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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)

May 21, 2007

Cruising around in my automobile ... in a few ... but right now cruising around on Auto Rewards.

Find, Georgiawill with SAMURAI'S HARA KIRI, at first lost, now I see.

The belief behind the symbol of a very special Haiku.

Thanks, dear poet. Keep 'em coming and we'll keep reading.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)

May 21, 2007

Poet, Geogiawill sure has a way with selecting the perfect words.

The ocean side comes alive with this Haiku, one of her best.

Thanks, Georgiawill. Have a great week.

Cordially, TEFFY ... tick tick tick ... waiting for that special Vampire Genre Contest .... OH BOY!
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

May 21, 2007

My, my, rfgraham, you sure to pack a lot of information into these chapters.

Informative
Grammar fine
Detail worthy
Actions of everyday life --- interesting

When the first person narrator discovers she has a blood-kin brother on the way to visit her in her foster care family home, all things point to swell.

Best luck in all future writing endeavors, dear author.

Cordially, TEFFY

Waiting on a brand new Vampire Contest!!!
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Review of The Dream Machine  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)

May 20, 2007

Prier offers THE DREAM MACHINE and what a fine use of imagination here.

Dream Machine is almost as if one can go ... now why didn't I think of that?

When an elderly gent, Chancy has problems sleeping he sets the dream machine to "ocean waves."

But when something bothersome comes to mind ... well ...

Click this one, members, revvers, readers & fond WC guests. THE DREAM MACHINE is sure to please.

Cordially, TEFF CLOSING THE PORT FOR A SPATE.
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

May 20, 2007

OMAR, MY MAN -- GET A JOB
by JR fills both the brain and the sense of humor with sound advice, rendered father to son.

Guests, authors, poets, members ... trust me, you don't want to miss this one.

And JR, welcome to WC where hopefully your fine work and talent shall be well noted ... and read, my friend.

Cordially, TEFF

 TWIN GIRLS / POEMS about Gwin & May  (13+)
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)

May 18, 2007

Serenity, this is an uplifting ditty to be sure.

Faced with a few irksome things on my mind today. Like: where is a minute to get things done? And these lines seem to be words to set the mind adrift from daily cares.

WHAT DOES IT MEAN TO BE ME, a poem by Serenity, listed on Auto-rewards also tells this revver to handle the in & outs of life.

Fine advice.

Cordially, TEFF
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Review of Wayward Sheep  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)

May 15, 2007

 New member, Nickster offers WAYWARD SHEEP, a poem which is part philosophical and quite enjoyable.

Like the line addage:

"Can a blind man weep
Or a hero fall ..."

These words provide a sound & adequate opening.

Nickster: Welcome to WC, enjoy the day, the merry month of May and this site. Any questions, give me a buzz, Nick.

Cordially,
TEFFY

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Review of Ask her  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)

May 15, 2007

Bat Sheva's poem, ASK HER may offer a between the line's perspective at the word "reporters." Tired of the TV media are we, dear poet?

Ah well, a fun read and of "mushy bananas" these are splendid in banana cake.

Kidding aside, welcome to WC & nice to meet you and read your work, hon.

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Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)

May 15, 2007

 Good morning, Cindy:

Your poem THE SWEETEST THING is posted today in the READ-A-NEWBIE column.

Here, dear WC members, poets, novelists, and welcome guests, one can see a very romantic letter type poem from this author's pen which also tends to remind of a Valentine card.

Keep 'em coming, Cindy. You write & post these and someone shall review them for you, most probably.

Sorry, didn't mean to sound like an 8-Ball directive.

Welcome to WC, hope you enjoy your new found writer's nook, dear.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: ASR | (3.0)

May 14, 2007

Good morning, Georgiawill,

How sweet this ditty from the portfolio of Georgiawill shown on Auto-Rewards.

Soon we'll see and smell the roses as spring turns to summer and like your title: ROSE IN CRYSTAL VASE portrays, a mini-second of sweet appreciation and scent shall be available to all.

Cordially, TEFF
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.0)

May 3, 2007

Hello, good morning Public REV PAGE (PRP)

SINGING LEAVES lists this morning on Auto Rewards.

And what a neat grouping of a three-line tribute to those blooming canopies above woody treelines resposing in an utterly fine burst of Spring.

Nice poem, Geogiawill. Hope the day finds you Writing ON!

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
April 17, 2007

Good Morning, PuppyPooka,

Your poem THE GATHERING STORM contains a heap of info which relates to today's strife as regards the war/ occupation.

However, it also tries to sum the past of when many wars were fought to conquer or gain. Naturally, the former goes all the way back to English wars with Scotland, with France, other places too in the last fifty years. Kinda hard to fit it in a paragraph, isn't it?

Suppose these lines are a feeling of what is not the right way to look at the world. Yet, we must.

Back in the day, students had no choice we took history courses. Now Social Studies absorbs both georgraphy and economics. US History in the pulbic schools is not emphasized as it was for generations.

This poem seems to me to lack a course that is set. We can be self educated in history which comes through re: war. War and money as partners both must be addressed, spoken about, changed.

Anyway, today seldom does one encounter all the answers. Those too must be searched for, right? Plus, does one sense a reluctance to speak views sometimes? YES!

So this classic line is one to savor from the pen of Puppy Pooka in THE GATHERING STORM ===>

"The power of dollars turns night into day." Something to question, no doubt.

Again, got the digression going here and am afraid too much is read into your poem, sorry. But the piece makes one think and feel.


GATHERING STORM is a grand title.

Next: One suggestion. Break into more stanzas with this one. More partial breaks may afford a clear cut realization, perhaps.

Best, thanks for this one, dear author.

Cordially: TEFF

(Note this c-rite below, not much changes at a snail's pace these days, despite any hopes to the contrary.)

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

April 10, 2007

Hi Ann:

This is indeed a real come-uppence style poem or in this case as you so state: lyrics.

Again from the pen of WC poet laureate, Ann Ticipation the fuitlessness of war explored.

Maybe things will end soon as we've been hoping since March 2003. Namely: that they never went this long or this far.

Something else to think about is the tie in to nursing which Ann hands down to us from the private venue from time to time.

Army Nurses and others in the first nuclear war that was Vietnam really did do a lot to help stop that terrible conflict. At the time they wrote of their experiences in the field. Providing an eye-opener to folks in the states who were also at the time far removed from what was happening on the ground.

I do not think the two wars are that similar in the least. But poems like this one help one see the "tears" in the eyes of so very many who are indeed affected.

Thanks Ann!

Cordially, TEFF

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


April 10, 2007 TUESDAY

Wrymwoodm, good morning to you.

Please understand that your entire comedy/ satire piece got throughly read this morning. It is wonderful!

Morning is my writing/ reading warm up time which starts the day at the Teffom household ...

Along with some heavy viewing in the background. And hate to tell you this but Imus is being cancelled for two weeks for a disparaging remark --- he made last week. Two WEEKS! Oh, the humanity!

Anyways, LIVING THE TV-LIFE -- EASTSIDE
is one terrific read. I hate to tell you this, since your first person narrator gives up the tube, but the opening Soprano episode for their seventh season is absolutley great. In fact, caught that one Sunday night. Monday morning watched Carmela's Paris Trip twice!

Then since A & E offers Sopranos now -- digested two last night, when Tony's sister shot her husband --- Richie.

Gee whiz is that 5 Sopranos in two days? Well Masterpiece Theatre didn't offer an appealing substitute on On Demand, phooey. Sorry, I digress.

W -- A few to edit --- capital S on Soprano

(Where are the notes -- another car bombing --- excuse me, lost my head for on TV news for a second ---)

Oh, yes, correction @ ---
"The TV had too go .." == to go
Afterall == two words == after all

You'll not believe this, Wyrmwoodm, there's a cable truck outside. Is that the lousy doorbell?

Hey, I'm outa here --- checkbook to the ready.

Laaaaaaa ttttterrrrrrrr, PRP!

Cordially, TEFF

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Wow, cable is really expensive! I'm back, sorry for the delay. Please excuse my addiction, really got caught up in this tantalizing read.

ATTENTION: WC members, writers, viewers, revvers, poets and guests ---->

LIVING THE TV LIFE -- EASTSIDE is a stunningly funny MUST READ !!!

Steak & Garlic Contest Entry

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Review of JENNY Chapter One  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)

April 3, 2007 --- A special day here in Teffom-ville, a woods walk scheduled.

Good Morning, Mandy:

Deep concentration must have gone into this first chapter of JENNY.

Read with a perk your genre choice of "occult." Since trying one of those myself for THE STAKE & GARLIC CONTEST.

Sorry, I digress.

The item calls out plainly for paragraph breaks. These are used quite a bit here and most often on Auto Rewards where no doubt a piece is ready for review.

Due to your dialouge JENNY really needs those par breaks after the copy/paste.

A few minor corrections (Feel free to let me know and this rate can be changed, Mandy.)

First Par --- as they

junior high (?)

glancing --- hmmm

Eye movements deter from the reader what he/she already takes for granted as per character placement. Plus when you do a follow up edit, notice that glancing goes on an awfully lot of times.

has he approached -- again: use as he == "has he" won't show up in spell check.

LIKE: The transition from wild girl wannabes to serious talk with MOM. This tactic to end the chapter adds to the continuation aspect of the novella. Good ploy.

Cordially: TEFF

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Review of Guns and wands,  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

April 2, 2007

Thinking of Day Lilies today for no paticular reason ... ah yes ... Easter.

Anyways,, here's one groovy fan-fiction chapter from the pen of Bmao featured on Auto Rewards p. 3.

Dear author and WC members, authors, poets, monitors, revvers and welcome guests .. it is well this item's intro mentions a sum of Harry Potter stories. Even the un-initiated may appreciate insider info written here-in. Plot and character synopsis for another upcoming Harry Potter novel from the original author. Hmmm (?)

A magician in Winston Churchills fireplace, hmmm (?)

Yo, readers things don't get much better than this, right?

So, enjoy, only a click away.

Bmao, nice to meet you.

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.5)

April 2, 2007

Good Morning, Rebecca:

Might I comment on your wonderful to Do list for a writer who tweaks her writing time into an art form while jiggling the ever-popular task of motherhood into the foray of daily life.

Agree with all you write here, except for one important thing which all authors must consider from time to time.

THE BREAK FROM WRITING.

From the portfolio of a Helium member as well as a WC member/author this is an item to read.

 THE MOTHER-WRITER: TWO FULL TIME JOBS from author, Ms Rebecca ... do try to cadge the full-time break, sweetheart. Oh, how relaxing to avoid the PC screeen on scheduled R & R.

Also, once, due to the over-influence of "little people" known as relatives or kin, Teff accidentally came across a few Parenting Magazines in a recycling bin.

Okay, here there were authors, whom if they ever gave birth or raised said children one would be in complete shock of their startling offspring successes.

Namely: this is one (tie-in) market for moms who write. For right there I ran into an entire issue devoted to the self as adult mom. The suggestion was on for any mother of young children to make a spa of shampoo time.

Gee whiz when lots of us were raised the word spa had no meaning in our everyday worlds of budgets, school lunch money or school busses, right?

Now this one mag accepted an article where the poor kid in question was to be told, verbally words to the effect: This is a spa. Your shampoo is a beauty blessing beyond all belief. In other words, whatya mean you don't like being submerged in hot water? Please realize, Rebecca, I am stretching the reaction to a three-thousand word article of pure fluff.

First, Teff cried then laughed but never forgot the richy tie-in for the irksome affluence which may not be available in 70% of households coast to coast.

So, where's the realism?

Rebecca, hoping this topic/hint can be used in your writing, in your authorship. And I already think that YOU KNOW your subjects are right inside your living room.

God Bless all the kids.

Love, TEFFY

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Mar 24, 2007?


Handy Prophet writes on writng as: dreaming .... AGREE. HUGE PART OF PLOTTING. Thinking ... from Teff.

TEFF says agree to the article at: "A well written story is just a series of visions."

YES! Prophet, because of setting. A Teff motto go for the greatest, bestest of the research available for setting. Oh, please tell me about Montreal.

Plus dear writers, always add a plus to Handy Prohet's direct quote from WRITING ON WRITING. At least there's no sign of the "emeriti" "Reviewing Wisdom 1, 2, 3 GO!"  ed rev-menship plethora of corrections on grammar and such bothersome how to of punctuation in this one.

Not, here. Whew, glad to have a proverbial break.

However, the dreaded Teffski however ...
Strongly disagree, Phroph ...with, and this only after getting 3/4 thru the piece your final edit did show on Auto Rewards without the nec paragraph breaks most published authors of WC tend to correct for readers.

Readers such as myself stayed the course. With difficulty reading in print format which we're allowed as members. One print copy out here for personal use. Miss Teffy wears glasses; she reads in print format. Also, it is a common practice to politley ask a fellow member before printing out. I asked only once for a short story. Plus, of copy and paste ... well I would rather continue as I have since 2004 to write revs without c&p. I also would hope a fellow member would ask me before they c&P me. Ooops, I mean my stuff, my writing.

Suddenly, a million little female teffoms jump from zillions of pages. Whew, maybe the imagination has taken over again. Dreaming, thinking and who'd knows bupkos about mini c&p teffites. Oh, lord, that vision scares even me.

Sorry, I digresss, but nice to meet you, HP.

That said ... disagree with your: "One cannot write what they don't have knowledge of or experience."

Uh, oh, gore, horror, sci-fic, research journalism, fantasy ---- F-I-C-T-I-O-N, hon. ETC!

But this is definetly a very heartwarming read for readers who enjoy curling up on lawn chairs reading books. The writer to readers aspect comes out here with the little know establishment of writer facts that .......

oooooo hhhh ---eee, Handy Prophet reveals which only true writers know.

Q: So, there's a writer's secret here, Miss TEFF?

A --- A click away, mon amis.

Cordially, Mary

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Review of Station 7  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Mar 23, 2007

Hi B, Welcome to WC.

WHEN WE REACH HEAVEN is the five-star work which I knew would jump out at me today, sooner or later.

Love: "Upton Sinclair meat factory" == one of many classic nuances this writer -B pulls out of a hat with ease of the talented author.

The plot of greeting death on a train platform may come sooner or later for a gran, a teen and a businessman.

Wonderful!

Sooner than later maybe this is your MUST READ of the day, ladies and gents, readers, public rev buffs, reviewers or WC members .... and guests.

B! WHEN WE REACH HEAVEN certainly shows imagination mixed with cunning story-line.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

Mar 23, 2007

Hello J A, Nice read you supply with EAT HERE AND GET GAS. Naturally, the plot is in the title with this comical rendition. By stopping for a bite to eat at what we call in the Teffom fam, "a greasy spoon" establishment characters here end up with short rift for their efforts.

Well ... at least it sounds ... well

like they do. Ha ha.

Funny!

Cordially, TEFF

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

Mon, Mar 19, 2007, Feastday of St. Joseph.

Good morning Mr Clark.

SMOLDERING DREAMS CHAPTER 2 is a fine title for the episode in question.

One of the best phrases in this piece is as follows:

" ... his hopes for the future, Eire burning ... in the distance ..."

Sum: Treasa -- "her limp form" "long red hair"

Connell --- "wrapped in the woolen blanket"

"coins from the box"

All spell the Kelley's departure toward ________ (?)

Away from "the cabin" where lies a fallen

"officer" with "hazel-green eyes."

The Suggestion: Maybe lighten up on extra adjectives, althought the piece is very detailed in that respect.

If you're research continues for a publisher whom you indicate is onboard, suppose it's never to late to supply readers a date of the travails going down in the grand Mother Country.

Thanks, a fine read, to be sure.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

March 8, 2007

Wow, St. Patty's day is only 9 days away. Where does the time go, SakaToMe?

Anyway, here we see your highschool newspaper article ... TAKING THE MENTAL OUT OF FUNDAMENTALISM.

Say, if Teffers (That's ME!) wrote that well then ... oh the dreams of Hollywood beckon, wishfully taken, dear author.

Your article not only raises a difficult subject to a different plain it boosts all the article's asides and comparisons to another hilt, indeed.

Loved every single word of this one.

A typical MUST READ, which students of writing (ourselves) can learn from and emulate.

Extremely well done!

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

March 8, 2007

Efforts in both research, coupled with well thought out and informative lines surround this item, an essay from Landmamalls.

Great job is not enough for this one. Fine work, indeed.

Ever encounter divorce, ever march right into the snare? Then click and enter here, for DIVORCE A DETRIMENTAL SOCIAL PHENOMENON will leave the serious minded breathless.

Also, impressive is the author's biliography. Again, a huge dose of grand and way to go, dear author.

Cordially,

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Review of Rockabee  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

Mar 8, 2007

Imagine getting the date wrong half the day. Now that's relaxing in March. Oops, silly Teffy. In March there's talk of the "wee folk" of Irish lore.

With this one, ROCKABEE from author, Basilides arrives a tale to match the strong talk of fairies, the wonderful imaginative parallel world. A creation in Cong, where the writing in the words of Basilides also evokes a "scene blurred with my tears."

Bravo! Very, very well done and highly strewn with gladness, glimpses of Vee, the man on the road and all the lore one may need in the month of storytelling among the byroads of Ireland.

Thank YOU!

Cordially, TEFF

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)
Mar 8, 2007

Hi, there J, Very nice to see an old writing adventure from an old WC friend.

This is very well presented and makes sense. Except that if chapters are in the ongoing story, why are you using essay to describe the content?

Hey, silly Teffy, perhaps one should click on and find out:

More about Maine,

More about New England history

And more about the initial, original days when J A Buxton picks up her pen ////

All back in the day without "spell check."

Far out!

Best luck in all your novel publications, J A.

Cordially, TEFF

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