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" CHAMPION! Well Done and Congratulations! I have to ask ... did that really happen? Do you have a neighbour who is also a Fan? Perhaps you'll have to put your hand print in and re-name your street: ' 6925 Hollywood Blvd (Grauman's Chinese Theatre)
"The WDC Angel Army" by founder, iKïyå§ama - which is: 'Dedicated to promoting positivity, encouragement, and support to the WDC community.' Anyone can join - and there are plenty of people on Angel Patrol, too!
It is Phenomenal! This Army pretty well underwrites WDC in the sense that it does a lot of the Grunt in looking out for Newbies, enabling Upgrades, an outreach program, reviews... just to name a few matters which this group reliably handles.
The founder has created an absolutely AWESOME Forum, if that is the correct way to describe what this group consistently accomplishes! If ever you see a fundraiser that they're organising - Contribute ASAP! You never know - You might even be the beneficiary of this Mighty Army's munificence!
I have come to do some reviewing for a prize-winner - iKïyå§ama - and I do love the story - I might say it reminds me of my own school days.
The descriptions of the protagonist are original and engaging and I could have read a whole book on this character. I loved it! An Easy 5 Stars for a story written for the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" - originally in 2006 & modified in 2015!
No typing or grammar errors detected and it was nicely set out on the page so the reader could distinguish between settings/time/place.
A poem written 37 years ago by Newbie to WDC, Merina - who is now undertaking the writing of her family history. I am guessing that Merina new a little something about poetry: 4 Stanzas... every second line rhyms... not that that is the only accecptable formula for writing poetry by any means, but to a novice like me, it IS a recognizable format.
Written with the 'fresh eyes' and clean heart of youth - it was also written before the advent of personal computers so I wonder how the poem was saved and later retrieved.Reading it now, in 2021 [and I think 1983 was the poem's 'Birth Year' - I was only 26] I find the poem a very pleasant 'view' of a Country we all know as Canada. I can picture the young woman aboard the bus on her way somewhere and feeling that exhilaration of youth!
"Letter To GOD" written by Sum1 Is Home! created nine years ago! - After I had a look around this writer's port, I decided to check out this 'Other' genre. Well, as I'm also fond of what I call 'Communing' with the Supreme Being from time to time, I wondered how someone else might be approaching this'.
Well, the writer is somewhat more altruistic than I am... although I feel exactly the same way about the state of the planet, my communing is more 1:1 and also when I'm in an appreciating frame of mind.
Now that I've read this, I wonder what the Supreme Being does think about the state of this planet. It's a bit of a mess! I wonder if He is already sorting out the 'Wheat from the Chaff' in terms of His sentient creation and is perhaps, carefully collecting the souls and keeping them aside, as they reach their mortal ending... leaving the rest behind... ashes to ashes dust to dust....
It's past the season for Halloween but I couldn't resist a peek - I'm a sucker for Halloween stories and this tale, "The Three Jacks" written by wdwilcox is a beaut!
A great story for kids with a happy ending (which, for adult stories, is not obligatory - but I always prefer it). The font and spacing on the page were also appealing and the little picture accompanying the story is great, too!
"A Bee" - which is a little poem about a Bumblebee I think... written by Newbie, T. Merle - with an accompanying picture, which is gorgeous.
My mother wrote about the Bumblebee too - I found a copy in her bible - which was supposed to (and did!) - serve as a little motivating story... yes, it is too big to fly - it defies the known laws of physics... but it flies anyway ... and makes a little' honey too!
This dear little poem reminded me of that story and I love to read it... I never tire of it! Well done!
"Glitter" by NJ for DFF which stipulates that all entries must be under 300 words. This takes practice, beleive me!
This story had more of a Bewitched flavour than a Christmas one ~ but Wow! Whatever rocks your boat! Gorgeous flower, that Amarylis - I just looked it up.. what great imagination NJ - that flower certainly lends itself to morphing into a redhead ...Oops! Story Spoiler Alert!
"Morning Feeling" is a short vignette, written by Newbie, Kirple. I think we can all identify with the sentiments expressed by Kirple - but sooner or later a special chore or even per chance some interesting appointment will get me leaping out of bed and reaching for the kettle to start off a brew of hot coffee... Well done! I was captivated by your descriptions of awakening to a new day.
"The Grammar Jungle" by Newbie, Samson would be a great book for students of any age including LOTE students. It's easy to understand and gives very good examples of when and how to use simple grammar.
No errors of spelling or grammar detected and I thought it was a splendid idea!
This little poem "Childhood Memories" by Newbie, SYV was just what I needed to read! And so true! Lovely, childhood memories.. ok - yes - based on fairy tales and such but innocent and lovely-never-the less! Thankyou for providing such an enjoyable reading experience.
A story written for the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" - by Odessa Molinari Written like a mini-short story - there is no particular twist to the tale. The story has pace and generates excitement and anticipation in the reader but the end is slightly anti-climatic. Needs a punchier conclusion I think. Still, the whole story and its effect was achieved in 231 words! Well done!
Ain't love Grand! Something as simple as all that?! Well, in this case, the means justifies the end and it's the journey not the destination. I enjoyed that background knowledge exhibitied of art and painting. The descriptions of the fruit and the shadows brought a dimension to the very short story, that it might not have otherwise enjoyed.
"scarf, light, button: 215 words" written by Sox and Sandals for the Daily Flash Fiction Contest - using 3 prompts in just over 200 words - about a year ago! By the way ~ Happy 6th Anniversary at WDC!
What a dark story, indeed! Thhe writer seems to have good knowledge of electrical current behaviour. I had to read it twice to see what was going on - that might be the hour, however, and not the complexity of the story. Well! I'm awake now! Very imaginative! Well done!
I did think that, with all those nails in your mouth when the phone rang.. might've had something to do with it... perhaps imbedded likes shark's teeth! eeeeouch!
"Grandma's Final Gift" was written by BScholl ~ A great little Flash Fiction story - and should've been listed in the mystery genre.
A very pleasing story arc and a fantastic ending! Imaginative use of the given prompts, too. But there was a clever and important piece of writing using a play on words which was central to the story's success. I really enjoyed the story.
"The Magic Paintbrush" was written for the Daily Flash Fiction forum in 2008! It's a great find! By the way, Happy 13th Anniversary at WDC!
Well written and descriptive.. the reader easily pictures what is happening and it had the feel of a Disney story. I'm so glad I discovered this little gem!
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