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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A gorgeous poem, I love the magical imagery that you have connected with nature. Powerful deities like Apollo and Mab often feel in closest communion with us mortals in places of beautiful natural scenery like the waterfall that you describe. I like how you weave in Gaelic words and place names.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Great characters in this one and I wonder what will happen next time the gypsies appear. A good job Betsey was okay after her scare and didn't cause too much danger. I'm looking forward to reading more of this and sorry I've been a bit busy for a few days. I love the enchanting Jane Austen episodes.
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Review of The Witch's Kiss  
Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a well thought out and inspiring story! I love how the traditional fairy-tale elements of plot and setting and characters were used. However, your story had a lot more depth as the 'evil' behaviour of the witch was given a realistic and understanding treatment so we can see her motivations for hating the innocent young girl. I also loved how Hope helped the witch so they both find a happy ending as it shows that anyone no matter how wicked and lost can find happiness if they trust God.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
The cherries pastries and tea with lemon sound lovely. There was a wonderful Jane Austen themed tea room I went to in Bath which was fun. I loved the interesting meeting with the gypsies, colourfully written.
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Review of Two Norse Myths  
Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
An imaginative, well written and enjoyable read. I love the Norse myths and I thought that your version was excellent. I particularly like how you added in some suspense as Loki tries and fails to get out of giving his head to the dwarves.
You might want to re-read this and correct a few typos as I spotted a few throughout the piece.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well written and lovely world building details. The dialogue was realistic and I love how the ordinary life Isabella expects to lead is transformed into the unexpected as she uses magic at the end of Chapter 2.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
Some great tips that I wholeheartedly agree with. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Once a Boy  
Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
A lovely, inspiring short poem. I love the contrast in description between the shy boy and the loud crowd. It's motivating to hear that he overcame his shyness so successfully and the poem seems to focus on a key point in this boy's life where he learns to be brave and becomes successful. It looks like a lot of thought has gone into crafting it to fit the short poetic form.
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Review of Earthbound  
Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
An enjoyable read wonderfully imagined from the point of view of a horned beast making an unlikely friendship with a bird. The setting and descriptions are lovely. The story was well written and gripped my interest, especially towards the dramatic ending. I'm pleased that this is listed as Part One as I look forward to reading more.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Such a beautiful, happy poem about a colourful fairytale world. I wish I could visit here it sounds amazing!
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Beautifully written, your worldbuilding skills are amazing. The fantasy world was so vividly imagined through the use of the senses and the familiarity of the main character with it. I love the inclusion of pixies and other fairytale beings and the squirrel and other animals. The lamb reminded me of one I once rescued which had got its head caught in a fence. I wonder what happened to the golden puppy after it was rescued though?
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Review by HollyMerry
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I like the discussion about the freedoms women have now and the expectations put on them in Regency times you made in Jennifer and Jane’s conversation. The description of Bradley’s house make it sound lovely. Lucky girls seeing these nice places.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
A beautiful, symbolic story. It’s like a fairytale with its message about pride and belonging. I’m pleased that the teapot had a happy ending back with the Potter and his teapot friends. The piece was nicely written too and read like a storyteller speaking.
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for entry "The fresh dawn" 
Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
I live the original way that you personified dawn as a person knocking. Also the way that the dawn light is like a sweet aroma, such a creative and memorable thought. The explanation of the Nonet format was interesting as it must have been something that took a bit of thinking about to write to fit the format.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Thanks for bringing this to my attention. What a lovely story, I wish it had been true as Jane deserved a happy ending like this. The opening with Jane wishing she had paper and ink to write down a new novel idea was perfect as it was something that immediately shows she's a keen writer. The fox having a name was a nice idea, I love it when animals get characterised like this, he sounds a mischievous and wily fox. The part where Jane sprains her ankle reminds of Sense and Sensibility. Jane is a lucky girl seeing someone like Mr Darcy appear right after she's been writing about him - defiantly a dream come true. The rest of the story was a beautiful fairytale and I love the description of the ball and their meal and the castle.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I like how you got Jane playing the piano in this one as I know that was a favourite pastime of hers. The rock and roll bit was super funny. I'm pleased there is a ball in it as I love the ball scenes in the Jane Austen films. Also it was nice how detailed you were about the clothes and things like it too 2 hours to get ready. I wonder what will happen now that Jennifer has fallen for a Regency guy?!
There is a 'want' missing in this sentence: 'You don't wmt to be alone, do you?'
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Review of OUR TIME  
Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderful poem by your wife, it's such a special way to celebrate your bond. The poem is well written and she's obviously put a lot of thought into it. You're a very lucky guy.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Poor Jane! I love the way you convey her hurt feeling by things like the way she leaves the table. I don't expect there to be a happy ending for Jane and Mr Mitchell but it's a shame. Thank goodness Jane has her modern friends to help her get over the disappointment.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Wow, I love the twist where the modern girls think they've met man Jane may have based Mr Darcy on. This is a fun read full of unexpected happenings and I like them discussing fun possibilities of what might happen like combining witchcraft, Pirates of the Caribbean and Twilight with Jane Austen. I wonder what would happen if Jane went to the modern world before she'd written all her novels, maybe they'd be very different and about modern characters.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I like the contrasts you make between modern life and Jane Austen's era like the hat pins being awkward. I find this from doing my Regency re-enactments. The mix of magical elements like the friends getting cursed to live forever is good. I love the cute cat Muffy. The ending of this chapter was good as it makes me wonder if things will work out and everyone can get home? If it was me I'd want to have a few more adventures in Regency times first though...
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Review of Hidden secrets  
Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well written and nicely done use of poetic form. I like the analogy between having to hide the true self and performance. A poignant poem.
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem made me chuckle. I love the name Grundlebletch von Hoogenspit and the idea of writing about a troll as the main character. Details of his everyday life like him waking and washing his face made him relatable and yet he sounded completely like a troll in what he did and the way he spoke.
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Review of Spinning Top  
Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, I’m completely blown away by the poetic perfection of the imagery in this piece. It sent chills down my spine. I wanted to start listing my favourite images but as I read on I realised that the whole things was so beautifully written that I’d just be copying out the lot. I particularly liked the sense of the chimes of the clock travelling through a wall that they had no kinship to as it set a scene of another time stepping through into the narrator’s house that night. At first I was focused on the clock as the hanged object so the change of subject to the spinning top halfway through took me by surprise - well done. I liked the way that a quotation from the grandmother was included to break up the narrative. The vivid image of the spinning top stopping innocently and the narrator wanting to but feeling unable to move it was well done. Also it ended fittingly with the narrator not being able to get back to sleep.
I just wondered about maybe changing this one line ‘ ‘When it spun, it was as if witnessing the work of a master craftsman, not the creation of a lanky eleven year old’ to ‘as if I witnessed’ to put the grandmother in the scene and make it sound like a more naturalistic speech?
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Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I’m pleased things are starting off on a better foot with Mr Austen as I wondered how it would go as he seemed suspicious to begin with. I love the pretence that keeps having to be made to hide you’re from the future and I wonder if this can keep on or if there will be a slip up? Also it was funny imagining Captain Jack Sparrow turning up and the Alice in Wonderland reference. This story is a bit like Alice in Wonderland going into a world that’s strange and having adventures.
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Review of Odin's Eye  
Review by HollyMerry
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great job! I loved the use of the traditional ballad structure to complement the theme of the poem. I love Norse myths and I could well imagine Vikings chanting this Ballard sat around their fires.
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