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Overall Impression:
This is a beautiful, loving and touching poem. The love you have for your wife resonates brightly. She is a very lucky woman.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
I didn't find any issue with the rhyme scheme or form of this poem but the meter was a bit forced in the third line of the third stanza.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
All of the elements in these categories are error free.
Closing Comments:
You have a lovely poem here that is a beautiful tribute to the woman you love. Write on!
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Overall Impression:
I absolutely love what you have done with this poem. It is perfect representation of our lives.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
All three of these elements have been executed with perfection. I was most impressed with the how smoothly this poem flows.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
Superb attention to detail. There are no errors.
Closing Comments:
I must tell you that I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Your take on life being a stage and the parts we play in it is brilliant. Most excellent write my friend.
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Overall Impression:
There is a very intensive journey being described in this poem. It takes the reader through a variety of situations and emotions. In some ways I can relate to it and in others it baffles me. If nothing else, it's thought provoking.
Form, Rhyme, Meter:
There isn't a set structure of this piece or rhyme scheme. It's free verse form flows well and is easy to read.
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation:
I didn't find any errors in any of these categories.
Closing Comments:
This was an interesting read of a sane through insanity. Thanks for sharing it.
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The feelings of sorrow over a loved one emmante strongly from this poem. It was clear to me that you care very much for this person. Prison is a harsh environment for anyone and having to visit a family member there can very emotional. The last line of this poem is what stood out most.
Technically, there were no issues found with the form or structure in this piece. All of the spelling, grammar and punctuation were fine.
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This story is quite fascinating and a good start, however I do feel it needs some work. There is a great deal going on in a short time. Your readers don't have enough time to grasp what's going on before it changes. I also feel it is too cramped. You need to give the individual paragraphs more space as well as moving the dialogue on lines of their own.
There were no spelling errors but some of the grammar and punctuation need editing too. With just a bit of work this story could be great. Good luck.
I will never look at the dark the same way again after reading this poem. Despite the fact that it is superbly written; it creeped me out! I am impressed with the level of imagery you included in this piece. It allowed me to see the gruesome scene as it played out.
Looking at the technical aspect of this poem, I felt the meter/flow were streamlined and the rhyme scheme was impeccable. There were no spelling errors noted and all of the grammar and punctuation were perfect. All in all this is one magnificent poem.
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Wow! These lyrics are incredible! I would love to hear them put to music. You have an admirable talen my friend. There isn't one thing negative I could say about this. You have outdone yourself! Way to go!
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The passion and desire that emmanate from this poem is enough to make anyone blush. You have written it beautifully and even though it describes a sensual scene; it is quite tasteful. The flow is smooth and even, the rhyme scheme is strong and there are no errors. Excellent write my friend!
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This is a superb acrostic! I love the way you brought it all together with the names. It flows remarkably well, and even though it is a poem, it reads like a story. You certainly deserve more than 5 stars for this one! WTG!!!
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I was quite taken aback by the feelings of pain and regret that emmanted from the character in this poem. The title does nothing to prepare the reader for what they are about to experience. I think it's a very strong write and was not at all what I expected. Good job!
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You managed to creep me out good with this story. The vivid imagery pulled me and and held tight right to the very end. The overall composition of this piece is great. I didn't find any spelling errors and all of the grammar and punctuation are perfect. Wicked write!
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There is an important message in this poem that I wish could be sent to all mankind. If everyone could just get along this world would be a much better place. I really enjoyed this poem and they way you brought it together. It has a nice even flow, strong rhyme scheme and there were no errors. Great write!
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This is a wonderful and fun way to pay tribute to a friend. I enjoyed the humor of this write and its whimsical nature. The image you included adds a visual punch for you readers.
I didn't find any issues with the technical aspects of this poem and there were no spelling errors. Great write Michelle!
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The state described in this poem is an awful place to be. I can relate to it on a personal level and I never want to be there again. The despair you experienced during this time emmanated strongly in this wonderful write. Thank you for sharing your work with us.
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A family reunion is usually a time to have fun and reconnect with loved ones we haven't seen in a while, however, this poem shows us that's not always the case. It is well written and error free. Thanks for sharing your work with us.
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This poem is amazing! You have done a brilliant job with the prompt. I was swept up in the beauty of the first stanza but that beauty soon faded as I reached the end. It took me by surprise for sure. Great write, no errors my friend. Keep up the good work.
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Wedding (E) An Italian sonnet depicting wedding written in strict iambic pentameter. #1574846 by Koyel~writing again
You paint a wonderful canvas of words in this highly descriptive poem. All the magic found in a wedding is captured here. The overall flow and rhyme scheme are great and there were no errors found. Great write fellow poet!
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I am literally blown away by this seemingly complicated poem. The alliteration is what makes this poem so much fun to read. You are one of a kind Ken and your work is wildly wonderful. I am honored to be able to offer my feedback. Keep writing!
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This is an absolutely beautiful poem. You have such a way with words that I find myself being drawn into each poem as I read them. The structure, flow and technical aspect of this one are flawless. Amazing write Ken!
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Black Hole (E) *edited* A 4-stanza poem about dark thoughts, written for the PDQ Poetry Challenge. (THP) #1564017 by mARi☠StressedAtWork
I have been here; in this dark place. The Black Hole of Despair I called it. It wasn't exactly the best place I could have ever been. Your poem brought me back to that place and oddly enough it didn't depress me. Since I have found the light once again, I was able to enjoy this poem for what it is; a beautiful work or literary art. It is perfect. Awesome write Mari!
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The tale you tell about this poor teenage girl is distressing to say the least. It scares me to think about how often this type of thing really happens.
Your poem is very well written, has a nice even flow and there were no errors found. Write on!
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Spellbound (E) (Quotation Inspiration) The magic in the water, the power in the waves-- spellbinding sea. #1573933 by mARi☠StressedAtWork
You paint a captivating picture for your readers with this spellbinding poem about the sea. It's vastness has always fascinated me and after reading your poem, I feel as if I have been drawn closer to it.
I didn't see any issues with the form or meter and there are no spelling errors. Nice job fellow poet.
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SPF-100? Didn't realize we actually had such a thing... I truly enjoyed this short. You have such a wonderful gift when it comes to writing. All of the technical aspects of this piece are stellar and there were no errors found. Thank you for sharing your gift.
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I've got to hand it to you my friend..this is an awesome story! You brought an old classic back to life so to speak. The 'gruel and unusual punishment' line had me busting at the seams. Another job well done! Keep up the good work.
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This story brought me back to my childhood and the ridicule I faced growing up. Granted the kids weren't as cruel back then as they are now but abuse in any form leaves wounds. Your story, for me was heart-breaking. Not only because of my own pain revisited, but yours as well for not taking action against the bullies. Being the silent type isn't always the right choice.
There is a message here and I hope those who may be going through something similar take something from this. It is a well written, emotional piece. There are also no errors.
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I truly enjoyed this short. You have such a wonderful gift when it comes to writing. All of the technical aspects of this piece are stellar and there were no errors found. Thank you for sharing your gift.
