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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Robin

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Re-Defining God

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is very nice, being centered on the page.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice. You accomplished a simple and beautiful rhyme rhythm, just lovely.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. My favorite phrase is:

We’re all earthly brothers – created by God.
We can live in peace;
With charity, cease.
And live side by side - as God’s blessings increase.

 This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. This is an uplifting piece about the importance of faith in our lives. You make many excellent points about the need for faith in our lives. I enjoyed reading this spiritually motivating piece.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Chelsea

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

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Title: Your Eyes Didn't Lie

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: Love without trust and honesty isn't really love. You conveyed this very well in your poem. The poem itself was very intense and emotional. Unable to understand and confused. Left alone and lonely. But, he or she saw it in their eyes. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Very nicely done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

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Review of My Angel  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Kings

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General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: My Angel

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy. The form is very nice, being centered on the page.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. I too, believe angels. That is a great relief, knowing someone is watching after you. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. You definitely have a true gift with words. he language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

You do so much when I need your help.
I could never explain all the love I've felt.
My love for you grows stronger each day
Time nor rain will never change its way.

Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! You definitely belong here, you have an amazing talent. This is an uplifting piece about the importance of faith in our lives. You make many excellent points about the need for faith in our lives. And keep hiding His word in your heart. I enjoyed reading this spiritually motivating piece. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Review of Grief  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, TiaraJane

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Title: Grief

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. The flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: This is a poem about your beloved husband, who is now deceased and in Heaven with his Creator. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. The reader can tell that you loved your husband very much and that the two of you had a very special relationship. You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Good poem.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

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Review of A Broken Doll  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Shirol

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A Broken Doll

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see his or in her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. It's about a broken doll that just wants to be loved. Even though it was just a doll, it really touched my heart strings. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. You definitely have a true gift with words. My favorite phrase (although hard to choose} is:

Her pensive lament, her tearless weep,
Left, forgotten, at a pitch-black hall;
To light breeze, she whispers, yearning deep,
For a heart to love a broken doll.

This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. You definitely belong here, you have an amazing talent. I really enjoyed reading this because it was so beautifully written. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Review of A Little Girl  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Jezri

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A Little Girl

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem, and caught my interest.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: This is really a cute poem. One in which I think many children would love to read. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. While I was reading this, I felt like I was that little girl looking up at the stars. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Nicely done, and a pleasure to read.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, YellowRose

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: TODAY AND EVERMORE

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.

Overall: This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. My favorite phrase, (although hard to choose} is:

Kiss my lips and walk with me
Warm my heart and my soul tonight
Be with me today and evermore

A pleasure to read this emotional,heartfelt poem, a winner for me. One in which I would highly recommend. I give you a big BRAVO!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, Princess Megan Rose

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Fairies And Dreams

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. How wonderful. While reading this I shared your adventure. Thank you for sharing this heart-warming moment with me. Very nice originality and great imagination. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Fairies in the forest,
Children and dreams.
Magic and love.
Fairies. You will always be my friends.

This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. I really enjoyed reading this because it was so beautifully written. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Robin

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Grasping Inner Inspiration

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem, and caught my interest.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.

Overall: What a gem of a poem you have here. I can totally relate to this poem. I'm sure other writer's also can relate. Every writer gets writer's block. But, eventually you start to write again. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. My favorite phrase, (although hard to choose) was:

I’m ready to begin;
I’m ready – hit the keys!
I’m ready to create again;
I’m ready – it relieves…

This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. You definitely belong here, you have an amazing talent. I really enjoyed reading this because it was so beautifully written. One in which I would highly recommend. I give you a big BRAVO!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Review of Firefly  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, typingrhyme

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Firefly

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: Very nice originality, and imagination. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. I can just imagine in my mind, those fireflies flying through the air. They are such a beautiful thing to see. I really enjoyed reading this because it was so beautifully written.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, typingrhyme

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Clickin Around

Impression Of Title: The title is unique, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. Wow, I can totally relate to this poem. I do the same exact thing you do. I'm sure there are a lot of people who do that while they are at work. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. My favorite phrase, (although hard to choose} was:

Oh I really need a fast cure
For my big clickin’ addiction
Because if my boss sees my plight
I’m headed for a job eviction.

This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Review of THE OUTSIDER  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Inner Peace

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: THE OUTSIDER

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping. Really pulled at my heartstrings. I can really relate to this poem. I get like that when I'm depressed. While reading this poem, I just wanted to give that person a hug, and tell them everything was going to be alright. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. I did feel the agony of the depths of deepest despair of this person. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Although this was a very sad poem, I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. It really touched my heart. Very nicely done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Inner Peace

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: By the Rivers Edge

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: What a lovely poem you have written here. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. While reading this poem, I felt as if I were there with you by the rivers edge. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Very nicely done, and a pleasure to read!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Review of My Stolen Soul  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Inner Peace

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: My Stolen Soul

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good, nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: The only suggestion I have is on punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Overall: I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. This is an uplifting piece about the importance of faith in our lives. You make many excellent points about the need for faith in our lives. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. My favorite phrase was:

A glorious new day has started to dawn
and my soul has began its welcomed thaw
trembling with pleasure as I make my revenant
knowing these wounds have been healed
the Lord will be by my side on my journey.

 This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. I enjoyed reading this spiritually motivating piece. And keep hiding His word in your heart.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Inner Peace

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: "Angels In Disguise

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. This poem captures the attention of the reader from the very first line and keeps the reader's attention throughout. You definitely have a true gift with words. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

How very sad it is,
for these angels in disguise,
that some people never see
they are God's most precious prize.

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!! Author IconMail Icon

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Review of Mom  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Jace

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Title: Mom

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good, nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: This is a poem about your beloved mom. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. Again, this reminds me of a love letter which you wrote to your mom, and in essence, I believe this is what this really is. The reader can tell that you love your mom very much and that the two of you have a very special relationship. I know that sometimes this can be a rare commodity indeed, so please consider yourself lucky. I know many people who have not had this kind of relationship with their mom. I, too, was blessed to have a special relationship with my mom, so understand of those things of which you speak. You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. A beautiful poem written straight from the heart that I hope many people have a chance to read and enjoy this as much as I have.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Lou

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Title: Peter Adam

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good, nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: This is a poem about your beloved brother, who is now deceased and in Heaven with his Creator. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. The reader can tell that you loved your brother very much and that the two of you had a very special relationship. I know that sometimes this can be a rare commodity indeed, so please consider yourself lucky. I know many people who have not had this kind of relationship with their brothers. I, too, was blessed to have a special relationship with my brother, who is also in heaven, so understand of those things of which you speak. You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. My favorite phrase, (although hard to choose) is:

As we placed fall flowers
Upon your grave stone.
Until we meet again,
I love you little brother.

 I really was touched by this phrase, because I know I too will see my brother again someday. This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely! One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Countrymom

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Title: I Had A Long Talk With god

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: I found this poem to be very inspirational. I can totally relate to this poem. I too, have asked God those similar questions, but no answer for Him. But, I do know that God does things for a reason, and we will not understand why he does them, until we come face to face with our Heavenly Father. This poem it shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You definitely have a true gift with words. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite phrase (though it's hard to choose) is:

I've learned to trust Him completely,
My soul and my life is in His Hands;
And I know that He will not forsake me,
For I - am one of His lambs.

 This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. I was really moved by this phrase. Because, you are right, we are all God's lambs. Very touching!! This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely! It was a pleasure to read your inspirational poem. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Title: Hunting Bargains

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Overall: What a nice poem you have written here. I can totally relate to this poem. I myself like to buy things from thrift shops, or auctions sales, after a person has died. It's a wonderful hobby, and something I like to do. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nicely done and a pleasure to read!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Kesan

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Title: Nothing Serious

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Overall: Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Very nicely done. Although a sad poem, I enjoyed reading it all the same.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Title: Staring at the Clouds

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Word Choice: Word good is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a few suggestions. First off, in my opinion this should be in a different format. Example:

Lying side by side,
Looking in your eyes
Feels like miles away

Lying back to back,
Staring at the clouds -
I have found you there...

 Secondly, you need punctuation in here. Example:

Lying side by side,
Looking in your eyes;
Feels like miles away.

 By doing these two things, in my opinion, it would make your rhythm, and make your poem flow better. But, again this is only my opinion.

Overall: The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, BScholl

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Title: Forever. You will see. (2nd Place)

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors. I did find one error on punctuation. In the 1st stanza. You forgot to end it with a period. This was probably just a typo error.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is very good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Overall: First off, congratulations on winning 2nd place on this poem. I can see why you won an award on this poem. This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed reading this, because it was well written, and a pleasure to read.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, YellowRose

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Title: It All Began With A Smile

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.

Overall: Parting ways in any relationship isn't an easy job. Here the poet has displayed grace through soft and kind words when two poeple are going their ways. I think this is sweet. I mean in today's world who would part ways like this? There would be more of speculations, blames and fights. But parting ways like this is a great way to burn all the grudges and live life afresh without ill-feelings. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You definitely have a true gift with words. My favorite phrase, (although hard to choose} is:

Promises he knew he could and would deliver
A pleasant man with love for me in his big heart
What we had will live on deep inside me forever

It all began with a smile

 I thought this was a perfect way to wrap up your poem. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, YellowRose

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Title: Forgotten

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem, and caught my interest.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is excellent. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I can't find any suggestions to make this poem better.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. You brought forth your emotions and I felt as if I was feeling them myself. While reading this poem, I did feel the agony of the depths of deepest despair of that person. I cannot imagine going through such a difficult life of feeling unloved. A person who feels forgotten and unloved. While reading this poem it really pulled at my heartstrings. I just wanted to give that person a hug, and tell them everything was going to be okay. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. This is a great poem. A sad one, of course, but a great one nonetheless. One in which I would highly recommend. I give you a big BRAVO!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, YellowRose

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Title: Remember

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a suggestion on punctuation. But, will not take aways from your rating. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. But, this is only my opinion, only you know what is best for your writing.

Overall: Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. Deep expression of emotion. Powerful! I like the tone and subject of you piece. It gets the reader thinking. What makes your poem is the love behind it - they come straight from the heart. Very nicely done and a pleasure to read.

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