This is well written and I know that during this time period life was very hard for orphaned children. I don't like to see children suffer even in written works - I've seen real children suffer because of adults. I think you are a good writer and I hope you continue to write and learn the craft. I hope that you will be published soon.
I think you write very well, if the last was a real question, yes God is real and very alive, the reason for all the chaos is the world is because God gave us all will to choose the way we want to go in life. He does not force or coerce us into anything. It is our choice to live for Him or to choose another path. The Bible gives us a good view into the mind of God - we just have to read it - then we have to act on it.
I liked this short story but would also like to know if the boyfriend came for Christmas or if he had an accident in the snow, was she worried about him or just mad at him. This could go a lot of different ways, please write more about it.
A very touching story. I liked it - check your grammar in the third paragraph - do you think it should be 'saw' instead of 'seen'. Again I really liked the story.
I liked this poem. Your format seems good to me. I don't know enough about poetry to review it's structure. I did not find any fault with it. I hope we can do as the poem suggest and break down the walls - however I don't see that happening until Christ comes back - and I think that is soon.
This was great - I don't know how to review poetry as to type - I just tell you what I liked and I like this poem. If you are in the military, I say, Thank You. If not, you wrote a very good piece about it.
This was different, I don't think I've read anything like it before, I like it and I think you wrote it well. I don't try to review poetry as to form etc. because I don't write too much poetry. I like this, but I have to admit - I've always been on the side of the Indian - what ever tribe they were.
This gave me chills and made me cry and made me think of my brother. He was a Viet Nam Vet also, he was 17 when he left and never the same when he came home. This was a beautiful tribute all military - thank you.
This is extremely sad and I do hope that this is a purely fictional piece of writing - if it is not please talk to someone don't let this happen to you. If it is fiction - you are a very good writer - keep at it!
I enjoyed this story! I am originally from a very small town in Mississippi and I can picture this story quite well! I think it was written very well and don't see any changes that need to be made - I was lost in the story.
I want to read more of your story. Welcome to WDC. Lots of stuff to see and do here. Be sure to fill out your Bio to let people know who you are and just a little about you.
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Lazy Writer
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