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Happy Party Time Espero! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! 
WOW! This story poem is absolutely enchanting. I loved reading it and look forward to reading it to some kids I know. I enjoy fantasy themes and the little deer on his mission is endearing. The surprise twist at the end was an unexpected, rather comical event! 
A fabulous piece of writing, and not easy to keep an epic going in rhyme. I am inspired and impressed! Way to go, word wizard! 
It is a delight to read this short episode which showed well the magic of children. The theme of the "eyelash" was cute and I even recall that bit of magic though had not heard of it in a long while! I liked the absolute faith and potency of Mia in commanding the situation! By the way, you spell Maya in two ways in the story. 
Your free style poem was captivating too. I enjoyed the language and vivid images you created along with its message. I laughed at the last line. 
The personification of vegetables and the content is unique.
Thanks for sharing your unique vision. 
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The photo is beautiful and I like the flower laid on the page. The backstory is inspiring and so authentic in voice and tone. I enjoy how you reveal your journey with the language and could relate to the "reliance" on the translation! LOL Yep, our mind knows better and wants to be lazy.
I noticed a typo "universl" missing an "a". 
Your description was detailed with vivid images and the first person voice was effective and consistent through out. I noticed you repeated "I could tell" close together. I wonder if there is an alterative way to say it the second time...eg. I could see... as you are looking at shadows. 
Your notions of the "old hat" and the "map" made me laugh. That map idea was brilliant too. I was drawn in by the question in the first line as it made me ponder too... it leads nicely to the theme of so many things to choose from.
I did wonder at the second line, unclear about what the brilliant writings are brilliant at? 
I also wonder who "another" is, in verse two.
Keep the quill moving!
Wow! I loved the image of the doves the notion of comforting in the passing season. Brilliant and moving! 
The free verse suits the theme and nuance of the piece and your use of consonance and assonance was very effective. It was a pleasure to read aloud. I loved the moanful sound of the "o" in the first verse showing the sorrow. The "s" and "e" sounds create a coherent effect as well. mm. "weeping children" is lovely too. The weave was well thought out and evocative. I could really enter into the vision here. 
I really felt for the poet at the end accepting her fate. The notion of last refrain had me hearing its lonesome echo. Wonderful!
The title of the work is evocative and really suit the picture with its theme..edge of road, edge of poverty, edge of nature vs man etc. Your response to the prompt was brilliant and moving as I could feel the intensity of the meeting of the two women.
The unique images and words like "ghost particles" and "blazars of edgework" are thought provoking and vivid.
You engaged by attention from the first lines where you set up the mystery. The horror aspect was vivid and your description was detailed. I smiled at the comparison to the Challenger and the sound without the baseball cards. 