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Review of Sally Fourth  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Greetings, Newton!
This isn't too bad for a 300 word FF piece. I know these aren't easy, but I like the idea of 'Bernie' trying to rescue her son from his father, even though I'm a little confused on whether or not she succeeded. That last line was a little strange to me ('the final time she saw Jeremy'), but I'm pretty sure she did!
Flawless spelling and grammar, and your prose was also great!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Ice Newton, wherever you are, and I hope to see you back here soon!
PS-My mother kidnapped me from school when I was 8 years old! I swear! This was back in the mid 70's though, so my father didn't press charges and I was returned to my dad about 2 months later.

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Review of My story  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Bon jour, Dennis Morgan!
I hope this isn't based on a true and current experience your going through, but if so, please get rid of this idea! No girl or woman is worth that!
OK! Now to your story. Dennis, I think your writing in English is good! There's just a few minor mistakes I'll mention, but for the most part, you're writing is actually better than a lot of true English writers I've reviewed on this site! And since I've reviewed more than 12,000 items on here and thousands of writers, that's saying something!
Here's a few tiny things you might want to look at:
'...and took sick leave(,) although I wasn’t sick' (or you could phrase it like this without the comma: 'even though I wasn't sick')
“Got ill again?” (sounds a bit awkward--how about "You're sick again?")
'Convinced that I really wanted to do it(,) I was happy imagining her crying after hearing the news of my death.'
Otherwise, great job!
Keep on writing on, my friend, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Slice of Life  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Aloha, Don Two!
As a terrible and very amateur golfer myself, I thought this was good! And when it comes to slicing, I can totally relate to Waggle Bunker!
I'm not an expert on poetry either, but the words rhymed well and the poem made perfect sense (which is great cuz most of the time I don't understand poetry at all! *Laugh*).
I've only broke 100 once for 18 holes (with 98), and I rarely get out on the links anymore, even though I do have my own clubs. Sadly, sometimes my clubs wind up flying further down the course than my balls do (if you know what I mean!).
Well done, my friend! You've almost inspired me to get off my own sofa cushion and take a few swings again!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this (and the chuckles), and have a great day!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Ahoy, Paul!
This is cool. I love the way you started it, and it really does sound a like a neat conversation between a couple that knows each other inside and out! In fact, I'd love to be in on it, or just sit around and listen to what they say to each other!
Writing this entirely in dialogue worked perfectly for this, and it was even educational! You weren't lying about how much a parsec is (I checked!). *Bigsmile*
So smooth, my friend! Do go on! *Laugh*
Comments and suggestions:
'A punishable offense' The grammar police? (*Laugh* I've actually been called that cuz I'm constantly correcting people's grammar and spelling on here!)
'immense liack of effort'
Great job, my friend! Nearly flawless spelling and impeccable grammar, and great use of the prompt phrase!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Paul! 'Twas a pleasure to read, have a really groovy day, and good luck in the contest!

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Review of Dear me that was  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Jinks!
I like this. It's a look both forward to your life and a look at your past life, and seeing how you can improve yourself in the years to come. We've all done things in our lives we've regretted, but hopefully we manage to learn from these, and writing down how we can better ourselves like this is great!
I don't think you know it since your pretty new here, but every year this site has a contest (or sorts) called the Dear Me contest, which is where we do exactly this. It doesn't have to be poetic, just a simple letter to ourselves about what we want to improve on ourselves. I think it happens around the beginning of the year...
Anyway, well done, Jinks!
As for a technical poetic review, I thought it was good, but I'm hardly an expert on poetry. From what I saw though, the rhyming words were great, but the meter (syllable count, right?) seemed just a tad bumpy in a couple stanzas! But like I said, I'm no expert on poetry!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Jinks, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Greetings, EnterNames5312!
This isn’t bad. I know you have it under the horror genre, but it didn’t seem too scary to me. To be honest, it felt more like a children’s scary story to me; it was so simple in the way you told it, and the ghosts seemed to be more of a nuisance than they were frightening. If they were really trying to scare James and Samantha, I think they would have done more than jump on them and throw chicken pieces at them. And neither one of them seemed too scared—they weren’t screaming.
But if you were trying to write a kid’s scary story, then it’s actually good.
One suggestion:
“Apparently the stories are enough to drive most people from heading to these areas” (I think this would sound better if it was ‘coming’)
Also, there’s a lot of missing grammar in this (commas and periods), but most of those are at the end of the quotes.
By the way, there’s a LOT malls in this country that have been abandoned lately, so it wouldn’t surprise me if some of them really WERE haunted!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Enter, and good luck with the class workshop!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Ahoy, Ridinghhood (p.boutilier)!
This is pretty neat, and that title was not only perfect for it, but quite alluring as well!
You say this is comedy (and horror, my 2 favorites!), but in fact it's not really that funny! There actually female demons in this world who do this sort of thing for a living! OK, maybe quite the way you're thinking, but phone sex can be a very profitable scam, and in a sense they do pick men dry ($) and leave them drained of color! *Shock*
But now they're (you're?) writing bestsellers about this? For shame! Haven't you any scruples? *Laugh*
The best part about this is I can just picture you slipping that costume on, leather wings and all! *Rolling*
Great job, Ridinghhood! I also like the rest of the imagery; a wisp of blue smoke and a scent of moist ashes and moss! *ThumbsUpL*
'The outfit slid on as slick as hair oil on a gigolo.' (excellent metaphor!)
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and have a fantastic eeeeevening! *Vamp*

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Review of Title  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello there, Xeno!
First off, I hope you're doing better regarding your anxiety and other maladies. Those certainly aren't things to be ignored, so if you ever need somebody to talk to, feel free to grab somebody's ear/eye on here! Somebody is always here to listen, including myself if I'm online at the moment.
Now to this piece. As writers, we're always going to have writer's block. It's comes with being who we are, and there's no real cure. Everybody treats it differently, but I'm glad to see that at least you have the guts to write about it, because that in itself is a cure of sorts! If you're writing, something, anything, and even if nobody reads the words, it might give your Muse some inspiration!
Trust me, I KNOW!
Now I'm no expert on poetry, so I can't really talk about that. It looks goods though.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and keep your chin up!
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Review of Poems  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello, Grieving Girl.
I know you have this under one genre of 'nonsense', but it really isn't: you're writing about your pain and the loss you feel, but sadly you're also putting yourself down! You are NOT ugly and people DO love you!
I'm what you kids might call an old fart since I'm 54, but I was young once too. And I know how you feel cuz I've been there. And I'm sure you've heard this a million times before, but you WILL get over this! It's NOT the end of the world, no matter how dark it may seem!
But more than anything, you have to stop putting yourself down!
I'll say one last thing: writing your feelings down can be very cathartic (make you feel better), even if nobody else reads the words! Keep that in mind!
Write on, rock on, and keep your chin up, G.G. *Music1* The sun will come up tomorrow! *Music2*
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Review of Another Day  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there, Diane!
This is a nice 'feel good' piece, and I like the way you told it. I used to live in a small town so I know all about how friendly people can be and how everyone's like family--it's not like big cities where everybody ignores each other and couldn't care less about you--and it doesn't surprise me that Christina would offer her talents for Jasmine and Brittany.
Makes me long for my own hometown!
One tiny niggle:
"...you have to try this on(.)" Jasmine said. (comma)
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and have a great day!

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Review of Deja Vu  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there, Blue Jay!
This is good. I think everybody's experienced Deja vu at least once in their life, but whether or not it's real I don't know. I do think there's something to it, though...
You did a good job of telling this, and having the boys spending the night in the tent was a perfect setting. I'll admit I was a bit puzzled when Joe threw that water all over his friends in the tent, but he obviously knew what would get his pals out of there! And quickly too!
Yeah, Joe might be 'weird', but thankfully he was weird enough to save their lives!
One tiny niggle (but 4 times):
“I am now(”,) Dan moaned. (,") (the comma should be inside the quotation marks)
Otherwise, well done! Great spelling and telling, and nice use of the prompt phrase!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Blue Jay! Thanks for sharing this, and good luck in the contest!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello there, Tim Chiu!
This is nice ode or tribute to your parents, and better yet you did it with a poem!
It really is amazing what parents have to go through, but I don't think we really see it until we become parents ourselves. I know I didn't anyway!
You did a good job of giving a little background on your parents and family (perhaps too much? *Shock*), and as long as the two of them can go to bed happy with each other then they've got a beautiful marriage. Too many couples go to bed angry with each other, and that usually doesn't contribute too much to marital bliss! *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Tim! Thanks for sharing this, and have a fantastic day/evening!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello there, Spidey.
Although this piece touches on the eventual loss of a loved one, the message you gave to us with it was really nice, and I can't thank you enough for sharing it!
So many people pass away without ever having somebody say goodbye to them, so to have this gentlemen have such caring and wonderful granddaughters like these was something I'm sure he treasured. And yes, I know this is probably a fictional story, but it wouldn't surprise me if it was based on some truth!
Extremely well told, Spidey! The spelling and grammar was flawless, and the ending, albeit a little sad, was still beautiful!
You didn't say if this won the contest, but it would have if I would have been judging!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful day!
PS-I'll bet this could be published somewhere, and my first bet would be Reader's Digest!

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Review of Beware! Love!  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello there, Rachel!
Funny I came across this just now, because it really says a lot about not just my current nonexistent love life, but the one that I used to have.
And it makes perfect sense!
Love is indeed a malady, but I wouldn't go so far as to say that it casts a lovely glow on life. OK, maybe for a while, but the ending consequences can be deadly, and not just for the lover, but for lovee as well! And sadly, sometimes just for the lover.
While love can be one of the most strongest of emotions in terms of feeling good, it is also one of the strongest in terms of hurt and hate! And here it can cross all of those lines in a deadly fashion. How many people have been found innocent because they killed somebody they once loved in a 'crime of passion'?
More than you want to know!
Anyway, that's my take on this disease people call love! Sadly, there appears to be no cure in sight, and most likely never will be!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Rachel, wherever you are! Thanks for sharing this and I hope to see you here back here someday!

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Review of E . K . G  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello there, E.K.G!
For one of your first pieces on here, this isn't too bad. Sadly though, it speaks of love and broken hearts, which is something we all have to endure.
It was kind of an odd style to write a poem in, but I'm no expert on poetry, so I can't fault you there. The words rhymed, and the meter seemed to be OK. The spelling and grammar were good, and whether this has just happened to you or not, I hope you've recovered!
Kee ponw ritin gon, E.K.G, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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PSSS-I noticed you like horror. Perhaps you'd be interested in entering my contest "SCREAMS!!!" ? We're always looking for new contestants, and I think you'd fit right in! *Smirk*

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Review of Garage Sale  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I’m reviewing this as a "The WDC Angel Army"  Angel and to thank you for all the reviews you do on this site!
Hello there, Bluesman, and happy 13th 'birthday' on here!
First off, thank you for those explanations! The only one that really threw me was 'gourd' though!
This is good, and it was pretty obvious that you either knew a lot about violins and their history, or you did a great job of BSing your way through it! *Laugh*. Nice to know it was the former.
Preston got lucky by coming across the violin, and in the end it would have indeed been in both their best interests if he would have sold the violin and spread the word about Blakely's shop. I can't say that's how it would have turned out in this day and age, but who knows?
Well done, my friend, but I did spot a couple of tiny niggles:
'Blakely(,) took the violin from Preston and immediately recognized the style of the old instrument.' (don't need that comma)
'Blakely(,) moved to his desk and carefully placed the violin...' (same here)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Bluesman! Thanks for sharing this, and may have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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Review of Graded  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings, Megabob!
This isn't bad. It seemed a little creepy there at the beginning with Miss Freudlinger being able to know Melissa was doing without seeing her, but I guess their blood bond was a little stronger than I could have imagined.
I also enjoyed the way you described Miss Freudlinger. She came across as a hard, stern woman, and one who kept a tight, well-disciplined class.
Nice job, Megabob! The spelling and grammar was flawless (thank you, but what else should I expect from a writing and English tutor and editor?!? *Bigsmile*)
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a fantastic day!
PS-You've haven't been around for awhile. I hope everything's alright!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello there, Angelica!
This is a neat piece about your rather unique birthday, and you did a good job of telling it. I'm not sure why you dread it though. I'd love to have my birthday on Halloween!
I love/read/write and judge horror, so Halloween is my favorite holiday, and I think it's cool that you were born on that day! And apparently your family knows how to celebrate it with you! That surprise party must have been great, not to mention that Chevy convertible you sadly wrecked! I rolled a brand new Trans Am when I was 15 and didn't even have my driver's license yet! And yes, it had the eagle on the hood and looked like the Bandit from Smokey and the Bandit! *Sad*
One tiny niggle:
'Th(e) good thing though is all the candy and adventures...'
Anyway, Angelica, thanks for sharing this, have a wonderful day, and I hope you enjoy your 30th Halloween Birthday this year!

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Review of You Old Fool  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Winnie!
Remember me? *Smirk* Yeah, I'm sure you do...
This is great, and I'm not surprised that you could come up with something like this. In fact, I was half expecting there to be some sexual innuendo (for lack of a better word) in it! And as soon as I read the words, 'Don't stare it', I knew I was right! *Laugh*
Yep, it was simple, short (no pun intended), and to the point (again, no pun intended *Rolling*), and that ending couldn't have been any better!
The folks on those commercials warn if it lasts more than 4 hours that you should see a doctor!
Great job, Winnie!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for the chuckles, and have a fantastic day/evening/tomorrow!

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Review of Life  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Ahoy, Marvin!
I don’t know why or how, but I’ve stumbling on a lot of pieces about aging lately, and this one says a lot of the same things as the others. Stranger yet is that it’s something that’s been on my mind a lot lately too!
Weird.
Anyway, I see that you only 4 years and 2 days older than I am, so I can totally relate to this when you said your (our) life is half over! Same thing with how you (we) longed for maturity, and now we long for youth!
And yes, the years are flying by! I told somebody the other day that my life has been like climbing a hill for the first half-the progress was slow. But somewhere along the line I reached the top without even realizing it, and now I’m going downhill like a rocket!
Well done, my friend! For only using 15 lines and 82 words, this says a lot about what I’ve been feeling about my own mortality, as scary as that may be!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Marvin! Thanks for sharing this, and have a terrific day!
PS-I saw a 4 or 5 year old kid the other day and I wondered what the world will be like when he’s 75 years old. That would the year 2090 or so, 125 years after I was born.
Now that’s scary!

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Review of Rainbow World  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello, Duepiter!
This isn't bad for your first piece on here. I, as I'm sure millions of other people, share your dream of a 'Rainbow World', where everything would be like a Utopia. But unfortunately, that's all it is and ever will be, a dream, and in this instance, it can't and won't come true.
I don't know how old you are, but in the early 70's there was TV commercial that showed an old Indian chief looking at the cans and garbage around him, and the smoke and all the other pollution that the white man has destroyed his once beautiful planet with. Then it shows a tear rolling down the chief's cheek. Not a word is said during the 30 second commercial, but it said enough!
Anyway, I like your idea, and hopefully we can start taking care of this planet better before it gets too late! I have no idea what my Grandchildren will have by the time they're my age! And I'm 54!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Duepiter, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Hello there, Cerulean Son, and happy 10th *Shock2* 'birthday' on here!
I try to stay out of politics on this site, but since I noticed this in your portfolio and saw that it was as about as neutral as you could get, I decided to check it out and add my two bits, for what they're worth.
I've always been a registered Independent and I always vote in the big elections, but since the last election I've seriously leaned to the left. I know you wrote this more than a year ago, but a lot of the subjects you mentioned are still, even not more, relevant today. Particularly the one about the environment and how the trump and the Republicans are crippling it! Just yesterday I heard that Trump is trying to negate California's environment laws for the very reason you mentioned: so that corporations can increase their profits! CA is one of the leading states of Climate Control and protecting the environment, but I heard that that's exactly what trump is scared of; that they will set an example for other states to follow!
Sorry, but completely the so-called leader of the free world! He has to go!
Anyway, I don't want to bend your ear too far, because once I start talking about this lying, lunatic, goat-banging, psychopathic nutjob, I might not be able to stop!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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Greetings, James E Doud!
This isn't bad. It's certainly different, and I like the idea of this wise old man telling you the facts of life, not to mention that reference to Janis Joplin's song! *ThumbsUpL*
There's some truth in this; yes, we do dare to challenge the fickle hand of fate like you/he said, and we think we'll get lucky if we just play one more card. Sadly, too often that next card is the one that makes us lose, and in the game of life, that just ain't good.
And since you used a Janis Joplin quote, allow me to use a Kenny Roger's quote, since it seems quite relevant to this piece: *Music1* "You got to know when to hold 'em, know when to fold 'em, know when to walk away, and know when to run!" *Music2*
A few tiny niggle you might want to check:
"...you have to wonder(.)” the old man said. (comma)
"Well it doesn’t work out, kid(,)” he said'
"...not in there(,) you have your freedom, how did you lose if you got free(.)” I finally asked. (again, that period should be a comma)
Kee ponw ritin gon wherever you are, James, and I hope to see back here soon!

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Howdy, PureSciFi, and happy early 5th 'birthday' on here!
This isn't bad, but it seemed a little simple. I'm not saying there's anything wrong with that, but other than the tombstone speaking to the kids and scaring them bejeesus out of them, it fell a little flat, at least in my opinion (for what that's worth).
I know you had word limit, and I know these 300 word FFs aren't easy, so I can't really fault you there. You did a good job with the prompt words though.
Niggles:
“That wasn’t a real Gillin(,) was it,”
“Let’s go (to) another supposedly haunted house.”
"Watch were you are going,” (where)
Kee ponw ritin gon, PureSciFi, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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Ahoy, Winchester, and happy 12 *Shock2* 'birthday' on here!
I don't know what contest this was for, but as a lover/reader/writer and judge of horror, I though this was pretty cool!
Yes, there's some mild repetition in it that might annoy some readers (like the cat's tail swishing back and forth so many times and the door not opening so many times), but I thought that just added to the story in a beneficial way. Besides, it's simple and to the point: the cat wasn't getting fed, the boy wasn't opening his door, so the cat decided to eat the flesh of the dead mother!
What more could you ask for? *Laugh* *Smirk2*
Talk about a surprise/twisted ending! I love it! Dark minds think alike!
Dogs are so strange... *Rolling*
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing your twisted imagination with us, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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