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Review of Santa Darling  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Minja,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman who want the man she loves for Christmas and is asking Santa for that. I am hoping that the woman in the poem gets her love. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Turning Pages  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Soma,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of love and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who is in love with a woman who is with someone else. The reader is wondering if the man will move on and find love. They will read to the last word to find out. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of expiry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi noahwayy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow, pain and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is suffering from post traumatic stress disorder and can't see how their life will get any better. I am hoping that the speaker will find some peace. I read to the last word to find out if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Darkness  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Amber,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of pain and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about struggling with depression. I watched my father suffer from depression for my entire childhood, and it was heart breaking. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Something, Still  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Fyndorian,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a woman who remains hopeful and joyful even as her neighborhood declines. My own hometown has declined since I lived there years ago. It has made me determined to see that the same thing does not happen to current small town I live in. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Blue Sky  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Mritika,
This a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with a simple statement of the time of day. The reader is wondering what will come next. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main character very well for the reader. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:


1)whenever i loot at the sky-"loot" should be "look".

2)You have neglected to start sentences with a capital letter. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The characterization is fully developed and believable. The chapter concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Crissy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, a man promiscuous behavior affects his son's attitudes about women. The reader is wondering if the speaker will be able to form healthy ideas about the opposite sex. They will read to the last word to find out. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Monochrome,
This is a fantastic article. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. I love hearing about different countries and different traditions. I anxiously began to read to find our more. You introduce the topic by explaining to the reader exactly why you started your travel blog. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about your trip to Singapore. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Buttercups  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi The T Lady,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. In the poem, a little girl has an adventurous ride on a pony and never forgets it. I loved the vivid description in this poem. I could envision the little girl on the pony as I read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. I gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Choice  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Image13,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the speaker will try to involve her child's father into their lives. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a woman's life is completely changed when she admits to her best friend that she is in love with him. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one piece of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The speaker speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Soma,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by outlining a play which makes the point you want to make about education. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about education and hard work and how they can change a person's life. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Why?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Laurie,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anxiety and pain. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone in the middle of a very confusing, very aggravating relationship. I am wondering if the speaker will stay in this relationship or leave. I read to the last word to see which happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi SRM
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of love and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone deeply in love and so happy to have the person in their life. I am wondering if this couple will spend their lives together. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Whobody  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Brenda,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone full of annoyance. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, a child blames the trouble they get into on an imaginary friend. I remember my imaginary friend from childhood. She disappeared when I started school. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Intensive Care  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi ForeverDreamer,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader about your deep feelings for your wife Lisa. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it on you and the piece. They will read to the last word. The piece is about a time when your wife was in ill health and almost died. The reader is delighed with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)Lisa has Chronic Obstructive Pulmonary Disease, or COPD. It lands her in the hospital way too often. She has been intubated twice in her life. This is about the second time that she was intubated, when she came the closest to death.
Lisa had a COPD exacerbation which caused her to be hospitalized. After a little over a week she was improving. She no longer needed to stay on the Bipap machine twenty-four hours a day. She only needed it at night when she was sleeping. Her blood oxygen saturation was staying up where it should be most of the time. She was doing well enough that the doctors decided to move her up to the Progressive Care Unit on the third floor later in the day.-These are two separate paragraphs and need to be double spaced.

You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of love and contentment. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about two people who have been in love for a long time, and are enjoying a new beginning together. I am hoping that this couple will be happy for the rest of their lives. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of no more you and i  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi kathy,
These are fabulous lyrics. The tone is full of pain and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The lyrics are about someone who has let go of a painful relationship and is trying to move on. I am hoping that the speaker can move on with their life and find happiness. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved these lyrics. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the lyrics a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The lyrics flow extremely well. They are a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in these lyrics. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dungeon Warden,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with anxiety and confusion as Susan wakes up not knowing where she is. The reader is wondering what has happened to leave her in such a state. They will read on to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are completely immersed in the family turmoil here and wondering why Susan is having delusions. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Keaton,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who tired if his senseless life and ends it. I am wondering why the man in the poem is so hopeless. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Rolly,
These are fantastic lyrics. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The lyrics are about the questionable choices made by Willie Nelson and how you think his life will end because of them. I don't know much about Willie Nelson except that he advocated legalizing marijuana use. I loved these lyrics and read to the last word. The free verse works well in these lyrics, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The lyrics flow extremely well. They are a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in these lyrics. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of The Little Girl  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Soma,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with anxiety and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman who dreams of the carefree girl she was before she forgot how to enjoy life. I am hoping that the woman in this poem finds the joy in life again. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi HikerAngel,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Rachel will find out who has broken into her home. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman who finds a strange photo on her phone which alerts her to the fact that her home had been broken into while she was asleep. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Is it love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Annaliese,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is full of shock and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what the woman in the story has been through. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In story, a traumatized woman accepts help from a man even though she is unsure if she trusts him. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Soma,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. I was curious about why you lost touch with this friend, and I began to read immediately to find out. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. This is a letter to someone you care for who has moved away from your relationship. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Kristina,
This is a fantastic entry. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the entry is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the entry without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the entry. They will read to the last word. You write about the writing project you are working on for your granddaughter. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the entry tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader.

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