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A log of the magnificent journey across the vast sea of my imagination. |
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Created: March 21st, 2007 at 6:05pm
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A log of our magnificent journey.
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Here comes the rain,
delivering its boon
on sultry summer afternoon,
as clouds attempt to drown
the gaudy rooster weather vane,
while torrents cascade down
my window pane.
Notes on the Star Sevlin form of poetry ▼
Form: Star Sevlin
Star Sevlin is an invented shape poem that is supposed to form a star when centered on the page.
It is found in Pathways for the Poet by Viola Berg 1977 and was created by Lilliann Mathilda Svenson.
Number of Lines: 7, a heptastich
Rules: 4/6/8/6/8/6/4 syllables per line and centered on the page.
Note the rhyme scheme below.
Meter: iambic syllabic
Rhyme Scheme: abbcaca
Choices for the poets to make this week: Your poem can be about any topic.
Example:
First One in 50 Years (Star Sevlin)
I don’t know why
this form is called a star
and not Svenson’s. That’s how things are.
There isn’t much to find
Good samples are in short supply
Thus my blog was designed
lest old forms die.
© Lawrencealot – January 30, 2015 |
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The earth becomes a canvas for Mother Nature's art
when Heaven pours its bounty upon the ground
and then brushes flower garden with lots of sunshine,
'til sprouts of daffodils and pansies abound.
She paints my yard in vibrant green, gold, and magenta,
bejeweled with resplendent morning dew drops,
viewed with pleasure from my perch in back porch rocking chair
while savoring scrumptious cherry lollipops.
Notes on the Doha form of poetry ▼
I've fallen in love with far away exotic lands,
images of elephants and slow dark eyes
beckon me to write a romantic Hindi Doha,
join me in invoking soft exotic sighs.
~~Tinker
Hindi poetry is a descendant of Sanskrit and is found primarily in the North, West and Central India. Hindi is the official language of India. The region is known for its romantic poetry.
The Doha is a Hindi stanzaic form employing a rhyming couplet with long syllabic lines. The Doha is also used in Urdu verse. This form often steps away from the Hindi tradition of romantic verse and can be written as didactic verse or used in longer narrative verse.
The elements of the Doha are:
1. stanzaic, written in any number of couplets.
2. syllabic, each line is made up of 24 syllables and is paused by caesura at the end of the 13th syllable, making the line two phrases of 13 and 11 syllables. The couplet can be arranged as a quatrain breaking the line at the caesura.
3. rhymed, aa bb cc
4. commonly used for proverbs and/or for longer narratives or didactic poetry.
Vanquished in the Night
The starless night drops down into the silent forest,
small creatures scurry to secure safe haven.
Peerless predators with eyes accustom to the dark,
stalking weaker prey with guile until craven.
~~Judi Van Gorder |
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thunderclouds parade en masse
ambulances rush this way and that
sirens scream
cacophony overwhelms
preacher's sermon of hope
Notes on the Japanese Gogyohka form of poetry ▼
distanced from touching others
fingertips tap keyboard
emotions framed in five line gogyohka
no rhyme - no syllable count
styled to stroke the mind
~~Tinker
Gogyohka (五行歌), Japanese meaning five line poem, is just that, a five line poem without any other structural requirements. The form is basically a tanka without the maximum 31 syllable count. Wikipedia suggests the form has been used by Japanese poets as far back as 1910 but was not named until 1983 by poet Enta Kusakabe, another dates it 1957. The original poems were untitled like haiku and tanka however I am seeing titles on poems being called gogyohka.
The elements of the gogyohka are:
1. a pentastich, a five line poem.
2. meter at the discretion of the poet
3. composed of five phrases, one per line (phrases should be complete but related to the others and create a total picture)
4. unrhymed
5. untitled
6. composed with any subject or theme
Gogyohka #1
lights go low
the rise and fall of violins surrounds us
on the big screen the wild fields of Ireland
blades of green populated by delicate lavender blooms
a child’s voice sings
~~ Judi Van Gorder
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Originally written for March, 2020, round of "Stormy's poetry newsletter & contest"  , using the words: music, lonely, miles, crowd, fade, stage, empty, lights. "My entry for March"
Lonely Miles
From town to town, we travel to play our music,
as the star of Hope guides our Odyssey
along the winding road up hill and down vale.
Every show drives us deeper into the dream
of fame and fortune that is sure to follow,
as long as we keep believing in our fans.
All these lonely miles lead to another crowd.
Year after year, we have chased this dream.
Forsaking logic from friends and family,
we take the stage to sing songs we have written
and soak in the admiration of our fans,
until the songs are sung, lights fade, and stage goes empty.
Then, we pack our gear into the bus,
crank it up, and head out down another highway
to another town, where we do it all over again.
All these lonely miles lead to another crowd.
Addicted to that surge we get when the lights go up,
we'll keep traveling and playing from gig to gig,
as long as the flame keeps burning in our hearts.
Away from family and friends for so long,
band members serve as surrogates when needed--
brothers and sisters with common cause.
All these lonely miles lead to another crowd.
Author's note: 23 lines of Bop poetry, as described and demonstrated in the following link: http://poetscollective.org/poetryforms/3235/
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Snowflakes fall at night,
shout out "Good morning!" next day.
Shoveling wet snow
becomes my fitness program.
Fetch my liniment
to quiet screaming muscles,
pushed to their limit
by exercise protraction.
Let the creativity flow from your soul! 
Dave
"The Poet's Place " |
February 29, 2020 at 10:54am
February 29, 2020 at 10:54am
February 7, 2020 at 3:56pm
February 7, 2020 at 3:56pm
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Swallows chatter, build their nests,
church bells chime, around the square,
while I sip cappuccino
in San Juan Capistrano
Notes on the Korean Kasa form of poetry ▼
Here is an Eastern form tailored for those of you who have trouble counting syllables or placing caesura. The frame of the Kasa is loosely adhered to but parallels are paramount.
Wiggle room in Kasa frame,
holding fast, side by side claim.
~~Tinker
Kasa in Korean means song-words and the form is compared to the Chinese rhyme-prose (fu). Its defining features are the lack of stanza breaks, lines of variable length and its strict adherence to parallelism. In other words, the elements of the frame though often exercised are loosely observed. The content in parallel is the focus of the form. The Kasa dates back to 15th century Korea.
in.seaung.un yu.han.han.dae
si.ram.do ku.ji.op.ta
Life has an end:
Sorrow is endless.
The elements of the Kasa, (song-words) are:
1. syllabic, 7-syllable lines broken by caesura into alternating groups of 3 and 4 syllables or 8 syllable lines broken by caesura into equal 4 syllable phrases. These options are guides with variables at the discretion of the poet.
2. strophic. Groups of variable numbers of lines, unlike uniform stanzas.
3. content is described or exposed through parallels. This is the heart of the form.
4. written from unrequited love, patriotism, daily life, nostalgia, etc.
#1
Chants of peace, love on demand,
screamed in anger, defeat dream.
---Judi Van Gorder
#2
Heady rush, vibrant new love,
yesterday's promises pale,
vows broken, children pay price.
--Judi Van Gorder
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January 17, 2020 at 3:34pm
January 17, 2020 at 3:34pm
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My doppelganger lurks
around ev'ry corner,
primed to zap ego trip
by showing pouting lip
whenever I must pass
in front of mirror glass.
Note ▼
Written for with prompt:
The prompt is the form, the topic can be anything you like.
Write one or more six-line-stanzas (sestets).
Each line must have six syllables and the following end-rhyme pattern:
xxxxxa
xxxxxb
xxxxxc
xxxxxc
xxxxxd
xxxxxd
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January 11, 2020 at 12:40pm
January 11, 2020 at 12:40pm
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Inhaling crisp morning air
in rural field, where the corn
grows in rows, the prairie speaks
to me on a journey my soul seeks.
When breeze colors cheeks like rose,
Nature's spirit flows in creeks,
where three raucous crows debate
a range of critiques about our fate.
Notes on the Kloang form of poetry ▼
1. Kloang poem composed for Round 62 of the " Invalid Item"
2. The elements of the Kloang are:
1. syllabic. L1, L2, L3 are 7 syllables each, L4 is 9 syllables.
2. stanzaic, written with any number of quatrains.
3. composed with an interweaving or cross rhyme scheme. The end word of L1 rhymes with the 5th syllables of L2 and L3. The end word of L2 rhymes with the 5th syllable of L4. L3 and L4 end rhyme. Stanzas are linked by the repetition of the end rhyme of L4 repeated as the 5th syllable of L1 of the next stanza and the rhyme pattern repeats itself.
4. most often a poem of nature.
5. tonal which is impossible in the English language.
x x x x a x b
x x x x b x a
x x x x b x c
x x x x a x x x c
x x x x c x d
x x x x d x c
x x x x d x e
x x x x c x x x e
Arctic Love
Gnarly feet trudge on the ice,
eighty miles entice a pawn
of nature, the price to mate,
four year cycle drawn up to create.
~~ Judi Van Gorder, aka Tinker   |
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