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Review of White Balloons  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi WW. You just gave me chills!! You're poem is so entrancing. I could picture the image of loved ones holding white balloons to honor a deceased child.

Your poem actually brought back memories of when my mom died. I had gone back again to see the stone and all. Now, I had time to check out her 'neighbors', and to get more familiar with the cemetery. When I looked at a very nearby stone, I cringed to see that there weren't flowers around it...There were Barbie dolls and little toys! I scanned for the date, and saw that the grave belonged to a seven year old girl! It's heartbreaking, as was your story.

You did an amazing job with the imagery, and in choosing just the right poetic words to make an impact in the expression. It would really be such a sweet (bittersweet) tribute to have all the loved ones hold white balloons. It was fitting to have it rain. It added to the sad feeling.

I keep thinking of 'My Chemical Romance' 'Black Parade'. I think they were holding black balloons. Well, this made just as much as an impact.

My favorite part of your poem was when you wrote that some people didn't open their umbrella. It added to the feeling that the mourners didn't care if they were getting wet...They needed to do this - They needed to hold those balloons up high to show their love. So beautiful. *Delight*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* You're picture and the little story that went with it brought back such great memories for me. I remember when my daughters used to make gingerbread houses.

Wow! Your family had lots of gingerbread houses! I thought they did a great job with them, too. It's so nice that you thought of snapping the picture to capture the memory forever.

I really enjoyed reading about how all of your relatives got together. You have a big family. It must be awesome to have so many young ones growing up together and gathering on holidays. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Favorite music  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* Oh! That was such a difficult choice! *Bigsmile*

I loved this poll! I enjoy so many types of music, so I picked 'all types'. I see that's in the lead, with 'rock' right behind.

I really thought you did a great job with this poll. I loved the poetic heading..."What music do you feed your soul"?
By the way, I would phrase it like that. You have it as, What music do you feed your soul with. I would leave out the 'with'.

I liked all of those choices. I thought of choosing 'rock', but I do like all types. It's great that you also left an 'email me for other' choice. I'd be curious to see what other types people might have emailed you. Maybe you might think about making a list of them.

I hope you'll make more polls! *Smile*

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Review of Quark  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4*I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Star Trek Poetry CONTEST " . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* I thought it was unique to choose a Deep Space Nine character to use in your Clerihew Poem. We don't see too many Ferangi characters in the Star Trek entries. *Smile*

You used the Clerihew style well.
I liked how you compared Quark to a 'dubious shark'! ...Great thinking there! Also, I thought the little tale flowed smoothly inside of the aabb form.

You told a lot in a small space. You made me think about Quark's obsession with money and schemes to get it. Nice work!

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Review of Mudd's Spud  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4*I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Star Trek Poetry CONTEST " . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim*Hi Snow! I found your poem to be very funny!

The mentioning of Harry Mudd set the stage for the humor.

You also filled your little poem up with lots of Star Trek memorabilia, by talking about things like, 'Alpha Quadrant' and 'Federation Space'.

I thought the aabb Clerihaw form was nicely done in your poem.

I would love to watch that comical potato race in the next Trek movie! Wouldn't that be awesome! LOL

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Review of Lasha Thornhook.  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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*Fire* This is part of your Nuclear Package from "Invalid Item"  ! *Fire*

*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION:This is a dark fantasy story about a noble family of gnomes.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I was impressed with your style of writing, Blue, and I really hope you'll continue this interesting story. Have you ever read, The Interview With a Vampire by Anne Rice? Somehow this reminded me of how it started. The vampire was telling the story. Here, you have the character, Lasha Reille Thornhook, telling the story.

I found your story interesting, and I liked how this entire first chapter concentrated on introducing the characters. Later on, you might add more here and there...Such as what each one looked like, and what their town looked like. You might mention what type of house they live in. Was it a castle, for example?

I honestly think your story has a lot of potential. Keep up the great writing! *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You have a terrific hook to your story with your first and second paragraphs. As soon as I read, "I am the first born of the Thornhook nobles," I wanted to read more. The whole idea of a noble gnome from a very dysfunctional family seemed very unique and intriguing to me. *Smile*

I think you gave the narrator a perfect personality. We can hear the spark and frustration in her voice, and we get the feeling that this character is believable.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I think your story is amazing! It deserves just a little bit of polish because it's certainly worth it! *Bigsmile*

The brief introduction is the first thing your viewers will see.
You have: "The oldest child of A noble..." I would change the capital A to a lower case letter.

In the first paragraph, you have: "... and it's happened to most of my..." I would leave out the 'it's' altogether.

Also in the first paragraph you wrote: " I wouldn't have to be telling you why my family makes everyone else seem functional." I think that might sound better as, "I wouldn't have to be telling you why my family makes everyone else's family..."

You mentioned, 'Morato', when you wrote about the narrator's youngest brother. I think you could mention this town near the beginning of the story, when the narrator mentioned her name and title. She could say a line about where they live.

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Review of Tap the Muse  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your In and Out.

*Exclaim* I love this In and Out! Gosh, what a really fantastic idea! Not only do we get to advertise an item, but then we get to play with words, too. *Smile*

I couldn't resist making a post of my own. The word of the day was 'novel', so I imagined a little girl seeing novels on a library shelf for the first time. This was lots of fun. *Delight*

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

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*Exclaim* *Laugh* LOL Oh this poem is so funny!! I'm glad I happened to click on it to read! I needed a terrific comedy read this afternoon, and this was perfect!

This reminds me of when I go shopping with my husband. He'll say something like, "Are you done yet? Pick something and let's go." I guess you nailed it when you said that men are hunters and not gatherers! ......Shoot something and drag it home!! So funny!!*Laugh*

I really enjoyed the gentle rhyme in your poem. It made the pleasant 'good reading' feeling even that much more enjoyable.

You cracked me up when I read about how there were so many brands and they all seemed the same!! You know, honestly I feel that way when I go down the toothpaste isle. That is so confusing! It took me a long time to figure that all out. *Bigsmile*

I thoroughly enjoyed this fun poem!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your story poem.

*Exclaim* I really enjoyed this great tale about the retired sailor. I found it to be very touching and captivating, too.

I thought you chose great names for the characters. 'Salty' does make me imagine an old sea captain, and 'Sally' sounds like such a sweet little girl's name. I loved how they became friends, and how the little girl caused everyone in the town to come to love the man and to look forward to hearing his stories.

You did an awesome job of casually showing time advance in the story. We followed Sally's life with her family, and the town's dramatic changes over the span of 90 years.

The ending was dynamic! Poor Sally didn't know that those pretty little stones were priceless! I'm glad she got to find out while she was still alive!

I can hardly believe that this poem doesn't have an awardicon on it yet! I'm honored to be the person to put one there. I think I'll give it a red one to match the rubies in the poem.

This poem is perfect in every way, so I won't dare suggest any changes.

Thanks for sharing with us that this poem won a big money prize. ...And thanks for sharing the poem with us on WDC! *Bigsmile*

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Review of The Chosen Ones  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Fire* This is part of your Electric Package package from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy! *Fire*

*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: I felt that this was a spiritual fantasy story.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Great work with this one. It read really smoothly, and had a terrific ending. I didn't feel confused at all about any part of it. You're talent for casually adding in tidbits of explanation made this a captivating read. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I thought you wrote a good opening. The hint about a package will have your readers wondering what will come next. The story seemed to flow smoothly after the hook, with the light introduction of the characters.

I really liked the way you added small details into your story to smooth out any bumps, like here: "Mary settled down before them, relieved that they didn't pay her any attention."

I think that by the time your readers finished the second scene, they would start to realize that Mary is an angel, indeed. First, she detained the old lady so her daughter could find her, and then it seemed that Mary made a call to help a couple's dying daughter.

By the middle of the story, your readers will have no doubt that both of the characters are angels. Then, by the end, your readers will be thinking...Yes, I was right!

I was happy to see that you confirmed that the two were angels at the end, because it cleaned up any loose edges nicely. Great job! You're smooth-flowing story had a profession feel.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: Here you wrote, “So did boss call you yesterday?” - By the end of the story, I realized that the boss was God, but at this point in the story, I wondered why you weren't writing, the boss. I think that if Boss is being used as a proper name, then it might be capitalized. ...Or, just write, the boss.

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Review of Bereavement  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Fire* This is part of your Electric Package from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy! *Fire*

*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a bittersweet poem about the sadness of death.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I was touched by the delicate words you used in this tender poem. Death is often difficult to bear, and I could imagine how difficult it would be to bear the death of a young child.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't notice any errors. Great proofreading!

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I really loved the rhyme sequence in this poem. You succeeded in rhyming well, and in the proper order.

You also succeeded in expressing the sorrow and helplessness felt by the parents in their death experience of the child. I would bet that some of your readers eyes will become a bit watery when they read about the moisture in the mom's eyes...

The bold, first line about the auction gavel was my favorite! I thought it gave your great poem a dramatic entrance! *Smile*

I especially liked how this poem told a whole story in an easy to follow way. Nice work! *Smile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I gave your poem a perfect score. I wouldn't change a thing, but if it were my poem, I'd polish up it's presentation a bit. I'd center the poem...Rhyming poems especially look great when centered. I'd then add some color to the font. I'd also be tempted to add a fine landscape-type picture which might mimic the painting told about in the poem. 'Just a thought...

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your book item.

*Exclaim* Congratulations, once again, on being our winner in this month's review raid. *Balloon2*

Lornda and I were both very impressed with this item of yours, and that's why it was chosen for the awardicon.

I think it's a very unique item, which we don't see too much on our site.

I hear so much these days about finding information about family histories. You took the bold step forward to pursue the gathering of this information.

I like how the 'outline' and the start of your book is coming together. The memory of the two men, and whatever you find on all of the family names, will surly be appreciated by all those loved ones of yours. I hope you get this in book form for each of them. What a fantastic gift it will be! ...And it will be cherished and passed down forever! *Smile*

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Review of Birthday Wolf  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your image.

*Exclaim* Hello! I thought I'd stop by your port to visit one of your 'anniversary or birthday' themed items, and I came across this really cute wolf!

It's small, and that's one of the things that's so adorable about it. Gosh, where did you find this image of a wolf decorated for a birthday celebration? I love the hat and noise-maker! *Laugh*

It' also unusual that when I clicked on it, I went to another image. This would make an interesting 'scavenger hunt' game! *Bigsmile*

Have fun during the review raid! *Smile*

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Review of Surprise Gift  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Wow! Bravo, Jyo! Your impressive poem seems expertly done!

I am still amazed at that swapped quatrain style...With first line reversed as fourth line. You put that together well, and still managed to tell a sweet story.

Ah, how sweet birthday parties for six year old children are! It brought back some memories of my own children's parties. Your readers will all be able to picture the cake, songs, laughter, and all the party atmosphere.

The use of emotionicons and the bright font was also a nice touch to this festive, swap quatrain poem. Nice work! *Smile*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your image.

*Exclaim* Hi WW! When I put together a list of suggested things for the Power group to review, I tried to include as many of our member items as I could find. This image was all I came across in your port with the anniversary or birthday theme, but I'm glad I found it! It's really so pretty!

I love the bright colors. ...Speaking of which...wow, this is so off topic...I just bought a dog toy in the exact same colors. It said on the package that it's no longer believed dogs are completely color blind. They now believe they can see 'yellows' and 'blues'. ...Just like in your image! *Bigsmile*

I thought the variety types of time-related objects in your image were great for the WDC Birthday theme. I especially liked the bright yellow hourglass.

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Review of Seven Years  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Wyn! That was a very strongly emotional poem. I didn't see the ending coming, but I thought it was certainly a dramatic end to your bittersweet poem. I kept thinking, seven years is way too short!

I see this was a contest entry, so I hope you did well. It seems like a perfect poem. I loved the smooth rhyme pattern that this one follows. It was very pleasant to read, and it held my interest, stanza after stanza.

You thought of great sentiments for each stanza, and I noticed that you added and highlighted the word, 'seven' throughout. You didn't let your readers know what the contest prompt was, but it's very easy to figure out that it had much to do with the number, seven.

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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* I thought this was a perfect birthday poem! It complemented the picture really well, with the very first line of, "Ribbons, balloons, and candles...", setting the mood. The bright orange picture was also a nice touch under the bright and colorful image.

I enjoyed the mild rhyme. You called this a 'free verse' poem, but it seemed to follow a consistent pattern.

I think you succeeded in bringing out all the thoughts of a young person's birthday party in this poem. You certainly brought back memories of when I hosted parties for my children when they were younger. *Smile*

I liked the closure that you expressed at the end. The best part of birthdays are the memories! *Bigsmile*

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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi, Sherri, I hope you're feeling better. I've been thinking about you! *Smile*

This is a terrific tribute to your mom. For most of us who have lost loved ones, their birthdays are tough to bear. The day comes and goes, and we have the knowledge that our loved ones are no longer around. You expressed this sorrow well in this bittersweet poem.

I loved the message! Your mom is gone, but not forgotten...Especially on such a memorable day. I lost both of my parents. Although I'm an adult, sometimes I feel like an orphan. There are a lifetime's worth of special days and memories...Birthdays, Anniversaries, etc. It helps to reminisce with other friends and family about good times we've all shared.

You're poem had a lulling rhyme, and the words were very tender. Nice work with finding just the right poetic words to honor your mother's memory. *Smile*

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your In and Out.

*Exclaim* I saw that you're having a WDC Anniversary this week, so I thought I'd stop by to say, 'hello'.

This is such a fun In and Out! I enjoyed reading all of the entries, and I also posted a quick one of my own! *Bigsmile*

I also, of course, enjoyed reading the examples and the scenario in the heading. Very funny! *Laugh*

Wouldn't it be great if we could be able to leave 'misfortune cookies' along with our tips, after times of very bad service!

Hey, this is a contest, too! What a great idea for an ongoing contest. This is a great place to come when we need a smile. Nice work.

You know that I'm going to be thinking of this In and Out the next time I have a bad restaurant experience! Let's hope it won't be as soon as this weekend! LOL

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your In and Out.

*Exclaim* Hello! *Smile* Gosh, this In and Out is almost as old as WDC itself! I'm guessing that when you created this, our site was still called Stories.com. Wow! That brings back many great memories. *Bigsmile*

I had the honor of adding the start of a new sentence. It was fun reading the 'story' that this collection of 'three word' additions made up. People are really having a great time with it, as did I. *Smile*

In the day of puzzle games on phones and everywhere we look, it's fantastic to know that we have so many of our own right here.

I hope you're enjoying the 12th birthday festivities. *Balloonr*

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*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poll.

*Exclaim* Hello! I noticed that you share an account birthday with our great site, so I thought I'd stop by with a visit. *Smile*

What a great idea for a poll! Thanks for putting it together. Most everyone loves polls...I think they're so much fun!

You didn't have my choice, so I voted for 'other'. I love fairy tale fantasy stories. I guess I always enjoyed concepts like, 'The Wizard of Oz', 'Cinderella', 'Harry Potter', 'Lightning Thief', and even 'Smurfs'. I love to read about magic of any kind. I also enjoy reading about talking animals, unicorns, and worlds of exotic colors and plants.

I think you have several great choices, but there are a few which are very similar. ...'All'...'Other'...And another type of 'other'. I think you might do some more research and eliminate one of them. I see that you've already had lots of votes, maybe you can now edit one of the choices to reflect some of your feedback. *Smile*

Bottom line - I had lots of fun talking with you about fantasy stories. Thanks for making this poll. *Delight*

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Review of Little Moments  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi, and welcome to WDC! *Smile*

I enjoyed reading your loving poem. As life goes by, we all hold dear memories in our heads. There are many moments where we'd just love to freeze time and stay right in that moment forever. I think you expressed one of those delightful times well.

In one of your lines, you wrote how great it would be if the children could see how much their mom loves them. After reading your poem, I was thinking that those children were so happy because they are filled with love. The love they feel is reflected in their happiness.

I loved the way you centered and colored the font. The larger size for the title was nice, too...Very impressive for a new member! Keep doing what you're doing! *Delight*

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Review of Sista Jenny!  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your limerick poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Carol, and Happy WDC Account Anniversary! It's great that you share an account birthday with our site...You can enjoy the festivities and decorations for your celebration, too! *Delight*

I love funny poems, and that's just what limericks are all about! I wanted to send you along a review for your anniversary. I saw this one, and knew right away that this would be the one.

I always say that my daughter was born into the wrong decade. She would have been a really good hippie. She dresses like a hippie, and is so into the Beatles. I guess, though, the best 'hippies' are those who were born way too late, and are young here now. They all seem to be well into fitness and eating right.*Laugh*

Your limerick flowed really smoothly. You kept the form of the style well, while telling a great story. ...And you added just the perfect amount of humor. I especially loved the intentional misspelling of 'twenty', in order to rhyme with 'Jenny'! Nice work!

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a fantasy story, about a girl born with powers.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Welcome to WDC. I'm impressed that you already have a few chapters of a great story in your port. Keep on writing! *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I found this first chapter to be really interesting. I liked how you build up the perplexing thoughts that your character is plagued with. It gives your readers a feel for what she's going through.

I love the Tokyo setting for the story. It's great that you told this in your first chapter, because it helps your readers to imagine the scene.

I thought it was great that you added suspense at the end of this chapter. We wonder who sent her, and how it was that she came to be born into this world of magic, where electrical devices explode in her presence.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: You have the makings of a really fantastic story here. I do think that it needs some polishing.

I would start by breaking up your paragraphs into smaller paragraphs. This will give some air in between the thoughts and points of information.

You might also add a few more sentences into these smaller paragraphs, to clarify some of the information. The beginning of stories are the parts where readers try to get a grasp of what is going on. At times, I thought the story was progressing too quickly to understand what was going on.

For example, we never found out what the character's name was, or what she looks like. We aren't sure what her people are like. We don't have any descriptions of her surroundings. These small details will fill more into your paragraphs, without rushing through the story.

Also, I think you might edit some of your wording to make your story have a smoother flow. Here you wrote: "I think so, sometimes. Times when my head turns into my mind and floats away from reality." You might, for example, change that to something like: "I think so. Sometimes my mind seems to float away from reality, as though in a dream."

I would recommend going back and checking to make sure there are no typos in your first chapter. If people see too many typos, they might be reluctant to read your other chapters.

I found a few - "Nataz shook her head to clear it, many times those fisrt real thoughts..." ...Should be,"first".

"A deep humming sound rumbled frrom deep within..." ...Should be, "from".

You might consider writing a short introduction about what your chapters will be about. This could get more readers interested in your story. How many people would choose a book without a clue what it's about. I always read the book jackets and introductions.

Keep the story going, because you have fine creativity. *Smile*

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Review of Secret of Success  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your story.

*Exclaim* This story can be an inspiration to any student who is worrying about taking a test. I'll have to remember the link to send it to students I know on our site. With the new school year underway, I'm sure there will be many in similar situations.

You did a great job in expressing so much with the limitations of wording. Your readers feel the stress which the student is experiencing, and the relief when he realizes that he can breeze right through the exam with flying colors. Nice work! *Smile*

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