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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Kenword,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Marsden will find Gillian. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who goes to rescue an exiled Fairy. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:

1)Lady Vera Victoria gazed at Marsden and for a moment-Should read "Lady Vera Victoria gazed at Marsden, and, for a moment,"

2)her role thee-"thee" should be "there".

3)snow to be face down-"face" should be "faced".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi All Smiles,
This review comes with a huge thank you for reviewing my poem "Rose". This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of longing and impatience. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who is waiting for a woman to love but thinks he will only find those women who deny their feelings. I have met men and women like this, and it must add up to a lonely life. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Jkenley,
This is a wonderful essay. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the essay. Here in Canada we are going out to vote on October 21, so I was really interested in your topic and began to read to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about how the manner of electing the President of the United States was created and its effectiveness. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)does produce-Should read "do produce".

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mike,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if this man's good mood will continue. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who is very optimistic about things going well the year being a good one before an unexpected accident occurs. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Michigan Sister  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Halleigh,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of love and tinged with sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about your little sister who passed away when she was still just a baby. It is good that you can remember her with love and acceptance. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Laurie,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem celebrates all those people who worked behind the scenes producing shells during war time and the sacrifices they have made in the interest of a safer world. I think that people who do jobs like this are not thanked enough and their contributions should be recognized for their importance. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Bikerider,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of determination. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will go ahead with the bombing. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a terrorist who is preparing to launch an attack. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The Holy Man speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Con,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with melancholy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if anything will change or improve in Hastings. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about the decline of a small town after the War. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi LegerdeMAIM,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of excitement and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Tara's expedition in space will be like. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a space mission turns tragic when a malfunction occurs. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hi khan,
This is a wonderful article. The title is a direct question posed to the reader. They immediately start thinking about the possible answers and will begin to read to find hear your thoughts on the matter. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about the importance of unity in countries. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)universal or global world wide-Should read "Universal or global world wide,"

2)In a few places you have neglected to begin the names of countries with a capital letter. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to your reader. Great job.

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Review of All I want  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Keo_Shortstack,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with longing and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who dreams of being with the person they love, even though that is unlikely. I am hoping that the speaker can accept the reality of their situation completely and move on with their lives. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Brenda,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is light and full of fun. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, while Old Ma Ness is preparing for Halloween, Moon's three kittens start getting into trouble. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great jobs.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Tabby,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the truth not being in pictures. I had a torrid childhood, but our family portrait shows a stable, happy family, so I can certainly identify with the feelings of the speaker in the poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The poem has a unique rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Kristina,
This is a fantastic entry. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the entry. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by giving the reader the prompt by which the entry is written. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the entry. They will read to the last word. You have written about your opinion on a quote from Einstein about imagination and knowledge. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the entry tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Carol,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem celebrates Jane Austen. I am not completely familiar with her writing, but I did enjoy the getting a sense of her both as a person and a writer from this poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The acrostic poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. You have used the letters of "Jane Austen" very creatively here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a married couple who are questioning whether or not they can make it through the maze of turmoil that is marriage. I am hoping that this couple will find a way to navigate their life together successfully with a great deal of joy. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem.. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Writers Block  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Allison,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is suffering from writer's block and tries having a drink of whiskey in order to help the ideas come. I am hoping that the drink helps the speaker and they get inspired. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I have suffered from writer's block more times than I can count and know exactly what is feels like. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Keaton,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of confusion and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is completely in turmoil when they arrive at a dramatic cross roads in their lives. I am hoping that the speaker can restore the peace in their lives. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a very loving family who lets nothing get in the way of their happiness. I am so over joyed for the family and hope that their happiness and stability will last. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Rotten Apple,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how you hate people who abuse and neglect dogs. I am an animal lover, specifically cats, and it makes me cry to hear about animals being hurt in anyway. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi FabianE.Guzman,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with an eerie hypothetical. It has the reader thinking about what they would be doing in this situation. They will read on to find out more. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main character and plot very well for your reader. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The chapter concentrates on the main character, Origin, and he comes across as a real person. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Lou,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if there is any truth to the beliefs of the speaker's mother. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a young man's mother scolds him for lifting a rug and disturbing the dirt for fear of releasing any spirits bound to the house. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that needs your attention:

1)I will sweep that up as soon as I warm my fingers a bit mom."-This is a piece of dialogue and needs to begin with quotation marks.

2)"Don't worry, my sister said, rolling back the knit rug. Sometimes I sweep dirt under here if I can't find the dustpan."-Should read "Don't worry," my sister said, rolling back the knit run, "Sometimes I sweep dirt under here if I can't find the dustpan."

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Trishele,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about a time in your life when someone else's abuse left you unsure of yourself and everyone else in your life. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:


1) cold, afraid it-Should read "cold, afraid. It"

2) i cant trust them it's not my fault,-Should read "I can't trust them. It's not my fault."

3) my sanity my happiness.-Should read "my sanity and my happiness."

You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Web Witch,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if this young man will arrive home on time. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman who is anxiously awaiting the arrival of her son from the army. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the mother, and she comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1) His tour of duty ends-"ends" should be "ended".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi JM Jr.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone trying to comfort the person they left behind when they died. I am wondering if the loved one left behind will be alright and that these people will see each other again in heaven. I read to the last word to find out. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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