March weather comes alive from the pen of Shll in RUNNING AGAINST THE WIND.
A lady takes a jog near the shore where a pelican looks on. Sounds simple but isn't. For this compostition is rife with those very special desriptive phrases, which as writers we should all use as often as we can.
Listen (13+) About making the world a better place. #1075978 by BluIze
The poetry (here) from this author indicates that the author has something to say. And says it well. Sometimes we must laud the incentive to speak out against the wrongs as we see them and the rights when we find them.
The poem rhymes well and is certainly emphatic and well crafted.
Probably what we used to dream about and many may still desire is contained here in essay format from the industrious pen of author/ Bentonar.
Teff takes the starry night stroll with you, devoid of stress, traffic. Readers can identify with the one place we do have a better world.
Where, these days --- maybe this author, Bentonar tells us is --- in our dreams.
Thanks, PERFECT WORLD comes off as a most helpful read. So let's all try it, maybe we'll like it.
Cordially,
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Greetings and salutations, Ocktune. Your item, ARTICLE was recommended to this reviewer, author, poet, journalist, forum hostess by Holland Kat who sings high praises for your comedic side.
Ladies & Gentlemen, readers, authors, guests click this one for a peculiar flare, by the way, which in Article, Octune takes to the hilt of grandeur describing the times, they be-a-chaging in the great USA.
One thing, doll, get with the caps as in C for Canada and then you've written a seven star work.
Marvelous! A Must READ, without a doubt.
Cordially, TEFF
Invalid Item This item number is not valid. #896696 by Not Available.
Hold onto your hats, members, guests, authors, poets, this windy March day for here comes T L Finch with a brand new folder of what he terms "rejects."
Not to this reviewer, Finch, not to Teff.
This poet once again in tip-top form as the "Civil War" rages and sadness fills the page with DRESSED IN GRAY.
Another Finch original? Another good poem? YOU BET!!! Click and see for yourselves at you earliest convenience.
Carry on, Finch, Baby. Let the good rhymes roll!
Cordially,
Teff
Invalid Item This item number is not valid. #952447 by Not Available.
Recently, discovering that if the date is posted on a rev, and a reply is received later on, this reviewer can think back, compare notes with the item in question. For the curious, a brief note on the date, March 9, 2006.
Gerardo (E) Hope you like my little poem about my boyfriend, Gerardo. He's a great guy! #1079681 by xLostxPoetx
is indeed brief. But that's okay. Once at my poetry group, oh a few years ago, we were astonished by one poet who read his four liners to a roaring room of laughter.
Dear Crative Mind: Just so you know, it was fun reviewing today. Many appreciative replies were in my mailbox this evening.
Your poem, LOVE COME BACK is well written, says in prayer form what you express and meets your intro.
Thinking to welcome you to WC where your writing is most enjoyable. Oh, a hint. Be sure to check out the many poetry contests here; these are listed under Contests in Item Jumps.
March 9, 2006
"Other things moved through time .... becoming furturistic." So writes author, Grivante in this essay on the occult, titled: THE HOUSE OF RIZ.
FANTASTIC comes to mind. However, a link is provided here, if readers wish to explore further. Look for "Medievel Land" and like Teff get hooked on this one and enter the paranormal.
ADDRESSED TO ALL -------->
And now writers, authors, members, guests, poets, we may assimilate that we have heard it all.
BUT not until we read:
The WDC Review (E) Sometimes you really get in to a review....and that is the joy of reviewing..... #1077395 by fyn
This is the name of the game for reviwers who burn the midnight oil, gather gift points, edit another's work, like to see their names in print. OR simply love to review! Like me.
So here's your chance. Don't miss this one.
Fyn! This is truly marvelous, fits the bill for writing.com. To a TEE!
Sometimes when TEFF revs in the morning early, there jumps on the table the seven lb. Webster Dictionary and companion Webster's New World Thesaurus, a recent library book sale item @ $1.00 hard cover, c-rite 1971, Prentice Hall Press.
For J A buxton's LAKE WICKABOAG, a tale of an author's childhood swimming and ice skating at a favorite recreation spot --- the word wonderful comes to mind.
Memorable === Unforgettable, eventful (with both the drownings, the teens showing off their diving skills)
Intersting === If Buxton didn't provide this georgraphical setting, it wouldn't get such raves.)
Significant? Answer Absolutely!
Next, let's try wonderful to describe the piece. Synonyms == Enjoyable, pleasing, marvelous ... Well, revvers, readers, raters, authors, poets, members, guests ... you get the picture.
Click this MUST READ at your earliest convenience and .... take the plunge into LAKE WICKABOAG, a reknown New England wonder.
ChrisNeedsanUpgrade offers the poem, OPEN AND TRUE on Auto Rewards page 9. This Feb copy-rite is dedicated in the intro "for anyone who writes or reviews."
Feeling bad about bad revs or puzzled by a complete thourough lack of editing for brief pieces or lengthy works or the direct opposite when every sentence is said to need a different slant and is edited beyond the term --- may compel the average or above average author to question their own common sense if low grades arrive in their e-mail / rev boxes.
HOWEVER, always examine the reviewer's credentials before taking yourself to the mat. Onto this rev for this poem, dear Chris -- although speaking to all (above) which can be expected on a talk format / review format entitled Public Review Forum. So it happens from time to time.
Much of the TEFF off-the-cuff advise comes from hints and time spent over stories at my keyboard. Other points of reference are garnished from background etc, or based on content of items themselves,or plain research online.
Be that as it may --- I love the sense of togetherness in OPEN AND TRUE, and adore the following lines ---
OF -- "Waiting for a response ...."
"If thankful, I'm thankful you're thankful ..." Now that's absolutely great, summing up review world A to Z.
Chris, darlin', Best in all your poetry endeavors as we head toward April, National Poetry Month! Well only 31 days away.
Cordially,
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Your poem SMILING is a fine little work with a large impact on this reader. In the middle of the morning and in the middle of this poem everything comes to right.
WHY? Because you have me ....
WHAT NOW? SMILING!!!
Thanks.
May the luck of the Irish greet you again next month and may that luck be ALL GOOD.
Uh-oh, Green Dragon, today you once more encounter not a snake in the grass or a dragon on the prowl, just me, humble reviewer. Sure I'm unlisted in credited reviewers, since constant complaints dub my revs 'confusing.'
However --- onto YOUR potentially good story, c-rite July 2005.
For HUNTER OF SOULS ... the pace stalls with the expected baby and is not brought back in this work-in-progress draft. Not yet, anyways.
Green Dragon wishes to thwart us all by stating grammar will be addressed later on. Uh? Okay.
Strongly suggest making use of: HODGES' HARBRACE HANDBOOK for comma slights. I hate the bloody buggers also. One way to get around them and here's your free hint. Shorter sentences.
Chronol: corrections ...
seamed is seemed
Make use of spell checkers.
Perhaps use car or truck instead of "vehickle" which comes off as highfaluting, me: high brow.
You're still recieving a four star here, Babe, for Teff is a kind lady and the story is really moving fast. This I like.
mans is man's
Which brings us up to the final bug-a-boo besides comma absentee-ism.
Of: " ... behind a rock ..."
Yes, granted, Dragon this is where I finally get a tad put off. While you detail many things in the story --- what about the size of the convenient rock?
Well, that is certainly up to you, your bag, and I laud you for posting this as is ....
Been there done that, too.
Best luck. Say have you abandoned this one?
Cordially,
TEFF'S MERIT BADGES (E) Home for VALID badges, contest wins & ribbons -- THANX TO ALL!
& IMAGE Collection ... #1047564 by April Sunday
Green the color of the woodsy setting brought to life in REIGN HEART EXTENDED by writing.com author, Finis. C-rite, Feb 20, clocking in at 18+kb, displayed on Auto Rewards where ===
Finis states: "Reviews needed."
So far so good. Teff likes the item. One disgruntlement is to address par breaks once more, sweetheart. Why? Well you had a few days, but the easier read and rush to post is best if they are all completed. AND this is a bummer to complete sometimes. However, no subtraction for a minor fault made by many, TEFF inclusive.
Onto the meat here ---
Folks do insist on the meat & potatoes rev, found that out on a poll once.
Anyways ---
Notes: hand written with cranberry juice (kidding) not into red ink, myself.
VERY GOOD hook par which sets the theme and pace for what readers may expect in this action/adventure tale.
Finis, we endeavor now to get you some views.
Your woods/ forest setting is near perfection. I can stand on the banks beneath the sloping trees in the forest beside these intimidated youths.
Meet: Tetcha, Laharem, Belomy --- listen to them outline their plans.
A war monster is detailed as legless --- well there's a stretch.
Enter VALGAM, regret that things you thought were so are not so, for in this fantasy world from author, Finis .... readers will be entertained.
Jeff, author on Writing.Com offers THE MID HILLS # 4 on the ever-popular Auto Rewards.
To tell the truth, Jeff, dear, Teff got halfway thru this story and had no clue of any serious direction. HOWEVER, this is okay for one can see this type of tale might capture your writer's imagination to set it up in this way ... thus unprepare the reader for the terrible ordeal to overcome the pony at Ruth's place.
This tale starts in an alley, progresses to conversation in a pub, then turns readers to the wall with a new local where horses (assumed) at pastrue.
Uh --- OKAY!
Viva freedom of press or genre I always say.
Here's a few hints not bordering on direction.
Q -- Is this a work in progress? If so state this at the end of the item, hon.
Next: In the first par one finds ..."he would have had to wait ..." SUGGEST shorten that or readers may turn aside for excessive verb use --- the Teffom verb sandwich syndrome.
At: ago ... perhaps go with: when he weilded power. (If it fits and you like the change.)
GREAT!!! " ... exiled to anonymity."
Good detail, a visual for the rat ... with --- "grey derelict ..." Shows the seedy side of vermin in general which is expected at this point.
he would --- try he'd (Cuts down for reader, sounds just as fine.)
remember me --- can drop "from before?"
Take a breath ... almost done, babycakes.
Confident. Thank you for this. It fits perfectly, is the exact right word and fits the prior sentence to a tee. Fine to use the one word sentence which is done around the globe. Not a mistake in the least. Bravo!
Love: "The city, well known for its rain and gloom." Affords an accurate setting tie-in. Very good phrase.
Of "scream unknown" You may need unfamiliar scream --- here.
Well, over and out. Best in all you do.
Four star === odd story but enjoyable to the end when readers receive the ultimate surprise.
Cordially,
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