I suppose this is a good survey. I often wonder why we have certain surveys unless it's going to help with one of our activities or some type writing that needs research.
You asked some fairly good questions.
I probably need to visit your port and read some of your writings.
I had to give this one a 5 rating. You have hit the nail on the head here. I don't understand where Christians are coming from when they do this to other Christians. I'm not going to say they are not Christians, but I am saying they can't be following the leadership of the Holy Spirit.
You've done a good job writing this piece. I found no typos or misspelled words.
The words in it are heartbreaking.
I wonder if you maybe have a short story in your port about this, or would it be too painful to write about? It leaves the reader wondering how Jeffery lost his life.
This is a beautiful poem. It has so much truth in it.
However, you need to edit this and make a few small changes. Anytime you're speaking of God, (this is His name), capitalize it. When using he, him, etc. and speaking of God, you should capitalize He, Him, etc.
This seems to be written well. I found no typos or misspelled words. The only thing, I read the description before reading the poem. Now, I'm confused.
I thought it would be you talking and your son talking. Yet, if that's the case, I can't figure out who is who. Did I just misunderstand the description?
I had to give this a 5 rating. This is such a sad story. It's hard to have to watch our loved ones (especially our children) suffer. I almost lost my 31 year old son last April. Thank God, he survived, but only because of prayers.
This is written well. I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. That really amazes me, because usually in an item of this size, there is at least one mistake.
You've already told a lot about yourself in this story. I'm anxious to read more.
Welcome to wdc. You've written an interesting story here. The whole purpose for posting and receiving reviews is to better ourselves with our writing.
You've done a good job, but I can see a few things you can do to make it even better.
First of all, for the sake of us with poor eye sight , it would be easier for us to read if you'll double space between each paragraph.
I also noticed quite a few sentences that began with the word now. I don't think this is a big problem, but it would read better if you don't use the same word at the beginning of a sentence so often. I might be the only one that feels this way, so it's just a suggestion.
I'm looking forward to reading more. Keep writing and posting good stories, etc. for us to read.
I've listed some errors that you might want to correct below.
Grandma Penny
seeing there<--This should be spelled their red eyes glint in the moon light.
This piece is full of sadness. It's so pitiful how age and disease effects folks. It's heartbreaking to watch someone we once knew turn into someone we no longer know.
You've done a good job writing this. I found no typos or misspelled words.
I had to give this a 5 rating. You didn't make any typos or misspell any words that I could tell. You certainly held my interest from beginning to end. And, you wrote about something I can identify with. It's amazing what God can do for us.
You've written this well without error as I can see.
As I read this piece, I could feel your pain, anguish and grief. The only thing, as I read, I kept wanting to ask you what happened to him? Was he in an accident? Other than that unanswered question, you've give great description.
I lost both my brothers; one to cancer and the other had a liver disease from drinking all his life. No matter, I still miss them both. I remember feeling anger at hearing the news of each one.
Mercy sakes! I'll have to say you've written this piece quite well. I found no typos or misspelled words. You held my interest from beginning to the end. You certainly tell a lot about who you are.
I like the last line. That explains it all.
Keep up the good work and continue writing.
Grandma Penny
This is definitely written well. I looked for boo boos but didn't find any, except for the one you made at the end of the story. Oh...I'm sorry. That was the end of the story, not a boo boo. (e:laugh)
Poor Brucie. Poor Joyce. Poor You.
You did a great job with this piece. Keep writing.
My goodness! This was chilling. It's written beautifully. I like the way it ends. They say we all have a personal angel looking over us. Looks like you even know your angel's name, huh?
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, it would be easier for us to read if you'll double space between each paragraph. 