Morning, Prem Junior Random Review link brought me.
This is read as a statement more than a poem I find, the repeat of Well seems to be unconcerned, lack of self love. Sad feelings that someone would feel this way, and grief can do things that no one can understand unless they experience death too, and that doesn't make their ability to live with that the same as someone else. I hope this helped unburden a little and I'm sure it will smack some others too. Almost makes me tear up, such a brittle statement. No suggestions beyond presentation.
Hermit, a story in a prose. Well done, I read it twice and the indecision, the self satisfaction, of knowing the right choice is being made and its rewarding to be a hermit. Quite a different subject matter for me, but well written, not too long, or overcompensated with big unique words. Thanks! No suggestions, praise.
So true why ask. I can relate, and think many do. Some very unique words, I had to look one up. I wonder sometimes what is expressed in this prose. My only suggestion is presentation. Thank you for sharing what many are thinking when asked : how are you.
Well written, simple yet expressive without a lot of imagery. Understood, the happy, the passing of time, get a good feel despite the lack of feelings unburden. I was have someone, and yeah now no, but I credit some of best qualities to him and the eighteen years we spend together so I get it, that despite what went downhill, warmth remains.
Foot prints in the sand, washed by the indecision of the ocean, always swaying my memories, I got this kind of vibe from your very well written poem. So easy to read and to relate to, to get inspired with. I don't see any errors, worth suggesting an edit, and really enjoyable even if a little downer.
Thanks staiNed
I enjoyed this, it is super creative, and honestly. Love in a wonderful way that it brings pain.I suggest though I'm sure it your intent, enlarging the poem, it's very hard to see, and there is a few spelling errors. I think I see cupid with his arrow in a new light.
Kindly, Thanks!
Very well made, and edited, I Can't say I totally I understood, but don't see any errors. Kind of sad read, forgetting, scared, a memory, a drive, old and alone. Like going a drive but remembering it. Again, Thanks!
A memory from the age of three, that is amazing I think, I can only back to around eight years old. It was so different back then, I don't see any errors and it's been well edited. Thank you for sharing, and enjoy your day.
Good Morning, Amethyst Angel 💐 Random Review link brought me, and I find a children's poem, not something I usually read but enjoyed the gentle subject momma frog, the ease of her life, the feelings of being a happy mom. Thank you no suggestion, great some young folk.
Limericks, all with the familiar rhyme, and historical themes. Somewhat funny, yet serious but creating a smile. I have never tried this form, it seems to light humored for me. I seem no errors, and enjoyed both. Thank you.
A dark poem shining bright in my dark places, lures me out, and this is moody in its intent, and gives imagery of them being caged, freed, misunderstood, but to be feared all the same. The added clarification on some word choices was a nice added touch too.
What a creative way you see your creative muse as dark entities, smothering and loving in the ideas they give, well edited, I have no suggestions to change it, and honestly I enjoyed. Thank you.
A fun read and well done with the word restrictions in place, there a lot of feeling in this, and almost a glimpse of anger. No suggestions to change this, the stanzas are short and intense. Thanks for sharing.
Not overdone is imagery, and spot on with how one would feel freshy wounded, kind of reminds me of a song I enjoy. It's hard to be broken, and every day you learn to live cracked and loosely glued together. Thank you for sharing.
Politics. eek, Temper inflaming subject, almost taboo to bring it up. Well written, and the point is passed on indeed. I have my thoughts as everyone does, It is over and over, nothing truly changes, might this time though since angry rules now. Thanks!
Might I say right out the gate. What a unique username. This is creative, yet simple is its imagery but tells more than it says. The soul seen through a candle, and soulless a wick that feeds the fire. The lack of captivation it nice as I not a romantic. Is the punctuation or lack or it intentional? If you centered it, it would do wonders for presentation. Thank you for sharing, I enjoy poetry and yours was a delight.
A snowy morning and bang! a love poem, not very romantic, but a last feelings of what one would think of themselves, and how their feelings survive and have the right to love the other. Not the classic troupe, but more of a darker journey with a lighted tunnel end. Thank you for sharing.
Morning, Tim Chiu Random Review brought me and delightful a love poem so early in my day. Great imagery, and that passes to feel, heartwarming and a bit sensual. Relationship can all consuming whether in fuzzy, blind struck sunlight or regretful chatter. The former here, and a pleasant to read with my coffee.
No suggestion beyond cosmetic, and well edited. Thank you for sharing way back in 2017.
Easter, very spiritual and has an old historical feel to, I say it's the form I don't know it. Some fantastic prose, wow! Thank you for sharing, I have no suggestions.
Good afternoon, Joy Random review link brought me and how delightful. Two retired aged men fight for the remote, one of a kind in subject, and a neat form to boot.
So well written, I could see these men in all their aged glory, the anger, the shaking fist, the exchange of bad words and a smack in the face with the remote. No suggestion as I struggle with forms and this seems spot on.
What a delightful find random review has found for me.
"in silence there is horror yet also: beauty" I got shivers. This is wonderful right up bright and blinding in my dark place. It's different as not really a gothic poem but more an explanation of horror of silence and being alone, the fear of the mind. Very much of mental health and the shadow cast by that light that casts shadows in our darkest corners, holding hand with the horror that cares. No suggestion this is well written and very my enjoyment. Enjoy your day and again Thanks!
Random Review link brought me and I enjoyed this long prose, train, feelings quite a jump from the start to the end, interesting, a little hard to understand so two reads.
Creative and I had a flash of a very sad manga I read once, involving a train. No suggestions as this is well edited, kind of like going down a rabbit hole. Thanks!
Hope is for dreamers and realists that know what lays waiting in the dark if the bright spot of hope goes out. Despite what happens we will always hope, though is may not feel like. Simple, well written, some questions we have all asked ourselves and the thought on those questions. This is able to stir up but not unbalance anyone with trauma. Well edited and easy to understand. Thank you.
Good Day, Tim Chiu Random Review Link has gone way back..
Tells of winning, though what was won a mystery, the thrill, the mindset, how fleeting that moment can be. Enjoyable. Some very good prose and had me rereading a few lines. Thank you for sharing, and no suggestions to change this. Kudos!
WOW! What a crazy well written poem. I enjoyed the "story" to it, and could imagine the feelings tangled in it's stanza that are quite long. Great rhyme, to say so much, I think this is superb. No suggestions, gosh nope, and Thank you so much.
Early I know. Relationships are hard and always takes two to make or break them, this poem reminds me of someone and I can relate to the shutting down, the feeling of being blocked. Complicated for sure.
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it nice as I not a romantic. Is the punctuation or lack or it intentional? If you centered it, it would do wonders for presentation. Thank you for sharing, I enjoy poetry and yours was a delight.
