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Wow. Your poem evokes a sadness somehow. I really like the way you express this "hollow" feeling. The repeated OK is so effective like an echo and using the word "haunted" bears that out.
Onecan sense the way the poet may not have been ok but unwilling to open the mask. Brilliant.
The free style poem suits the content and emotion. Your weaving made its mark. 
It is amazing how he got main ideas of the old and new testament as well as the journey of the boy into this story poem complete with rhyme.
I was caught by the flowing title and the notion of poetry as movement.
and does the next line follow from it? I just got a bit confused there. 
I liked the evocative title of this piece and it made me curious. I enjoy philosophical and wisdom themes. This short poem reveals your thoughts on what creates basis of friendships. It really gives me something to ponder on.
The three line free verse is simple and clear in tone and intent. Mutual trust can be value as well as trust that people will be who they are even if they make mistakes.
I did wonder about "onward path" and whether the word "common" goes with that as well. eg, does friendship require people going a similar direction. And it would seem reasonable that the path would be onward in anycase..rather than backward. I will ponder more. 
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Wow! This is a wonderfully appealing poem. I love the nature theme and it is amazing how you managed to use all of the prompt words coherently in your message.
The imagery of the environment is so vivid that it was easy to enter into the vision. The personification of some elements is brilliantly done. I really liked "light's brush, heavy with the colours of life" and "nature"s easel".
I notice you have it posted as a poem and yet it is written in paragraph format, not like a poem though the feeling is potent. It is well written as a bio piece and easy to enter into your experience. I like the image of "cleaning out the heart" and the singing and the difficulty of the decision. 
I enjoyed reading it aloud and could imagine illustrating it as a child's book. One could leave blanks in it for any child to insert specifics for himself. I could see using it as a template if a book came out. 
The image of the "spiral arm" is appealing to me as it makes me think of being held and safe even in the expanse of space.
I was wondering if there should also be "commas" or semi-colons after the words "planets and stars, that's in the.." in each verse as the last line in each verse still refers back. Just a puzzlement. 
I like the cows and the way you had him look at you. Lucky to get a shot with the sunlight! Cropping it into a circle added flair. I like how you wove memories of your father into the journey. His pride in the crazy tree is too cute!
I noticed a typo in " to possible write about." IT should be "possibly" and I wondered about ending a line with "about". 
I wondered if you used a camera or cell phone camera.
The free verse is so fitting and was a pleasure to read with its engaging images, theme and soundscape. Your use of poetic devices like rhyme, assonance and consonance was very effective and the enjambents added to the drama. The image of the feet on coffee table and the comparisons are brilliant and evocative. The preacher in the tent I could so see this "circus". The word "suspiciously" made me ponder too. 
You have really caught the essence of this hero in your short quatrain. 
Hi Maryann! I am so happy you popped into the Daily Poem and took up the difficult challenge. YOu did a brilliant job on not using the letter "a" in a sonnet. LOL The topic is unique and the tone is happy and light. IT was fun to imagine the picnic and goodies. I liked the rocking food song and the notion of food bringing folks together.