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Review of Rebel  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi BkackAdder,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Tinah and her husband will be hurt. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a couple who have violent confrontation over a horrible debt. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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2077
Review of Puddle Song  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Brenda,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a child who goes out to play in the rain with their new boots. I loved going out in the rain and snow as a child. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of A Child is Born  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Richard,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone if filled with joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the joy a child's birth brings. I have always been so happy when someone io my family has or adopts a child. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The haiku poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. You have concentrated on one emotion here-joy. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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2079
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi kathy,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about a time in your life when you needed help. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to use a comma before coordinating conjunctions. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Soma,
This is a wonderful piece.The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about a time when you found a flower over shadowed by a tree and rescued it. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across on structural issue that needs your attention:

1)wilting so I decided to make an impact.-There should be a comma after "wilting".

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Out of Tears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi NorahMae,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who has cried themselves dry. I an wondering why the speaker is so sad. I read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. Thee is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Holly,
This a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the speaker weil have a life filled with diversity. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a young woman who is influenced greatly ber grandmother's culture and language. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Twiga,
This is a fantastic story. The story is tinged anxiety and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what has happened to the Ninja Tribunal. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles are asked to help when the members of the Ninja Tribunal are attacked. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of About Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Kev,
This is a fantastic essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. The reader knows they will be learning about you but not much else. They will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. You have written about the struggles you have experienced in you life. While the reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer, they are hoping that things do improve for you. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of A Bear in a Storm  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi FireWriter2012,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about enjoying every moment of your life exactly the way you wish. I agree with this completely. I loves this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well in this poem. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Hiccup Ran  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi whiskerfaceatthefireplace,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Hiccup will discover any other talent besides his quick mind. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a young boy tries to get along in a world in which he is the exact opposite of the person he loves most-his father. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Holly,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is light. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Akala will find a special treat for Callie. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a bear cub gets help from an owl when she tries to find a special treat for her mother. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. Akale speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)birthday but she kept that secret too.-There should be a comma after "birthday".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi cheshire,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about humanity's struggle to gain a sense of unity. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hi NOBODYLEARNS,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well.The reader is wondering if the speaker will be caught by the aliens. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a spy who lies their way onto an alien vessel in order to gather information. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:

1)That was a really bad one and you knew it.-There should be a comma after "one".

2)But after he calmed down-There should be a comma after "But".

3)You switch from the past to the present tense in this story. You should keep your tense consistent to keep your writing clear for your reader.

3)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view. Great job.

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Review of More Secrets  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi R_chel,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with a general statement about a teenager's life. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the chapter. They will read on. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up you plot and main character very well for your reader. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The chapter concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. Great job.

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Review of Barry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Ashii,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is full of frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Barry will find relief from his high temperatures. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The piece is about a man who suffers from persistent fevers. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The piece concentrates on Barry, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Evan,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the development of human intellect and ways of expression since prehistoric man. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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2093
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi CarrickCasa,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is all the different facets of your personality. I was delighted with the look I got as you as a person as well as a writer. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Krishnavi,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly why you wrote the article. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about a poem that depicts life in all its diversity and complexity. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Ken,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of confusion and apprehension. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what is on the newly discovered planet. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a scouting group who find a strange planet that seems to have no inhabitants. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn-elf,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with peace. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman who is staying home and relaxing instead of struggling through Black Friday shopping. I stayed away from the stores this Black Friday. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm in this poem. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Madeleine,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of wonder and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a crowd of people involved in some exciting communal ritual. The reader is wondering why the crowd is so excited and transfixed. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi NorahMae,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone trying to concentrate and stay focused as they read poetry. I am wondering if the poetry is being read for a specific purpose, like a class, and if the speaker will get through it. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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2099
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Evan,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about how to take control of your life. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi lea,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is intense and full of passion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman who has her first night of passion with the man she loves. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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