Short, bold and to the point, this poem certainly makes an impact. I think it would take much more than what you describe here for one to think you were insane. This is one of those thought provoking poems that give the reader soemthing to chew on. Great write with no errors.
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I can see why once would never be enough in this sweet, romantic poem. The beauty and sensual nature of this piece really stand out. It is well written, has great flow with a nice smooth rythm and there were no errors found. Wonderful write my friend. Good luck in the contest.
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Eve and the Garden of Eden came to mind when I read this poem. You have given this everyday fruit a strong, willful character here. I love the way you described it; it brings a very vivid image to mind. Great form, nice even meter and no errors. Great write Michelle!
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I marvel at your ability to write such mazing poetry that evoke such strong emotions in your readers. The images you chose to accompany your words are also perfect. This poem is no exception. It left me feeling bereft as the subject in the poem. Excellent write Ken.
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A fairy tale romance is what comes to mind as I read this poem. The imagery you have created here is lovely.
It has a nice even flow, a great rhyme scheme and there were no errors found, however, I feel that punctuation is needed to finish off this piece. Good luck in the contest.
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A new life should always be cause for celebration and I find it unfathomable that anyone would think otherwise. Your poem highlights the miracle of life. As a mother of 4, I couldn't agree with what you say more.
This is an incredible write Jezri! It has a strong rhyme scheme, impeccible meter and no errors.
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I was thinking for a moment, lucky you all snuggled up in your bed with a good woman but it's a cat! Well, I suppose that is just as good. The simplicity of this piece makes it a nice read. No complicated structure or rhyme scheme. It doesn't even need punctuation. Nice write Dawn!
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Although I don't fully understand science rhetoric, I can honestly say I enjoyed this poem. Trying to prove that time does not exist seems like a waste of time to me since well all know it clearly does.
This poem has a nice flow and is well written. I thought I noted a hint of humor too. I would consider adding punctuation. Other than that, this is an error free write.
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I felt a sense of loneliness and frustration emanate from this poem. It felt as if the person in the poem was giving up all hope to find love.
The chain rhyme sequence in this poem is quite fascinating. I don't think I have seen it before. Alhtough the rhyme scheme is flawless, I found the meter in this poem to be quite bumpy. Nevertheless, the reast of this piece is great and there were no mistakes found.
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This is quite a compelling poem as it compares human emotion to the dark and dismal nature of the Acheron and Styx. A deep feeling of foreboding fell over me as I read this piece. For me, evoking emotion in your readers is a plus.
This is a great write Dawn. It has a nice even flow and there were no spelling or grammatical errors found.
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I have to say that you certainly have a way with poetry. This piece is great! With three short stanzas, you manage to tell a story of love gone bad. The syllable count and rhyme scheme aid this piece in having what I feel is a flawless meter. Great write my friend and there were no errors found
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Goosebumps covered my flesh as I read this poem. The scene you describe is macabre but all to real in the outside world. I love the overall effect of the red and black font. It clearly fits with the tome of this poem.
The technical aspects of this write are flawless and there were no spelling or grammatical errors found.
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Oh my Mari, what an exceptional poem! It wasn't hard at all for me to feel the pain felt by the character in this poem. The consistent syllable count in each line made this piece truly a joy to read. The form is standard, however, there were no errors of any kind in this poem.
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It's amazing the things we discover when we open ourselves up to see and listen. You have given your readers a vivid look at the path taken on a journey of self discovery.
I found your poem to be well written. You have a strong grasp of poetry and its various forms. There were no spelling or grammatical errors found during my review.
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So many things can be seen through the eyes of a child. Their innocence and strength astounds me. The child portrayed in this poem, took a bad situation and did their best to change it for him and his mother.
This poem is well written, has a nice even flow and is error free. Thanks for entering the contest. Good Luck!
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It's hard not to feel some kind of emotion after reading this poem. All I could picture while reading this, was a woman with tears falling down her cheeks while she held onto her young child. The image was hard to bear.
You have a really great poem here. It gives your readers an inside look at what it's like to have someone you love walk out on you. The harsh reality of this poem is that situations like this happen everyday.
I didn't find any issues with the form of this poem and there were no errors. Great write!
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It's merely by coincidence that I happened upon this poem today as I started my own weight loss program. Your poem is highly motivating and tells us to get off of our rumps and get moving.
It has a solid rhyme scheme and nice even flow. During this review there were no spelling or grammatical errors noticed. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a compelling poem about one's sin and desire to be forgiven. I couldn't help but feel for the person in this piece.
The technical aspects of this poem have all been carried out splendidly and there were no errors found. Good luck in the contest.
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This poem brought me back to my time in school and the detested line ups. I like the spin you put on this seemingly ordinary routine. Well done!
I didn't see any issues with the form of this poem and there were no errors found. Thank you for sharing your work with us.
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I immensely enjoyed this fantastic poem about the "Plumber Geek." The rhyme scheme is absolutely fabulous and makes this poem shine. This poem is deserving of all the accolades it receives. I am honored to be able to review your amazing work. I wish you all the best in the contest.
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I absolutely love reading your poetry. It is so beautifully written and has an eloquent quality to it. This one is especially lovely. You have an admirable talent my friend. This poem is flawless. I am honored to have the opportunity to review your work.
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I love the way you describe the memories left by this mystery woman. You paint a lovely picture for your readers through the vivid imagery in this piece. For me, the poem had a serene feeling. It is beautifully written Eliot and error free. Thanks for sharing it.
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Gardening in this story definately has its perks. There was more than just foliage blossoming here. I like the subtle way in which you described the characters lustful thirst for each other. For a short story, this one is really good.
I didn't see any issues with the technical aspect of this piece and there were no errors found.
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Sensual Fantasy (18+) Fantasy/Erotica Short Story Contest for those who love to love mystical creatures. #1511345 by Christine
I can honestly say I have never seen these two genres combined in a contest. I would assume that you get some very interesting entries. Your idea is certainly original.
You have the forum set up in a neat and orderly manner. The contest rules and regulations are easy to follow and the prizes you are offering are awesome!
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You need not worry about where this poem came from because it is awesome. I agree that it is very macabre, however, it's intriguing at the same time. The images that came to mind while reading this were pretty gruesome.
I don't see any issue with the form and the meter is great. Another winner Jewel.
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