This lovely little set of verses display the love/hate relationship most people have with mobile phones! Those technological devices always seem to ring at the most inappropriate moments. When walking around, I do see people fumble with their device, especially when their hands are full. As for the last line, located within the fourth set of verses?
Most people have to carry their phone as it often stores the information they need! Mobiles are a necessary pain in the posterior we unfortunately have to carry in this modern world of ours!
After reading this bright little poem with the subject matter concerning caffeine in a few of its forms, I will have to make a cup of tea! My favourite part was the ire of the writer needing a morning fix of coffee or tea... Only to find her pot was empty! More than once, I have had to venture outside in all types of weather to purchase more of my daily addiction; tea! It is gratifying to know I am not the only caffeine addict out there!
Very good short piece of fiction you have here. Short, sharp, yet straight to the point. The 300 word limit makes this item even better, as you have to ensure the words you choose are able to convey the theme of the story. Dimensional travel, slight horror theme. Brilliant!
The disclaimer about you not being a poet made me grin as I read it. I definitely agree with the subject matter inherent within your poem. After having a few bad days recently, things appear to be getting better. This great poem reinforces that. Thanks for writing it, self-proclaimed not poet!
As a short person I can totally relate to the comedic, yet serious topic within this rather fine upload. As a young woman, I often was mistaken for someone far below my chronological age. Thanks for presenting this pain for us shorties in such a brilliant, comedic way.
Very nice upload you have written here. Rather atmospheric in nature. I especially enjoyed the encounter with the skeletal being: wise, ancient and very ominous. There is a mysterious hint of adventure laced throughout the entirety of this item. Nicely crafted. I personally believe you could make a novel out of this. I'd love to read more!
Nice item here! Crash reminds me of a much older, wiser and life worn version of the adult wolves from Teen Wolf! I know, not a very good comparison! Still, to me, this seems to be a novel in blog format! I find this rather interesting. A deeply scarred military USA veteran, being assisted by his furry buddy. I see there is more! I'm off to read that!
Is this a portal based science fiction based comedy? If so, I love this! Is this short piece inspired by the Talking Beasts of Narnia? This might sound rather absurd, I have always wished to find a strange world hidden away. Jersey did it first! This did make me laugh. I think this holds the potential to become a novel or novella. Perhaps with the otter's warning as part of the main plotline? That could be fun!
Physical touch can stimulate the minds and memories of cats. When we had a heatwave here in the UK a few years ago, my cat Gizzmo, a calico, wasn't doing very well. I used a cold, damp flannel to cool her off. She was purring the whole time! Using a wet cloth to cool her off, obviously reminded her of her mum all those years ago. Well done on such a fine upload.
Thank you for writing such a fantastic item. I knew I would enjoy reading this when I saw the title. Michael Reeve is a perfect character: wise, has a sense of humour and is of course, an eternal smart-aleck. He reminds me of another character: Belgarath the Sorcerer! Michael seems to be a more modern version.
Plus the poltergeist has been finely crafted. Burning down the house to get rid of said ghost? Genius! Now all we need is a companion item detailing the reaction of Michael's superiors.
Well if a mystical shop based in a fantasy land required an advertisement for the services it can render to the local community; well this is it! There is a faint hint of humour present within this advert. I could totally see this posted on the front of such a shop in an epic fantasy novel. Well done on such a finely crafted piece!
You fiendish fiend! This was a very difficult one! I am not ashamed to admit that I didn't know a fair few of these. Well done on such an inventive puzzle/crossword item. This has proven I need to brush up on my superhero knowledge. Time to raid my younger brother's Marvel/DC comic stash again!
I had to give you five stars for this poem! This set of verses reminds me of how long my father used to leave cutting the grass in our back garden! My second mother used to nag him about it all the time! I swear, every time that man cut the grass, it rained, ALOT!!!!!! Thanks for this little gem of a poem reminding me of my father's utter lack of regard when grass cutting time came around.
Well done on such a great item. Even though it is short, I really enjoyed reading it. At first I thought it was a Harry Potter related item! But after reading through again it is something completely different.
I liked the way you built up the transformation Sam experienced. It seemed to me the coat had a spell or other such influence on it. Well done on such an excellent read!
Nice puzzle! I almost got every answer. I got one wrong: the inventor suit one! This one is the most fun crossword I have ever done. It seems like you did your research with this one. There are many superheroes on the internet, so I hope there will be more of these.
You have definitely done your research into the ways of the Roman Empire. Great world building is evident in this chapter. Plus we learn more concerning the Reapers. Slavery was very much a fact of everyday life. In fact, slaves were treated rather harshly. I really enjoyed the glimpse you gave into the past of Articus.
Plus the research into last names was brilliantly done. In fact, last names in the UK only came into use in the past few centuries, not sure when.
Oohh is this upload based on the works of Talking Heads by Alan Bennet? I studied him at college in my late teens! I really enjoyed reading how the various types of flowers have their own unique voice. The way the dandelion had its lines is fantastic. Since that flower does mature rapidly, it makes perfect sense its voice is more old world in nature/style!
Another fine upload! I am beginning to enjoy the world building present so far in this chapter and the pervious one I read and reviewed. The denial of Articus is plain to see, as he denies the role fate has apparently laid out for him.
Plus I like the explanation of the Reapers you have created to combat a threat also mentioned in this chapter.
First of all, well done on writing and uploading this chapter for me to read and review here today. I enjoy the glimpse of the main character Ruri I have here. A young woman determined to help her family survive, even though it has to be done by slightly nefarious means. It is obvious she has dark events in her recent past.
One point though: try to separate the sentences in the chapter into paragraphs. This will enable easier reading. Apart from that, no complaints here!
I must say this is a most excellent chapter. There aren't many books concerning Grim Reapers, if that is what the main character is, on the internet. Unless I haven't been looking hard enough! Is the novel set in ancient Rome? It seems to me it is, as there are certain terms indicate this may be so. Or perhaps a Roman like civilization set in a modern world?
Thank you for writing this chapter. I am looking forward to reading on how the trainee Reaper begins his journey!
Sounds like Christmas is fun for this family. The comedy throughout this piece was subtly written. I really enjoyed the dynamic between the twin daughters as they pranked their ever loving, but exasperated dad with a very special cup of whatever is was made me chuckle. What was even funnier, dad got his own back!
A rather lovely little poem you have written here. Thank you for post it here on WDC for me to read and enjoy. Whilst reading through this, it seemed to me that life is a journey, full of unexpected events, meeting various types of people. I concur with the lesson you have written here. Sometimes in life we teach others and in turn, we receive tutelage in return.
To me, a day well spent is when I have learned something new! Nicely written, well done!
This is brilliant, full of nonsense, and quite fun! The monologue of the main, albeit rather grumpy character is very well written and actually made laugh as I read through it. This short chapter could actually be material for a longer piece, a novella or novel perhaps? Now that could be a fantastic read!
And we see more of daily life in parts of Dinotopia. I do remember the a bit of the Codes that are part of daily life for all races of Dinotopians. Plus the World Beneath is mentioned. It is always brilliant to see parts of the original lore mentioned.
It seems a hint of trouble is slowly creeping into the idyllic life with a scarcity of fish. Another finely crafted chapter. It was a most enjoyable one to read.
This poem is fantastic! Even though this has been written about your Dad's collection of neckties, I feel the other members of your family are present in your poem! Mum, ever wise and making sure everything is all correct within the family. What I enjoyed most about this set of finely crafted verses:
Your Dad considering his neckties as a badge of honour, a sign he was able to provide for his family, even though he despised wearing them!
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