This poem was good. But the total opposite of what I thought, clicking on the link. That's not a bad thing.
It speaks of a child trying to live up to expectation, and seeming never to do it until giving up. But the effects of this last well into adulthood. Well done.
That was an interesting poem of a memory between a couple where money seemed to be tight. Amusing in places, it ended up as sad or bittersweet, whichever works fine.
Anyway, good work. I enjoyed reading it, and cannot find anything to suggest. Well done.
That was a good peom. I can see the sadness written into it very clearly. However, the impression of neverending seems to be eased a bit at the end, when it says each time. That gives a hint that the person is not always sad. That it itself, seems to lend a bit of hope to this. Nicely done.
This was an interesting story, reflecting on the control some individuals can have, whether spiritual, in this case, ot political.
I thought it ended in a good spot. Assuming there was a bit of time between the last paragraphs, gives a good hint that he is preparing to join them after arranging the room after the previous paragraph took place.
This poem I found quite interesting to read. With each verse it seemed to expand into the bigger picture each time as things progressed. Almost as an expansion of the previous verse. But each situation blended with the other so there were no changes in how all should be viewed that I could see. Good work.
I thought this was really amusing and well written. As in the poem, parents sometimes find the best way is to let children try/do things instead of debating the issue. In this case, they were proved right without having to say so, which left everyone happy.
That was really good to read, semi inspirational to me. It seemed to show the hopelessness of the night or darkness of emotion extending to the more postive side when the dawn approaches, bringing hope and light with it. Repairing the damage of the night. Great imagry
I thought this was good. The way thngs work out sometimes is interesting and the best laid plans for malice often trip up. The story here illustrated that nicely.
I also thought it ended up at a good place. Just ending once scene, and leaving it open to a future that can be imagined by the reader.
That was an interesting poem. The couple it speaks about haven't been able to hide it from the sound of things. But there is still some unsaid reason why they are denying it or downplaying the feelings. Mainly to themselves it seems. Nice little poem. Well done.
I thought this was a really amusing read. It left off at just the right moment to give the reader a chance to imagine the expression on the guy's face when he finds out what she has in store for him. But at the same time, I'm not that sympathetic to his 'plight'
That's really good. It gave the hint that the speaker's partner died very suddenly and unexpected.
The story is well written to show the conflicted feelings. On one hand wanting to leave, but then being able to realise that leaving would not fix the feelings this situation envoked.
Interesting poem. Taking the lure of the wide open spaces for some and turning into a negative context. At least on the part of the speaker.
Just another way to write the ending of a relationship, with at least one side not able to admit to themselves and only calling it a break to see how things go. Nice work.
That was good. The characters were well plotted and I can picture the scene. He's so determined not to be caught long term he is able to recognise the danger signs and break free before he can't do it. It could make the reader inagine what would happen if he did fall hard, or consider what kind of relationship suited him. Nice work.
That was an interesting story. I liked how it came together at the end, with points of observation throughout that held back from being a definate clue. That is until re-reading and things were much clearer. It's also good in giving the flow at the end, showing one battle over, but the war is still on. Very nice.
This was a really good response to a problem that can become annoying. It made me smile. On occasion I've been tempted to write back in a similar way instead of hitting the delete button. I can imagine that they replied in super quick time or more likely - probably not.
Oh yes, that was really great. I can just imagine it even though I've never experienced an older brother. Sounds like he holds all the cards, at least how he sees it. Could be very interesting to read more on what happened. Whether his plan was enough, or if she was right and it was a stupid idea that would go nowhere. Great work.
Interestign story. Before I get to the things I noticed, minor typo's. I thought it was good. interesting subject and characters. I did wonder about the master. Perhaps some reference could be made to him. Was he someone who had trained her? Or wanted to train her and she resisted?
"Stop or I will shot."
I think this should be - Stop or I'll shoot.'
Brenda set the paper down and sighed. She hoped they would found out that he was the serial killer.....
She hoped they would find out - or - She hoped the would have found out........
That was a good story highlighting the reactions of the cancer victim and her family and how they cope and deal with things from diagnosis to remission and recurrance. I had wondered if they would try for the bone marrow transplant, but instead it seemed to move to her bone. That was an interesting twist. About to go read the second story.
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