Acme's (acme) Reviews

Review Requests: OFF

2,953 Public Reviews Given

3,697 Total Reviews Given

Review Style

Honest. I give my overall impressions, let you know what worked well for me and what didn't, and when that happens, I like to try and offer suggestions--totally up to you if you want to take any notice; it is your writing, after all. I am just glad to have the opportunity to read and review. I rarely think anything is perfect, so please do not request a review if you value ratings over review content.

I'm good at...

...being interested. I take time over reviews. My reviews are intimate, informal and honest. They aim to help, offer insight, and celebrate the graft of craft. I love commas. Punctuation is a personal passion.

Favorite Genres

Comedy, supernatural horror, sci-if, fantasy, thriller, detective, slice-of-life, history.

Least Favorite Genres

Dystopian glumness, romance, personal.

Favorite Item Types

Scripts. Fiction. Essays, especially academic

Least Favorite Item Types

Free form poetry. Other than that, little offends.

I will not review...

Unless previously agreed, novels and chapters are a no go with me. I am sorry to say that I haven't the time.

451

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2773337

Review of Desperation

Review by Acme

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

I am reviewing this as an entry in "Invalid Item"

What are my overall impressions?
This is a dark story in a monologue format which makes for interesting reading. There are areas where you could look to your technical delivery of the story.

What are my favourite parts?
I thought you managed to create a distinctive voice for your narrator in this story. Your images of the satellite characters are very vivid, like 'snap shots' - well delivered.

What are my suggestions?

It could only tell me one thing. Our system of life is collapsing.

connective thoughts should use a semi-colon.

A wife...a son....a daughter.

use three periods in an ellipsis.

I also had a little trouble seeing the comparison with the prompt story.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

452

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2773272

Review of Jean Lafitte

Review by Acme

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

What are my overall impressions?
I thoroughly enjoyed your take on the 'adventure' prompt with this poem about one of the most infamous pirates in history

What are my favourite parts?
The structure with refrain worked really well and I particularly found the author's note and 'click' link a thoughtful addition

What are my suggestions?
For an adventure rich character, I was rather surprised that you focused a number of stanzas on his part in fighting the British, and neglected the belief his friendship with Napoleon resulted in him hiding the Emperor's treasure which is still undiscovered today.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

453

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2773189

Review of Hate

Review by Acme

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

What are my overall impressions?
This is a good story which uses the 'adventure' prompt well. You hooked me with your well developed characters and plot line and the history came through well, and not just as a backdrop. There are technical areas in your writing which could use an editorial eye, and I think this story is well worth any effort you would put into doing so.

What are my favourite parts?

At the sound of water swishing around in the canteen, Greg's dry mouth started to water. As if the old man could read his mind, Greg felt the cold metal against his arm. Grasping it in both hands, he let the dirty water drip down into his mouth. You do a good job in using narrative description to move the story on, add detail in imagery and flesh out your characters. Your dialogue is smooth and believable.

What are my suggestions?
There are a number of places where you could cut words, making your narrative tighter and punchier, eg:
regiment had been mostly wiped from the face of the earth in the bloody battles that they had fought
most of the regiment were wiped from the face of the earth in the bloody battles they fought

He was angry with all the white people [that who] held his race in contempt.

his sorrow was beyond [what he had ever imagined before his imagination]. He knew just about ever body [that who] lay at his feet. He had been trained with them and [had been bunked?] with them ever since [they had come to this country being stationed here] and fought in the war for the fate of world freedom [that was now threatened now under threat]

- my example here is an attempt to show you 'dead' words, and how you can spice up your language by widening your vocabulary. It is only an example; one I'm sure you could improve on

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

454

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2772899

Review of Nature is Calling Me

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (3.5)

An Acme Review

This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!
Want to join a group which will encourage and support your writing, as well as making new friends? Please visit
The Holding Pond (E)
Currently not accepting new members - group under redesign. Thank you for your patience.
#1360711 by Brooke is plotting.

What are my overall impressions?
Thank you for entering Pond Poetry. This month's prompt was La Courante form and your rhyming couplet poem does not meed the requirements of the form, nor your subject matter with the corresponding picture prompt. All that aside and reviewing this as a poem, rather than contest entry, I have to say I enjoyed reading this poem.

What are my favourite parts?
You managed to engage all my senses with some stunning imagery and descriptions, freshly mown grass, bird song, warmed by the sun and cooled by the wind... your words transported me to this scene.

What are my suggestions?

Wind is blowing much too softly to[o] tend.

Your use of full stops (periods) at the end of your lines is a little confusing when the sentence naturally continues on the next line.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

455

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2772160

Review of Why Worry, Today Is Here

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (4.0)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

This is a review on behalf of "Invalid Item"

What are my overall impressions?
A thoughtful and thought-provoking poem which brings the reader into a shared moment with the narrator.

What are my favourite parts?
I like the way you create an intimacy between the narrator and the reader by sharing "The View"

What are my suggestions?

As the cars go flying by.
My eyes are glued upon the sky.
As the clouds

- again, I'm a little uncomfortable with the use of periods as end line punctuation, but you should also be aware of the word 'as' being over used. And your title has too many periods in an ellipsis.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

456

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2772132

Review of No, I'm Not Looking....

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (4.5)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

This is a review on behalf of "Invalid Item"

What are my overall impressions?
Reminiscent of the old "Hey Good Lookin'!" song, I found the easy pace and informal language really suited this poem.

What are my favourite parts?
I liked the odd stresses you placed on particular words by using capitalisations in unexpected places - they made me conscious of your words choices, slowed down my reading pace to match the tone of the narrative, and added to my enjoyment

What are my suggestions?
Only a quickie - ellipsis should really only be used with three periods; any more seems like a yawn than a pause, and any less could always be construed as a typo.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

457

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2772120

Review of Way Back When.....

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (4.0)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

This is a review on behalf of "Invalid Item"

What are my overall impressions?
Oh, this is very well done! Just a few tweaks to some of the rhymes which were a littl loose, will make this good poem a great poem

What are my favourite parts?
I loved the structure! Is it your own? Please write me and let me know, as I have not come across this before and would love to know if there are any particular rules to it so I can try it myself! Lovely imagery and narrative again - you are starting to acquire a 'voice' in my mind's ear

What are my suggestions?

Way back when I was only seventy.
Flowers and Honeysuckles still smelling heavenly

- it pays to be tense aware, as shifts between past and present can prove distracting for a reader.

The ABCCBA rhyme pattern did seem a little weak with a few word choices, particularly those which only shared a last letter in common.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

458

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2772116

Review of My Hecate, The Wise One

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (4.0)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

This is a review on behalf of "Invalid Item"

What are my overall impressions?
A glance at the driving force behind your spirituality in this poem of tribute to divine force. You controlled the pace well and used the two stanzas to convey your subject in rhyming couplets.

What are my favourite parts?
Your love and celebration of divinity shines through your narrative, making this an intoxicating and powerful read.

What are my suggestions?
Again, I would suggest looking at re-editing those areas where you repeat words and widening your vocabulary accordingly.

End line punctuation consists solely of exclamation marks and you may want to review this, as they lose their impact with overuse.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

459

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2772108

Review of Spring's Here

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (3.5)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

This is a review on behalf of "Invalid Item"

What are my overall impressions?
The ABCB rhyming quatrain form of this poem works well here. This poem has some wonderful spring time images of nature and I connected easily to it. There are some technical areas which would benefit a small amount of time in a re-edit.

What are my favourite parts?
I particularly enjoyed the images of nature in your narrative, and a timeless tone of enjoying the fruits of spring.

What are my suggestions?
I realise that traditional poetry etiquette prefers capitalisation at the beginning of sentences, but I found the periods ending each line rather distracting as quite a number of lines followed on. Not using any end line punctuation is quite acceptable these days. If you would like to include it, it makes sense to use it appropriately

It should not take you long to fix and will enhance your readers experience of your poem.

There are a couple of 'lovely's in swift succession and I would ask you to review your word choices and widen your vocabulary.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

460

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2771142

Review of Drought

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (4.0)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

What are my overall impressions?
A good attempt at La Courante form which could use a little tightening in the structure. Your narrative and imagery were very well done and I enjoyed the tone you set throughout. Good use of prompt.

What are my favourite parts?
I thought your language choices were excellent and especially enjoyed the subtle differences in the last three lines of both stanzas

What are my suggestions?
La Courante form requires 5 syllables in line 9 of both stanzas and you have only 4 in yours. Also, and this could be my internal accent, there seems a syllable missing here:

me, neath this wire frame

- unless you give 'wire' two syllables, in which case it is correct (spot the Brit

)

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

461

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2767906

Review of Recurring Nightmare

Review by Acme

Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

AN ACME REVIEW

This review is part of an initiative to spread positivity through reviewing. While it may not be a technical edit, my thoughts here are honest, and I hope you find them helpful and encouraging

Hey there, Legerdemain

Well, this is one action packed and dramatic nightmare! Your pace and delivery kept me on the edge of my seat, and although you could polish a couple of technical areas, it won't take you long to do so

Suddenly[,] the trees start to fall

Left, right..then left again.

three periods make up an ellipsis.

Thank you for sharing. Write on and take care!

462

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2762230

Review of Because You Cared for Me

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (5.0)

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Acme Review

This review is offered in the spirit of support and is only my opinion. Please feel free to take what you will from it and thank you for sharing your work!

Overall Impressions
A thoughtful and delightful poem on the realisation of affection.

Favourite Parts
This is a simple ABAB rhyme, but your clever choice to enliven the form with alternative spacing of lines and colourful text makes it a visual pleasure beyond a traditional quatrain structure

Suggestions
None - Write ON!

Write on and take care!

463

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2762191

Review of Path of Open Doors

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (5.0)

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Acme Review

This review is offered in the spirit of support and is only my opinion. Please feel free to take what you will from it and thank you for sharing your work!

Overall Impressions
I've come to expect a lot from your writing and each time I read something new, I remember why that is! It won't be long before I see you in print, and this well written story of a 'supernatural' turning point in your protagonists life intrigued me as to other stories based on this character's development.

Favourite Parts
Now, it really would be unfair to pick a particular part, but I have to say I loved the pace you set. Your whole story seemed to pulse along like your opening sound of the rail tracks - compelling stuff!

Suggestions

What?! Jane's stomach fluttered madly

- this was the only part which jumped out at me. It may just be me, Nicki, but I get a nervous twitch when I see double end punctuation. Personally, I'd go with the question mark, as the reader is already as shocked as Jane, at this point.

Write on and take care!

464

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2762166

Review of Shelby

Review by Acme

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Acme Review

This review is offered in the spirit of support and is only my opinion. Please feel free to take what you will from it and thank you for sharing your work!

Overall Impressions
Children are a great source of material for writers. They force us to examine the world from a perspective which may not have crossed our mind before. This story looks at a mother's questions on the use of products and delivers a twist with the end result.

Favourite Parts
I think you set the 'mystery' up well here, and have created some interesting characters which retained my interest with the story.

Suggestions

This should be a good spot for those that love the humidity. When all of the pots occupied their new places, she stood back and admired the arrangement. They should do quite well there.

- repetition.

A squeal from the backyard drew her attention outside the window where Jason was trying for a new height record on the swings while Shelby created a mountainous terrain in the sandbox over which her toy dinosaurs roamed. Linda smiled as she noted that the little girl had stuck twigs into the hills to represent a forest.

- this particular scene is redundant, as it serves no purpose in the story. If a scene is 'dead', and I mean it doesn't advance the story, or foreshadow events, or add to character development, etc -- in other words, if it just is a 'scene', you should edit it out. You may be proud of the construction of a sentence within it, or a descriptive image, if this is the case, I suggest making an item where you can store such snippets to better fit a future story

Write on and take care!

465

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2762150

Review of A Wish For You, My Son

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (4.5)

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Acme Review

This review is offered in the spirit of support and is only my opinion. Please feel free to take what you will from it and thank you for sharing your work!

Overall Impressions
A lovely examination of a child's life through the eyes of his mother. Touching and tender, this poem gives the reader a good insight to the observations of parenting. Some of changes in line length detracted from the overall rhythm of the poem.

Favourite Parts
A beautiful dedication to an important relationship. I thought the narrative tone was well maintained throughout

Suggestions

and face your fears in despite it all.

Write on and take care!

466

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2758504

Review of Imagination Alphabet

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (5.0)

An Acme Review

This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

This review is part of
WDC Power Raid And Chat Forum (E)
Join our group to help. :-)
#1388251 by Maryann

What are my overall impressions?
How could I not pop in and raid the princess of power reviewing

? This in & out is set up really well and I addictive! I had to post

What are my favourite parts?
As per usual, you ensure a visually stunning presentation to your creation. The use of illustration and WritingML enhance the main body of instructions well and show those thinking of adding that you care about the item - well displayed and welcoming

What are my suggestions?
None - alphabetize on!

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

467

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2757120

Review of A LITTLE HOUSE ON THE HILL

Review by Acme

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

AN ACME REVIEW

This review is part of an initiative to spread positivity through reviewing. While it may not be a technical edit, my thoughts here are honest, and I hope you find them helpful and encouraging

A lovely poem which made me smile with its warm, nostalgic tone and narrative description. The HOME you paint is just that: a home, not a house. Descriptions which include family, pets and nature all enhance your poem.

I only noticed one typo:

I'vs planted flowers

Thank you for sharing. Write on and take care!

468

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2756143

Review of Things Mom Forgot To Mention!

Review by Acme

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

Thanks for your entry in "Invalid Item"

What are my overall impressions?
I can see why this funny write has a lovely ribbon next to it! Insightful, humorous, tongue-in-cheek, observational... the list goes on and on.

What are my favourite parts?
They are all good, but the following made me snort in acknowledgment:

Your mother will never, ever change. Deal with it.

What are my suggestions?
Simple fix on the ellipsis (they move in threes

)

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

469

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2752960

Review of The Graveyard.

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (5.0)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

What are my overall impressions?
I liked the look of this folder for the name alone

The dark theme runs through your port and this folder is most fitting. I'm not reviewing this as part of Lornda's port raid, but only because I wanted to comment.

What are my favourite parts?
Your headstone, mist filled, graveyard illustration is fab!

What are my suggestions?
You have two items (they could be images or links to forums/other works) which are not working. This is because you have used the wrong WritingML code and typed {center:#####} rather than "item", or "image". It's an easy fix and well worth the time as this is a fantastic portal to your other work.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

470

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2749834

Review of Green Peas at Stake

Review by Acme

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

An Acme Review

This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

This review is part of
WDC Power Raid And Chat Forum (E)
Join our group to help. :-)
#1388251 by Maryann

What are my overall impressions?
This raw stage of your poetry makes for addictive reading, from Plath, floral inspirations and the Knife Selling industry. I'm a bit of an old dinosaur; the kind who liked old vinyl, and analogue recordings because of their 'naked' honesty. So, I absolutely adored this item. Thank you!

What are my favourite parts?

White ibises, imitating catwalk models, stroll on their thin stilts

- lovely imagery bursts out of your entries and this one caused a smile to flicker over my face

What are my suggestions?
Oh, none! I look forward to visiting this item again soon. Write on.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

471

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2749139

Review of Top Ten Highlights of Convention 2003

Review by Acme

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

An Acme Review

This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

This review is part of
WDC Power Raid And Chat Forum (E)
Join our group to help. :-)
#1388251 by Maryann

What are my overall impressions?
Oh, this was only five years ago, but it is wonderful to smile at the events you list here. I feel so jealous to be a relatively recent addition to the site, but would love to see an event like this take place again one day

What are my favourite parts?
It is great to have links to members suitcases and these humorous anecdotes will make me look at all involved just a little differently!

What are my suggestions?
One member's name link no longer works and you may want to replace it with her written name instead.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

472

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2745915

Review of Forbbiden Love

Review by Acme

Rated: 13+

| (3.0)

An Acme Review

This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

I am reviewing this story for "Invalid Item"

What are my overall impressions?
Good pace and thoughtful story, but you should take a little time to proof read and your reader's enjoyment will be enhanced.

What are my favourite parts?
I think you do a great job of establishing plot line and developing this in an interesting and believable way.

What are my suggestions?

ever noticed that whenever a disagreement

- try to proof read for extraneous word use; getting rid of 'fillers' like "that" and "had" can add more punch to your writing.

Then you fin[ed] out that they were right

that's the story of my life. Which lead to the argument [that which] caused a major uproot in my life.

dating for three months now, only I hadn't told my mother that. I was suprised that it took this

- I've probably made my point! I'll let you look through the rest of the text for these points

He wasn't good for me beacause he's not a honors student like me, big deal. He's no good for me

"because". Watch out for changes in tense. You start out using past tense and then move into present. s***s like this can be very distracting for you reader.

when I heard the familier voice

- familiar. Use the site spell checker in the item's tool bar to help proof read for spelling errors

What's up?!?

- use only one form of line end punctuation.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

473

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2743116

Review of Deep Peace

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (4.0)

An Acme Review
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

What are my overall impressions?
Congratulations on your Honourable Mention in "Invalid Item"

I enjoyed reading this and wish you look in the site wide contest it appears to have been written for.

What are my favourite parts?
I really enjoyed the tone you set with this "in-the-moment" piece. You have some lovely imagery which pulled me into the setting easily

What are my suggestions?

t was early morning and the mist[,] frothy and cool[,] lingered above the murky waters of the lake.

- try reading work out loud to see where punctuation naturally falls.

They whispered a tune so beautiful and mysterious that all could hear it if they only chose to listen.

- watch out for words which can be cut without altering meaning, or are poor substitutes for more appropriate ones. These include: "had", "just" and "that".

Deep within all that tissue beat a heart, and it pumped blood throughout that small body. Ok son now put him back. The boy didn't protest.

- denoting dialogue with quotation marks would help the narrative clarity in places such as this.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

474

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2743113

Review of BREAD

Review by Acme

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

An Acme Review

This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

What are my overall impressions?
Congratulations on your Honourable Mention in "Invalid Item"

!

This is an amazing monologue of your narrator's life. Well written with some fabulous description, I soon got drawn into your fabulous story telling. There were a couple of places I thought you could tighten your vocabulary, but these will be easily pinpointed by proof reading.

What are my favourite parts?

I remember the fresh smell of bread as it baked in the oven in our little cottage.I used to inhale that aroma in deep breaths; to me that had to be the scent of heaven. My mother kneaded that bread until her tears were mixed in the dough. At the time, I imagined it was her tears that made the bread smell so.

- wonderful, vivid imagery. My stomach grumbled as I engaged all of my senses as I read

What are my suggestions?
Beware the extraneous word monster... (he normally lives in my port

):

my husband had gotten for me.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

475

Only reviews from the past
14 days may be credited.

#2743086

Review of The Wolf

Review by Acme

Rated: E

| (4.5)

An Acme Review

This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!

What are my overall impressions?
Wow! Powerful stuff, Leger

Love all the imagery and careful word choice selection here. The whole tone is dark and passionate; a realistic evocation of emotions

What are my favourite parts?

My light upon your pain,
...In silvered embrace,
...Wax and wane, the way

- all these nods to moon metaphor really help the poem build in imagery and impact. Fabulous writing

What are my suggestions?
Please think about changing your item listing and genre choices? This is poetry, not prose, and "other" really won't be used that often on the site search engine.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **