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Review of Vampire Voodoo  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Dave,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is sinister. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a vampire who is after their next victim. I am wondering if the victim will realize they are in danger and get away in time. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi KidAwesome,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone full of feelings of isolation and curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes the want to read on. The poem is about someone who experiences life and alone and all its pitfalls. I am hoping that the person in the poem finds a good life for themselves and someone to share it with. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The haiku poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem concentrates on the emotions experienced by the person in the poem. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation here, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Marginal Light  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Carol,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about getting past lies which others tell us. I believe in forgiveness and try to incorporate it into my life. Holding grudges really accomplishes nothing. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of The Agreement  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Beholden,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of determination and curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Timon will find a way to gain control over the inmates again. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a group of convicts plan to kill their jailer in order to escape. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to put each piece of dialogue into its own paragraph. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Needles  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Angus,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of worry and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Kathi has actually hurt Megan. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a girl who is worried because she dreams about getting revenge on a girl who torments her at school. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi midnightviolet,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about a time in your life when you felt empty and were searching for fulfillment. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Mental Mess  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lauren,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of self doubt and feelings of isolation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who struggles with so much anxiety they cannot keep people around them and are completely along in the world. I am hoping that the speaker will find a way to make a connection with someone else. I read to the last word to find out if this happens. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi SomaSilver,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with sorrow and regret. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone tormented by the memory of someone they loved but gave up. I am wondering if the speaker will go back to the person they love. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Matthew,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of sorrow and disappointment. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Ben's parents will convince him there is a Santa Claus. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a young boy who is told, by a boy he goes to school with, that there is no Santa Claus. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)said Billy, his best friend, had told him.-"had told him" is not necessary here.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi annakerrtate2019,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the evil impulses which we fight everyday in order to live a good life. I try to treat others the way like I would want to be treated. I think you can't go wrong if you do this. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Yoda Remembers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Bill,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Yoda will be successful in his training. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, while training with his mother, Yoda learns about his father and the Dark Side of the Force. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is true to the characters as they appeared in Star Wars. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of A Girl like You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Joto-Kai,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of confusion and doubt. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the enchanted necklace will work for Stiles. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a gypsy who uses a lonely man for her own selfish ends. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Laurie,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the rabbit who makes the eggs that the Easter Bunny brings each year and how he does it. I love the magical quality of this poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Angelina,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a girl who finds a wounded crow and nurses it back to health. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Felices,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the writer will learn anything useful from the pirate. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a writer who goes to a pirate to learn speak like a pirate for a writing contest they are entering. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. You have left the description to the imagination of the reader. This is a very effective technique which keeps the reader focuses on the conflict. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi GivingThanksBrad,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is light. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a person is can't cook tries to make dinner for someone they love. The reader is wondering if the meal will be successful. They will read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Cimone,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with the main character introducing and describing herself to the reader. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on Lashawn and the chapter. They will read on to find out more about her. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the story. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)" Diaz says shut up,” he said as he scanned the room, ” what’s going on ?“. Without my permission Lita just blurted it out ” Shawn just won a contest where she gets to go the best school in the country, my smart little baby”, she said as she smothered me in kisses. Santiago nodded in acknowledgment and walked out of the room with the slightest smile on his face.-Two characters are speaking here. The paragraph should be divided into two to account for the two pieces of dialogue.

2)as we drove there Lita had spread out the rest of my life for me,-"as" should begin with a capital letter.

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Patrice,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about what you would like to see from the people you meet on WDC. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a friendly style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of The Trigger  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi BXC,
This review comes with a huge thank you for reviewing my item "Business Landing Page". This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of determination. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will shoot the woman working on the time machine. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who plans to shoot his mother in order to prevent her from inventing a time machine. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Zealous,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full confusion and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman who, as she says goodbye to her husband, wonders if she was ever important to him. I am wondering if the woman will find out that she meant a lot to her husband. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of A Shark's Tale  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Jellyfish,
This is a fantastic essay. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the essay. I love learning about nature and animals. I began to read right away to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about sharks. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Unknown Lady  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Minja,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a man who becomes obsessive about a woman he does not know only to have her disappear from her life. I am wondering if the man will try to find the woman, and to what lengths he will go. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Upsidedown world  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi AnxietyWritten,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of confusion and fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is feeling threatened by unseen forces in a house they are used to being in. I am wondering if the speaker will find out if their anxiety is real or imagined. I read to the last word to find out. The haiku poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. You have concentrated on the emotions of fear and confusion that the speaker is experiencing. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Who Was He?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Shaved_Space_Monkey,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about a time in your childhood when you feel your guardian angel kept you safe from harm. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)A little later, my parents come and shout my name,-Should read "A little later, my parents came and shouted my name,"

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Chris,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with vivid description. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on what is going on. They will read on. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here.. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)The Hovertaks became a quite family that night and-Should read "The Hovertaks became a quiet family that night, and".

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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