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Review of The Letter  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. As I read this poem I could just feel the pain of the person. It really pulled at my heartstrings. About someone stealing his precious letter. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed reading this poem because it was well written.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Review of Dying for freedom  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you.

What a great article on dying for freedom. This article really makes you think a lot about choices. I totally agree with what the article says about abortion. I believe it is a child from the moment of conception. And it is a sin to murder that child. That child did not ask to be created. So I do not think it is right for a woman to have an abortion. Great article.


Thanks for sharing this article.

Have a Great Day!!

Peace and Happy Holidays,
Janice

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Review of Perfect Moments  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors. I did find one error in spelling. In the 3rd line you put (colours} should be spelled (colors}.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: Good imagery in the readers mind of someone walking down the road and the colors are glowing. Which helps the reader to see in her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. All in all a good poem.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Review of Why am i here?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you.

I think that is just great that you setup your own website. Especially because your were only 13 years old. What an accomplishment for a 13 year old. Congratulations on your website. That is awesome.

I however did not like the fact that you wrote this article in some letters. It really made it hard for the reader to read. I think you should go back and redo it. And capitalize words, were needed.



Thanks for sharing this article.

Have a Great Day!!

Peace and Happy Holidays,
Janice

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Review of A Star's Secret.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a suggestion on punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one about a person who what someone to notice them and love them. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. All in all a good poem

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Review of Maria  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem, that caught my interest.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: What a beautiful poem you have written here. You have painted a lovely picture in the reader's mind of Maria. The language in this poem is beautiful. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Very nicely done, and a pleasant read to boot.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Review of MY ROCK  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. A wonderful message. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed reading this inspirational poem.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: What a nice poem and tribute to your mom. This is a poem about your beloved mom. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. Again, this reminds me of a love letter which you wrote to your mom, and in essence, I believe this is what this really is. The reader can tell that you love and appreciate everything your mom has done for you. You can tell the two of you have a very special relationship. I know that sometimes this can be a rare commodity indeed, so please consider yourself lucky. I know many people who have not had this kind of relationship with their moms. I, too, was blessed to have a special relationship with my mom, so understand of those things of which you speak. You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely. Very nicely done, and a pleasant read to boot.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Review of Color My World  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: This is a beautiful, well written poem that conjures up wonderful pictures for the reader. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. My favorite lines or phrase were:

I wish you rainbows in your skies
pure joy to release;
asking from you, in return
color my world with only peace.

This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. I thought this was a great way to end your poem. Very nicely done, and a pleasant read to boot.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping. Just pulled at my heartstrings. This poem is a very sad and emotional one about losing some one you loved. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Although this was a sad poem, I enjoyed reading it. Good Job!!!

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Review of SEE  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: What a beautiful and inspirational poem you have written here. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. My favorite lines or phrase were:

Won’t you open up your troubled heart
And find beauty in front of your eyes
Any questions that need to be answered
Comes to you as nature speaks of the Lord

This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. I enjoyed reading this beautiful and inspirational poem.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Review of The Wrong Day  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: I can totally relate to this poem. My sons always have to be reminded of my birthday and such. And some times they do get the day mixed up. This poem gave me a laugh because it reminded me so much of my two sons. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. All in all a good poem.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Review of The Journey Home  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: What a great poem you've written here. This poem speaks of a person that is trying to find their way down the right path with the help of family and friends. As I was reading this, I felt like I was on the journey with you. I think the picture added a lot to your work. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. Very nicely done, and a pleasant read to boot.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Review of My Drummer Boy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. he flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: Very nice poem you have written here. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Good imagery of the drummer boy playing his drums, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Very nicely done, and a pleasant read to boot.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good perfect that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: You definitely have a true gift with words. The language in this poem is beautiful. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. I also like how you used different colors for certain words, it really made your poem pop. As I was reading this poem, I felt as if I was on the journey with the fairy princess. Thanks for taking me on a journey in my mind for awhile. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. This is a lovely poem about a princess who meets her prince and is lonely no more. My opinion is you should have this published, children of all ages would love this poem, even adult would love it. Very nice originality and great imagination, too. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You defaintly belong here, you have an amazing talent. I must say that I think this was a pleasure to read and wondefully written. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!!

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem, that caught my interest.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: What a great poem you have written here. Speaks of a man who looks back at his life with regret for all the wrong doings he has done. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You definitely have a true gift with words. I must say that I think this was a pleasure to read and wondefully written.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: I can't find any suggestions to make this poem better.

Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.

Overall: What a beautiful poem you have written here. Good imagery of the ocean waves., which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. As I was reading it, I felt like I was right there at the ocean and the waves were splashing on me. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I really enjoyed reading this because it was so beautifully written and a good read. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A perfect title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: What a beautiful and inspirational poem you have written here. About God's love and how when we die we will finally see his face and be in his grace.The language in this poem is beautiful. You definitely have a true gift with words. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You defaintly belong here, you have an amazing talent. I liked reading this poem because it was so well written and very inspirational. Keep hiding His word in your heart. This poem is one I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem, that caught my interest.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. It just pulled at my heartstrings that this person was so lonely and had no friends. What a sad, sad existence. I could just feel the pain as I was reading this poem. Although this was a sad poem, I really enjoyed reading this because it was so well written.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: You really used variety of words as well as metaphors and imagery that pertains to the senses to evoke feeling and picture. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. All in all good poem and good read.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Review of Pulse  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: Good imagery of, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. All in all a good poem and good read.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.

Overall: Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. You definitely have a true gift with words. Really enjoyed reading this poem because it was well written. Great Job!!

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.

Overall: What a great poem you have written here. Good imagery Of the piper, which helps the reader to see in her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I think children would just love this poem. Very well written and a joy to read. Great Job!!!

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (3.0)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is okay, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is a little choppy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: My only suggestion is on punctuation. My suggestion would be to place a a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Overall: Nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: None.

Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one about when your wife left you. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Although this poem was a sad one, I enjoyed reading it.

Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!

Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.

Have a Wonderful Day!!!

Peace and Happy Holidays!!
Janice

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