July 19, 2007
Writing.com author/poet, JamdownJenny (love the pen name, BTW) ...
offers ODE TO 9/11 on Auto Rewards, page 3.
Wow, when taken as a whole like this and placed inside small (brief) confides of poetry form, readers may or may not agree that our memory of this day is both still very much alive and horrified.
Yet, to declare of the worst US disaster/ catastrophe to hit the Eastern Seaboard and not be from a natural cause such as a hurricane, dear, dear, Jenny ...
Maybe the line "What a mess ... is simply in need of a tad of re-writing/ re-wording at "mess." You decide.
Thanks for posting. Keep up all the good works offered in your poetry.
Cordially, TEFF
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With your far-out fantasy/ piece one does see the comparisons in setting, of course.
As a terrible disater in our times now makes it into fiction we can only but wonder as the character does --- when will the nightmare end.
A strong suggestion as a story plotter, my desk to yours.
For your recently posted work, THE TWIN TOWERS ....
+++++ MAYBE +++++ Keep the second tower up and then you have a unique story which can then stand apart from the initial worst day in modern times in USA history.
This suggestion is certainly up to you, Croaton.
Best in all future writing endeavors, my friend.
Cordially, TEFF
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Especially want to convey to you how wonderfully witty your FRED DIARIES are.
Every morning waking up to another one is pure heaven at the Teffom Household.
This morning, I fear that the tabby, Jack is beside himself with addiction like myself. He is wont to emulate Fred's antics but also is one to spin in the office chair and always the hunter he carried rabbits into the house in the past. Voles, moles we no longer have any trouble with around the rental havens.
I see your life is a happy one with your crazy companion, dear Fred. Of this fine story, you must know I seriously re-read it sometimes for TEFF adores the laughter which your lines produce.
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Well, best for now and Happy Fourth of July. Did the blog thing this morning on "MOFFETT FILES TAKE FIVE"
Using the word blog === reminds me your very endearing series of the MY 2002 DIARY ENTRIES ABOUT FRED shows a superb type of blog style. Important for bloggers and journals lest we forget when to add in the personal side of ourselves and those we love so well.
Ms Buxton --- Thanks so much for posting these for all the world to read and enjoy.
Cordially, TEFF
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Off to another good start with the saga of our guy, the lovable, Fred the cat, J A Buxton offers ----->
MY 2000 DIARY ENTRIES ABOUT FRED.
With each segment, Ms Buxton tells all about the life of bird feeders, rainy days, neighboring dogs and before you know it it's over and one can't imagine life without old Freddie with this spontaneously quick and wonderful read.
The Diaries are both fun to fathom and from the personal abode descriptions, Teff felt at home in this establishment.
Hey, Judity what are we feeding Fred this morning? Shall I bring the catfood?
How very well you present in diary form the life with your cat, Fred.
I already love Fred and of course I have never met him.
This reminds me of almost seven years ago when I moved into a large apartment and woke up to get a peanut butter sandwich in the kitchen.
It was a first floor castle with a stone wall kitchen and trees that came to the house.
Whereas, Fred likes to play with your phone, JA, our Jack likes to hide in high places. That night, I took this tabby cat to be a racoon on top of the fridge.
Talk about "grey hairs." The Doberman, Beelzebub in MAINE DAWG on "Invalid Item" is yet another pesky pet.
Your new work, posted this morning at 6:51 W.C time is well worth the look see for essayists on site.
Migration is a topic tackled by myself and my daughter for a science class over a decade ago. Well, it took over 32 hours to complete as perhops you are aware how parents mold themselves to science projects per se, Brandie.
A very interested topic. Of course, the common theme is birds fly south to escape winter. On the way S. migrating flocks are visible. Where we live now below the New England states it is always a surprise when Junco arrive which usually spells the end of winter.
Myself is a new member of the www.writing.com A NO. One writing community.
Welcome Myself.
You see, Myself, sometimes my reviews (revs) contain my own self in third person while trying to spurn the I in review compostition.
Therefore, TEFF says to anyone reading this public rev on PR (Public Reviews) that the poem, DECISIONS captures quite the rhythm one expects in a poem.
Good cadence shown.
Hah! Just starting out and a five star grade to boot. So way to go, Myself, with a hardy welcome to this site.
Must tell you that here: in THE TOWN AND COUNTRY MOUSE REDUX a rathere startling new take ensues which really is impressive.
LOVE the line "the exclusive college where Jennifer majored in snobbery ..."
LOVE: How everything else about this piece just makes this flash fiction blend together very well .... while showing the nuances of city life vs country life in this fast paced, updated format.
"Oh, my goodness, Bella. You admitted in your intro, that you posted: TEST to see if you could post, said so in the entry and despite all your efforts got a one star for the daring novel efforts you made in good faith. Bella, you posted, you achieved, can do so again. And listen to this honey child ... we're like Dr. Frazer Krane ... we're out here and of your future writing be it poetry or short story or article or letter ... 'we're listening.'" 6/18/07 /// T.Teffom
"From the portfolio and desk of new member, Whiteangel comes the romantic poem, UNSPOKEN WORDS. Via a "chance" meeting a story ensues where verses add to summary of this romantic genre. Glad to see this tale of a happy go-lucky relationship. Whiteangel, a fond welcome to www.writing.com. Enjoy the site." 6/18/07 /// T.Teffom
"Noting with utter dismay that one www.writing.com member rated this essay a 2.5 star ... let's hope to set the record straight, SINCERELY YOURS. The item you post: WARM SMILE, LOVING EYES is okay when one considers that it tells a story in flash fiction style which with a minumum word count is far from always an easy task. Also that the item in question makes sense and has fine grammar and syntax adhered to thoughout. And it is from the heart. So, best luck in all future writing endeavors, dear author and please enjoy the site with a huge welcome to W.C dear author." 6/18/07 /// T.Teffom
"CRIMSON TRAIL is a poem by Malambo featured on www.writing.com. The poem centers on exactly what the author writes of in the intro. Namely: The African ritual of "female circumscion." Here, Malamob handles a difficult situation in startling verse." 6/18/07 /// T.Teffom
June 18, 2007
In case PRP is listening the date is at the top to easily recognize time-wise any future replies from authors.
Also, since Teff refers to herself in third person sometimes this is a trick of journalism which is never about I for editorials, reporting or review writing unless a tie-in is mentioned. No worry, right? Certainly of little consequence, however simply meant to define for those who write they are in the dark re: A Teff Rev.
Okay, sorry, Poetrygirl. Love your pen name. It's fabulous.
Your poem NEVER REALLY WHOLE does contain the ups and downs of the break up or behind the scenes and naturally you must relish in the fact that you are not alone as this happens to many beside yourself.
Putting the feelings into a poem presentation is a good first step and sincerely hope all is well as time goes by. Also, plenty of fish in the sea is a great philosophy to live by, right?
Welcome to www.writing.com and surely hope you enjoy navigation on this widely varied site.
Re: your fine poem TUCKER '48 AND ONE MAY NOTE THAT USING CAPS FOR TITLES OVER THE YEARS HAS ALSO LENT ITSELF TO ALLOWING FOR THE CLICK ON FOR THE TITLE AND ITEM WITHOUT THE exact ID.
Sorry, I digress only seconds before checking to see the lists on Public REV page (PRP) according to stats. You see, sadly enough after 8 rev badges, Teff must have had a (unfortunately -a minor) misdemeanor once back in 2004 and never gets going too high up the list. Anyways ... back to TUCKER '48 ...
This poem makes this revver want to see one at either a museum but don't imagine there's too many at classic car shows featuring A TUCKER '48.
However, did point out once to a child relation the sizes of the V-8 engines and the fact that as teens we were driving these tanks with those antique steering wheels as wide as the Mississippi River. You know what I mean, Brandon?
Anyway have a wonderful summer. And know factually at best, I love this poem.
Cordialy, TEFF
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