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Review of Who Am I?  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello CJThomasson . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your "Who Am I?"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of this testimony of faith.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write of love and trust in the Savior that is heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a picture of God's grace, taking
you from the darkness of sin into the light of His redemption that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor about yourself - "a battered ship set adrift" and nice use of personification - to be set in
"the flaming arms of darkness": very nice descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express beautifully a powerful message of hope that new life in Christ has given you, with passion that uplifts and encourages that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about who you are as a believer in Christ. Good alliteration,
assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
But in the midst of my blindness
I found You; a shining light of hope; - these two lines express something all believers in Christ have learned, the blindness of our sin
is taken away by the Savior, our beacon of hope and saving faith. Well stated.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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Review of Heaven Opened  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Whitemorn . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Heaven Opened"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is uplifting and suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love Japanese form poetry and this is a very good write about a love's beginning that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity. Heartfelt, romantic and whimsical. A well crafted traditional Tanka. Perfect 5/7/5/7/7 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a stirring yet memorable picture of destiny that is seen through the chance encounter at love's inception that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable in this Japanese form of poetry.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express the light and joy of new love shared between soul mates that hold passion and blessing that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
"Destiny perfectly timed
Enhanced perceptions" - I love this expression of love's design, that it occurs exactly on time, at the right place with the right people that will experience heaven's bliss.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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Review of Invocation  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | N/A (Unratable.)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Osirantinous . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Invocation"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A very good title that is apropos for the subject of your poem. I really like it and it drew me in right away.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about 'borrowing' poetic skills that is prayerful and heartfelt. Clever word play. I like the humor of this piece. Excellent use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Cinquain with perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of the talent and skill of a great poet that today's poet would desire and aspire to that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor - "silver-tongued" and simile. Very good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable although in this form there is no restriction to rhyme.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. A solemn request to the 'gods' about receiving writing talents that made me chuckle... don't we all wish for this at times. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Good word choice; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration (Lord, lend, like; silver-tongued, skill), assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
I like all of the lines of your poem. They contribute to the whole theme, the longing for the "writing gifts" that you crave and long for that is expressed so well and with a bit of humor. Delightful.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Laughter  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Lina Black-So Far Behind!!! . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem"Laughter"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. Just a suggestion, since this is a short form poem and has such a strict syllable count, I'd recommend a different title that would still express the theme of laughter, but please note, this is only a suggestion.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about the joy and beauty of children's laughter that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of children's laughter, how beautiful it can be and how it spreads that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of simile "delight spread(s) like flower" a creative descriptive comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable although in this form there is no restriction to rhyme.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express in a beautiful way how laughter can be infectious in children, giving joy to them and others who hear it that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Good word choice; nice use of alliteration (seeking, spread; devour, delight; floats, flowers), assonance and consonance. Spelling: check the tense of "spread" in line four, should be spreads. No punctuation errors. Just a suggestion, since this form of poetry is so short, I would suggest limiting filler words (i.e. the) to be used only once in a poem that is driven by syllable count and is to express a snapshot of a subject that the reader can see in their mind's eye.

I especially like the following lines:
In your poem, and because it is a short form, I like all the lines in it because they contribute to the picture of joy laughter brings which you have creatively captured in this piece.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Alexi . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Autumn Winds Breath"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A delightful title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. Very creative expressing the theme of your poetry. Your title drew me in to your poem. Autumn is my favorite season

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about the autumn season and its beauty that is short, concise and succinct. Very good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form. I really like the presentation and your use of different colors in each line that beautifully represents the season. Cleverly done.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid 'snapshot' of this autumn scene that any reader can appreciate and see in their minds eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of wind, its "breath" which is a good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable although in this form there is no restriction to rhyme.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. I like how you express the beauty of this moment with a tinge of sadness as the colorful leaves fall to their final rest during this season. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
I like all the lines of this poem because they contribute to the imagery expressed in this piece.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello ~*Arpita*~ . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Let me fly now, some place in blue" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A very good write about saying your farewells that is heartfelt an introspective. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of your feelings that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of metaphor - "peels of feelings" - a good descriptive/comparison.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbcc aadeff. A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line one of stanza one (fly, I).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling. You express your feelings of hope and the importance of moving on beautifully in this poem.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Good word choice as is your use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Some place in blue, pale blue of sky
weary feathers shall rise so high!" - I like this turn in feeling, the hopefulness that comes with change. I can relate.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Uplifting closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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Review of My dear husband  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Oriana . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "My dear husband"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about your life of love with your husband. Heartfelt.
A skillfully crafted Nonet; perfect syllabic form of 9/8/7/6/5/4/3/2/1.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nice. Through the lens of your heart you paint
a picture of love and friendship that has deepened over the years that any reader
can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling: you express your love for your husband beautifully
in this piece. You are blessed with this gift of love and friendship. I can
relate to your thoughts well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.
No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the
end of line five and remove the period at the end of line seven. This will make the
flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"You’re my partner in crime!
You’ve been a godsend," - powerful description of your relationship, it's strength
and your husband being a special gift from God for which you are thankful.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Oriana . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your "Walking Home on a Winter's Night"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very nice write about a winter's night that is short, concise and succinct. A nicely crafted Whitney; perfect 3/4/3/4/3/4/7 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture
of what you see that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Nice depth of feeling; you express your appreciation of the scene well. I can relate to it.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice internal rhyme in line two (alight, night). Nice use of repetition for
emphasis on reflections caused from the snow. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.
No spelling errors. Punctuation: to remove the period at the end of line two; it will make the
flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Also, just a suggestion, to change line two to
something like this: 'alight night with' it will fix the slight awkwardness of the structure.

I especially like the following lines:
"Moon and stars’
earthly glimmer." nicely stated descriptives.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Patchwork Quilt  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Patchwork Quilt"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about the autumn season. Heartfelt. Very nice picture prompt as inspiration for your poem. A skillfully crafted Shadorma chain. Perfect 3/5/3/3/7/5 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. With the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the beauty of autumn leaves and how the wind makes them dance that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of personification: winds "unmask branches"; "leaves dance" and earth having "rebirth dreams" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme; Perfect masculine end line rhyme in stanza one (bare, air, prayer) and near perfect masculine end line rhyme in stanza two (upon, drawn, dawn). Nice internal rhyme in line one of stanza two (they, lay, a).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; the warmth you feel about the season ending and the one you await permeates your poem. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"A whispered colored farewell
is their final prayer" - a simply beautiful way to express how these colorful leaves are 'prayerful'.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Dream Cycle  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your "Dream Cycle"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about your inner feelings as seen in the character of a leaf. Heartfelt and introspective. Clever word play. Very good interpretation of the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted Parallelogram de Crystalline. Perfect syllabic form. Excellent rhyme.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your dream cycle that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of simile: "dreams shine like a spark"; nice use of metaphor - "Memory's ripples dance" vivid descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abb acc add aee. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts creatively and with deep emotion. I like how you describe sleep's oblivion (dark and light). I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is very good as is the use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: line 2 final verse - heartbeat is one word. No Punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
Each verse is so beautiful and can be a poem on their own. These are my favorite lines-
"Transcendent.
There is beauty and peace
which enfold, yet in the end, release."- simply beautiful with depth of emotion that touches the heart.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of The Lullaby  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Athena Lynn . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Lullaby" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A very good write about love between sister as shared through a lullaby. Heartfelt and poignant. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoyed very much.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your heart and eyes you paint a lovely devotion between sisters that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Not applicable.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff gghh. A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. Your love for each other, for time spent together singing and this special lullaby is expressed beautifully in this poem and is a blessing shared.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Very nice use of dialogue. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"As the haunting melody reached its sorrowful end,
I knew I’d now and forever lost, my only lifelong friend" - these words are powerful; you express how deep and close your relationship was with your sister that is moving and touches the heart.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Very good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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Review of Legos  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello jjasmine . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Legos"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about legos, and how it gives one the ability to build many things that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Cinquain, perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of legos that any reader can see in their minds eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm, and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express beautifully, the possibilities one has when creating something from legos. This brings back lots of memories of watching my nephew build so many things with them.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to add a comma at the end on line threes. This will give emphasis to the subject as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following line(s):
"Endless" Powerful and says it all. Excellent closing line.

*Pencil*~Overall:
From the first word, I was captivated by this piece. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of Time  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello William Kail . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem"Time"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A very good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
An excellent write about a love that ends and how time affects it. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Cinquain Crown. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form in each cinquain.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of what it is like when love ends that any reader can appreciated.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Nice use of internal rhyme in line two (they, say) and (brings, things) in lines three and four of your first cinquain.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings beautifully about lost love and how time, brings things about (good or bad), ends it and then brings about healing. I can relate very well to your words.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion - in your fourth cinquain at the end of line two, change the period to a comma and in line three change closes to 'closing'. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Time brings all things to be,
Just as it brings all things to end." this is a truth that we all understand in our journey of life.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Excellent closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Vicentiu Vassiliu . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "PDG Poetry Class Cinquain"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
"The Best Classes Ever" is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A nice write about this poetry workshop and learning a new form which is short, concise and succinct. A nicely crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Nice imagery and descriptive about the PDG poetry workshop that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express your passion about participating in this poetry workshop well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about this class. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to add a comma at the end of line four. This will give more emphasis to thought expressed in your poem.

I especially like the following lines:
I like all the lines as a whole since it expresses your opinion about participating in this workshop.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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Review of Fireflies  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello svenalo . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Fireflies"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about the light of fireflies. Upbeat and fun. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the blinking lights of fireflies that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of fireflies: they dance, seek mates and look for dates - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdefeghih. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece (ink, blink); (tree, see) and (mates, dates).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express your joy, excitement and wonder of this 'dance' of fireflies that you see in your yard. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on the fireflies light. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Sitting in darkness,
Black as ink,
Suddenly I saw,
Blink! Blink! Blink!" - you paint a delightful picture of the fireflies light that I remember as a child on a warm summers night.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of Impossible Dawn  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello DonnaB~On a Roll! . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Impossible Dawn"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about the dawning of day in morning and mourning. Heartfelt. Clever word play. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a good picture of morning, dark and light that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor "burning dew from mourning eyes" - nice descriptive comparison of grieving as described through nature.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express the vibrancy of the day, the power of it; that it will rise no matter the circumstance, something we can always count on, light that helps to extinguish the darkness.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the semi-colon at the end of line three in the second stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Let fire seep into the
Deep and the dark," - a powerful picture of the colors of the sky as the sun rises, the heat of it at dawn that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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Review of Love Dreams  
In affiliation with  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Perish Throckmorton . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Love Dreams" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A good write about true love in its subtleties. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your heart and eye, you paint a vivid picture of this special love that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of simile of what cool moonlight is like "love that does hover between one another" - nice descriptive comparison of light and love.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abac cdec f. Nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Good internal rhyme in line one (clover, over); line 2 (dreamers, streamers); line 3 (hover, another); line 6 (truly, unruly) and line 7 (unbeholden, golden)

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling; you express how special true love can be. Softly sensual.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the quality of true love. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the commas at the end of line two and three. This will make the rhythm and flow even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Lying in clover, slowly touching all over.
Cool moonlight, to dreamers, seen flown down in streamers," - powerful and compelling line about love that is continued throughout the poem. I love the romance of it.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Very good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of Dance  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Unwritten Insanity . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Dance"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about dancing that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt. A nice shape that is aesthetically pleasing and is a good example of concrete poetry. A skillfully crafted Lanturne. Perfect 1/2/3/4/1 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of dancing, and the importance to keeping moving across the floor that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express well the instructions and fun of dancing that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found. Nice use of onomatopoeia (stomp).

I especially like the following lines:
"Swing step stomp" - I love the sound and power of these words when read aloud; they picture the fun we have when we move to the dance.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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Review of Lady Of Mortality  
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Summer Wind is Healing . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem " Lady Of Mortality" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A good write about the personhood of mortality, the shroud of illness that is heartfelt and introspective. Dark. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of this woman, her personality and how she is clothed that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Good personification of mortality - "fever crowns her head" she has "soulless eyes" and "her mouth draws breath" - good descriptive/comparisons of her humanness. Nice personification of night, it whispers.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Not applicable.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion; you express the traits of this woman in a powerful way in this piece - her sorrow that permeates her being and brings about heartache... much like anyone affected by a long illness and how they would feel after fighting it, becoming weaker and weaker which results in the lack of joy in life.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of mortality's characterization of the darkness of drawing close to death as illness takes over life. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: line six - soulless is one word. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"She is waiting in time's shadow
Wrapped in night's whisper" - powerful lines capture the essence of the Lady of Mortality, drawing the reader in as we come to understand who she is, and the emptiness and grief she leaves behind.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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Review of Life is a Battle  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Liam . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Life is a Battle"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about the ups and downs of life, and at times how much it seems like a battle that is heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Cinquain Garland. Perfect form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your heart, you paint a vivid picture of this battle from within and without as you strive for balance in life that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Good use of metaphor about life--its a battleground within you that is fought every day. Very good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion; you express your thoughts on this inner battle that takes place and the warrior's heart which you wish to awaken to seek balance in life that I can relate to very well. You tell a powerful story taking place in your life.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis on this battle of your life and the strategic plan set loose. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Set loose
the dogs of war.
Let the battle begin." - these line catch my attention from the first words and carry me through to the end. This battle theme permeates your poem with powerful descriptives.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of Restored  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello iluvhorses . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Restored"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write and prayer to God for restoration that is heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming Acrostic which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is nice as are the descriptive. You paint a vivid picture of yourself at prayer, on your knees crying out to God that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbcbdede. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line ten (stray, pray).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. You call out to Him in prayer for the restoration that only He can give, a lovely example and testimony for those who know and love Him. Your faith shines brightly in this prayer poem. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in this petitionary prayer. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found. Just a note to add a space after the comma after 'stray'.

I especially like the following lines:
"Teach me, LORD, yet again
Refresh my joy in you." - these are powerful lines expressing your trust in Him as you cry out to the LORD to hear your petition that is followed through to the end of your poem.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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Review of A Challenge  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Charice . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "A Challenge"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about the need to be engaged, pursuing something new. Heartfelt, short, concise and succinct. Nice word play. A well crafted free style metered monorhyme which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaaaaa. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two (open, broaden).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about needing to be challenge, a way to grow. We all need to be challenged during our lives. It makes life interesting. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about needing to be tested for growth. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance. Spelling: see line two, should be 'horizons'.

I especially like the following lines:
"I need a challenge, Yes, something new
To open horizens and broaden my view," - these lines drew me in and was followed through to the end of the poem.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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Review of Little Bird  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello ScottyS . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Little Bird"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about this little bird and the sounds it makes when finding way to a feeder. Short, concise and succinct. A well crafted haiku. Perfect 5-7-5 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of the senses, you paint a good picture of the sight and sounds of this chickadee that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Nice depth of feeling; you express your knowledge of birds and their calls very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of the sound this bird makes. Strong alliteration and assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found. Nice use of onomatopoeia (fee-bee, fee-bee).

I especially like the following lines:
I like all the lines. Haiku being a short form its meaning is drawn from the whole.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of My Epitaph  
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Liam . Good day to you.

"This is an official Showering Acts of Joy Member to Member Review"

I am reviewing your poem "My Epitaph" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A good write and message for your tombstone. Heartfelt and humorous. A skillfully crafted epitaph that is short, concise and succinct.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is nice as is the descriptive. You paint a picture (implied) of a grave and tombstone in a cemetery (where you didn't want to be buried) and the picture of cremation that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Not applicable.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling; excellent sense of humor. Your words made me chuckle.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines: I like all the line but especially
"I clearly stated in my will
That I'd prefer cremation." powerful and tongue in cheek.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of Warning  
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello April Desiree-I'm back! . Good day to you.

"This is an official Showering Acts of Joy Member to Member Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Warning" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A good write about a harbinger or sign of danger that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Naani. Perfect form of 4 lines which consists of 20 to 25 syllables.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of the senses, you paint a vivid picture of the sounds of a flock of birds as a warning of danger that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Not applicable.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb. Second and fourth lines are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three (bring, warning).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Nice depth of feeling; you express how sound can send a message of warning, alerting others of danger on the horizon.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a comma at the end of line two. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Nice use of onomatopoeia (flapping).

I especially like the following lines:
"Bring forth with them the warning
A true ending has come" nice emotion in these lines about a harbinger of doom.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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