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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi PumpkinMistress,

What a cool signature, Winter Mistress Signature.
What I liked:
1. The title matches the signature described.
2. The icy blue is rather cool and gave me a chill.
3. The Winter Mistress in silver accents the signatre. So does Elizabeth Hayes in a darker shade of blue.
4. Love how this signature is framed like a fancy painting from a gallery.
5. Even though the signatre is mainly one color I can see clealy what it is with a the fine details.
6. Credit is given to the creater of the sig.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi P Lima,

I just read your wee poem, Random Visions of Wilderness.

What I liked:
1. The title piques interest and draws the reader in.
2. It's easy to read and understand.
3. It has a nice pace.
4. Centering the poem gives it eye appeal.

I'm not an expert on different poetry styles so I can't comment on that.

Good job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Princess Megan,

I took a peek at Vandy, A Vampire, Character Sketch. WOW! All three images are awe inspiring. The title tells the reader what this is about. The colors of the images draws the reader's attention. The first image piques my interest the most. I wonder who's inside the crystal ball. Is he friend or foe to Vandy? The other two images show places that would make great setting for scenes as this novel unfolds. I shall return to read more about Vandy.

Great job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes.

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Silverindian,

I just read your wee tale, The Unwanted Guests. The title invites the reader in, and the brief description gives her an idea what this tale is about.

This story is told not shown. The only differece between the characters are their names.

I spotted two spelling mishaps.
They had taken pity on a family of homeless people. They were a loving family but underneath there was a sensiter heart; within Henry. -- sinister is misspelled.

The same hammer, that killed Edwina, calimed a second victim. -- claimed is misspelled.

This is the beginning of a great story. Adding a bit of description of each character will help? How did Henry feel before he killed Edwina? Did it become easier to kill Dora and finally Mr. Brown. Did any of the victims scream or fight back? Adding sensory details can create more suspense.

Example: Henry followed Edwina down the stairs. He heart hammered against his chest and the lump in his throat threatened to chke him. A cracking sound echoed through the cellar as the hammer smashed Edwina's skull. Bood spurted every where from the blows.

I've never be real good at explaining things. I hope this makes sense and helps. These are only my opinions and as the author you can decide what is useful and what to ignore.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes.

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Review of Tales of Terror  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Lottie,

WHat a neat wee contest.

What I liked:
1. The rules are easy to read and undestand.
2. he title piques interest and draws the reader in.
3. The deadline is posted clearly.
4. The contest tells the reader how to post an entry.
5. The gothic window with the prizes and the scroll with the rules are eye catching and make everything easier to see.

What I wish was included:
1. Word count limit if there is one. If not, I wish that was stated.
2. Where to post contest entry.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes.

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Review of Pumpkin Eater  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi leeflan,

I just read your wee tale, Pumpkin Eater. BRAVO! WHat a ince creepy little tale. You took an innocent pumpkin and turned it into a monster. All the details paint a vivid picture. I see the half rotten pumpkin until ROger gets to close and then the transformation after the pumpkin eats the boy. I love this twist.

This is easy to read and you did a great job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes.

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Review of Dead Steps  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Lyons,

I just read your wee poem, Dead Steps. The title is quite intriquing and drew me in. This is easy to read and understand by the use of simple and common words. It has a nice pace that flows smootly from line to line. It also send a chill down my spine. And I'm not sure if the man dreamt the whole thing or if it's all in his mind.

This is well written. Great job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes.

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Review of Reflections  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi AndrewG,

I just read Reflections. WOW! What an emoitonal piece. I'm having trouble writing this with tears streaming down my cheeks. It is well written with a lot of detail. I can see and hear what's happening. I can tell that the man loved his father and would miss him greatly after his passing.

I don't know if it's easy to know ahead of time that a loved one is dying or if it would be easies for that loved one to die without any warning. My mom died without any warning and to this day i still don't know why she died.

Your piece was well written from the heart. THanks for sharing this tale.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes.

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Review of The Labyrinth  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Wilke,

I just read your wee tale, The Labyrinth. You set the scene for a creepy little story with someone lost in a maze.

Nice description here: like a blind Frankenstein's monster. I wonder what made that click and seem to drive Samuel. Was SAmuel moving away or toward the click or something else? Who and what were the voices and what were they chanting?

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes.

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi stokecity,

I just read your wee tale, The Man With Blood On His Hands. What a creepy little story. WIth the spacing you used, it makes this tale easy to read and understand. The use of colors to seperate the characters is a nice idea. The main is in a hospital and has died, yet doesn't realize that fact. I wonder who he keeps talking to. I can feel his fear as he tries to rigure out what's wrong with him, then his horror when he realizes he's an experiment.

Good job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes.

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Allyann,

I found your request for a review on Nothing but the Truth - Review Forum page. I just read your prologue, The Treasure Keepers. WOW! What a great beginning for a tale about pirates and lost treasure. I can see the old witch and the captain clearly. Your tale builds slowly and draws the reader further in.

I like this description: Her dress was orange, a large necklace with a ruby was hanging from her thin neck, -- In my opinion I think hung sounds better that was hanging.

I spotted on this one mishap: The following morning a poor fisherman from this very town went fisherman from this very town went fishing -- you accidently reperted fisherman from this very town went.

This is well written. Great job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Every Day  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi ShadowCatMistress,

What a cool handle. I love cats and things that go bump in the night.

I just read your wee poem, Every Day. I'm impressed. It has a nice pace that flows smoothly from line to line with a rhyme. I love that your used colors to give it a different look and more eye appeal. If you decide to try to get this publish remember to change the words to black.

It is well written. Great job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of A Lilac Dream  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi SlayMe,

I just read your poem, A Lilac Dream and I enjoyed it very much. The title hints at some wonderful happening. It has a nice pace and is easy to read. Your words paint a nice picture in the mind's eye. I hear longing and perhaps some regret as someone ponders his love.

This well written. Good job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Second blog Sig  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Yellow Witch,

WOW! What a sig. I love the frame that gives it the look of a fancy painting.

What I liked:
1. The title hints at what the sig pertains to.
2. The whie and black with the grey shading are eye catching and appealing.
3. The words stand out and don't block the image.

What I wish was included:
1. Credit given to the artist who created this sig.

It's a great picture of an angel that's a bit naughty yet done in good taste.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Dreamin1-DiaphanousDelight,

I got your email and decided to take a peek at what you asked me to look at. I started with A Message from Your Reviewer and I will get to the others in time.

I found this article on reviewing quite helpful. I do have trouble deciding what to write an author after I read something in their port. I want to be helpful without hurting anyone's feelings.

I spotted several typos:
Because we associate what something sounds like with whether the character or place seems a challenge or shows some character..some weakness even. -- I believe it should be three dots between some character and some weakness.

Make use of white space between paragraphs and character dialogue -- you missed the period at the end here.

It's better to break it up into two static items or if it's a novella or novel, change it to book and separate into entrys. -- Entries is misspelled.

After the quoation mark they may have capped the he said part, if they use any dialogue tags at all. -- you missed a "t" in quotation.

You must indicate where we are, whos character POV we are in, -- I think it should be who's.

Whiskers, the Himilayan cat meowed as he brushed past me. -- I believe Himalayan is misspelled.

The area needing to be fixed can be and often is an obvious error--maybe it has a consistant comma error -- consistent is misspelled.

I've been guilty of posting things on the site without editing them more carefully. I hope this was helpful.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Witch's Fury  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi T. Williams,

I just read your wee tale, Witch's Fury.

What I liked:
1. The title piques interest and draws the the reader in.
2. The story is easy to read and moves along at a nice pace.
3. Your words paint a vivid picture for me. I can see the hateful crowd.

What I wish was included:
1. A more detail about each character.
2. A brief explanation of what the Witch's Fury is.

I only spotted one mishaps: Theta had seen through the her from the first and that animosity and suspicion for the young woman had been her undoing. -- I believe the should be removed between through and her.

This is well wriiten and leaves me wondering about several things. How did Theta return in Sera's body? What happened to the real Sera? Do you plan on writting more of this tale?

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of The Mystic Way  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi StormyRaven,

I just read your wee poem, The Mystic Way.

What i like:
1. The title piques interest and draws the reader in.
2. It's easy to read and understnd.
3. It has a nice pace.
4. I love that you used color to brighten the page.
5. I think centering the poem gives it eye appeal.

Good job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Joto-Kai,

I just read your wee poem, Bloodstained Scepter.

What I liked:
1. The title piques interest and draws the reader in.
2. It's easy to read and understand. No unknown jargon used.
3. Your words paint a picture for the reader to see.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi to the last cicada,

I just took a peek at your Images: Signatures file. All the signature posted here are eye catching. I especially like My Amy Sig. ANd the DeadBlue Sea stands out, too.

What I liked:
1. The colors used to create the My Amy Sig grab the reader's attention.
2. The Amy in gold set against the darker blue background makes it stand out.
3. THe purple edge is a nice accent.
4. I like the simpleness of the DeadBlue Sea. THe multi colored words against the blue background stand out nicely.

Moon Beam did a fantastic job with My Amy SIg. You also did a fantastic job with your DeadBlue Sea.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Chocolate Love  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Pamela,

I just read your wee poem, Chocolate Love. What a cute little poem, it made me smile.

What I liked:
1. The title says it all -- a love for chocolate
2. It's easy to read and understand.
3. It has a nice pace and moves smoothly along.
4. Your words paint a vivid picture of someone who's obsessed with chocolate.
5. It made me feel good by reading these words.

Great job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Left Alone  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Elizabeth,

I just read your wee tale, Left Alone.

What I liked:
1. The title piques interest.
2. The brief desciption hints at what's to come.
3. You tell us when and where the story bgins.

What I wish was included:
1. Spacing between the paragraph to make this a bit easier to read.
2. Some desciption of Amber, Liv and Jasper.

I spotted these mishaps:
Once I was on the bus things startedto go back to normal. -- a space is needed between started to.

"Ohmygosh! Liv, did you hear about the new kid? He is so cute!" Amber giggled. "Amber can you be any more of a gossiper?" -- "Amber can you be any more of a gossiper?" is a separate paragraph from the sentence in front of it.

I questioned her as we pulled into thee high school. -- I think you wanted the instead of thee.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of R.I.P Copper  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ZombieNeko,

I just read your tribute entitled R.I.P Copper and it brought tears to my eyes.

What I liked:
1. The title tells the reader what this tale is about.
2. It is easy to read.
3. Your words tug at my heart and made me cry.
4. The color is a nice touch.

What I wish was include:
1. What was Copper?

This is well written. Great job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi CssndrMks,

First let me say that I'm not an expert on the different styles of poetry so I can't say if the poem meets sytle requirements.

What I like:
1. The title piques a reader's interest and draws her in.
2. it's easy to read and understand.
3. It has a nice pace and flows line to line.
4. Your words paint a vivid picture.
5. It has a creepy vibe to it.
6. The use of the different colors give a Halloween feel.
7. The spaces between each line makes it easy to read.
8. I think centering it, gives it eye appeal.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Lord Norry,

I just read your wee poem, A victory of Darkness. I love the way you centered the poem. To me this is quite eye appealing. I love that you used color to draw the reviewr's eye. Your words paint a vivid picture in my mind of something creepy slipping through the night.

I'm not an expert when it comes to spelling and grammar, I believe victory in your title should be capitalized.

It is well written. Great job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Murray the Troll  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Highmage,

I just read your attempt at interviewing Murray the Troll. I see the big guy was quite evasive when it came to his name. It makes me wonder what he's trying to hide. A secret past he doesn't want anyone to find out about. He vague answers are cryptic and would make a great tale of what he's trying to hide. Or is he simply embarrassed because his name doesn't make others shutter with fear?

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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