This is a good little story. I was just a tad disappointed with the ending. Not that it's a bad ending, but I was hoping Tom had a new worker at the shelter. But your ending is still a good one.
Maybe it was the craggy face that looked liked time had sculpted it with wind and sun, or maybe it was the way he walked, straight-backed and erect, despite a pronounced limp.
What a "love"ly little poem. It says volumes about love in just a few words. I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. I can tell you take great pride in your work. It's a pleasure to read something that isn't full of errors.
Wow! This is a very well written story. I found not typos or misspelled words in it. That amazes me, since it is a rather long piece. You've done a great job.
You grabbed my interest in the beginning, held it throughout the story right on to the end.
I'm not surprised at the way it ended, and am wondering if there is a follow up story?
The contents in this poem are so true to life. It is really sad to think how an elderly person can just be put to the side.
I live in an apartment complex where all the apartments are in the same building. Many folks mistake it for a Nursing Home. It's for the elderly and handicapped. It blows my mind how some families have placed their mother or dad here and just left them to take care of themselves. Yet so many of them just aren't able to take care of themselves. Many have no transportation; are unable to cook for themselves, and I think there may be a few who can't bathe themselves.
I'm sorry, but this is what you poem reminded me of.
Keep up the good work and continue writing.
Grandma Penny
This is a beautiful little poem. I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. You've written it well.
I'm a bit confused, though. I just reread it and the first thing you mention is the sunrise, then talk about seeing the sunset come. Did you mean it this way?
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. You held the reader's attention from beginning to the end.
I enjoyed the humor in this piece. It certainly doesn't pay to try on pull one over on another, especially when we're talking different denominations, huh?
Thanks for sharing this. You have made some great suggestions and give good advice on forming your characters.
Most of the stories I've done so far, I had someone I knew in mind, so that made it easier. Ex. In a couple of my stories, I used a different name from my son, and added a lot of fiction to already existing events in his life.
I'll have to come back to this and study it some more. I know it will be helpful to others as well as myself.
Very good! Very good. I enjoyed this little poem. I found no typos or misspelled words in this which is great due to the length of it. You must have worked hard on this.
The humor in this piece is from the beginning to the end. I really like it. Did I say very good? Oh, yeah, several times.
This piece is well written. I found no typos or misspelled words in it. It's written in a way that it's easy to read, but I'm not quite sure I understand it.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. You've done a beautiful job writing this. Wow! What a dream. Wouldn't it be nice if the world was the way you dreamed it?
It sounded a lot like Heaven until you said And everyone participated in election .
This is one of the most beautiful stories I've read in a long time. The only thing I found wrong at all is a couple typos, listed below.
Keep up the good work and keep writing.
Grandma Penny
a life time commitments. <--I think you might need to drop the a or s; example: lifetime commitments or lifetime commitment.
The following fall, Momma and Poppa Geese flew away with the thousands of other geese. Poppa Geese, his wing healed and strengthen by exercise over the summer, flying point, Momma at his left as they flew south. They didn’t return in the spring.I think you might have meant to say Poppa Goose.
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