Thanks for sharing! You have poignantly showed that homes are meant to bring peace and comfort to our hearts. Even though a home may look like a mess, it has its own warmth and solace.
"Focus only on things that must be arranged
for recovering our society that has been changed."
These lines convey the message of the author and what everyone must expect from their homes. A good flow of thoughts like a stream from the beginning to the end connects ideas gracefully.
Thanks for sharing. From the beginning to the end, the author maintains the tempo of the story and connects well the happenings in the story with ease. Before understanding what will happen next, the characters move ahead into the next phase and ends the story with a surprising end. The smooth transition connects the important moments of the story and captures the reader's attention.
Thanks for sharing. As an author you have successfully established the emotional bond that exists between dogs and dog lovers. Being in a family that shares warmth and love is always a gift to a dog or a cat. The story perfectly establishes the strength of relationship bond that can be felt while reading this story. Though I am not a lover of dogs as a reader I appreciate the love for dogs and how they live among the family members with a soul similar to a human one though they look different than us.
Thanks for sharing. The author has successfully created a haunted place virtually that can linger on the reader's mind forever. The movement of ghosts has been written quite descriptive to evoke fear in the heart of the readers. With simple words and sentences, the author has written a ghost story with ease. Keep Writing!
Thanks for sharing! A wonderful piece that shows how creativity takes the deepest root in childhood. Rhyming words add to the beauty of the poem and virtually creates a wonderful picture of ladybugs. The author must be a child prodigy blessed with the gift of writing by Muse. The poem also shows the innocent heart that sees beauty in everything and loves to be always one with the bliss of nature. Keep Writing!
Thanks for sharing. Being young and young at heart, as an author you could write succinctly the emotional bond that exist between two love hearts. Quite descriptive, it brought before my virtual eyes a Christmas Eve that is blessed with chillness and flakes of snow that paint love in white against the night sky. Keep Writing! Happy Writing!
Thanks for sharing. As an author you are successful in maintaining the suspense of the story from the beginning to the end. The transition from one chapter to the next one is well connected and the reader will be kept in utter suspense and made to read more to find out what happens next. The characters support to keep the suspense tight and that adds a layer of fear to the events that follow. The story ends with a suspense and as a reader I could not guess what will happen next.
Thanks for sharing. As an author, this is a good start. Sharing your ideas or ranting your worst through writing will definitely help you to grow into a better person. Ranting verbally with some one in person may disappear into air and never be heard again. But when you write down what you have been feeling at heart and what you have planned to do next, will show you the way down the line which may ultimately take you to the place you want to be in. Writing heals. You are at the right beginning. Keep Writing! One day the world will cheer for you as an author!
Thanks for sharing. As an author you have successfully created the virtual picture of the tension and the emotional upheaval that happens in the world of a teenager. Unexpected moments that can bring in varied colors of experience every day for a teenager teaches what life is and how it can turn to be strong base for facing problems tactfully later in life. The author has successfully created a true reflection of thoughts that goes through in the present day teenager. The author has been successful in choosing words to help the reader understand the tough, stressful life of a teenager.
Thanks for sharing. With a simple setting, simple words and simple sentences, the author has maintained the suspense from the beginning to the end of the story. The author has been successful in maintaining the serious tone throughout the story. Though the story has a surprise ending, a reader will definitely feel scared and experience goose bumps. Being alone on a scary night is definitely an experience everyone would like to avoid. Keep Writing.
Thanks for sharing. As an author, you must remember that writing more and more helps to write down thoughts elegantly and in a refined way. As a reader I feel you are on the right track. As an author even if you feel you are not writing up to the mark, no need to worry. Keep Writing. Writing records moments that we just leave behind. Years after when you read them, it will be surprising to know how your thoughts were at that time. Words help us to heal, love and be the motivation to achieve more. Keep Writing! Even a scribbling may turn out to be a wonderful piece of literary work!
Thanks for sharing. As a reader, I know still there are things that are apart to the human knowledge. The author has successfully created a virtual picture of some rituals that are hard to believe. Such rituals play an important role in creating an unknown life that existed in an unseen world. The author has taken this plot to prove the strengthen of creative skills that once again emphasizes a good story teller is in line to succeed.
Thanks for sharing. Dialogues help the story to move on. The author has used the dialogues to make the reader recognize the plot, characterization, and the context that helps the reader to grasp the suspense that lingers from the beginning to the end. The author has given a chance to the reader to know how things happen in a police station, the conversation that unveils the motive of the crime and the emotions of the characters that are involved.
Thanks for sharing. A good analysis of photos that are not real and hide away the true colors of human faces. Appearance rule the world. People judge by looks and technology has helped to make the faces look charming and beautiful to win hearts or get things done. Even though we understand technology has gone a long way in changing looks, still we look for better looks and charm.
Thanks for sharing. The author has set the plot to develop more. The story triggers the anxiety to read more and know what will happen next. The author has successfully developed a virtual world where two innocent souls talk to get their things done. As a reader I can understand the present world has children who are smart enough to understand and get things done on their favor. The story emphasizes this. Develop this story into an interesting read.
Thanks for sharing! Words are always icons that will tell the world who you are. Though you have penned down your random thoughts, yet they show how you love your life as it is and want desperately to achieve something in this world. You have the ability to turn even your tears and sighs into your favor and let the world understand your heart. Keep Writing!
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Plot: A knot that will intrigue the reader to read more.
Setting: A place that is quite different from the concrete buildings and proves how nature is everlasting and gives hope for a better life.
Characters: The enthusiastic youngsters who want to explore a part of life that was explored and made as a symbol of hope.
Dialogues: Dialogues help to move the story further and help readers to understand and feel the emotions of youngsters who want to be different from their peers.
The author has been successful in creating a virtual world that brims with energy of teenagers who want to do something different and prove their guts. The story flows smoothly from the beginning to the end and never lags to distract the reader from reading. Keep Writing!
Thanks for sharing! The author has successfully written a story brimming with emotions that are not shared with each other and left as a burden within those two characters. Dialogues laden heavily with the strong tone of emotions can leave any reader with tear brimming eyes. The story builds the suspense in the beginning and takes the reader along with its smooth flow for a continuous read and ends the story with a punch that leaves readers to arrive at their own conclusions. Strong characters that have their own level of justification and live as the life demands. Keep Writing.
Thanks for sharing. As an author you have evolved a story line from a simple incident that can happen anywhere with a switched on computer system. Our lives have become one with the machines and we are now mentally ruled by these machines. Life has taken a big turn with sophisticated machines. Instead of thoughts, these machines rule our brain and we have become addicted to these machines. Life may become meaningless and confusing for a while if we move away from these machines.
Thanks for sharing. As an author you are successful in emphasizing the idea that you believed to be successful. In a technology savvy community, when gadgets rule the world, a life that is in alignment with nature is always a question of acceptance. Many users may not be ready to come out of their comfort level and experience a life that looked basic and raw. Yet such life has its own benefits. That kind of life can link your soul to peace and happiness. Keep Writing!
Thanks for sharing. You have set the stage for a good story that will allow the reader to read more. From the beginning to the end, there is some suspense that leaves the reader to guess. As an author you could create virtually glimpses of real events that could happen between friends in the college. The main character will catch the attention of the reader and every reader will like to read what will happen next in her life. Keep Writing!
Thanks for sharing. As an author you are successful in retaining the sense of horror and awkwardness from the beginning to the end of the story. The stage is set for the author to tell a story of horror and share whatever readers may not know about life at a graveyard. There is more scope for the story to be developed further and made into an interesting read. Keep Writing!
Thanks for sharing. As an author you have successfully written a story bubbling with love and emotions that make the heart feel pleasant and happy. Your story has once again emphasized the idea that birds bring in peace and happiness wherever they are. Sharing our space with these harbingers of peace and love brings peace and contentment into our lives also. Keep Writing!
Thanks for sharing. Usually stories relating to birds and animals connect children to nature and help them understand the importance of nature in our life if we need to lead a better life not affected with pollution. The story flows like a smooth stream from the beginning to the end. As a reader, this story will win hearts of little children if it is read aloud and even make the children read the children playing the role of different birdie characters. As an author you know how to capture the attention of children to read more. Keep writing.
Thanks for sharing! As an author you have beautifully brought out the fact that a mother's instinct is the same across all living things in this world. A bird or an animal or a human being, a mother reflects love laden with care, love and compassion. This short story is heavily packed with emotions that will reflect compassion at all levels. Keep Writing!
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