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Review of The Memory Girl  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Ms. Meowcaron,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what Solie will do with her new ability. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about who is being pursued by people wanting to study a special ability she has. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Solie, and she comes across as a real person. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. Miranda speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)me and I don’t want to get poked and jabbed by anyone.-There should be a comma after "me".

2)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of The Creature  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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GU35T,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with contentment and peace. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is completely absorbed by the emotions in the story. They will read to the last word. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a blind boy who is enjoying the company of his best friend-his pet. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is well developed and believable. The story concentrates on the blind boy, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Pieces  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Logan,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone struggling to finish a jigsaw puzzle. I used to love doing jigsaw puzzles. I found them relaxing. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Don Two,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who finds a time machine. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Angelina,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the feelings of an actor when their big production is over. I am hoping that other performances leave the speaker with more pleasant feelings. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The metis consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of On Being Yellow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi WebWitch,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem celebrates becoming a preferred author with the yellow suitcase. I remember when I became preferred. I was so proud. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Fear of Flying  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi sindbad,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. My father struggled with a fear of flying, so your topic fascinated me. I began to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about coping with your fear of flying. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of One Step Away  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Zane,
This is a fantastic essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about your struggle to achieve your goals in life, the most important being playing football. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Luna,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow and pain. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the hole that was left in your life after losing a relationship which meant a great deal to you. I was hoping that you moved on with your life. I read to the lat word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. there is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of I am Coming Home  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi nix,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone who has lost touch with the family they were so close to but decides to go home and renew the relationship. I am hoping that the reunion goes well. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of In this moment  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi RootsToAPoetree,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of love and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how you feel when you are alone with the woman you love. I am hoping that the both of you share a long lifetime of happiness. I am so happy for both of you. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Lucid Drops  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Rhychus,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the strange forms our dreams can take. I very rarely remember my dreams, but this ones I remember were weird. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works extremely well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Black Magic  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi jaya,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is sinister. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a black ritual carried out in the dead of night. The reader is wondering what outcome the ritual will have. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Stargazer  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi AJ,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of wonder. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone gazing up at a starlit night and contemplating their place in the universe. I have asked myself about where I fit in the huge universe, and I am still searching for that answer. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Grey and Black  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Carolyn,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who has been left by the person they love. I am hoping that the speaker can go on with their life and find love. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in the poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Little Jamey  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Jace,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of loss and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Donna will be able to cope with her grief. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman who must deal with the loss of her husband and son. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and believable. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Redtowrite,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering how Christine's family will get by. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a young girl who is taught the true meaning of Christmas through tragedy. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:

1)The younger ones didn't understand but they sure saw Pa's temper.-There should be a comma after "understand".

2)she was helping Theresa also and that would have made Mr. Ray happy.-There should be a comma after "also".

3)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of A Conversation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Christine,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of confusion and longing. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the person seeking personal knowledge will listen to their companion. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about someone who is trying to comprehend their place in the universe and how achieve enlightenment. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. You have left the description to the imagination of the reader. This is an effective technique which keeps the reader focused on the conflict. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Flooded Mind  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Just Izze,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anxiety and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is searching for a way to connect with the one they love and the world around them. I am hoping that the speaker can find peace and contentment in their life. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of The Ark  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jellyfish,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone who experiences damage during a flood and has to take similar action as Noah from the Bible. I am hoping that the speaker and their family can rebuild and move on. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Holiday Poem  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Angelina,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone enjoying Christmas with family. I love Christmas and this poem reminds me of all the reasons why. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of County Fair  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ken,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a day at the fair. I love going to fairs. There is one that come to my area every year. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Lenito poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a fabulous rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Kathie,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Julianne will be able to rebuild her life after Lance's death. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman who has to cope with the death of her husband. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)in a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Claws and Teeth  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ray,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the evolution of violence among humans. I hope that one day humans will out grow violence, but I am wise to realize that this will take a very long time. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Angry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Serenity,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have outlined your current emotional issues for the reader. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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