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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*

Hi, Kenzie, and happy belated 18th *Shock2* ‘birthday’ on here!
I’m reviewing this as a "The WDC Angel Army"  Angel and to thank you for all the reviews you do on this site!
This is a really neat and informational article, and I’m so glad you decided to share it with everybody instead of keeping it just as a blog post. In fact, before I even came to the ending of it I was going to suggest you do just that!
I’ve been writing my whole life, but I never got serious about it until I joined WdC and decided it was time I tried to get something published. Like some writers, I thought my stories were the best in the world, so I had no 2nd thoughts about sending my stories off to some of the most well known and prestigious magazines I could find, knowing full well they’d accept anything I submitted because I was JUST THAT GOOD.
WRONG!
Your line about how we have to learn to crawl before we can walk was never more fitting!
I’ve known about ‘fillers’ from reading my dad’s Reader’s Digests back in the 70s, but I have yet to submit to them. Don’t know why cuz they pay pretty good. But I like how you mentioned other magazines, and that calendar picture was a complete surprise! *Shock*
Great piece, Kenzie!
By the way, after my first attempts at trying to have some big-time magazine publish my stories, I lowered my standards and started submitting to smaller, less known mags, and low and behold, now I’ve been published 12 times by 8 different publishers: online, in paperback anthologies, one magazine, and one in the hardcover edition of The 2016 Writing.Com Anthology!
So the way I look at it, not only have I learned to crawl, but now I’m walking! And hopefully I’ll be running soon! *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and may you have many more wonderful ‘birthdays’ on WdC!
PS-Maybe you should post this on the Newsfeed again so Newbies and others who haven’t seen it can check it out!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Bandit's Mama (Sandy?).
I realize you're not physically here with us, but I know you're looking down on us and reading this right now, and I just want you to know that I thought this was a neat little list of 'guidelines' that everybody should carry with them. I can tell you were/are a wise person, and even though I didn't know, I still feel like I do a little bit thought this writing site.
And whether you're a spirit, a ghost, or whatever it is when we cross over, I believe in the afterlife, even if I don't know what it is. I lost my mother when I was only 11 years old, but six months later I saw her as a bright light in my bedroom!
Sorry, I digress.
Anyway, this list has a lot of truths in it, as well as some nice proverbs, for lack of a better word!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! And know that we'll all be up there to join you one day where we'll continue to entertain each other with our stories!

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Review of “Skeek 2”  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Buenos dias, Paul!
This is kind of simple, but I really enjoyed the subject of it and how you told it. If I had a nickel for how many small animals I had when I was growing up, I'd be a millionaire! Everything from mice to Guinea pigs to hamsters to rats to gerbils and lord knows what else! *Laugh*
I thought it was neat that David made friends with Skeek, and that line about you needing each other said it all! I also thought it was great that Dana allowed David to keep the mouse with him in the coffee shop, although it had to be 'under wraps'. *Silent* *Wink*
Great spelling and telling, but I did spot a couple of tiny niggles:
'but (s)he needed my warmth and I needed her company'
I held her up so Dana could see her.(”)
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! 'Twas a pleasure to read (as usual!), and have a wonderful evening/tomorrow!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ahoy, Ron!
I’m reviewing this as a "The WDC Angel Army"  Angel and to thank you for all the reviews you do on this site!
I don't normally read poetry except for free verse and limericks, but seeing this was about aging, I figured I'd better check it out. And I'm glad I did! I may only be 54, but I've been thinking a lot about my own mortality lately for some reason.
I love the ocean, so to see how you compared aging to the rolling waves and the sea gulls and the wind and all those other things associated with it was great. What's more (and I'm not sure you noticed this or I overlooked it) is that the ocean is forever moving, and the tides will all be coming in and going out. At least until the earth is gone, anyway. That's another way of comparing life to the ocean.
But what made this shine was the positive spin you put on it at the end: We might not be here physically after we die, but we will become one with the earth and the ocean and the sky!
Well done, my friend.
Kee ponw ritin gon, and have a really far out day!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, R.Engels!
For a short FF piece, this isn't bad. I like the idea of Linda sneaking into Ms. Grater's garden and exploring that shed, only to find out Ms. Grater might not be just an innocent neighbor. *Smirk2*
I just wish you had more words to use so you could have had a little better (and longer) ending.
On a side note, I used to enter this contest a lot, so here's a little hint: I know for a fact that the owner and judge, Arakun the Twisted Raccoon is big fan of twisted/surprise endings, so you might want to keep that in mind if you enter this contest again.
Great spelling and grammar, the descriptions were excellent.
'goose-bumpy' *Laugh*
'a small, broken-down shed was barely holding on to its frame' (nice line!)
On a side note, I read your port intro and bio, and I see that you've got a lot of writing experience. Good luck with your manuscripts! I'll try to check out some of your other stories if I get a chance, but for now...
Kee ponw ritin gon, R.Engels, and welcome to WdC! Since you like to write, I know you're going to love it here!
PS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies"  and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.

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Review of Homecoming  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, Kevin!
This is kind of short, but it's still pretty good. And a bit sentimental and nostalgic, only in a bad way.
I don't know if this is based or loosely based on a true story, but I don't doubt that it could be. The events of 9/11 very well could be a reason for somebody not wanting to fly on that day, with or without that bud luck reference to that airport.
But it was nice to see that your son (or you character's son) isn't going to live his life being tied down because of superstitions.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and have a marvelous day!

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Review of Bad Luck  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Aloha again, Beholden!
You’re quite the raconteur, I’ll tell you that! I don’t know what the prompt was for this contest, but I love the way you told it!
You’ve got a great imagination, and to have these trolls stumble across this battlefield and pilfer the war items off of the dead was a great idea. I also enjoyed how you portrayed Rugpin as a not-smarter-than-your-average troll, and the names you used were perfect. Snotleg? *Laugh*
Once again the spelling and grammar was flawless, and the whole piece flowed smoothly.
But it was that simple, sudden, and ironic ending that really made this shine. Just a shame Rugpin had to be so damn adamant about wanting that flag, as well as Gozni’s willingness to let him take it.
Should have listened to Snotleg…“Bad luck I tells you," *Laugh*
A comment and suggestion:
“You promotin’ me?” *Laugh*
‘So the band of trolls formed into (a?) column and marched away’
Kee ponw ritin gon, Beholden! ‘Twas a pleasure to read, and have a most wonderful day/evening!
PS-Speaking of trolls, I have a 300 word piece that might put a smile on your face: "The Bridge" 

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello there, Blackbird!
For your first piece on here, I thought this was pretty good! It's a little bumpy in that we're not sure how she could have killed her beloved prince since she was foam--I think you could give a little more detail about that--but I like the premise of it.
Also, you kind of jumped right into this with her suddenly falling off the ship. Maybe some back story would help.
Overall, I think you've got something here. You just need to smooth it out and go into a little more detail with it, and perhaps expand on it.
It's obvious you like to write (I read your port intro), and I can tell you're anxious and excited to start filling up your portfolio! There's no time like the present, and I'd like to see some of your stories!
As for your English, it's actually pretty good.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Blackbird (that's my way of saying 'Keep on writing on' by the way *Bigsmile*), and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something more about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*

Hi there, Itchybarn, and happy 1st anniversary on here!
I like this, even though it's kind of negative, and by that I mean depressing. Not a lot though, because I think you were doing this 'tongue in cheek' to work with the title.
Most teachers assign that essay 'What I DID Do Last Summer', so this is a nice little twist. You apparently didn't get to accomplish all those things you wanted to, but I'm sure you still managed to do a lot of more realistic things, right?
But if it makes you feel any better, I didn't win one billion dollars either! *Sad* Oh, well. There's always tomorrow, right!
The spelling and grammar were perfect, and I thank you for sharing this with us!
Keep on writing on, Itchybarn, have a fantastic day, and keep taking care of your parents and sister! *Bigsmile*

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Bon jour, Paul!
Oh, the joys of being a husband and being sure your all 'errands' are done before you can enjoy the fruits of your labor...
I'm kidding, of course, and only referencing the bargaining your character had to do when he was reminded that the shopping didn't just stop there. A man should never tell his better half 'that's women's work'! But I guess your character learned his lesson.
This isn't bad. I like how you did it mostly in dialogue, and the spelling and grammar were great. Nice use of the prompt words, too.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Paul, and have a spectacular day!

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Review of The Game  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, Write4purpose!
This isn't too bad for one of your first pieces on here. I think it would look better if you formatted a little better though, but that's not really relevant.
I like how you segued so smoothly from scene to the next, and I realize this is just the beginning of something longer, but I'm interested to find out just how real this Amy character really is, if she's real at all, or if/and Ann is actually controlling her. Is Amy trapped in some virtual gaming world, kind of like the movie Tron?
Interesting...
Great spelling and grammar, but I did spot a couple of tiny niggles:
'This was a 20 (gauge?) shotgun.'
'Ann bit her lip as her thumbed her controller...' (she)
Also, you might want to put this in a larger font to make it easier to read.
Otherwise, good job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something more about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
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Review of Mixed  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Gail S!
This is neat. I'm guessing this is based on a true story (it sure seems plausible), and to have that little/big girl approach you with that question would be likely, considering the diversity of the classroom.
But the cool thing is you came up with the correct answer, even though it might have been off the top of your head.
My uncle did a family tree for us a few years ago and even sent some pictures of my great-great uncle and aunt who came over here from Holland in the 1800s. I hate to say this, but they were NOT the best looking folks I've seen!
Anyway, I'm glad the girl accepted your 'answer' and you were able to 'fit in'!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and have a marvelous evening/tomorrow!

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Review of Ian and Bill  
Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Paul!
This is interesting. I remember back when I was in my late 70s, but I still considered myself to be just middle-aged. *Laugh*
Seriously though, I’m not sure when the line crosses over from being middle-aged to being an old fart. I was a father at 18 and a grandfather when I was 38. I’m currently 54, and although my health and body feel a little older, I still feel like I’m only in my 30s.
I’ll say one thing: time marches on exponentially with each passing year!
Ian and Bill seem to have a lot in common (almost too much—I was half-expecting them to find out they were long lost brothers for a little while!), so to see them have that camaraderie as they sat there on that park bench was cool.
I love the realistic dialect you used, as well as the dialogue, and the fact that they’re going to start an Old Fart’s club was fitting.
I’m not sure what they’re wives are going to say when find out they were going to be in it, though! *Laugh*
One tiny niggle:
‘japan’ (Japan)
Otherwise, nice job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Paul, and have a wonderful evening!

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Review of My Nightmare  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, Pernell!
Went poking around in your port and found this, and glad I did!
This is another of your cool little FF pieces, and I like how flipped the scenario around. Some folks have real things that happen to them and THEN have nightmares about it, but here you've done just the opposite.
The idea of seeing a grizzly bear staring at you in your kitchen window would scare the bejeesus out of anybody! (I only wish you had more words to use for this story. Perhaps you could expand on it sometime.)
My father told me of time when he was up in Alaska and he was camping with his buddy. They were in a tent and in the middle of the night he saw a huge shadow rise up over the tent (from the light of the fire). He immediately knew what it was, but fortunately he had his rifle right beside him for such an emergency. He jumped out of his sleeping bag and chased it away, shooting his gun into the air!
His buddy got a good laugh out of it though, seeing my dad running after that bear in only his underwear firing his gun into the sky!
Anyway, well done, my friend! Great use of prompt words, but I did spot a couple of tiny niggles:
'a sleep' should be 'asleep'
'The figure lunged and me. (at)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Pernell, and have a wonderful day!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Howdy, Paul!
Now this is more like it! I thought it was great! There's just something about comedy and ghosts that I can't resist, and you did a fine job with this!
How do we know what to expect from ghosts? Are they all just out there to frighten the heck out of us, or do they have a sense of humor too? I just watched Beetlejuice the other night (probably for the 100th time), and this reminded me a bit of the ghosts in that movie.
So God is a benign old dude eh? Whew! That puts a lot of my worries to rest! *Laugh*
Great job, Paul! I like how you did this all in dialogue too. That's not easy for some folks, but you seem to have it down perfectly!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Have a 'spirited' day, and good luck in the contest!

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Review of FIRE! FIRE!  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Dr. Smith!
Saw this on the Comedy Newsletter (but I'm pretty sure you already knew it was there, huh?), and I had to check it out!
This is pretty good. I like the way you told it, and although we'll never truly know how the great Chicago fire began, this is does further the possibility of the O'Leary's cow being involved! *Laugh*
Just a shame Captain O'Leary was so wrapped up in getting his neighbor/fugitive downtown instead of putting that damn fire out!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! 'Twas a pleasure to read, and have a fantastical day!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Aloha, Paul!
This isn't bad. I like the happy ending, but that would certainly be one heckuva way to meet your (character's) future daughter and step-granddaughters!
One thing I'm not sure about is why you set this up with so much drama. It had the making of a horror story at first, but then we're left not knowing what they were running from and why they were so scared.
And then they all lived happily ever after?
Hmm...
Anyway, that's just my opinion.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Have a great day, and good luck in the contest!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, Nordic Noir!
This is purty durn good! I don't read as much sci/fi as I used to, but I like the idea of this asteroid hitting earth and the escape wormhole, as well as the reasoning you gave for not letting the public know of this impending disaster.
But what stood out and made this shine was your confession to your embarrassment, sadness, and ultimate 'cowardly existence' for going through the wormhole alone just to save yourself, instead of staying behind and 'going down with the ship', so to speak. Kind of reminds me of those cowardly men on the Titanic who jumped in the lifeboats while brave womenfolk stayed behind with their husbands. I think I even remember a documentary where one wife said, "No, my husband. We've spent our whole lives together, and we shall die together." Or some such thing, anyway, but you get my drift.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Great use of the prompt phrase, and the spelling and grammar were flawless (thank you!).

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Review of Proof of Life  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Normajean!
As a believer that we are not alone in the Universe, I thought this was pretty good. George seemed awfully defensive for blowing up that planet (or whatever it was), whether he did it on purpose or not, and I'm just glad I wasn't in his shoes.
I guess that was the Tadpole Galaxay's way of saying 'hello'! *Laugh*
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and have a fantastic day!

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Review of College Chat Room  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi there, Victor!
This is a really unique piece, and I don't think I've seen this style entered in 'SCREAMS!!!' before. At first glance I thought it was a screen play! *FacePalm*
I like this bizarre chat room murder scenario where Courtney being threatened and scared to death, and their cyber conversation was quite engaging. At least from somebody who was on the outside and not partaking in it! *Laugh*
You had some pretty graphic images in it with Alexis being gutted like a fish, and you certainly got a 10 on the creep factor! One thing I noticed though is at that the beginning you refer to Courtney as a guy, and then while he waits for a reply from his first message you refer to him as a 'she'.
Also, I'm not too sure how Courtney's death scene would play out in a chat room. In other words, surely Courtney wouldn't have been typing out her final words such as 'Heeeeelp Meeee' and 'Noooo please don't do this to me', right?
Otherwise, nice job!
My favorite part was where Paul answered the 911 call:
'911, my name is Paul how can I kill you.' *Shock2*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Victor! It was a pleasure to read, have a great day, and I hope to see more of your entries in "SCREAMS!!!"  in the future!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, Phil Thomas!
For being new to writing (as you say), I thought this was pretty good. You've certainly made a lot of people think twice about travelling, especially to a foreign country! *Laugh*
This almost sounds like a satirical movie, where if something can wrong, everything goes wrong! Heck, I have a hard enough just living in my own hometown! I wouldn't even want to think about what would happen if I went overseas! *Laugh*
Comments and suggestions:
'at 7am(.) Before boarding' (New sentence)
'Calm, breath(e), think' (breath is noun, breathe is a verb, which is what I think you were going for here, right?)
Otherwise, good job, and thanks for the laughs, although I guess this wouldn't be so funny if it really happened to you!
My only other suggestion would be to possible enlarge the font to make it easier to read.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Phil, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies"  and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.
PSS-You're only a few months older than I am, and my hometown is up north in Weed, CA. I'm currently in TX (please don't ask me why *Sad*), but I'm coming home next year (Thank God!)

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

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Review of You Win!  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Aloha, Normajean!
A story about a Jeep not being able to get around a few little rocks? As a former Jeep owner, I take offense at that! Jeeps don't get stuck! Or at least when they do, they REALLY get stuck!
Sorry, I digress.
This is pretty good, and I like the unique take you took on the prompt phrase. Most of the other stories for this prompt dealt with crooks or bad guys being chased by the authorities, but you went in a whole different direction! And not only did you win the scavenger hunt, but you also won the contest! *Laugh*
Congratulations!
Flawless spelling and grammar (as I've come to expect from you *Bigsmile*), and the dialogue was natural and realistic!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend!
PS-Kind of ironic that you titled this 'You Win' and You Won, eh?
PSS-I do have one suggestion: perhaps you could make the font in your stories a little bigger to make them easier to read? Maybe at least 3.5 or better yet, 4? Not all of us have 20/20 eyesight anymore, including myself, sadly.

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, Andrea!
This isn’t bad for one of your first pieces on here. And strangely enough I can relate to it.
I like the idea of the daughter resurrecting her mother’s manuscript and writing it for her after her passing. They say that’s there’s a book in all of us, but rarely does a person write it. And usually it’s for the very reason you mentioned here; that they just don’t know how to get it on paper.
I think that’s sad, because in this day and age we have a lot of ‘ghostwriters’, people who are willing to write their story for them! In fact, I’m sure there’s some right here on WdC who might do it if you asked!
OK. There’s a few misspellings and grammar niggles with this, but I think it’s the gist of the piece that really counts. Who knows? Maybe if you went back over this and expanded on it (with a ghostwriter if so needed), you could write a book about book that just needed somebody to write it. That’s a pretty unique concept, and those aren’t easy to come by these days!
Keep on writing on, Andrea, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write (or if you have a story to tell, which I think you do!), then you’re going to love it here!
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#1300305 by Maryann

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Bon jour, Andrea!
This isn't bad for one of your first pieces on here, and you really do make some very good points about mythical creatures. There are literally millions of people who believe in Bigfoot or some creature close to it, and plenty of people believe in the Loch Ness Monster. Your point about just because nobody has yet to prove they exist is a valid one. There are currently still creatures being discovered to this day that were considered extinct years ago (especially in the oceans since they're the one location we know so little about cuz it's never been explored!), so who's to say that Bigfoot and Nessie doesn't exist!
This is a little short, and there's a few small grammar and spelling niggles in this, but I think if you went back over this you'd see them. And it's really the main subject that counts anyway, right?
One last thing: if you're really interested in things like this, I'd suggest you do some research so you can back up this piece and even expand on it!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Andrea, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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#1300305 by Maryann

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Review of Entropy  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*

Greetings, C.L. Thomas, and happy 9th 'birthday' on here!
For a short creative writing piece, you did a nice job with all those vivid descriptions. The reader can just picture Terry sitting there in her car and trying to relax after a long shift at the hospital, and having her 'trance' of relaxation interrupted by the vision of what was about to come was a nice touch.
One thing I think this could have used, even though you might have been limited by a word count and/or Terry's location and the setting, was using all 5 of the sense to make this really come alive. I'm not being hypocritical here—it's something I need to do in a lot of my own writing!
Anyway, nice job, C.L.!
Kee ponw ritin gon, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!
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