Hi Genipher! I am happy to review your entry in the 'I Write in 2018" activity.
The title is appealing as it paints a picture and made me curious. I could imagine a pile of garbage with all of its different aspects include how it might smell! Yuck!
It made me ponder about the environmental questions. It was a cool surprise when I read the piece that the idea of trash island was actually positive. Neat!
Even more curious now as to how that would work. LOL
The short piece of writing gives a really interesting and unique prompt for a story and gives a challenge to the imagination. The Bermuda triangle element gives a potential author lots of room for the wierd or wonderful to occur.
The composition was easy to follow and provided enough scope the who, what and where elements of a potential story line. The question at the end is directive in intent with the words "survive" and "alternate dimension". It could indicate a sci fi, paranormal, fantasy, adventure in terms of genre possibilities. The sky is the limit! Good job.
Thanks for sharing your visionary idea.
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The photo of your truck is incredible too. Looks like a near miss and I remember living through a couple of ice storms and the damage was pretty freaky. Awesome that you could capture it in pics. It would make a good prompt for a story! 
Thanks for sharing this precious memories and your love of goats! Keep on writing and Merry Christmas! 
Hiya Dave! Happy Party Time! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! 
Oh gosh! I love fairies and so Tinkerbell appeals to me. LOL I was curious about her invitation too so here I am hooked by the title. 
The first verse is my favourite for its vivid images like "plumes" "stardust" and "wings" with their descriptions 
In the second verse the last image is brilliant and the close sound of "unknown" and "moon" echoed well. I think the word "previously" is a bit heavy and not so poetic as in the first verse. It through me out of the piece a bit. I think "constellations unknown" says it all as it would mean they are still unknown til they get there, so why say "previously"? 
I was glad you found a way to make it positive... in looking to the future rather than complaining and getting sucked into the dark. Like you mentioned, it could be suicide making experience. 
We could all take a lesson here...and many of us have had less to go through that this. You are an inspiration. 
I could feel the devestation of not even being able to say goodbye to family. Again, for no good reason. I can see how Fear really runs the show and denies common sense and decency. You really reveal the dark side of this structure that is supposed to protect the innocent.
I am delighted to review your piece from 'I Write in 2018"! Congrats on making it to the end! 
Opening the piece with a question draws me in to ponder the idea of being a light. I like how you begin by asking your self and then the reader. Adding the concept of being willing to let it shine is an important point to make. We all have light...yet may not choose to let it be a strong as it could be.
The flow was pleasing to read aloud and the lines 2, 3 and 4 rather mimicked the lengths of time in their structure and speed. Well done! 
The quatrains are well composed and fun to read and I enjoy how you intersperse them with couplets in italics to add the poets commentary on how the aspects occur to him. Brilliant and so entertaining to the end.
You have a gift for composing fine quatrains filled with details on the subject matter. You really know your facts and wove the tribute poem effectively. The rhyme scheme is consistent and the chosen words interesting. The vocabulary suited the math concept and it was fun to read aloud. Your use of consonance and assonance added to the pleasure of the read.
Though the syllable count is not even, it flowed well. The only line I found hard to get into a flow with the rest of the poem was line 2 in the last verse.
The title is appealing and drew my curiosity. I can so see the kitty on the ledge hiding. Cool! You paint a vivid picture of the first view of snow and the personification of the cat is well done.
What a neat idea for a poem. I could so visualize the sweeper with the hyper dog! 
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The form of tanka is well composed and the topic is a unique one for the form. It was fun to read with its imaginative picture.
Thanks for sharing your clear vision and craft.
The title was intriguing and I like the idea of the enigma of the theme labyrinth..it could go beyond to the unknown! Brilliant! 
My imagination was inspired by the word "golden labyrinth"! Good hook! The contrast of imagination and madness is interesting and valid too. The verb "threatens" adds potency to your image. I like how evocative your concept is as you leave room for the reader to add their own vision. 
Ahoy! Thanks for entering the "
