Hi there,
This came up to me through the read and review section. I’ve never heard of Barbados, so don’t really know what it’s like. Seems like it was filled with natural beauty, but what was so special about the frogs? And if you wanna re-live the buzzing of mosquitoes, come to Bangladesh.
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Landed on this one through read and review. Never heard about a tanka before, what are the specialities of this? I did enjoy reading this one. Does it have to rhyme or not?
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Hi,
I enjoyed reading this story, but why would you want to keep a ringing phone inside class in the first place? I think this happened to many students during class time. You might want to work on the font size and the formatting here. The spacing seems a little clustered.
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Hi there,
Stumbled on this through the review request page. I like the way you’ve portrayed the young couple in the story. I felt like a lot of things were left unsaid between the two. I like the smooth flow of the story, you’ve chosen the words quite cleverly. The ending came as a real shock. An enjoyable read, keep writing!
I’ve kinda fallen in love with these two twins. They are always so full of fun. The only thing you need to work on is the formatting of this story, the font size would look better when bigger, and double the spaces too.
Write on!
Hi there,
Thanks for giving me a reason to laugh, I seldom get that nowadays. My most favorite part was where Jellybeans became Bellyjeans.
I’d surely want a sister like yours. You may be seniors, but you really seem full of fun!
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Hi there,
Your friend Dawn Embers had gifted you 3 short story reviews she had won through an auction. This is the first of three, please give me links to the other two you want reviewed.
I enjoyed reading this item, and how the narrator found out about her relatives. I feel sorry for her mother though, as she never got a chance to meet her real dad.
I liked the easy flow of this item, and this is something many readers can relate to. However, the font size and the tight spacing does hit the eye, so you might wanna look into that.
I flew into your port to look for something to read, unfortunately landed on activities and previously reviewed items at first. Then I landed on this one.
No child should have to go through whatever this little girl faced. She needed a mom to grow up, and she should at least get the chance to say goodbye when the mother passed away. I am glad the mother remained with the girl in spirit, though.
Enjoyed reading this piece, however, could you make the font a little more visible? it kinda hits the eye.
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This item really taught me a lot, especially the part about writing side stories with the main characters in it. Also, I like the parts about showing conflicts.But what to do if we’re stuck on a longer work? Like I could really use some help with my NANO novel. I’ll come back again to this article to learn more. Thanks for sharing.
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I was rummaging through your port for something to read, and landed on this.
This looked like a perfect, sweet tale of love, the woman silently keeping track of her man. I love how the atmosphere unfolds with each line. However, I wasn’t expecting the story to end the way it did. Yes, the man cheated, she could have just taken the high road and broken up, but cyanide? That seemed a little too much for me!
Enjoyed every bit of it, write on!
Happy account Anniversary!
Hi Sonali,
Reviewing entry "Smoke Signals"
Flash fiction happens to be one of my favorites, as it is short, sweet and simple.
I love the way you’ve portrayed all the scenes, I can visualize the concern on the little boy’s face, wondering if his Daddy would die. And the mom’s a clever one too, she didn’t try to answer his question herself. I’m glad the story ended on a positive note. And as always, I applaud the simplicity of your words.
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Got this on Annete’s parenting contest forum and knew I hadn’t read it. This is such a heartwarming tale, I can completely relate to this. Why do mothers always become so concerned early on, by the way? I’m glad all went well in the end.
I like the way you begin with a nice music I like the way you’ve mentioned your writing goals, that would help other writers around here too. I hope you never decide to close your account though.
I feel so sorry for Beth here, and even for the little boy who didn’t even get a proper chance at life. However, where was the girl’s partner when the fire happened? Was she a single mom?
I really didn’t expect the ending to be the way it turned out, yet, I really enjoyed reading this story. Keep writing!
This is a different kind of story where money doesn’t exist. And if the women around the world were as attractive as the woman as the central character here, maybe life would have been a little different. Enjoyed reading this. Keep writings.
Hi Hi, big bro,
So the uninvited guest is a coyote, huh? What was it trying to do, attack the dog? The dog seems interesting, give it to me, to pet for a day or two. As always, I was spellbound by your descriptions, and this story is of a perfect length for me. I can relate to the barefoot sensation very well.
Take care.
Hello there,
I'm reviewing in connection with: "I Write in 2025" as your entry was right below mine.
I am not much of a poet, so I'll not comment on the technical aspects of the poem, the line, rhythm, I'll leave that for the poem experts.
What I can sense here though, is an elderly person looking back at his accomplishments, and what he failed to achieve. He's looking back at a reflection of himself. Nice way of portraying that picture.
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I’m doing this as part of I write, as your entry was right below mine.
I haven’t read such a story where I could visualize almost everything so clearly. I liked the way you portrayed that kidnapping scene. The character Sullivan has qualities of a good husband and detective. The word choice was appropriate, the language was easy to follow. Every word was worth reading.
Write on!
Only you can think this way, otters and fishes are like eagles in water! So what happens when the eagles actually devour those fishes? The fishes would swim deeper into the water to avoid the predators? I loved reading this, as always!
I am a teacher myself, and I was intrigued to read this. I could completely relate to the sentiments here, students actually become our children while we teach. I’m glad you didn’t give up when you felt like, that would actually be depressing for you.
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Your entry kinda set me thinking. My Mom’s over 70, and Dad’s over 80, and I’d never want to leave their side, come what may. Obviously, this experience might have been awkward for you, but didn’t you like it when you got to see your girl? I like the way you incorporated the past experience with the present.
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Hey Bro,
Why does red always have to be the angry one? I adore all the personalities you’ve given all the colors. But I think white should have shone above all, instead of being shy. I’m glad finally all the colors could work together to paint a masterpiece.
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All well with you? How come I didn’t notice this before? It’s such a delightful little tale, took all my footache away! How is Anne turning out to be, now? More confident, compassionate? Or naughty?
This story just made my day. You keep writing, while I’ll keep flying into your port to read.
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