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Review of Midnight Manor  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi EnterName5312,
This review comes with a huge thank you for reviewing my story, "Gratitude For The Relatives". This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what the strange smell that John detects is. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a party which turns deadly when one of the guests turns into a ravenous beast. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)“I saw what you did and I didn’t want to leave you behind”-There should be a comma after "did".

2)John went outside and climbed up. He walked along the roof till he reached the glass. When he got there, the stranger popped his head up. “I didn’t ask you to follow me” said John as he was stomping on the glass skylight.
The stranger walked over and looked down before saying, “It doesn’t look like there’s any survivors in there anymore”-These are two separate paragraphs and need to be double spaced.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Dimitriou  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Sumojo,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Dimitriou will be caught or keep on scamming people. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, the son of Greek immigrants leads his life a as a con man. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)I’m so inadequate I should be able to help them.”-There should be a period after "inadequate".

2)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Despair  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi ThomasPain,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow and hopelessness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is experiencing a very painful time in their life. I am hoping that the speaker can find someone to support and help them in this difficult point in their life. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Light continues  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Rotten Apple,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of love and hope. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about when you met your soul mate and the enduring love you have shared since. I am so happy for both of you. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works extremely well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of A bus  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi tales of 6502,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have made a statement on the vibrant, unpredictable moods of your people using the guise of a personified bus to make your point. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi MementoMori,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and filled with anger. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Faye will succeed in killing her husband. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman who plans to kill her husband because he is trying to kill her. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Lucky Lady,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if speaker will find a way to find love and not be hurt in the process. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a woman goes through two difficult marriages and a self-destructive life. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are fully developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either indent or double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Laurie,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the beauty of the ocean off the shores of Green Island. It sounds so peaceful and gorgeous. I love the being on the beach or near the water in anyway. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The haiku poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem concentrates on one specific image the beauty of the sea. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Brenda,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of love. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem pays tribute to your beloved cats, Barney and Dinkie, two cats you have loved and lost. I still remember the loss I felt when our cats, Marbles and Harley died, 2009 and 2003 respectively. We love and miss them everyday. It has given us so much joy to adopt our present darling, Tiddles. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (2.5)
Hi Cocotwinkle,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering who is causing the deaths in this town. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a town in which people are dying after getting a phone call. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:

1)Granny shoced-Should read "Granny, shocked"

2)In a few places you have neglected to start sentences with capital letters. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

3)In a few places you have neglected to start proper names with capital letters. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of The Dread Bridge  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi DuhhscaryFactor,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of fear and annoyance. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will find a way to defeat the dragon creating their fear. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who is plagued by a tiny dragon who is creating fear in his mind, specifically of a bridge. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:

1)but he knows their stable,-"their" should be "they're".

2)heart starts racing and he's breathing rapidly.-There should be a comma after "racing".

3)"Great now-There should be a comma after "Great".

4)He realized that this had to be his last stand and-There should be a comma after "stand".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Action!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi kathy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and filled with self-doubt. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who puts on a show and pretends to be the person everyone expects them to be instead of themselves. I am hoping that the speaker can find a way to be comfortable with who they are as a person. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Eden Now  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Robert,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of confidence. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will convince the woman he loves to become a cyborg as well. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who has had his intelligence uploaded into a mechanical body and wants the woman he loves to do the same. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Bill,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Sully will defeat the AI. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who battles an artificial intelligence who had gone rogue and killed everyone on a space station. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of The Flawed Gods  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi J. Thayne,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of doubt and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if J'on will decide to continue using his abilities to save people or give up. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a person with super-human abilities questions his commitment to saving others. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You abruptly switch from the past to the present tense. This is a bit confusing to the reader. You should keep your tense consistent in order to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view. Great job.

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Review of The Performance  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ken,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. In the poem, someone had a momentary bright moment in a bleak life as they watch the beauty of the sun bring light to the world. I am hoping that the speaker can find a way to break through their dark life and find peace. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The Dorsimbra poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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for entry "HI everyone" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Kristina,
This is a wonderful entry. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the entry. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the entry without introduction and preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the entry. They will read to the last word. You have written about your hospital stay and your hope for recovery. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the entry tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1) because I have in the hospital.-Should read "because I have been in the hospital."

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of In memory  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Niffler,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who lived their life exactly the way they wanted to. We all hope that we can do this, and I am so happy to see that the speaker accomplished it. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Pernell,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of confusion and horror. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why the growth has caused such strange behavior in the doctors. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, when a growth is taken out of a patient during surgery, it causes the doctors to start to attack each other. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:

1)"Yes, it my turn today.-"it" should be "it's".

2)dress in their pale blue smocks-"dress" should be "dressed".

3)It was dull grey once I was dried.-"I" should be "it".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Human  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi kathy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow, regret and determination. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a girl who has made a mistake which affected someone else and is asking for forgiveness. I am hoping that the people in this poem can move on from this point and that the mistake won't end the relationship. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of See my Mask  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Hana,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who wears a mask to hide who they really are but want someone to see their true selves. I am hoping that the speaker can find the courage to reveal who they really are to those they are close to. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Spring is Sprung  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Carol,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of hope. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is faced with their past demons as Spring arrives and they should be enjoying the prospect of a new beginning. I am hoping that the person in the poem can find a resolution to their struggles and get the transformation they need in their life. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I love this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of "Three Gargoyles"  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Rojodi,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of terror. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if creatures which visit will hurt Asher and Gail. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a couple who are terrorized by demon and ghosts on Halloween night. They conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of JINN  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Victor,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of astonishment. It grabs all reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Walter will wish for. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who is visited by a Jinn who offers to grant him three wishes. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Ironic Despair  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Luckie,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of determination. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the homeless man will steal from the store. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a homeless man who is contemplating shoplifting in order to eat witnesses a robbery. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The cashier speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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