Sometimes we may as authors & readers ask ourselves about content found in brief flash fiction. Should we question same when the genre is appropriately marked?
Are we here to judge a story or comment on member's story deliverence ala grammar, style, form, syntax, punctuation, verbage etc?
Well, yes to all othe above from Teff's vantage at this desk. In the mind's eye of the theme currently explored by WC author, Shredded Rose is yet another take on a wily, unacceptable theme, undertaken by few in flash fiction.
Of the out-of-print hardcover: CALL THE DARKNESS LIGHT by Nancy Zaroulis ...
a young lass is orphaned, casting fate to the wind to work in Lowel, Mass's new industrial age. She also wears long dark "skirts," like "Lana."
In ALONE WITH LANA, Rose presents the fate of a young lady beguiled by men, a bishop, a father, a boy or boys with a car like "Elvis."
Hard to say if this one has the makings of going further ashore, but it does leave a reader holding the bag.
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Cordially, Teff reopening ---->
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How's it going? With your poem FOREVER LOVED: OF AN AUTISTIC CHILD the author seems to outline similarities for these children and a mother of same. Fluent poetic launguage peppers the poem.
The latter rings with a realistic flavor.
The author invites conversational sharing on this subject. Many times this is seen as being partially a diagnosis for border-line reserved children who inhabit the school system. The issue currently swims into the waters of an open book.
And, yes, it must be very hard to witness.
Also, Rebecca, hon, in the first lines you mention three words. These are?
Cordially,
TEFF
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"BLUE M&M from the port of Ellis is not alone, being one of those contest entries which crests the top of the charts. No, oh no."*
Blue M&M is a well crafted must read of high caliber.
When a man, a father takes on the erstwhile responsibilty, quirks arise yes. After his wife dies. But revenge, although unintentinal is exactly the way this one should end.
Fantastic!
Five star rate --- ten star material.
Thanks, Ellis.
Can't wait to see more of these horrors in fiction, yet believable mode.
Paddy, TEFF here, reeling in the skyline beside this river your characters are "drawn" to, where they sit, meet, greet, record the intro, the chance meeting of kin. Tried and true.
Especially glean the daylights of a great twist here near the end highlighted by the lad in the pram's baptized name. We've the lot of them.
Anyways, gliding down the slopes of the story then comes the "bride" and the well the other word, too, which starts with the second letter of the alpahbet that one. When just as a blooming Babs comes along, I thought Bridget. Silly me.
So from the other side of the pond, shiver me timbers something else graces the noggin of this revver, Paddy.
It is this, now, at long last an announcement on PRP while reading THE RIVER by askpaddy.
Sir, smooth, elegant, now Paddy I've attained respect for flash fiction by reading this.
TEFFOM MOFFETT's -------- (drum roll, please) Pick of the week?
THE RIVER by askPaddy.
Thanks, man.
Sincerely,
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Perhaps WC author, Thought Particle gives us the blow-by-blow which is for many a WC member at odds with WC addiction, a look see into our daily lives.
And dear Thought, find this reviewer guilty of the need to "linger."
Cordially,
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Say is that my toast burning ... phooey!
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Where there's a few editorials to sample, just to get your motor running, dear, dear Thought Particle. All readers welcome!
It is very pleasant to read your details regarding the setting which starts this writing. This seems the time in life to contemplate things for the first person narrator and the piece falls into place edging those emotions to the surface.
Good job!
Cordially,
TEFF
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Hey there Anne, Sincerely hope Labor Day finds you well with time to enjoy sunny skies in your home state.
With 7TH OF JULY ONE YEAR ALONG comes the reminder for this reviewer to catch up on the latest in the London Times and see if The Independent has anymore to say on this terrible tragedy.
Anne, you present the look back in sorrowful words and like the fallen towers of NY City, these awful things, explosions, loss lives of innocent by-standers ... the very least we can do is research them and the consequent investigations on the world wide web available in a theatre of eventts we really wish, looking back, would never have occurred.
Thanks for your poetic offering on the subject.
Cordially,
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As the poets indicates in this adroit relaxer from the norm ...
perhaps we're all in need of
" ... something nice to say."
As we approach another Anniversary for the 911 disaster which brought to the ground the Twin Towers, words of NY-ers such as WE shall never forget are not at even the slightest whim capitulatd to, or about in this poem.
"Siting by the pond" while sitting by the pond can be the title without the 9-11 sceanraio if not used in the piece at all.
One readers opinion, John.
TV offers natural disaster scenes from from Katrina 2005 this week.
We may as poets & authors prepare for more on the Sept 11, 2001 horror as best we can.
Well, words to ponder near river, ocean or pond.
And John, perhaps there are more poems in the muse which are forthcoming. This one misses the mark with title tie-in. Maybe just a little more, a few appropirate lines to stay on topic, methinks.
Best in all writing & poetical muse building endeavors, John.
Cordially TEFF wondering why.
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"Impossible, you (as reader) might scoff to write a poem about "the last tear." Not so, Book Section subscribers. For: enter Pandori with CRYING MY VOICE where a simple action ... "crying" is certainly given a new look with this in-depth, tightly crafted poem." Alabama Courier Times // T.Teffom // Book Section // 8/28
Steph B along with other members is really getting it on! One can see with this item, THE BEST OF THE REST that emphasis for this contest is not on short stories, novels or poems.
Instead, look here to post possible winners for other formats.
Uh, oh, in the intro, why not add blog, which still comes up on spell check BTW.
But that's okay, it's up to those who create dictionaries to recognize blog.
So here we go a-seeking, here we come a-finding and hopefully nominating to at least a half dozen impressive judges the best which is out there amongst us and surely already added to our WC favorites.
So members, authors, writers, artists, bloggers, photographers & welcome guests --- Why not check this one out.
"Writing.com, Author, Sandover Clegane is off and running on Auto Rewards, page 10 with a fast paced intro and prologue for the novel: THE TWINS OF LEGEND. Readers will find in this fantasy/ action/ aventure the setting of Vinculum where a young lord, Jarl faces his men, soldiers who advise he flee future danger in the age old tie in to King James II on his way to France. Well, maybe not but reader sympathy may fall infact with the qualms and trials of Jarl." Alabama Courier News Times/ Fictitious newsrag // T.Teffom // Book Section // 8/26
With MY DREAMS BROUGHT YOU BACK, the allusive unstated absence between the two characters sorts the readers willingness to accept reality from the words.
Where is the lost one in the dream?
When this reviewer wages a guess and answers that question, it seems worse than the usual break-up pattern often encountered in the genre pertaining to romantic poems.
So, advise y'all to click this one, authors, poets, reviwers, monitors, contest hosts and sore into dreamland as many of us often do.
Best in all future writing endeavors, Rachwrite82, and enjoy this site and the coming Autumn Season. Meanwhile, I'll do the same.
Imagine if you will a placemat for world arena speak, devoid of media mess-around. In other words, it is possible to set our minds away from tumultuous times and to hope.
Suppose dreams do come true? While we may wish dreams to come true, poet, yellow case, Ann Ticipation delivers haunting stanzas with the end of what passes for war amidst a change from poverty.
Evident === With Ann's refrain: "The bombs stop, and the guns are all gone" ....
To: "A richman gives everything to the poor."
Readers, myself included may come away with the knowledge of a Utopian era, we all from countries far and wide at one time strove to emulate.
Thanks, Ann. This one really rings. And rings loudly as an attention grabber in this dreamy fable form.
Maybe we'll see more from your port depiciting the actual opposite of spin.
Much poetry can always be directed at peace for all mankind, just a personal overview, of course.
Cordially,
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THE PERKY POLKA-DOTTED POODLE by WC author, Harry who's gifted in this one with a penchant for the Letter P's predelictions. Just one particular pleasant way to read this hilarious account.
Also a PUBLISHED work in the realm of the oh-so-popular Read-A-Loud form, a genre sure to please all ages.
All kidding aside (?) --- Never, do look here and laugh away.
Excellent job, well done, Harry, dear Harry.
Cordially,
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Aug 24, 2006 Lot's of times we hear these words on WC, "Can I help" or "Hope this helps."
The informative instruction data-start up for building a website, which this author is attempting for the first time with a good luck here and a good luck there also comes with the utmost respect for those of our members who already have a decent handle on all of the above re: web page creation.
Therefore may this review come with sincere thanks. Rating this a 5 star, but a tad worried if all will go well for my new premium membership which is a gift from my dear friend and co-conspiritor in assisting in encouragement for TEFF's writing endeavors. We'll see more about this on my blog. Very busy now with what almost seems like a foreign language to me. Namely: HTML.
So, learning as I go into the cyberspace world already conquered by the author of WEB PAGE ITEM DOCUMENTATION, namely the one and only, Story Master.
Thank you, old chap* for making this possible.
Best days ahead to you and yours as summer heads into fall.
Cordially,
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* meant as a term of respect.
AND --- Respect to all who are already fluent in this new world, of web page building.
PS --- As this is on PRP: any help from fellow authors/ WC members is most welcome.
A startling take on decay from the pen of poet/ newbie member, Presley ---
With the title word DECAY ---Outling something we tend to avoid or overlook. However, all microcosims in the macrcocosim or something like that. Coupled with WC's venue of freedom of speech for all writers allows readers the right to judge this one for themselves.
And here decay may also combine with hate. With the personal approach of "you" contained in the poem, usure how to describe or center in on this one.
Cordially,
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Of course, it says, honesty in revving. For once just had to follow the rules.
"Writing.com new member/ Reaching for a handful strikes a "bloody" cord of discontent with OPEN WOUND, C-rite,
(Oh my goodness) only yesterday.
Perhaps a litle more in way of explanation to render the poem toward the category of heartbreak if that is your aim. Many times we skip over entire reasons for our poems, but Hey that's okay for poetry is never meant to be an absolute.
Aug 20, 2006
Last one tonight ... reviews that is and glad to find newbie member, Memyselfandillinois has what it takes to pay a tribute to a loved one, share personals from life and entertain. All at the same time.
Marvelous pen name, don't see these everyday of the week --- andillinois.
So welcome aboard the great gravy train which schedules non-stop, the one and only WC. Enjoy the site and whenever the mood strikes ....
Please Write ON!
Cordially,
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Let's see? Who writes comedy so well. Well, new WC member Katlyn sure does.
Who likes comedy? We all love comedy. Right, guys?
So, readers, authors, newsletter monitors, contest hosts, find your way to WELCOME TO DQ, HOW CAN I HELP YOU? Where an elfin co-worker and half naked customers are sure to lurk.
Great ... And Katlynn, you had me @
"I come home from work and sometimes wonder if I am a dangerous person."
What a great hook sentence. Perfect through and through.
"RUDY'S CAN'T FAIL from WC, author, PuppyPooka displays a quick study in essay form, aka flash fiction wrting. When encountering the metal mechanics in this one, uh on the road(?) be ready, dear readers and fellow authors for the special, well done twist in the tale which the ending certainly provides with percolating percusssion." Alabama Courier News Times // Creosote// 8/16/06 // Tess Teffom
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Aug 15, 2006 Alabama Courier Times is a fictitous newspaper in Tefff's port. From the port of thebrunette comes the fiction piece .... ---------->
"GODDESS OF RUIN" shows readers from intro to ending how life can go completly from stable a "conventional relationship" to horrific details of husband killing wife. Quickly and instantiously with little remorse this first person narrative hinges, dear readers, on WC/ author, thebrunetts's less vulnerable "milkman." Perhaps the by-gone proffession of delivering milk at the door is not all that convenient. Judge for yourself only if you dare for this read from horror/scary genre on www.writing.com."
Alabama Courier Times/ Tess Teffom /8/15/6
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Your poem, MY DREAM ON A NYC PARK BENCH, posted this morning, Aug 15, reminds one of the closeness of the city, when surrounded by humanity in a sense.
It allows for something to think about whether in the country, by the sea or on those city impasses.
Thus the poem sticks with this reader and is highly commendable in my book.
Welcome to WC, hoping your thoughts on paper will stand you well and that we see more of your creative whimsies.
Cordially,
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PS --- I'll be looking forward to inviting you and all readers to visit my forum anytime.
And Eagle, ( forum - above) Where recently travelling is on the logo, but after all it is great to travel in the desk chair via the web. So come share some NYC with us, please.
Regain a stance when you read MELTING CLOCKS from the pen of Orion, copy-rite ... hold on a sec.
Copyrite today! Aug 14, 2006. Don't you just love to be the first one in, a reviewer's dream and find the poem that pratically shows how easy it is done.
Especially like: "Ticking the tock at what cost?"
Where with this line, even I might supply a hidden meaning, but hey better not.
Aug 13, 2006 The author of this poem, Saffron supplies in the intro info re: a trip to The Wounded Knee Memorial.
Of all the books kept from my private library when I moved recently, BURY MY HEART AT WOUNDED KNEE is one of them, Saffron.
Your poem, GHOST DANCING is indeed a tribute to what took place there, in a godforsaken part of the American landscape and experience.
And dear readers, reviewers, poets and all WC authors, Saffron realigns feelings of hope and despair of the Wounded Knee disaster quite well and in a sense fearlessly.
GHOST DANCING -- a telling poem, well worth the look see for all students of history, and American Lit.
Aug 4, 2006
Cool off with this one from AskPaddy in children's genre. Find for yourselves, dear readers, authors, reviewers, monitors and guests of WC, how to plot and deliver in the fairy tale style.
Especially like the alternative ending. Chosing the second one deviates from the norm.
Best in all your writing endeavors, dear author.
Cordially:
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One for you to join, Askpaddy, right up your alley? Could be.
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