Oh La La! Small, expressive and very angry poem. I felt it. Too often this happens, all for different reasons, and it's sad people grow apart, since loneliness is a real fear today in society.
In the moment, and well edited and enjoyable. I had anger years ago, but now no more. Sharing was wonderful and I appreciate it, It's nice to know we're not alone in out experiences. Thanks Intuey. StaiNe snowed in
A poem can be about anything and this cute one about a sock with toe holes is cute. I could see the contentment of putting on a favorite pair of socks, only to realize that they've had their day and another pair is needed. Made me smile, simple and well edited. Thanks!
I myself can't pass up a good word search and this was fun to do, took me a little longer than I'd care to admit but delightful for everyone. The Gif and image at the first are a heartwarming touch, as I have many winter wonderland memories myself and adore the warmth despite the theme.
A neat little historical like tale you tell with this poem, I enjoyed it. Very creative and clearly expressed. I could see Aegis is all his glory. The only suggestions I have is the beginning it seems to be missing the tense you keep with the rest of the poem.
You wrote:
Oh people give ear,
The tale you hear,
Of an adventure dear!
example:
Oh people do give ear,
To this tale your hear,
Of an adventurer dear!
I really did enjoy this, and I wish you luck in the contest.Thanks you kindly for sharing. StaiNe snowed in
Good Morning Anhait
Interesting, philosophical look into how one would see themselves walk, as if their life with each decision, each feeling, each remembered event was like a page in a book. It seems as if a lot of life has been written, wore shoes. Content, somewhat happy, a glimpse of sadness but I see no regrets, perhaps confusion. There's a lot expressed in this tint poem, and that's what great about poetry everyone get something different from it.
Perhaps despite it size, breaking it into three line stanzas to emphasise some of those questions and deep feeling and self reflect. Like this:
example:
What can I see, the road or my own passage?
No worn out shoes are ever strange.
A story becomes a legend on the last page.
Which winter ever paints the leaf jade?
Love is always free even in a broken heart's cage.
I do not know where I am going in my own haste.
My fingers are still touching my fence.
My worn out shoes still sketch some footprints on my life's page.
You open with each question, then give the reader a change to understand the answer a read on. Only my suggestion and I hope it helped. Thank you for sharing, again I enjoyed this a lot.
StaiNe snowed in
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Thoughts?
This is a very well thought out poetry form. I enjoyed it, and it sweet in that your memories are intense and kind. Thanks you for sharing and good use of the prompt provided.
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This is such a powerful emotionally charged subject, I feel like it would be scary to wade these waters but this is very well done. "Don't ring" Impactful and well edited. Thank you for sharing and talking about a subject that is very much needed, I hope this helped someone.
It's often said you get back what you put into something and I think that sums up this straightforward poem. I enjoyed this, simple imagery and not over used in difficult words. Thank you for sharing.
It can be difficult to write an interesting poem with prompt words, but no here for I enjoyed this story like poem, and could see the change in direction at the end. Sweet and somewhat romantic. Well edited I have no suggestions for improvement. Thanks!
What a cute well written children poem, creative even restricted to a prompt. I enjoyed it. The rhyme, the innocence I saw. You have a wonderful talent for poetry, and this doesn't disappoint. No errors, my Thanks!
Let me say I think this is a very cute poem, such a nice change from road rage and venting stuck in traffic or such. Reminds me of my phone calls with my older sister, takes her over a hour drive to make a 15 minute walk. Thank for sharing I enjoyed it a lot.
I hope it helped you shed some of your perceptions just as the reader is to do. Helped you deal with what seems a rough hand for lack of a better word. It's sad to read and well edited I see no punctuation errors. Thank you for sharing and again I hope it helped venting.
Well written from the prompt provided. I could picture the pit, the intense anger, all the spooky, gory intent. The predator almost seems like a wild animal with intellengent thoughts.
Long but enjoyable, edited completely. Thank you for sharing. StaiNe snowed in
Small poem, but quite impactful. I found myself totally relating, thinking of the two flights of stairs at work, and the flight at home. I suppose thoughts like this happen as we age, as we see those changes to ourselves and never really sure if it just age of something else. Thought proactive.
Misleading, almost suggestive than totally relatable. Well done. I would never think to write about such an experience but have my own memories of my own. To display it from the eyes of the newborn is so well done! Thanks for sharing with me.
Delightful story, all that misleading was great, I really though I was reading a spooky story, the house, the wheat field, being chased, all that fear, the cat watching it all unfold, and all for a bath. So entertaining Thanks!!!! No suggestions, I enjoyed this a lot.
What a pleasant well thought out poem. I agree we all see age differently, and know that as long as we use it and move it we keep both. I found myself smiling reading this and enjoyed it very much, quite heartwarming. My My! Thank you for sharing.
This sounds like a happy cat, and I found myself relating a lot as my own cat is very such similar as I feel this sums many vats, not to step on your Mamabear in any way. I'm sorry.
I see no errors, and enjoyed it for it feeling of adornment. I have a cat myself and he a senior now, so this is sad in knowing the lost. My cat was a gift to my youngest son who is no longer here, so he's very special to me.
Thank you for sharing and I hope it helped you you. StaiNe snowed in
Milo
Simple, no flashy imagery, just two people trapped in an elevator. I enjoyed it, and appreciated the larger font size very much. Thanks for sharing a glimpse of romanc, or hormones.
Easy to read, not a easy subject. I could see the lady with the wonderful smile, and can feel the young age as you relate the memory of the cleaning lady. Thank you for sharing, I see no errors, and have no comment to change this in any way.
Thanks for sharing. When we are broken so much goes through our heads its sometimes very hard to express. This is well done, shows the confusion, the guilt, the loneliness, the anger. so much. I felt included and that my own experiences are similar. Unloading. Broken is used a lot but doesn't lack it which is nice. No suggestions to change this. Again Thanks for sharing, I hope it helped you in some way.
Thanks for sharing, It reminded me of a relationship I tried but somehow wasn't invested. Using the same line each stanza is a neat touch and kind of emphases the feelings of confusion and fear. I have no suggestions, again Thanks!!!
Houseflies are fairies. I'll never forget that. Thank you for always using a larger font size, it truly makes reading easier. A annoyed fairy giving a rather unimagine interview, at first I thought Interview with a vampire but nope not even close. Well edited, I have no suggestions, and as always I very so enjoyed, especially being left with that thought of houseflies. I think I'm becoming bias you write stories so well.
Last weekend before the big four hours. This is a neat poem. To be honest not my cup of team but is interesting in it's quite gallant imagery no doubt. Not overbearing. Thanks for sharing.
This is a well done story about a notebook that stays completely away from media troupes currently out and about. Not too long. I could see the fear on henry face, the uncertainty, hear the cat yowl. Honestly well done!
Thanks!
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I found myself totally relating, thinking of the two flights of stairs at work, and the flight at home. I suppose thoughts like this happen as we age, as we see those changes to ourselves and never really sure if it just age of something else. Thought proactive.
Thank you for always using a larger font size, it truly makes reading easier. A annoyed fairy giving a rather unimagine interview, at first I thought Interview with a vampire but nope not even close. Well edited, I have no suggestions, and as always I very so enjoyed, especially being left with that thought of houseflies. I think I'm becoming bias you write stories so well.