I'm reviewing your poem for "Invalid Item" General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: Haiku: Winger 2010
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Good imagery of what winter feels like and how we long for spring. Which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Good poem and a joy to read.
Keep On Writing , Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
I'm reviewing your poem for "Invalid Item" General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: Things I Thought Were True
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. The flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Parting ways in any relationship isn't an easy job, but it's about something I think we've all experienced sometime in or our lives. Some times you just have to find the strength to get on with your life and start anew. Sadness is found here. Unable to understand and confused. Left alone and lonely. You conveyed the emotion of pain very well in this poem. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This is a great poem. A sad one, of course, but a great one nonetheless.
Keep On Writing , Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!!
.•°*"˜˜"*°•.¸☆ ★ ☆¸.•°*"˜˜"*°•.¸☆
╔╗╔╦══╦═╦═╦╗╔╗ ★ ★ ★
╚╝║══║═║═║╚╝║ ☆¸.•°*"˜˜"*°•.¸☆
║╔╗║╔╗║╔╣╔╩╗╔╝ ★ NEW YEAR ☆ 2011!!
╚╝╚╩╝╚╩╝╚╝═╚╝ ♥￥☆★☆★☆￥♥ ★☆May All Your Wishes And More Come True For 2011!! Best Regards, janice48 Have a Nice Day!!
I'm reviewing your poem for "Invalid Item" General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing! Mother
Title:
Impression Of Title: The title fits and is appropriate.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: I do have a suggestion. I would shorten up you lines. Example:
When I was young and innocent,
my mother sang a song.
Perhaps it had to do with birds,
I can’t recall just how it went,
though I used to sing along.
By doing this, it would help your rhyme and make your poem flow better. But, that is only my opinion, only you know what is right for your poem.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. About a mother that drinks and commits suicide by being hit by a train. And brakes her son's heart every time she drinks. What an awful thing you had to go through as a child. My heart aches for you in all that you endured. As I was reading this, I could just feel the pain, agony of the depths of deepest despair. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. It's clear that you write from your heart. All in all a good poem.
Keep On Writing , Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!!
.•°*"˜˜"*°•.¸☆ ★ ☆¸.•°*"˜˜"*°•.¸☆
╔╗╔╦══╦═╦═╦╗╔╗ ★ ★ ★
╚╝║══║═║═║╚╝║ ☆¸.•°*"˜˜"*°•.¸☆
║╔╗║╔╗║╔╣╔╩╗╔╝ ★ NEW YEAR ☆ 2011!!
╚╝╚╩╝╚╩╝╚╝═╚╝ ♥￥☆★☆★☆￥♥ ★☆May All Your Wishes And More Come True For 2011!! Best Regards, janice48 Have a Nice Day!!
General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Hi, Destiny This review comes from:"Invalid Item" Title: Faded memories
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping and really pulled at my heartstrings. About a woman who is very sad because she only has her memories of the one she was in love with. Bitterness is also found here. Unable to understand and confused. Left alone and lonely. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. I did feel the agony of the depths of deepest despair. I think the picture really added a lot to your work. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Very nicely done. To me you did a fine job with this.
Keep On Writing , Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!!
General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Hi, Jessesgirl This review comes from:"Invalid Item" Title: American Heroes
Impression Of Title: A great title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good, Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: What a great poem you have written here about honoring of our military. You emotions of Proud of the military was conveyed very well in this poem. I like the tone and subject of you piece. It gets the reader thinking. As I was reading this, it made me think of all the men and women still fighting overseas for our country. I pray everyday that each and everyone of them will come home safely and soon. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This is a beautiful, well written poem which I enjoyed reading.
Keep On Writing , Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
Its been an honor and pleasure to review your work!!
General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Hi, Jessegirl This review comes from:"Invalid Item" Title: Your Hands
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This is a poem about a beloved father. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. The reader can tell that this person loves their father very much and that the two of them have a very special relationship. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I really enjoyed reading this because it was so beautifully written, Nicely Done!
Keep On Writing , Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
Its been an honor and pleasure to review your work!!
General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Hi This review comes from:"Invalid Item" Title: Just The Wife
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem, that caught my interest.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: What a great poem you have written here. As, I read this poem, I thought to myself, wow, this poem is speaking about me. I thought this poem is a very sad and emotional one. Because it shows that the husband does not have any respect for his wife around his friends. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. My favorite phrase was:
You think you're the very life
of every party or cookout
but my heart dies a little
when you say I'm
“just the wife”
I thought this was the perfect way to wrap up your poem. Good Job!!
Keep On Writing , Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
Its been an honor and pleasure to review your work!!
General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Hi Berty, This review comes from:"Invalid Item" Title: End Song
Impression Of Title: Fits the content well.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: First off, I sure hope this is just fictional. If not, please go and talk to someone. PLEASE!! I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping. Really pulled at my heartstrings and brought a tear to my eye. To think that a person would commit suicide because they are lonely and depressed about how their life is going. What a sad situation this person is in. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. All in all a good poem, very sad though.
Keep On Writing , Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
Its been an honor and pleasure to review your work!!
I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Hi, Jess This review comes from:"Invalid Item"
Title: One Possibility
Impression Of Title: The title fits and is appropriate.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: The only suggestion I have is with punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.
Overall: This is a poem about someone special in your life. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. Again, this reminds me of a love letter which you wrote to your special person in your life, and in essence, I believe this is what this really is. The reader can tell that you love this person very much and that the two of you had a very special relationship. You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. A beautiful poem written straight from the heart.
Keep On Writing, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
Its been an honor and pleasure to review your work!!
I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Hi, Dorianne,This review comes from:"Invalid Item"
Title: New Year's Resolution
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: What a great poem you have written here. About setting realistic goals for 2011. This poem was true to the subject and carried the message well. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. I like the tone and subject of you piece. My favorite phrase was:
Old habits I know are hard to break.
New figures I want, for goodness sake!
I liked this phrase because it is so true that old habits are hard to break. I can really relate to this because I'm a smoker and have tried many times to quite, but have unfortunately failed. I'm going to try again this year, hopefully I will succeed. Very nicely done, and a pleasant read to boot.
Keep On Writing, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
Its been an honor and pleasure to review your work!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: Go in Peace
Impression Of Title: A perfect title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: First off I send you my deepest condolence and prayers for the loss of you loved one. There is a lot of feeling in this piece. I can tell the difference between someone being angsty and someone writing from experience, and I could feel the pain and the loss in your heart as I read it. There are tears in my eyes right now. Really pulled at my heartstrings while I was reading this. I can not even begin to image what you are going through. May God help you through this trying time. You brought forth your emotions and I felt as if I was feeling them myself. I am so sorry that you have to go through this. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I usually have a favorite line or two, but, Oh my gosh, the whole poem just touched me and brought me to tears. Very well written poem. Again, my deepest condolences, you will be in my prayers.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: The Young Wolf
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem, that caught my interest.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.
Suggestions: I have no suggestion to make this poem any better.
Overall: What a great poem you have written here. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. You describe the wolves very well in this poem. I could just picture them in my mind as I was reading. You definitely have a true gift with words. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I really enjoyed reading this because it was so beautifully written, and the imagery was just great. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: Son of Nature
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: What a lovely poem you have written here. Speaks of God who touches you and lives in wind and air. I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Very nicely done, and a pleasant read to boot.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Dear Magoo,
Title: The Strange Creature.
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: What a good poem you have written here. Good imagery of this beast and how it gets in trouble, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I could just imagine while I was reading this, I could just imagine in my mind the beast setting the curtains on fires. Very nice originality and great imagination in this poem. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Very nicely done, and a pleasant read to boot.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A Very
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. Good imagery about a person that is very much in love, which helps the reader to see in her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A Very
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas ★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. While I was reading this it really pulled at my heartstrings. About someone that is losing their memory. That must be an awful thing to go through for the person and the family. I can not even begin to imagine what that would be like. All in all a good poem.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A Very
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas ★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: First off, I send you my deepest condolences and prayer. May God help you through this trying time. There is a lot of feeling in this piece. I can tell the difference between someone being angsty and someone writing from experience, and I could feel the pain and the loss in your heart as I read it. There are tears in my eyes right now. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. I liked this poem because it was well written.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A Very
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas ★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. This about a young youth that dies on the streets. It just pulled at my heartstrings, because there are so many of our young youths that live on the streets now days. It is truly a shame and not a life for a young youth to lead. You definitely have a true gift with words. You've obviously spent some very creative energy in the construction of this bit of verse, made this a wonderfully smooth read. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A Very
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas ★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: I found this poem to be very inspirational. Speaks of how we should all worship God at his feet. Very good message. Gods love is probably the most taken for granted thing in the universe. Which I just think is a shame. People need to realize that God is always with us and all he has done for us. Especially, dying on the cross for use. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed reading this inspirational poem. And keep hiding His word in your heart.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A Very
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas ★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors. I did find one mistake with capitization. In line 8 word (it) this needs to be capitalize. No mistakes with spelling.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. This poem really touched my heartstrings. About a woman who wants to be like someone else. She does not feel wanted or lovable. What a sad situation for this woman, that she can not accept the person for who she is.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A Very
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas ★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: The only suggestion I have is to take the numbers off you poem.
Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. You conveyed the message of addiction very well in this poem. Nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. All in all a good poem.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem, that caught my interest.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Very nice originality and good imagination. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout.Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. You conveyed the message of negativity very well in your poem. All in all a good poem
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: I would shorten up the sentences. Would make the rhythm and flow better in my opinion.
Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. All in all a good poem. I think with a little work this could be a great poem.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is okay, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow kind of choppy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: My only suggestion is to shorten this up a bit. To wordy. This would help with the rhythm and flow. But, only my suggestion.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. About losing the man you love. I could just feel the pain while I was reading this. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. I think this could be a great poem with a little work.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Wonderful Day!!!
Wishing You A
*★Merry★* 。 • ˚ ˚ ˛ ˚ ˛ •
•。★Christmas★ 。* 。
° 。 ° ˛˚˛ * _Π_____*。*˚
˚ ˛ •˛•˚ */______/~＼。˚ ˚ ˛
˚ ˛ •˛• ˚ ｜ 田田 ｜門｜ ˚and A Happy New Year 2011!!!
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. As I read this poem I could just feel the pain of the person. It really pulled at my heartstrings. About someone stealing his precious letter. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed reading this poem because it was well written.
Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.21 seconds at 9:47pm on Jun 30, 2025 via server WEBX1.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!
★ 。* 。