I'm assuming you wrote this article that was in the BC Eagle.
This is a very informative article. I'm not sure that increasing the age would make all that much difference. If the students take more Driver's Ed., that might help. But for the most part, I think the danger is in fact that once the teen gets that license, they are a bit too confident. A lot of them are ready to celebrate their new found freedom; the freedom to drive. I realize not all teens are like that.
I noticed a couple errors which I've listed below.
Keep writing.
Grandma Penny
Many changes are needed in order to make our roads safer
You've written this well. I found no typos or misspelled words. I love the style you've used with this. The color is beautiful. Sometimes using color font just about blinds the reader, but this is a soft, pleasant color.
Again, you've done an absolutely beautiful job. This poem is a witness for Jesus. You never know when someone who isn't saved will read it and it will touch their heart and help them to accept Jesus as their Savior.
This is another great tribute to our Heavenly Father.
I found no mistakes in this. You do a wonderful job. I almost envy those who are good at writing poetry.
This one deserves a 10, but we only go to 5. They say 5 is perfect and they also say there's always room for improvement. To me this is perfect. I don't know what you could do to make it any better.
This is so beautiful. So far, everything I've read in your port shows you either talking about God or to Him. That is a wonderful testimony in itself.
Keep up the good work and continue writing. You never know who you'll be a blessing to. Actually, I'd think anyone who visits your port will be blessed.
This is absolutely beautiful and so true.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. I can't think of a thing that I could suggest to correct or improve.
You seem to have it down-pat.
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. It reads smoothly. Your lists of wants and don't wants is very interesting. I think that's what most of us would ask for.
I read another poem about bipolar. Is that the same thing as manic depressive? Or is it something different all together?
I know how much your Great-Grandmother and your Grandpa loved youDid you mean to say Great-Grandmother or Grandmother? Oh, I just saw this. You don't need to capitalize the words grandmother or grandpa when using your in front of them.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. This tells me that you are a very careful writer. I've read a lot from your port and I don't think I've found errors in any, except for one story.
I'm afraid you've earned yourself another 5 from Grandma Penny. I found no errors. You use good strong sentence structure. There are no sentence fragments. You held my interest. As a matter of fact, your writing tends to make me feel that I'm right there in the middle of the story.
I know 5 is perfect and they say there's always room for improvement. But, for the life of me, I can't think of a thing you could do to make this any better.
You pulled the reader in and held my attention from the beginning to the end.
I feel as though I knew Jeffry when he was just a child. You've given such wonderful detail and description of him in everything I've read in your port.
This is such a beautiful story. I found no typos or misspelled words in it. You've used good strong sentence structure. I found no run-on sentences or sentence fragments in this.
You've given great detailed description and pulled the reader right into your living room with you.
Keep up the good work and continue writing.
Grandma Penny
Wow! What an interesting story. That son of your's is something else, huh?
That child-like faith gets the job done everytime.
I saw a couple errors you might want to correct. We don't want anything to take away from this heart-warming story.
I was determined not<--Did you mean for this word to be here? I would think you meant that you were determined to make up for that loss to make up for that loss this year.
I certainly know where you're coming from here. Do you think maybe we have a disease? If so, it must really be contagious; there's a lot of folks on the site with the same symptoms.
Right now, as I review your poem, my son is in the kitchen yelling, "Mama, come eat." So I better run. It's not often someone else cooks for me.
Hi Rusty,
This is written beautifully. I found no typos or misspelled words. My first thought is that you take pride in your work before submitting it. You've done a great job with this piece.
I don't usually do these things, but this one just looked so interesting and inviting I felt drawn to it. I tought I'd give it a try.
I know folks get a kick out of these activities and it does seem to help us get our minds in gear. I suppose it is a good writing and mind exercise to get our creative juices flowing.
I'll have to say this was more interesting than most madlibs. At least the part of the story you wrote seemed to be error free. Most folks think that because this is something just for fun, they don't need to take pride in it.
This was fun.
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
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