You wrote me a review sometime ago. I thought I would return the favorite and write one for you.
I just read your wee poem, Poem from a dead girl. What a powerful poem. I can hear the pain and despair in these words from someone who’s lost their way in life.
Your words make me wonder just what could go so desperately wrong that would change someone so much.
This poem is easy to read and understand. It flows smoothly from line to line.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
You wrote me a review sometime ago. I thought I would return the favorite and write one for you.
I just read your wee tale, Pirate Woman's Story.
The title caught my interest and drew me in. I love pirates. I guess the dangerous life they live thrills and the hint of romance that goes with such a fantasy.
The pictures are a nice touch to the tale. The wee flowers at the beginning of some of the paragraphs draws attention to them.
This tale is well written and easy to read. Yet I wish you had added a few more details to this tale. The hunt and rescue of Olivia would make a great story by itself.
I noticed a few of mishaps: My mother died when I was I was born so it was just my father and I. -- One set of I was needs to be removed. And the last I should be me.
One I flirted with a rich man that Cyrus was planning on robbing. -- One should be once.
They found Roscoe and his men at Blarney Cove, a favorite hide out place for pirates. -- This sentence would read just a well if you removed place.
Good job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
You wrote me a review sometime ago. I thought I would return the favorite and write one for you.
I just read your wee article, Creating the Supernatural World.
Thanks for taking the time to remind writers what a supernatural world should contain. It’s excellent advice about keeping a detailed journal of your supernatural world so you remember who can do what and how they are able to do this.
This article is easy to read and understand.
I think it’s great that you named several authors to give the reader published examples of what you’re talking about.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
You wrote me a review sometime ago. I thought I would return the favorite and write one for you.
I just read your wee poem, Civil War Love Story Poem.
What a cute sig at the end that illustrates this poem, a lady with her hero.
This poem is easy to read and understand and moves smoothly from beginning to end. I assume the words in color were required for the contest. They stand out and draw the reader attention.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
You wrote me a review sometime ago. I thought I would return the favorite and write one for you.
I just read your wee tale, Shadow Detective.
APPEAL: The title caught my attention and drew me in. As I read I felt a bit frightened. An intruder in one’s bedroom would set anyone’s nerves on edge. Great build up of suspends.
FORMAT: This tale is easy to read and understand.
SETTING: I can see the layout of the house from the few words of description.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: As her eyes grew accustomed to the blanket of darkness, she could begin to pick up details of items in the room. -- I think it might sound better if written she began to pick up…
The terror had built to such a crescendo that she wanted to scream. -- Instead of saying she was terrified, show it. Such as sweaty palms, paralyzed, etc.
The tension in the room could snap a red oak as if it were a mere twig. --Great image.
POINT OF VIEW: You did a good job of keeping this tale in the character’s point of view.
FLOW: This tale flows smoothly from beginning to end in a logical order.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
You wrote me a review sometime ago. I thought I would return the favorite and write one for you.
I just took a peek in your port and found this adorable sig.
The title told me what to expect when I opened the file.
The colors used create a beautiful picture. I love the kitty watching the birdie in the old mailbox.
The words are easy to see and read.
Whoever created this sig did a great job
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
You wrote me a review sometime ago. I thought I would return the favorite and write one for you.
I just read your wee tale, A Celtic Festival and Blessings.
APPEAL: Being part Irish myself, I love anything written that has to do with Irish tradition. This wee tale made me feel like I was young and in love for the first time.
FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand. You put spacing between some of the paragraphs. You should put spacing between all the paragraphs to give the page a consistent look.
SETTING: I get the impression from your words that a festival bonfire is taking place and everyone is gather round to celebrate the harvest.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.
FLOW: The story moves smoothly from beginning to end.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
You wrote me a review sometime ago. I thought I would return the favorite and write one for you.
I just read your wee tale, The Headless Spirits. What a creepy little tale you have woven.
You made it easy to read by using the extra spaces between the paragraphs.
This beginning chapter sets up a mysterious horror tale. Who or what is the dark creature? Was this creature human one and the previous owner of the house? Or a helpless victim that fell prey to whatever lurks within?
Grammar & spelling: 14 year old Katie. -- Fourteen needs to be spelled out since it’s the first word of a sentence. And especially since it’s the very first word of your tale. After that I’m not completely sure about whether or not it needs spelling out or if it’s okay to write in number form.
Victorian 2 story house not knowing the history behind it. It had been abandoned for five -- here you use 2 and five -- you need to write all your numbers one way or the other throughout the entire tale unless it’s the first word of a sentence.
However when things started happening that was unexplained she started believing and wondering if maybe these things were true. -- I think were would sound better.
She got up and left the house and down the road screaming. -- I think you need to insert ran before down.
“Not sure what happened but we have a murder on the loose carrying around a severed head." -- You need to add “er” at the end of murder to make it murderer.
The mysterious creature than re entered the house and descended back into the wall and ate the head of the dead woman and waited for his next victim. -- Than should be then.
This is a good beginning for a novel. Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
You wrote me a review sometime ago. I thought I would return the favorite and write one for you.
I took a peek at your port and found many neat things to read and look at. The sig with the bubble and butterflies is really beautiful and made me smiled.
I just read your wee poem, Dance, Lady, Dance.
The title caught my interest and drew me in.
Your words paint a vivid picture for the reader to see.
This poem flows smoothly line to line.
The only mishap I spotted was in the four stanza, third line. You accidentally put a space after me and before the question mark.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
Hello SoCalScribe,
This is a Let's Give Thanks Review from the "TGDI Group"
Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.
I just read your wee tale, Rush Week
APPEAL: Whoa. What a creepy sinister tale you wove. I see the making of vicious criminal in this fraternity. All fraternity pranks should be outlawed. These silly little boys and girls always go too far and someone ends up hurt or dead.
FORMAT: Your tale is easy to read and understand.
SETTING: The coffin is a nice touch for a vicious and deadly fraternity prank.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor I won’t comment on this.
FLOW: This tale flows smoothly from beginning to end.
Great Job!
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!
Hello SoCalScribe,
This is a Let's Give Thanks Review from the "TGDI Group"
Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.
I just read your wee tale, Escape
APPEAL: Very clever. I love the twist at the end. You had me thinking the boy was fleeing from something terrible not a bath. You got me and made me laugh.
FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING: I get a feeling for the corn field and the boy’s fright.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: He was scared, but he has to be strong. -- I think had would work better.
FLOW: This tale flows smoothly from beginning to end.
Great Job!
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!
Hello lesdonks ,
This is a Let's Give Thanks Review from the "TGDI Group"
Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.
I just read your wee tale, Have you ever Kissed a Mule?
APPEAL: Your wee article made me chuckle and smile. Thanks for the uplifting information.
FORMAT: It’s easy to read and understand. I always wonder how large a hand was when it came to measuring a horse, mule or donkey. I’m glad you told me. Learned something new just now.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: The second horse in the ring, a well-buit half-arab mare caught all eyes. -- built is misspelled and Arab should be capitalized.
FLOW: This piece move smoothly from beginning to end.
Great Job!
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!
Hello WhoMe???,
This is a Let's Give Thanks Review from the "TGDI Group"
{size:}Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.
I just read your wee tale, So Far Gone. I know how you feel fighting the battle of the bugle. I have one of those Some Thing when it comes to my battle with my bugle.
APPEAL: Your wee tale gave me new hope that if I’m really determined I just might succeed in losing all the weight my doctor wants me to.
FORMAT: It’s easy to read and understand. No foreign words or unknown jargon without an explanation to gum things up.
LENGTH: It appears to be a good length for the subject matter.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor I won’t comment on this.
POINT OF VIEW: Telling of from the 1st person point of view made it more personal and made me identify with it.
FLOW: It flows smoothly from beginning to end.
Great Job!
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!
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