Lew
What a refreshing poem. Very deep and emotional. Written in rhyming couplets, the emotion flows down the page with ease of rhythm and rhyme.
Have you considered breaking this up into two verses? About midway, there is a turn in thought and emotion. Where the nights get better, end the first verse with the lengthened couplet, ohhhhhh, better yet YES, JUST LIKE IN REAL LIFE, MY THOUGHTS INTERUPT EACH OTHER, end the first verse with the you/true rhyme, then add a space, enter the next couplet, as if a refrain, then start with the rest, to look like this:
Alone nothing mattered much
Yet longing for a gentle woman's touch
The days blurred one after another
Before we had each other
My life was self absorbed
Yet my nights were plain and bored
Nothing felt as it should
All of the bad would turn to good
The day I said I love you
I knew our love was true
The nights have been better and I sleep more
My daily life is filled with joy and no longer a bore
Every day and night it's you I see
And I know you're the only one for me
Your beauty is divine and grand
As I reach with out stretched hand
To hold you and squeeze you tight
And love you with all my might
I may be strong but don't be coy
You make me feel as but a boy
Our partnership is stronger than you or me
As we grow together you will see
My love for you shall never dim
As his love for her and hers for him
Some will tell you that punctuation is needed in poetry. Others will argue that it is not needed and makes no difference. Still, there will be those who say it is up to the particular poet and the poem itself. Personally I feel that the way the verses flow down the page, that punctuation is necessary for this piece, though without it, the message still comes through strond. For me, I use to write poetry without any punctuation. Somewhere down the line someone gave me sound advice and it made sense to me. The punctuation, or lack thereof in a poem, is the direction of the writer, guiding the reader. The punctuation is where the author wishes the reader to take a breath; to contemplate; to pause for dramatic effect. The lack of punctuation says the same thing, "Read in one breath, whether slow, or fast, down the page". To me, punctuation is direction from the author to the reader. Use it, or don't , to your heart's desire and don't let anyone persuade you otherwise. However, if using it, be consistent throughout the piece.
Overall this is a great poem of finding love. I could find nothing more to add for this piece aside from the aforementioned. A great love piece.
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