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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like this poem, it is a perfect description of the whole Covid mess. The positive and the negative. Yes many people died. Yes there are conspiracy theories about its origins. But the fact is that it did a lot to bring families back together. People simply couldn't do all of the things that were tearing the families apart. In that way covid was a mixed blessing dressed as a curse. Even the loss of life wasn't the worst thing for the world in general, it gives the planet an extra second to breathe before we smother it with our population growth.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I think this "As the ball of light shove itself slowly down" needs to have either balls, or shoves.
"Nothing much than that of the rodents." needs another word to make sense.

Those are the two main places where the wording tripped me up while I was reading. there were a couple more awkward places but I could get past them.

I loved the message of the poem. It showed your deep faith. It is an excellent contemplation of the worth of our salvation and the way most people don't live up to the promise made by Christ on the cross.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I remember days like these. They don't happen anymore. Parents have the habit of scheduling every minute of their kid's time. There's soccer practice, dance lessons, trumpet lessons, after school programs, daycare, homework help programs. Parents are afraid to let their kids out of their sight, barely tolerating leaving them with "trusted" adults. Then the few minutes the kids have to themselves are spent playing video games on systems that cost as much as a car used to. It's ridiculous. I think kids had more fun back before parents started spending more money than sense on keeping their days structured.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Clearly a deep love here. I enjoyed most of the rhymes but the week-weak rhyme seemed a little (pardon the pun) weak to me. I love the love this poem portrays and the lengthening of the separation increases the pain expressed I just hope the poet's pleas are heard and the reunion is swift.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Interesting poem attempting to create a new poetic form. I don't have the guts to attempt that. It is a poem that I feel has some of the emotion inhibited by the attempt at a new form. I think perhaps trying something more traditional would have had a better flow and more emotional impact.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a painful poem, it goes from a beautiful love where the poet feels fulfilled and content to an empty life devoid of the one thing that made the poet feel whole. I can feel the tears on my cheeks and the pain twinges in my heart. I hope the separation isn't permanent.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This poem reminds me of birds that mate for life. It definitively describes a deep and loyal love between the poet and their partner. I can sympathize. I too would rather live the rest of my life in the worst argument we have ever had than say goodbye to my partner.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This poem captures the process of writing a poem. The poem discusses the responsible use of words, they can hurt or help and that should always be kept in mind when putting pen to paper or finger to keyboard. The anguish over the right wording is clear and I know I have felt it.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like this rendition of a spring poem. it touches on most of the typical symbols of spring. I like the lambs frolicking and the chirping chicks that is better than simply saying new life being born. It is more specific and offers sensory images that really help the tone of the poem.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh boy. In the last hour I have read optimistic, pessimistic, humorous, and romantic spins on the life of toilet paper. I think I like this melancholy view the best. It isn't just a case of the toilet paper bemoaning its fate it is the toilet paper empathizing with the pain of its user. I think it is one of the sweeter ones.

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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This view on the life of toilet paper is refreshing in that it reveals one of the many other than the obvious fates of toilet paper. I like that this doesn't aim directly for the brown frowning destiny most toilet paper faces. I also like that the toilet paper seems to have romantic feelings for the woman.

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Review of Osteoarthritis  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ouch! Usually it is physical injury that I associate with being the cause of arthritis pain but this poem equates it with the emotional or psychic loss of a loved one. The struggle of movement from the physical pain does seem to echo the emotional pain of trying to move on without someone you love. I like it!

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for entry "Too Late" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a very dark poem. It treats time like an enemy that is stealing something from the poet. The poem focuses on the loss of time and the destiny of all things to end. It is really pessimistic. Very glass half empty. Never mind that as time has passed much has been gained too.

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Review of Yashoda  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a good story poem that reveals a piece of the author's culture. There were a couple of places where the phrasing was awkward but for a nonnative English speaker, I think this poem is just about perfect even the imperfections add to the flavor of the poem. I appreciate this window into another culture and the new information I now possess.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a well-written acrostic poem. I like the images and the emotions it portrays. It fits the internal theme well and the ending line outside of the acrostic part is perfect it seems like it is almost an inside joke like see it's an acrostic about Valentine's day.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I thought it was a historical period piece being it was from the covid lockdown. Imagine when I got to the bottom and discovered you based it on prompt two instead of one. There are a few typo/ grammar blunders but I can't tell if it is a part of the story or not in the places I saw them so no big deal. Overall good story cool characters!
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Review of Dad Holmes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That is a funny little story. I can see this dad telling dad jokes and being a really good dad. The daughter is clearly exhausted by her father's quirky sense of humor and incessant attempts of making everything a mystery. I wonder why Ted was trying to trap squirrels though.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the way this poem looks like a the tornado of chaos in the poet's mind. I follow it well it shows all the way through the point it is trying to make, especially in the last stanza. I really like the whole effect this poem has. And the way it pitters off at the end is perfect.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I have a sister like that! I would have to say that I think they will grow out of their behaviors but, she's turning forty in two months and well, I am still waiting. Your tweet was not out of line they were. This was a well-written rant. It shows a lot of fuming thoughts went on before you wrote it down. I am sorry something so ridiculously frustrating happened but at least a good piece came from it...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a good story. I think it could be expanded into a longer story possibly a book. You could go into detail about the treasure hunt. More flashbacks would be good. Maybe a letter from his friend. there are so many wonderful places this could go and I want to read more of it!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, it is the perfect snapshot of a summer day. It engages all of the senses. The onomatopoeia are well placed and well-chosen. The images are carefully crafted from the eye squinting glare to the water gurgling. the droopy pants and the rest of the character's wardrobe really establish who he is as a person. Well done!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice cliffhanger. This is an interesting story. I would suggest changing one of your categories to lgbtq or whatever the equivalent. That way people looking for that kind of story can find it more easily. I loved your characters. A little more description of the characters would be good. I assume the previous parts explain the beginning of this story that I have jumped into the middle of.

My suggestion is that you place an extra return between your paragraphs to make it a bit easier to read, it doesn't automatically indent to indicate new paragraphs and it is a hard read as it is. I also would suggest that you increase the font size to 4 or 5 for members with poor vision. Anything you do to make for an easier reading experience increases the chances for someone to read your story. I would also consider putting this into a book item if your membership level allows it. Then you could put a chapter per entry. That would make it easier to read too rather than having to read six chapters in one sitting which was hard to do. I got lost a couple of times.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The poem is a cautionary tale of what can happen when you are infected with an earworm song. The truth is they are very common. The dangers of earworm songs are everywhere. I think the character could have infected her boss and Ms Garnett and that is why she was fired.
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Review of Flight Home  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I never got to meet my mother's mom. She passed away before I was conceived. I would give anything for the kind of memories this poem describes. I feel they were portrayed in a very accessible way even for someone who didn't know their grandmother. Great job!
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Review of Draft  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I find a fresh clean plain white piece of paper to be the most frightening thing in all of writing. I have dozens of beautiful journals in which I intend to write things. The problem is I am terrified of ruining them. I feel like how could anything I write be as beautiful as the journal was before I wrote on it.
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