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#4005219

Review of Reflections Revealed

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Ẃeβ࿚Ẃỉtcĥ

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Reflections Revealed"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. Very nice use of alliteration in your title. Nice touch. It sets the stage for your poem by reflecting the intent of the theme while capturing its essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

Form/Style:

A very good write about a beautiful autumn scene reflected in a lake-like mirror that its viewers delight in on a brilliant fall day that is heartfelt and awe inspiring. Elegant verse. Skillfully crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Excellent use of color and shading of words that evoke emotion that the sights and sound in nature promotes in this season. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a majestic picture of an autumn day, a snapshot reflected in a body of water created by God above for the entertainment and wonder to those that view it that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of metaphor: "O' proud mirror" (a lake or other body of water); "inspiring still shot of nature." "currents' striped ripples, percolate an image"; Nice personification of symbiotic sensation of nature: it "satisfies the senses"; celebrates with "eye feast" holding "a banquet of clarity"; the evergreen trees: "pencil-like sentries" they salute "the handiwork of the Creator". - very creative descriptive/comparisons. Powerful images.

Rhyme:

Nice internal masculine rhyme in the second line of the eight stanza (delight, flight); nice perfect feminine end line rhyme in the third and fourth lines of same stanza (places, spaces). Nicely done.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty and majesty of autumn, a palette created by God that is breathtaking and uplifting to the spirit for the pleasure it brings to those who view it. A precious gift that is magical and warms the heart. I can relate.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Excellent word choice. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling and this landscape of beauty in autumn. Nice use of rhetorical questions about what is more beautiful: "the reality or the reflection". Nice use of call and response. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three in the fourth stanza; remove the comma at the end of line one of the sixth stanza (the couplet); in the eighth stanza, remove the period at the end of line one and in the last stanza, line one, change the period to a colon. This will make the emphasis, flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines: There are so many wonderful lines in this piece.
"The viewer knows not which scene is more perfect;
the reality or the reflection.
Conflicted?" - This 'reader' (me) is also having a hard time deciding what is favorite of her favorite lines. I think these lines puts that thought across for both readers and viewers. Clever word play.

Overall:

Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4004708

Review of Binary Blindfold

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Liam

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Binary Blindfold"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your subject. I like your use of alliteration. Nice touch. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

Form/Style:

I love form poetry and this a fine example of one and a favorite of mine. A good write and message about the world wide web and its affects upon the user. Clever word play. A well crafted Trijan Refrain. Near perfect form due to rhyme scheme variation. Perfect 8/6/8/6/8/8/4/4/8 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptive. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. I love your use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling through sight and sound in regards to computer technology. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of how addictive the internet universe (i.e. world wide web) is to everyone who accesses it; how it is our standard way to contact others and yet never "meet" them and it's the place where our children "play" as it becomes addiction in our daily lives that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Good use of iambic meter.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of metaphor: "the internet our universe"; "God the keyboard keys"; Nice personification of the internet: it kills, has a victim and leads people astray; - good descriptive/comparisons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababccccc dedefffff ghghiiiii. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme line five of stanza one (dismiss, idleness); in stanza two line five (kill, will) and in stanza three line five (play, day).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the power and addiction of the internet in our daily lives; how there is no way to get away from it, no rest from it; it has hidden dangers that aren't so hidden as well as its insidiousness in everything we do while we remain anonymous which is becoming a sad commentary in life.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of the internet's power and is a poetic device that also drives this form of poetry. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"The death of our morality
lies victim to its claim." - I like the power and truth of the words in these lines. Although technology can be good, there is a darkness in it as well that can do damage to those who become addicted to it. Deep and thought provoking.

Overall:

Good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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#4004113

Review of ♥Streets of Dingle♥

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello ♥HOOves♥

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "♥Streets of Dingle♥"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

Form/Style:

A good write about visiting the sights in Ireland that is informing, entertaining and good fun. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. I like your use of color and shading of words that evokes feelings through the senses of sight, sound, scent and taste in the different cities you walked in Ireland. Through the lens or your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the romance of this place, walking its streets, enjoying the sights, mingling with people and creatures that you came in contact with during your visit that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is a nice mix of near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty and magic of these places you visited during the winter at Christmastime that held feelings of the joy, fun, and the ambiance of these places that any reader can enjoy and relate to. Nicely done.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good. Strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in your walks to see the sights in Ireland. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line one of your first stanza and add a comma to the end of line two; in the second stanza, line two add and apostrophe before the 's' in December and add a comma at the end of line three of the sixth stanza.

I especially like the following lines:
I liked so many of the stanzas of your poem but I think I liked this one the best--
"We walked the streets of Adare,
In Chawke’s Pub, we did alight
Songs sung by Noel McLoughlin
We spent that Winter’s night" - I like the rhythm and sound of these line when read aloud. I also love the sense of romance on this particular night, a night of togetherness enjoying the music. Simply lovely.

Overall:

Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4003873

Review of A Small Death

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌖 HuntersMoon

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "A Small Death"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal that invites readers into it. Nicely done.

Form/Style:

I love form poetry and this is one of my favorites. A very good write about the peacefulness and joy found in dreams that is heartfelt. Lovely presentation and interpretation of the inspirational image. Whimsical. A skillfully crafted English Sonnet. Perfect syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery and descriptives are subtle yet well done. You utilize this poetic form nicely in this piece. Good use of color and shade to evoke emotion in this dream state though sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of this young woman's dream-filled sleep; her conversation with Morpheus on his plane of existence where there is only beauty, joy and peace that in a moment of indecision is gone that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Near perfect iambic pentameter. Well done.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor for sleep "an alabaster veil of moonlight"; nice personification of Morpheus: he converses and "he croons" - good descriptive/comparisons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg. A nice mix of dactyl, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express with subtle power a poignant sadness she carries, even in her dreams which affects the outcome of a peaceful rest that is out of her grasp as she suddenly awakens. Moving.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good. Elegant verse. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of onomatopoeia (croons). Nice use of inversion. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"She lies in sleep, an alabaster veil
of moonlight shimmers with each rise, each fall," - I like the whimsy of these opening lines which are simply beautiful; they express her sleep (and implied dreams), this theme which is built upon through to the end of the poem. I love how the words sound when they are read aloud. Nicely done.

Overall:

Good closing lines. I like how you end the final couplet with the creative touch of a question that gives power to her emotions upon awakening from her dream. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4003854

Review of Carpe Diem

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Dave

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Carpe Diem"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of your theme while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal drawing readers into it. Nicely done.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the celebration of love in nature that is heartfelt and introspective. Romantic. A skillfully crafted Grossblank with perfect syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic form beautifully in this piece. Very good use of color and shading of words to evoke emotion through sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of youthful love, the memories of it that warms the hearts of the adventurous nature between two lovers that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice enjambment. Excellent execution of iambic hexameter which is not an easy feat. Well done.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of metaphor: "ghosts of summer whisper"; "turn the page of Nature's book" - good descriptive/comparison's about time and seasons passing by and memories of love flourish. Nicely done.

Rhyme:

Nice use of internal feminine rhyme in line one (russet, sunset).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. I like how you seize this special 'day of love'. You express the youthful exuberance of love and romance in the 'wild' of nature, something done with the brashness of youth; delightfully sensual with a dash of danger due to seasonal changes of temperature which can affect how the waves break upon the shore.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"the ghosts of summer whisper in our ready ears
and reminisce about romantic escapades," - I love these line, the power of the image, the depth of love and a time of youthful exploits when you are in love, and have been for a long time. I love how memories of love that have stood through time is implied in these lines. Nicely done.

Overall:

Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4003322

Review of Love's Sweet Repertoire

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Dave

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Love's Sweet Repertoire"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage to reflect the theme's intent while it captures the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal drawing readers into it. Nicely done.

Form/Style:

This is a new form of poetry that I was introduced to recently and I enjoy the fun and challenge of it. A good write about finding true love that changes one's perspective in life. Heartfelt, introspective and romantic. Whimsical. A skillfully crafted Roundabout. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Very nice color and shading of your words that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of falling in love; the change you undergo when you met your soul mate, how she brought her loving light into you life and world and brought you true riches that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of metaphor: "Cupid's arrow brought love's flame" and your new love touched your heart by melting your "hard veneers" and she is a "star" - good descriptive/comparisons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abccb bCddC cDaaD dAbbA. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express this life changing moment, one that seems magical when you at last met your true love and found the riches that really matter in her. Moving and stirs the heart; this is a feeling any reader can relate to.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition which drives this form of poetry. Nice use of alliteration, assonance with good consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three of the second stanza; to change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line two of the third stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"with your warm gaze,
and charming ways
to melt the hard veneers." - I really like these lines. I like their rhythm, I like how they sound when read out loud and they show just how life changing love can be. Well done.

Overall:

Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4002899

Review of Whispering Stars

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Angels in my Ear

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the "Invalid Item"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Whispering Stars"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of its theme while capturing the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal drawing readers into it. Nicely done.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the stars care to those they shine upon that is heartfelt and introspective. Whimsical ad romantic. Skillfully crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device beautifully in this piece. Your use of color and shade of your words evokes feeling through sight, a warmth of protection in the evening light. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of the purpose of moonlight and starlight, the love that is reflected below to earth through their light, invisible during day but bright at night that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the moon: its "loving gaze"; the stars: "conquered the earth"; they speak "whisper" - good descriptive/comparisons of their 'humanity'. Nicely done.

Rhyme:

Nice dactylic and masculine end line rhyme in lines two and four of the second stanza (eternity, free).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express beauty, peacefulness, comfort and love that warms the heart about these lights that guide your path. I love the sense of hopefulness that is implied in the character of the moon and stars. I can relate.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling expressed by the moon and stars to those they shine upon. Very nice use of dialogue in the stars spoken message that it whispers to you. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion in the first stanza remove the comma at the end of line one; in the second stanza change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line four; in the third stanza remove the comma at the end of line one; in the fourth stanza remove the comma at the end of lines one and four; in the fifth stanza in line two capitalize "they" and at the end of line five add a period. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"They have conquered the earth
and taken their place in eternity." - I like the power of these lines. It is a vivid picture of the character of the stars, their station in the universe forever laid. The implication of these lines are carried through to the end of your poem. Well done.

Overall:

Good closing lines, I like how you repeat the first two lines of your poem which gives it completion. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4002497

Review of The Gravity Machine

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Don Two

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Gravity Machine"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal that invites readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
I love form poetry and this is one of my favorites. A good write about weight and its affect in regards to aging. Clever word play that is heartfelt, introspective and fun. A skillfully crafted Shakespearean Sonnet. Perfect form.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Very nice use of this poetic device. You use color and shading of words that evokes amusement through wit and playfulness. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a picture of how the "gravity machine" (scale) keeps track of the changes in your body that any reader can appreciate and relate to very well.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Very good execution of iambic pentameter. Well done.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor for weight: "gravity" - nice descriptive/comparison.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; I love the humor of this piece, the 'tongue in cheek' feel to it and how all of us have to deal with "gravity" issues as we grow older. It made me laugh. This is something we can all relate to.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about change in weight coming with age. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"I have to say my middle is not lean;
there is a bit of belly here to stay.
Therefore I use this digital machine
which utilizes gravity to weigh." - I love the opening lines to your sonnet. I like the understated humor that has verve to it which evokes feelings of fun and lightheartedness about weight gain and its connection to aging that is followed through to the end of the poem. Well done.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4000811

Review of Free to Choose

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello warriormom. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Free to Choose"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it and reflects the theme's intent while capturing its essence as it acts as a portal that invites readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
A very good write about how you choose to make use of your free time that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse that is short, concise and succinct. I like it!

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this poem. Very nice use of color and shading of your words that evokes feeling about how you use your daily free time. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of what choices you can make in regards to your free time: conversation with friends, solitude, enjoyable playtime, completing a task or napping - all things that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts beautifully in the choices you can make with your free time that makes your day more "bearable" for you. I can relate.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Because this is a very short poem, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole - the theme of what to do with free time which is very well expressed from the beginning to the end of the poem. Well done.

~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#3999691

Review of Sweet Cardinal

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Lisa Noe

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Sweet Cardinal"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the essence of your poem and acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
A very good write about a bird readying itself for winter. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You use this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shade about a bird's preparation for winter. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of a cardinal, its coloring, features, habits and how it lives that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of this bird: an "industrious little guy" - good descriptive/comparison.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee ff. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line four (realize, eyes).

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the beauty you see as you watch this bird make its home on your ranch. You see the industriousness of its daily life as winter sets in; his instinct to survive that is implied while he's hard at work. I like to watch birds too, so I can relate.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on the traits of this little bird. Nice use of inversion. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found; Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma in line four; remove the comma at the end of line five and remove the comma at the end of line seven. This will make the rhythm and flow even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"I suppose he will use it to make a nest,
Where all winter long he’ll take his rest." I like the rhythm of these lines; the implied instinct of this bird in these lines and how they sound when they are read aloud. Good description of the season and the habits of this bird in its habitat.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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#3998513

Review of CASCADE

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Dave

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "CASCADE"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it and reflects the intent of the theme while capturing the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal drawing readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
I like form poetry, especially those that are driven by repetition. A good write about the creativity of a writer of poetry that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt. A well crafted Cascade. Perfect form.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. I like how you use color and shade in words through sight, sound and touch which evokes emotion in regards to writer's creativity. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the creative process of writing in a poet's mind; how it flows, the struggles that can ensue that reflects their inner thoughts and feelings that any reader can appreciate.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Very nice use of simile: words cascade, frees ink "like water over Niagara Falls" - good descriptive/comparison.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines one/four (Falls, walls); lines two/five: (page, cage); lines three/seven (reflection/perfection).

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the poet's mind set, his or her love and passion of words that is a reflection of their thoughts as it flows through their creative juices that I can relate to very well.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition which is a poetic device that drives this form. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of lines five and ten. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Passion flows with a force that breaks down walls
in his mind, freeing ink from its cage," - I love the power of these lines. It is our passion for words and writing that breaks down the walls to allow our thoughts to be put to paper. Well said and so true.

~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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#3998509

Review of Under the Crimson Moon

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello R. Walter Smith

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Under the Crimson Moon"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal drawing readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
I love form poetry and this is a good example of one that is new to me and I plan to give it a try very soon. A good write about nature and a danger that enters into it for a time, but nature will always continue and remain. A well crafted Empat Empat. Perfect rhyme scheme and syllabic form.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You use this poetic device very well in this piece. I like the coloring and shading of your words through sight, sound, touch that evokes feeling about destruction of forest lands. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of a sanctuary in nature in the evening, under a darkened moon as a soft wind is blowing causing movement of leaves on trees and in the background is heard the chirping of crickets in the first days of summer that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice use of rhythm and enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of simile: "leaves rise up like waves on the sea"; nice personification of the wind: it whispers. Nice metaphor for man: "blood-red monsters". Good descriptive/comparisons.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: Abab cAca adAd eaeA. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the power, beauty and serenity in nature's forest; then it's disturbed by men who enter it to pillage the land, but nature carries on, long after they leave it. I like the suspense and sense of foreboding in this poem.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition which drives this form of poetry. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Under the crimson moon
Leaves rise up like waves on the sea" - a beautiful beginning to this poem about nature's beauty and serenity; I like the image portrayed, the magic and music of it on a peaceful moonlit evening. Nicely done.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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#3998497

Review of Life

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello JACE

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Life"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it reflecting its theme while capturing the essence of the poetry as it acts as a portal inviting the reader into it.

~Form/Style:
I love short form poetry, especially when it's minimalistic and this is a great example of one. A very good write about a mighty tree, aged in stature that is short, concise and succinct. Good presentation. A skillfully crafted Lanturne. Perfect 1/2/3/4/1 syllabic form.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of this poetic device. Very nice coloring/shading of the words of the piece that gives power to its eminence in nature and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of this tree that stands with distinction of age in nature that any reader can appreciate.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the power that the tree exudes in nature as it towers over yet amongst other trees in its presence as it exerts its purpose: beauty and life.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good. Nice assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
This is a short form of poetry and I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole of the theme which pictures the character and greatness of the continued life of this tree.

~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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#3998493

Review of Nature and Nurture

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Liam

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Nature and Nurture"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
I love short form and the challenge of it. This is a very good example of one that I have not yet written, but I plan to very soon. A very good write about what makes you who you are, your essence that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Wreath poem, perfect form.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. I love your use of color and shading of words that evoke feeling about how you see yourself, your being that lies under the surface. Through the lens of your eye you paint a abstract and complex picture of how you see your inner self, hidden yet quite out in the open and how life around you affects that being that any reader can appreciate.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Good execution of iambic pentameter.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Good use of metaphor regarding your being: "thread with which I'm sewn" and that you're a "plant that others grow" - good descriptive/comparisons.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababcdcd. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Also, as driven by the wreath form of poetry, the end line rhyme of the previous line is that rhyme set in the fourth syllable of the following line. Challenging and excellent execution.

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express yourself well about your inner being and the affects of outside elements that "grows" you into the individual and unique person that you are. Nicely done.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; strong use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"I’m prone to be a plant that others grow;
the seeds they sow and nutrients they use" - I really like these lines; they're thought provoking and deep. A powerful way to express how you came to be. Nicely done!

~Overall:
Good closing line. I like the humor; it's well stated. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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#3998484

Review of Insomnia

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello 🌖 HuntersMoon

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Insomnia"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it reflecting the theme's intent as it captures the poem's essence while it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
I like form poetry and this French form is a favorite of mine. A very good write about you being unable to sleep that is heartfelt and introspective. Prayerful. Clever word play. Nice presentation and take on the picture prompt. A well crafted Rondeau, near perfect form. Check line five of your first stanza. It has nine syllables it should have eight.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this device very well in this piece. I like how you color and shade your words through sight and sound that evokes feeling in this poem. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of lack of sleep, even counting sheep doesn't help to the point you're ready to do anything to get some sleep that any reader can appreciate.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment. Very nice execution of iambic tetrameter.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of sleep: having a face, a "death-like facade" - good descriptive/comparison.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba aabR aabbaR. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion; one can sense your feeling of anxiety, being at your wits end in your need to get some sleep (if only Morpheus would listen)... I've certainly been there so I can definitely relate.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition which is one of the devices that drives this form. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Please, lull me with your song of sleep;
I've found there aren't sufficient sheep" - these are excellent lines as you 'beg' for sleep that won't come and this theme is powerfully followed till the end of the poem. Nicely done.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#3998474

Review of New Beginnings

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Elby Wordsmith

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "New Beginnings"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for the theme as it reflects its intent while capture the poem's essence and at the same time acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
I life form poetry and this in another of my favorites. A very good write and message about the ups and downs in life. Uplifting and encouraging. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Nice imagery and descriptives as is your use of this poetic device in this piece. I like the coloring and shading of your words to evoke feelings that are upbeat in the midst of life change. You paint a picture of one who overcomes through life by not fearing change which is a powerful tool in life that any reader can appreciate.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of emotions, stress, pain and fear - they walk "hand in hand" - good descriptive/comparison.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ef gg. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the power of change in one's life if one will just take hold and use it. It is a message of hope to those going through hard times and is wonderful advice for all of us.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Spelling: line two in the first couplet, cannot is one word; to change the tense of come to 'comes' in line two of the second couplet; also add a space after the comma in line one of your third couplet. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma (or period) will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Emotions, stress, pain and fear
Hand in hand, come rushing near" - I like these lines; they are powerful and so true.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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#3998469

Review of Somewhere He

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Elby Wordsmith

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Somewhere He"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
A good write about waiting for one's true love that is heartfelt and introspective. Romantic. Well crafted free style rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. I like how you color and shade your words to evoke emotion through sight and sound in this search for true love. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of your true love, his character and personality that's just a shadow in your dreams knowing one day you'll meet him that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
These poetic devices are not applicable in this piece.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe aghg aigi. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line four of the first stanza (he, me) and line three in the fourth stanza (he, me).

~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express your hopes of finding the perfect man of your dreams, his love for you and your love for him that will be transforming and for now is just a shadow in your reality.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in finding true love. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a period at the end of line four in the first stanza; in line two of the second stanza change the comma to a semi-colon and add a comma at the end of line two in the third stanza. This will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"I see him as a shadow
As sun shines from behind,
A form to make me quiver
Excitement fills my mind." I like the picture of your "dream man" in these lines, the excitement you feel about him even though you can't really see him. I also like the rhythm of these lines and how they sound when read out loud. Nicely done.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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#3997944

Review of Soft and Gentle

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Rhonda - the Queen of Minis

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Soft and Gentle"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting the theme's intent while capturing its essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
A very good write, message and teachable moment about the importance of learning how one can be soft and gentle that is advice for the smallest child to an aged adult. Heartfelt and imaginative. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Nice use of this poetic device. I like the coloring/shading of your words that evokes feeling by describing the importance of being amiable and genial even in the smallest of children. Through the lens of your heart you paint a picture of friendship; a pact between "soft and gentle" and the work they do together to teach others how to practice this art in life that any reader can appreciate.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Good personification of soft and gentle: they "made a pact"; gave "advice" and helped lassies and gents. Good descriptive/comparisons.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defg hiji klml nobo. A nice mix of near rhyme, near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you are a clever storyteller whose advice about learning how to be congenial in everyday life is a teaching moment for children of all ages.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better i my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Soft and Gentle
made a pact
to use their words
with equal tact" - I like the bond/promise made between "soft and gentle, " the subtle power of this theme that is followed through to the end of the piece. I like how the words sound when read aloud and the rhythm is very good.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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#3997423

Review of Your immortality

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello ~Minja~

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Your immortality"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it while reflecting the theme's intent. It captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done. Just a suggestion: capitalize the 'i' in immortality.

~Form/Style:
A good write about who and what you are to others; how your are seen. Thought provoking. Good presentation, aesthetically pleasing. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of this poetic device. I like the color and shading of your words that evokes feelings through sight, time and pain in this piece. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the different aspects of one's inner being that any reader can appreciate.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Very nice use of metaphor: "you are flower"; "you are color"; "you are hope"; "you are boat" and "you are thought". - Good descriptive/comparisons of a person's essence. Good observations.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the many facets of a person, how one feels about them and really 'sees' the person, who they are inside that I can relate to very very well.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Good word choice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found. Just a suggestion to change the tense of a word in the last line of your poem: change "lie" to 'lay".

I especially like the following lines:
There are so many, but I think I like these lines the best -
"In artist's eye you are color
what is used for his
masterpiece." This is so deep on so many levels. I like the color and implication expressed in these lines. The artist can be a person, and it can be God, who is the Creator/Artist and always sees you as you are in all one's attributes. Powerful.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#3997373

Review of Cloud Stories

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello 🌖 HuntersMoon

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Cloud Stories"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it reflecting the theme's intent as it captures the poem's essence and acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
I love story poems and this is a delightful one. A very good write on spending time watching the fairytales and children's stories that form while gazing at the clouds. Heartfelt, introspective and imaginative. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. I love your use of color and shade in your words as they evoke feeling through sight and time in this piece. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of sitting and gazing at clouds, the peacefulness of it, as they change forms and paint pictures of stories that you see and are constructed that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Very nice execution of ballad meter.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of clouds: they tell and create stories - good descriptive/comparison.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef and so on... A nice mix of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two of the fifth stanza (see, flee).

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express implied joy in watching clouds that create pictures of stories and fairytales from your memory and imagination. A fun and restful day being entertained by the 'story clouds' that I can relate to.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Good word choice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a comma at the end of line three in the third stanza; remove the comma at the end of line three in the fourth stanza; change the period at the end of line three to a comma in the fifth stanza and remove the comma at the end of line one of the seventh stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"I love to sit gazing without
and watch the world go by.
I see the clouds; they seem to sprout
dark wings up in the sky." - I love these powerful opening lines and how they set up what will come in the rest of the poem. I like the rhythm and how they sound when read out loud. From these lines the theme is followed through till the end of your poem which is definitely entertaining to children of all ages and the child at heart. Well done.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#3992441

Review of Home of the Brave

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello 🌖 HuntersMoon

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Home of the Brave"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting the heart of the theme capturing its essence while it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
I love form poetry and its challenge and this is an excellent example of both. A very good write, tribute and memorial for our fallen heroes in the military that is heartfelt and poignant. Elegant verse. Nice presentation. A skillfully crafted Quatern, perfect form.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this device beautifully in this piece. Excellent use of color and shading which evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of honoring our fallen heroes through sight, sound, touch and pain felt by those affected by their loss that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Very good execution of iambic tetrameter.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of winds: it "sighs"; shadows: "rest" - good descriptive/comparisons.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: Abab cAca adAd eaeA. A nice mix of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two of stanza three (he, see).

~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion; you capture the sorrow and honor that a son gives to his father, and all thees fallen hero who are celebrated and remembered for fighting for our freedom and liberty on Memorial Day. A moving and touching remembrance that I can relate to.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition which drives this poetic form. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice use of onomatopoeia (sighs). No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"The markers, in a hero's guise,
stretch out as far as he can see
as light fades from the evening skies.
Such is the price of liberty." - I love these lines. They capture the deep emotion, honor, respect for those who gave their lives for our liberty. I love the rhythm and sound of these lines when read out loud. Simply beautiful.

~Overall:
Very good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#3992022

Review of My Shield and My Sword

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello 👼intuey

. Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "My Shield and My Sword"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting its heart as it captures the essence of its theme while acting as portal to invite the reader into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
A good write, message and testimony about your relationship with the Lord that is heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You use this poetic device well in this piece; the coloring/shade of love through faith evokes feeling about God's love. Through the lens of your heart you paint a picture of faith and love in God that any reader can appreciate

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Near perfect use of iambic tetrameter. Nice enjambment in lines nine and ten.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor for Jesus as "shield and sword" - good descriptive/comparison.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee ff gg. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three (He, me), line four (be, free), line six and thirteen (by, my).

~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. Encouraging and uplifting. Your faith shines beautifully in this piece along with your loving praise and adoration of the Savior that I can relate to very well.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma after "stripes" in line five; remove the period after "Jesus" in line eight and remove the comma at the end of line thirteen. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
There are so many lines in this poem that I like, but I will choose -
"Because He sent His Son for me,
thanks be to Jesus I am free." - I love these lines, the power and love that they express as well as how they sound when read aloud... the thankfulness for God's love. Simply beautiful.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#3991662

Review of Could This Be All

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 💙 Carly: poems & novel

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Could This Be All"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem's theme reflecting its intent at the same time captures the underlying essence of the poetry while acting as a portal that invites readers into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
A good write about your personal feelings on responsibilities in life that are heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy. Near perfect eight syllables per line in each stanza. Please check line two of your third stanza. There are nine syllables, should be eight syllables.

~Imagery:
Nice imagery and descriptives. You use this device nicely in your poem; your coloring/shading through sounds and feelings. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a picture of worry in daily life and the pressure of work and its affect on your dreams that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Nearly perfect meter in iambic tetrameter. Nicely done.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of work: it "calls to arms" - nice descriptive/comparison.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion; you express your thoughts about your hopes and dreams with depth of feeling as they clash with the work that lies heavy upon your journey in life, what is and what you want it to be. I can relate to these feelings.

~Word Choice/Onomatopoeia/Oxymoron/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of onomatopoeia (wails, shatter). Nice use of oxymoron (rabid/doubt). Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the period at the end of line one in the first stanza and add a comma at the end of line two; add a comma at the end of line two of the second stanza and add a comma at the end of line two in the third stanza. This will smooth out the flow and rhythm and make it better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Could this be all I have to give
Could this be all, I say through tears" - I like the power of the emotion in these lines, at you wonder of what you experience now as you ask: is this all you have to look forward too? These feelings, this wonder is something that all of us deal with sometime during our lives.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Nicely penned and a much enjoyed read. Thank you for participating in our workshop and congratulations on your honorable mention in the contest. Write on!
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#3983560

Review of Snowstorm

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jali~mostly on hiatus

. Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Snowstorm"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting its intent which captures its essence as it acts as portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

Form/Style:

I love short poetry and this is a very good example of one. A good write about a snowstorm that is short, concise and succinct. Well crafted rhyming verse which I enjoy. Very nice use of brevity.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this device very well through its color and sound. You paint a vivid picture of a snowstorm, its beauty, eeriness and fierceness during the winter season that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the wind: "howling whistling, wailing" - good descriptive/comparisons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Nice rhyme scheme. Nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the character of a snowstorm beautifully in this peace as well as your love for the winter season.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; strong use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Nice use of onomatopoeia (howling, whistling, wailing). No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Wind-whipped wisps of flying snow
Lighted by the moon's pale glow" - I like the power of this image as well as how it sounds when read aloud.

Overall:

Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Castle in the Sky

Review by ShelleyA~15 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello J.C.Stonewell2

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Castle in the Sky "

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem that sets the stage for it reflecting the poem's intent, capturing its essence as it acts as a portal inviting the reader into it. Nicely done.

~Form/Style:
A good fantasy write about a castle of dreams. An imaginative story poem. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Very nice use of this device which colors the scene that through the lens of your eye you paint with vividness that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of mirror as "sole resident" in a land that is "sad" - good descriptive/comparisons.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling as you express the sad demise of this ruin, this castle in a faraway land that has been deserted for a very long time, a place that is abandoned and only seen in dreams.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of a castle's ruins. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"the stones are fallen, the portcullis down
the gates are open the town is gone" - I like the rhythm of these lines. They give the reader a vivid image of the death of a kingdom and the castle that has become a ruin. Powerful.

~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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