I'd like to believe that as parents we do the best we can by that we have to try no excuse our parenting. I have similar memories, Sunday school, neighbors telling me where I was going cause I'm not baptized, my sister and I skipping school to watch our little sister cause our mother was MIA, I could go on and on. This all said though I think we all need to be happy and our personal choices are ours.
Perhaps some cosmetic editing to make it easier to read, indenting. Thank you for sharing I hope it helped.
Thanks for sharing. When we are broken so much goes through our heads its sometimes very hard to express. This is well done, shows the confusion, the guilt, the loneliness, the anger. so much. I felt included and that my own experiences are similar. Unloading. Broken is used a lot but doesn't lack it which is nice. No suggestions to change this. Again Thanks for sharing, I hope it helped you in some way.
Thanks for sharing, It reminded me of a relationship I tried but somehow wasn't invested. Using the same line each stanza is a neat touch and kind of emphases the feelings of confusion and fear. I have no suggestions, again Thanks!!!
Houseflies are fairies. I'll never forget that. Thank you for always using a larger font size, it truly makes reading easier. A annoyed fairy giving a rather unimagine interview, at first I thought Interview with a vampire but nope not even close. Well edited, I have no suggestions, and as always I very so enjoyed, especially being left with that thought of houseflies. I think I'm becoming bias you write stories so well.
Last weekend before the big four hours. This is a neat poem. To be honest not my cup of team but is interesting in it's quite gallant imagery no doubt. Not overbearing. Thanks for sharing.
This is a well done story about a notebook that stays completely away from media troupes currently out and about. Not too long. I could see the fear on henry face, the uncertainty, hear the cat yowl. Honestly well done!
I enjoyed this, the image of the used water, mean to be used was a neat touch to this almost fantasy like poem. I suspect many don't have such memories, and times that many say were better. Thank you for sharing, and I have nothing to suggest.
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This kind of reminds me of The Midnight Meat Train is some ways. I always enjoy a dark, full of feelings poem. I see no errors and honestly have no helpful suggestions to improve this. Thank you.
Like a scarecrow in Wizard of Oz.. OHH my. This as all I have read is great, so easy to get onboard. I truly thought we were going somewhere else so suggestive at the first and the high rating. Harold enough to feel the creepy, the little girl with the pink ribbon, I'm sure I could see her cry, and last but not least the bus driver taking a heart attack. So much in this flash fiction. Just a great smooth read. Thank you so much as I said before just so well done!
Heartbreak is a changing emotion truly, and no come out unscathed in some way. I'll be honest I do not know who Stephen Gunn is, but this is good and easy to read. Thanks for sharing I always enjoy a walk.
Neat prose. Quiet fire? I don't think I understood your intent, but felt the somber stillness of a flame. An idea? I really do like this. Thanks I hope the quiet fire continues deep within far from your heart but always warming.
The description doesn't do this fantastic creepy poem justice. Wow! The description is spot on with the flow. Leading the way gently seems to be so easy for you, I enjoyed this too much! I can see the alleys, the creepy head and oh! the ending, karma indeed. I can't say there's a thing wrong with this, I'm so entertained.
Thank you so much for the creepy original idea poem. I'm smiling from ear to ear.
A tribute type poem about the thankfulness of finding faith and sharing the fact that you have. I respect that. Fear and feeling alone isn't pleasant, and being able to share totally unafraid and asking for guidance and understanding in powerful for some. It's well edited and one sided, but that being said it what makes some what educational. Thank you for sharing.
I liked this, though I had to read it a few times as the great ending caught me up. A very descriptive prose of a past time when we lived with more struggles and more appreciation. I could see the cat, the fire, hear the rain, imagine the smells of the fire the sound of the ticking clock, there is a lot going on here and the ending just yanks all that and put the reader on their bum. This is very good and I have no suggestions, like I said a lot described. Thanks!
What a delightful children's poem, about a Koala with allergies. Easy to follow and simple rhymed. Kind hearted, yet educational in a way. Kind of reminded me of family knitting mittens and socks, that warm settling feeling. No suggestions. Thanks!
Congratulations on your placing for this old but well written story like prose, about mice from their point of view, giving some empathy to an animal not often thought of, or sought to learn about in a positive way. The suspense of the old owl in it almost tactile mood. All in all great. Thank you for sharing and enjoy your day.
Neat small story about despair, I don;t know the reference in the description. I think though this is prose at least, or free form poem. It just bare no imagery, no characters. The repetition would make great stanzas. I'll show you.Your first paragraph as a beginning poem.
A light tapping on the door of despair.
She knocked, and I let her in.
She sat silently for a while, saying nothing.
The room began to feel dingy and dirty.
The longer she stayed, the more it felt as though smoke had filled my lungs.
Basically putting each sentence on its own line. Makes it easier to read, I don't think its a story. Thanks for sharing and I hope I was helpful as that was my intent. Good day!
Very well done. arboreal creates a world of mystery and beginnings and endings. You capture that essence in small glimpse of gracious imagery. I enjoy the woods, during the day songful, and scents, at night dark, creepy and misleading.
I don't have any suggestions to improve or change this but feel it could be perhaps another stanza or two. Again Thanks for the poem. CandyStaiNeCane
Not for the weak stomach people indeed. I got a lot of Jeffery imagery happening in my small head, but super entertained, despite a small headache. To have a friend like this, and be so young, to know the adults are worse, well it just a great story. I'll admit I usually don't go this brutal but you lead your readers so gently I couldn't help myself.
At first I kinda had a thought what breed? but realized fast a small dog for sure, The ending is superb, when I think I'm not and there's more and a cliffhanger. You have a great talent for flash fiction and stories in general. Being able to create such yucky imagery and feel for Chuck is creative on so many levels. I will be back again, your just too good.
What an interesting story based around Santa Claus, but without all the commercialisation that's usually done. My poor attention span super duper enjoyed this. Crazy easy reading, with no fluff and mixed imagery. Your stuff is fast becoming my fav, so easy, entertaining, flash fiction, in a size my poor vision can see.
Thanks very much, little me has no suggestions, but am impressed.
Very cute, easy to follow and nice rhyme. Teddy the dog? I could imagine this quite clearly and brought me a smile. Little kids and their imaginations. It's a sweet look playing a game, instead of trembling under the blanket. I don't have any suggestions, honestly warm hearted. Thanks for sharing.
I nailed it, 10/10. I'm a fall baby and it's my favorite time of year. Part for spooky season, but the rest all the great things about fall. Easy not over complicated questions, and edited great. Thanks! I appreciate that it takes time to create activities for others, "crackle"
I enjoyed, have a good one.
Thanks! Another word search, a fun few minutes to relax, enjoy my coffee and think about what I'm thankful for. This took me longer than I'd care to admit, but as word search are one of my favorite things this is spot on entertaining.
Presentation great!
Fun Factor Sweet!
All in All superb!
Kudos! and again thank you for taking the time for a fun activity.
Found this on my newsfeed, and although spooky season is over I enjoy word searches I couldn't pass up. I was multi tasking so it took me about fifteen minutes, and I enjoy poetry but form scare me so there were some I never heard of.
Not flashy, just simple and fun! Thank you for creating and enjoy your day!
Lyrics are tricky, cause they're basically poetry put to music, and it difficult to feel that beat sometimes. This is well written, Grunge. Hard, dark, angry in your face imagery. So angry. I don't see any punctuation errors, and grunge is one of my favorite genre of music, Godsmack is very good, but perhaps..
We’re all of us twisting
We’re all of us resisting
We’re all of us insisting
Hates gone too far
Yeah, hates gone too far
Blood-stained tradition’s, built with our dead
Believe me, life has no comparison
It can’t be replaced
Upon hate, turn, walking away
We are all twisting
We are all resisting
We are all insisting
The hate has gone too far
Yeah!
The hate is too far
Blood-stained tradition, built on our dead
Can't be replaced
Just hate, indifference, turning away
That's what changes I'd make, more tense change to put the reader right in the moment, instead of being something that happened. I did enjoy this, and thanks for shearing with me, I hope I was helpful as that was my only intent. have a good day.
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When we are broken so much goes through our heads its sometimes very hard to express. This is well done, shows the confusion, the guilt, the loneliness, the anger. so much. I felt included and that my own experiences are similar. Unloading. Broken is used a lot but doesn't lack it which is nice. No suggestions to change this. Again Thanks for sharing, I hope it helped you in some way.
Thank you for always using a larger font size, it truly makes reading easier. A annoyed fairy giving a rather unimagine interview, at first I thought Interview with a vampire but nope not even close. Well edited, I have no suggestions, and as always I very so enjoyed, especially being left with that thought of houseflies. I think I'm becoming bias you write stories so well.
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