A satirical essay on people and events in the Bible.
by: KURT
Excerpt: Preamble
...the most significant scroll was destroyed through human error, before it was deciphered. This scroll contained the answer to the meaning of life, along with a cure for cancer and AIDS. They left it unguarded in a museum, and some redneck walked in and mistook it for a roll of toilet paper.
What we do affects others along the time line very far into the future.
by: scifib
Comments
This is a very interesting concept and I'm particularly interested in the Karmic influences at present
Never the less, as interesting as your monologue/opinion are, they could be more so - if some definition between paragraphs were evident.
Of particular note in current times:
Excerpt:
What if you made a pact with yourself that starting tomorrow you would never let an unkind word leave your lips? If everthing you spoke was kindness instead of harshness, just think what effect those words would have on the world.
Poem written when I felt far from God and unsure of His direction for my life.
by: Demitria Ibanez
Comments
This poem could benefit with some separation to mark stanza's - and to make it more visually appealing to an online readership.
Lovely words
Excerpt:
Every thought, every word
is held back, tainted
by doubt, by fear.
I know Your strong, unfailing arms
are always ready to catch me...
but what if I won't let you?
I wish that I could leap into the sky
with the confidence of a bird,
unintimidated by the distance of the ground below,
and that I could see (clearly)
Your love,
Your plan and how I am supposed to fit into it.
A story about a kid's visit to a barbershop
by: SHENG
Many funny turns of speech in this story such as:
*Frankly, I could not fathom the reason he chose to aggravate the hideous hairstyle he bore.
*Unlike her amiable and approachable personality, Miss
Marie possessed a poor and insufficient hair-cutting skill.
*The situation aggravated when my demanding and authoritative mother, who palpably had a
strong craving for distasteful haircuts, indefatigably insisted me go to Miss Marie whenever my hair began to thrive
*Occasionally, I let out a stream of bellow to express my exasperation but to no avail as she relished the moment very fondly
*Miss Marie loomed up abruptly, assessing my wavy hair with a salivating complexion.
*Frustration engulfed me as I gaped at my staggeringly repulsive reflection in utter shock.
Natalie is alone in the haunted hallway! It's dark and scary and there are monsters!
by: Captain Colossal
ExCeRpT
Natalie crept down the dark, dusty hallway. It smelled of old wood and dog hair.
The flashlight gave a treacherous flicker. Her breath trembled and her heart pounded. A menacing creak sounded behind her, and she waved her feeble light in its direction,
....but nothing was there...
Comments
Another example of dynamic Flash Fiction
Flash Fiction offers the writer the opportunity to think on their feet, after all you need a character, a plot a beginning, middle and end and quickly ! This is a Daily Flash Fiction Contest!
I Was Bad So My Teacher Sent Me to the Thinking Chair
by: THiNG (4Ps)
Who wrote
"Throughout my life I have a habit of getting into embarrassing and/or ridiculous situations. At this point I've accepted this as my fate. I deal with it by writing about it and laughing at it."
Comments
... Well, I thought we were Kindred Spirits and now I'm convinced.
I love this story - what a great memory, ... he became a Police-man, Huh !
I hope the writer will take consolation in their life's direction from the time of this account... some great stories have evolved as a result
... I mean to say, Who would you rather read about... (no disrespect intended, but the truth is..) Mother Theresa? or the latest Devil-ish account of ...(Your Favourite Sinner)
What a terrific evolution of creature-kind! This metamorphous from Some Other Thing To Bovine is truly marvelous!
I commend you on your cleverness!
I, myself am a shape-changer, sometimes Mother DeVille - sometimes Rooster (sometimes sheer cow !) ... and I enjoy the company of other, comedic shape-changers!
A lovely forum, and I have enjoyed visiting here very much - the story of The Praying Hands is a wonderful story of human sacrifice... I have saved it to favorites!
A heartwarming message, and an absolute delight to read. Also, well set out and easy to read.
Because both the presentation and the message from the writer are so refreshing and pleasant on the eye, I'm rating this a 5 - Thankyou for this piece.
... from the Writer...
Jesus had a sense of humor (as well as many of the other religious leaders of different religions) and did not preach be good or go to Hell. These teachings, that are idolized by most of the worlds religions, have philosophies that try to tell us treat others the way you want to be treated, help out your fellow human and don't abuse others, other life, or this world we live in.
... and finally...
"If each one of us that has found happiness or pleasure in life would help just one person find their way then if that person helped one other and the chain kept going imagine what this world would be like in a few years."
This is written for a close friend of mine who is divorcing after 23 years of marriage.
by: Ann Ticipation
Comments
Where is Everyone? Have you all gone away for Easter?
... Sorry Ann- this piece, written for a friend, has impacted resoundingly on the senses! I'm certainly glad that I am not the errant partner to whom this poem is addressed.
I felt that its presentation might have been improved with some centering and colour,and even italics, to differentiate between the anguish and anger of the situation.
I don't usually do this sort of thing, but I'm going to refer you to my poll, which deals with the male perspective (in Australia, at any rate) on divorce.
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Sometimes the greatest loneliness comes when you are with someone.
by: Ann Ticipation
So feelings must stay concealed,
Thoughts private not revealed.
Until in anger my words I've poured.
The pen is mightier than the sword
Comments
Ann Ticipation has captured, in this neat and structurally pleasing poem, the fractured and isolative environment that often accompanies the role of mother and wife.
The life-long commitment of mother and wife is often an undervalued function in a society that sees achievement as bucks and the bottom line.
It must occasion many - who contribute to the pivotal role in society of successfully raising people - to question why they doggedly and loyally continue to offer their support, and some, if not most - of the best years of their lives!
Thankyou Ann Ticipation, for another of your precious poems. I really hope that you may one day find the necessary resources to have your work published.
The church say suicide's a selfish crime.
Nuns at the institution made him feel he was doing time,
Made him an example and used his abandonment to show
Others his failings. No one ever really came to know
His own feelings of anger, aggression fed by his hate
For his once loved mother. Back to now, he shakes his head
As he stares at the ground so very far down below,
Thinks of his son for a moment ...
Comments
I would like to know how you know these things ! Such insight - as usual - in your work.
Heart-rending sadness, where did the inspiration for this poem come from?
I can always live your poems - I am transported into the being the protagonists in these story/verses of yours, feeling what they feel... imagining myself in their skins.
I turned away a door to door salesman and then I got to thinking...
by: Ann Ticipation
Comments
Ann - I don't know how you do it! The way you can turn out a verse... well perhaps you should do it commercially - you are such a prolific writer of these...
This is a poignant verse indeed, and shows a great deal about you and your humanitarian nature!
It also reminds me that I was talking to my eldest son just the other day, and he had attempted door to door sales for a toy company... your poem fairly well expresses his own feelings.
All right for them he thinks, they don’t face rejection
Don’t feel the fear as they try to make a connection
With the woman or the man that comes to the door
They don’t wake in the morning desperately poor
Having to plead and cajole, selling door to door ...
Steeling himself he puts the thoughts out of his head
Pushes away fear, that encompassing sense of dread
Walks up the pathway, presses bell at the front door ...
I'm sure that you have captured the pathos of this appalling, often underpaid form of employment with this sad verse.
My feelings about writing my poetry on the internet.
by: Ann Ticipation
As I progressed with my poems and received reviews of them I was amazed that people liked them. I read about the reviewer's feelings and learned about their lives and I felt very humble
I hung my feelings ragged on the rocks to open up to the sun, as a rose opens up its petals in the light.
Comments
Thankyou Ann my keyboard is jamming - No need for GP's - I am sending them back to you
I heard someone say they don’t like poetry,
But I hope they will not close their mind,
For with any prose I always wait and see
...But what I always give, is the words time...
Comments
Well, Ann - I can tell you that I have liked all your poetry... and I really love the encouraging and thought - full words you have written in this poem. They are heartening, indeed.
This is a common trait were I work. Betrayal is hard to forgive.
by: Ann Ticipation
I did not see two faces,
a forked tongue erases
truth, prevents an open honesty
from developing. My integrity
Takes a downward turn
I hope a lesson I will learn.
Comments
Integrity: honesty, veracity... I'm not sure that this is what you meant, in context with the rest of the verse; (do you mean your faith? goodwill? self belief?
An otherwise satisfying poem - since we have all met people who have betrayed us... and would've liked to express our views this way!
You post items. You read others. Are you getting the feedback you'd hoped for on this site?
Poll Results:
112 Votes (41%) No. Less than I expected
100 Votes (37%) About as much as I expected
58 Votes (21%) Yes. More than I expected
Total Votes: 270
Comments
...Also very interesting ... I have been giving these polls a good look, and many of them have been covering great topics, and they've been helpful and revealing!
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Stanza 2 could be the chorus
A heartwarming message, and an absolute delight to read. Also, well set out and easy to read.
