This is a very helpful and informative story. Thanks for sharing it with us.
It would be a lot easier to read if you would double space between each paragraph. That's much easier on the eyes.
Below I've marked a couple errors you might want to correct.
I did not have to undergo radiation or chemotherapy.<--Here you probably need to insert a comma instead of a period--> but I was left with a greatly weakened immune system.
However, andy cancer patient can tell you that the treatment or even eventual death is not the most devastating aspect of cancer.
This piece is very well written. I found no typos or misspelled words in it.
It's full of humor. I chuckled all the way through the story, just guessing at the ending. I was a bit off base. I thought maybe there was a chalk eggs.
This is very touching and heartwarming. There's just something about grandmas, especially good grandmas. I still miss my grandma and she died in 1960. I remember so much about her. I think she had as much influence on my life as anyone else did.
This is another beautiful poem. You just have a way with words. The words reach out and touch the heart of the reader. I don't see anything I think you should change with the piece.
You caught my interest in the beginning and held it all the way. You've ended this part in a way that the reader feels anxious to go on to chapter one.
I found one error, listed below.
Her face cringed as she drew forth an internal energy only one other had caused her to resort n<--Not sure what goes here using.
Gosh! This is just too cute. I hope you have more of this type memories in your port. I love reading things like this. Believe me, today, I need all the laughs I can get and this one certainly brought a chuckle from me.
You did a good job with this little Christmas story. I don't think there's a purer love than the love of a child; especially a child like Jimmy who isn't spoiled with so many of this world's riches.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece.
Can you give me an idea how to find Christmas contests? I'm not having much luck in finding them.
Wow! Christmas memories. Are'nt they wonderful?
You mentioned your tree. Did you send a photo to, OOPS! I forgot whose port I saw this in...anyhow in the left hand column of the screen, there's a title...Oh Christmas Tree, Oh Christmas Tree. I clicked on that and some of the members of wdc have sent photos of their trees.
My grandparents came to visit and brought Fluffy, their calico cat that I had always loved.
There was a white mermaid made out out of white fiber material at the front of the store.
Wow! What a poem. You did a good job with this. It's heartbreaking to think there are acutally children who are going through just what you wrote about anytime of the year, but especially at Christmas.
I can't think of anything any more beautiful than newly fallen snow. Although it doesn't snow everywhere in the world on Christmas, we all still dream of a White Christmas.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece.
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
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