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Review of beautiful me.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi jessiewor,
This is a wonderful essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader about the different ways the people you know view their lives. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about what is most important in life. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1) & Some say they're living their lives to the fullest.-"Some" should begin with a small letter.

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Bill,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Ms. Jones can salvage the production in any way. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a town librarian who puts on a production of "Romeo and Juliet" with less the adequate performers. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Bourbon  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Angelica,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a Main Cool, named Bourbon, who is living in cramped circumstances with many other cats. It looks like Bourbon is waiting to be adopted, and I am hoping he does. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Starry Winds  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Petalleaf,
This is a wonderful piece. The tone is full of anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what will happen on Stella's first day at her new school. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is abut a teenage girl who prepared to face her first day at a new school. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Stella, and she comes across as a real person. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. Stella speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)I walked through the doors of my new high school and the-There should be a comma after "school".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of The Stroll  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Webwitch,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anticipation and impatience. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the woman will catch up with her lover. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman suffering from a strong, and heartbreaking, delusion. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hi abaru,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is tinged with impatience. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Oliver and Shirley will get away with their nasty plan. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a selfish therapist who manipulates one of her patients who is having marital problems. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)your wife Jennifer-"Jennifer" should be enclosed in commas.

2)In a few places you have neglected to puts each piece of dialogue in its own paragraph. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You change points of view here, but it is done smoothly. The story is consistent in terms tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Snow Vampire,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of impatience. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is tired of the wintry weather and how it makes them feel. We have had a nice winter here, so far. I hope it stays that way, but I am still looking forward to spring. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Rhupunt poetic style works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Love has a Visage  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Exhausted Fool,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with resignation and determination. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who had a troubled, unhealthy relationship with their mother but did not let it color their lives or their relationship with their own children. My relationship with my own mother has been rocky, to say the least. I have her on the fringes of my life-nothing more. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Breathe  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi wHisskerfaceisspooked,
I am reviewing the edited version of this piece. I found it was more descriptive and got your point across more vividly than the first version. This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about how vital Jesus is in our lives. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of pick your poison  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi amy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the four personality types and the characteristics of each. We don't always think about where the personalities of the people we know or encounter fall in the spectrum of behavior. It was interesting to find out. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Jellyfish,
This is a wonderful article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the article. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they can expect from the article. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about where you were and what you were doing when you found about the bombings at the Boston Marathon. The reader is delighted with the look the get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)we were asked to write about-"we" should begin with a capital letter.

2)Grabbing a bottle of water from the mini bar I turned-There should be a comma after "bar".

You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Snow Vampire,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about people who are in love needing to keep moving in the same direction in order for the relationship to last. In two months it will be my boyfriend and my 24th anniversary. We have lasted this long because of staying on the same page and on the same path. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Trepanation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jin,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the emotional abuse your mother inflicted on you and the effect it had. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer, even as they are hoping you can deal with your emotional injuries. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.



You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Why I wait  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Niffler,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow and pain. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman who is waiting for a man they love to return to them. I am wondering if this relationship will go on, or if the man has gone away for good. I read to the last word to see which happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of I am what I am  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Michael T,
This is a fantastic preface. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the preface is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the preface without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the preface. They will read to the last word. You have written about how, exactly, feel about yourself. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the preface tedious. You use an aggressive style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Naveed,
This is a fantastic essay. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the essay. We have just had a general election here in Canada, and I was fascinated by your topic. I began to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic with a brief overview of the political history of Pakistan. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about the problems which exist in the political environment in Pakistan. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Triggers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
Hi Safely anonymous,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of anxiety and nervousness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering and hoping that this woman escapes her abusers. They will read to the last word to see if this happens. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a young woman runs away from an abusive situation. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:

1)Im fairly short,-Should read "I'm fairly short,"

2) well my fathers a respected detective-"fathers" should be "father's".

3)You switch between the past to the present tense in this story. You should keep your tense consistent to keep your writing consistent for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jkenley1,
This is a wonderful article. The title is very attention grabbing. It poses a direct question to the reader. They will immediately start thinking about the possible answers. They will begin to read to find out your thoughts on the subject. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about the mental capabilities of different species. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either indent or double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Do you remember?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Minja,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a couple who enjoy a moonlit night in the woods. This couple seem so happy together. I hope they get to enjoy many more nights like this one. I love this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Kris,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of apprehension. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the there will be trouble at Bernie's birthday party from the people he really had not wanted to invite. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a cruel present leads to a wonderful experience for a deaf boy. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Seasons  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi spidey,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Elliot will go back and try to make up with Rachel. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who thinks about the first time he met his wife after their first fight. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Elliot, and he comes across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Dog’s dally  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi WakeUpAndLive,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone who wakes up in the middle of the night to find their dog has been up to mischief. I was wondering what the strange the speaker heard was. I read to the last word to find out. The haiku sonnet poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The poem concentrates on one experience-finding out the source of a strange sound in the night. There are fourteen lines. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Space  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jin,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone if filled with sorrow and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is caught between wanting the person they to be near them and telling them to go because the speaker is no good for them. I am hoping that the speaker can find a way to be with the person they love. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of The test  Open in new Window.
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Hi Bridget,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is tinged with fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Jayens will find his brother. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a boy who enlists the help of a witch to find his brother. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:



1) “please witches above please help me find him.”-"please" should begin with a capital letter.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fifer,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is fascinated with the way the two seasons regard humans. They will read to the last word. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, Autumn and Summer discuss the humans and their development. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. I love stores which personify inanimate objects and seasons. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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