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Being a Bangladeshi, I can completely relate to this. Sometimes the solution to our problems lie right under our fingers, but we don’t get to see it at all. I love the way this piece ended, as a reader I wouldn’t really appreciate something tragic here. Keep writing.
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Yes, it’s always wiser to pen down your thoughts as paper has more patience than people. I enjoyed reading this sweet and rhythmic poem. I just wonder, why rain? Why not anything else?
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This one's a nice little tale told well in verses. Well, I did stumble on some words, because English is not my first language. I could kinda visualize the lady and that dragon in the end. Some kind of a related image used as a header, might add to the visual appeal. Keep writing!
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I came across this item through the read and review link. I was drawn to this because of the different format and the unique genre.
Your words just seems a little too clustered, you might try putting some space between the lines. I could actually visualize a group of teenagers talking as I read this. Enjoyable. Keep writing.
And then they lived happily ever after! Obviously, this trillogy is very inspirational too, especially for those who've had their hearts broken and maybe have lost faith in love. I like the simplicity of these poems. Keep on writing!
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I couldn't resist reading the other parts, so here I am , flying from one branch to the next. This one seems like it's written about a teenage girl, waiting for her dream man. Now let's see what happens next...
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Well she seems like a woman every man dreams about. I like the nice little picture you've painted with words. Maybe you could allign the poem at the center and enlarge the font size for a better view. Otherwise, great one! Write on!
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Pleasure meeting you. This is a pretty short piece, yet it talks well about your views related to religion. Just try to brush up the format a little bit to make it a little more visually appealing and a bit more easily readable, the words look a little too clustered to me. Keep writing.
Hey Sonali, got something in your portfolio after a long time. I can really relate, as I also didn’t get trained for many things being the youngest of the family. Now am self training myself. Did the mother daughter relationship improve over time? Did the daughter try to bridge the relationship?
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I love the way you describe the main character's love for her feline friends. I wonder why the husband didn't like cats, though. Did he have a disease, like asthma? I think "pets" could be a second genre of this item. The story had a nice flow and didn't seem monotonous at all. Keep writing
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Thanks for trying out my new activity. This happens to many mothers or fathers when their children leave. I believe this happened to my parents too. I like the way you incorporate the butterfly in the story. I hope the young lady finally got to choose a good college for herself.
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Welcome to WDC. This one's a little sweet tale about the perfect birthday gift. But there's still lots of room to improve. Work on the format, and try to elaborate the account a little bit to let the readers know more about why the bike was so important to you. Keep writing!
I had promised to pay you a visit as you gave me a very nice review a few days back. So here I am. Here's what I thought about your story:
Title: I was curious to know whatever princess knew, and I adore the little cover image.
Language and Layout: I like the simplicity of the story. It's a blend of innocence mixed with a pinch of suspense. Hats off to your word choice, because I personally tend to avoid using too many unusual or extremely difficult words. The story unfolds bit by bit, and there's something new in every paragraph. The story is neatly laid out.
Maybe you could add: Tell us a bit more about the dog, the story lacks that. The supernatural bit is the dog here, so show that a bit through actions. I know there is a word limit, just try to put it here and there.
Congratulations on winning the cramp...keep writing!
I returned to your port in search of something to read. This poem really made me laugh. I like the whole of it, but the last stanza seems a bit out of place. you might try to rephrase the last 4 lines in some way. Keep writing!
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Welcome to WDC. This one looks like a preface to a novel, the paragraphs seem a bit jumpy, not properly connected together. do you plan to expand this into a novel? If so, then what is the conflict? Make it a little more smoother by connecting the paragraphs together, add a bit more actions and descriptions. Keep writing!
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I flew into your port in search of something nice to read, and settled on this one. I always enjoy reading family related stories and this was no exception. I just wish the mother wouldn't lie in the beginning, but glad everything turned out happy in the end. Keep writing!
I just love this poem. When I first looked at the title, I thought this might be something really sad. Yes, we all must go to God one day, and heaven definitely is nice. but the life of this world can also be enjoyed if someone chooses to walk on the right path. Thanks for sharing. Write on!
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I wonder how this item escaped my eyes. I just loved reading this! I always like real life related articles? I miss you. What happened to your blog? I hope Jackson is doing really well, and so is Savanah. How is your jewelery designing going on?
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Well, if I was the man I'd have pointed out about the spaghetti in her hair. I wonder how I'd reacted if someone proposed to me that way. This one really made me laugh. Girls always care about the ring only? Nothing else? Well no idea, as I don't have experience.
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