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Review of With Great Thanks  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderful tribute to auric. There are so many wonderful people here on WDC! I am glad you got your inspiration back. Remember, one day at a time. You will get there. This was very well written, and I will be going to check out that poem you mentioned. Keep up the great writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of FEMA Blues  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading this. Rhythm, flow and rhyme all worked together. Sadly enough, this is the truth of FEMA - when they are needed, they are not there. You did wonderful on this poem. It reflects what survivors of Katrina are still going through, even to this day. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was well-written and although sad, I did enjoy reading it! I did not see any grammatical issues that made it difficult to read. I would like to read more about your brother. I would be interested to know more about your relationship with your brother. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This was beautiful! Funny, worrisome and quite interesting. We never know what our little four-legged children are up to! This was well-written and easy to follow. I did not see any grammatical issues that took away from the story or distracted me. I was glad to find out that Boo didn't actually eat the little blue bread tie. Keep up the great writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of The Artist  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed reading this. I could picture an artist sitting at his canvas, painting. I could see the colors as he puts them on the canvas. Rhythm, flow and rhyme all work really well together. This was beautifully written. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of The Horizon  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
"All, conditions of life" - do you really need the comma after the word "All"? it seemed to me to break up the rhythm a bit in this line.

Other than that, I think you did wonderful on this. Great emotion, great message. Other than what I pointed out above, the rhythm seemed to work very well. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of She's A Rock  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is beautiful. You followed form perfectly and I love how you pay tribute to your sister. I could actually feel the pain, but I could also feel the strength she has. More than that, I could feel your love for her. I loved the hourglass type shape the poem is in as well. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Bonnie M. Ray
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Review of Gratitude  
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a beautiful story of how adoption can go so well. Sadly, not all adoptions end this way. You did beautifully on this and I really loved reading it. It was well-written and what I loved the most is the fact that it was written from the heart. Great job and keep writing!

Bonnie M. Ray
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You make such valid points in this! Your observations are well-thought out, well-written and well-rounded. I personally believe that our education system is more interested in statistics rather than a good education for EVERY student, and that is the sad state of our country. You put this out there in a very good rant article. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Bonnie M. Ray
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Review of She  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a beautiful poem for your wife! I hope she loved it! The rhythm and flow seemed to work well, and I could really feel your strong love for her. You really did well on this. I saw nothing that detracted from the poem or caused difficulty reading it. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Bonnie M. Ray
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Review of The Cow Caper  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was quite amusing! The rhythm and flow worked very well, and the rhyme scheme was spot on. Great job on this! I can see why it won the Writer's Cramp for March 17, 2017! I could actually feel the plight of the cow trying to escape a horrible fate. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Bonnie M. Ray
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Review of Spirit Dance  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey, Ken! It's me again. I loved this poem. Based on your description of the Kyrielle Sonnet, you followed this form very well. I love the repetition of the line, "The wind sings of your love to me." The rhythm and flow of this poem is spot on. I can feel the love in this poem. Wonderful job here. Keep up the great writing!

Bonnie M. Ray
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I could really feel your pain as I read through this. You were able to express deep pain in few words. Just remember, you are not alone. There are those who are with you on your journey, even when it feels you are all alone. This was well-written. I hope and pray all works out for you. Keep writing - writing can be very therapeutic!

B.M. Ray
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was well-written. I could feel the pain of how it's not fair that your loved one is there and you are here. The only issue I saw was "hop and pray" - believe it should be spelled "hope"...Other than that, great job. The rhythm and flow of this poem was spot on. The rhyme did well, too. Keep up the great writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of The Debt  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Jeff - this was well-written. And it points out just how manipulative us humans can be. I read through this twice - mainly because I was intrigued by the story. I would love to see where this would go if it was continued. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of An Angel's Prayer  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Ken! I just read this poem and loved it. Rhythm and flow were spot on! Rhyme scheme perfection. And such a valuable lesson in this poem. You really painted a picture with your words. I could see the angel kneeling in prayer, and you kneeling beside her. Beautifully written! Keep up the wonderful writing!

Bonnie M. Ray
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You did really well on this! The rhythm and flow work really well with the rhyme scheme. Such love as expressed in this shows just how much God loves us! Just reading this gives one hope. Keep up the wonderful writing and keep the faith! It will get you where you need to be!

B.M. Ray
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a beautiful tribute to your mom, and as such, I really hesitate to give any feedback that would suggest improvements - especially, because as you stated in the first paragraph, you were writing this the same day she passed away. It is raw with love and emotion, and the hurt you felt when she passed away. That being said, I will offer my suggestions for you to either use or discard as you see fit:

"Love those who might not know God love otherwise" - I believe "God's" would work just a bit better here.

"to love those who might know love otherwise. " - I think adding the word "not" between might and know would work better because it seems your mom's message was to show love where one has not known love before.

"I heard her say that I love you but I do not like what you are doing." - I heard her say, "I love you, but I do not like what you are doing."

There are other examples, such as her and Dad quipping, "Where did we get this guy?" - but I don't want to tear apart your poignant piece about your mother.

Please accept my suggestions as just that -suggestions. They are in no way meant as disrespect or to hurt you during an already painful time. Whether you change this or not, it is still a very beautiful tribute to your mother, and I really enjoyed reading!

Keep writing - it is healing!

B.M. Ray
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Schnujo! This was cute! I loved it. It was simple, yet it flowed well from one line to the next! Great job! Maybe silly, but a great poem for little ones - or for anyone who needs to smile! This is a wonderful picture in words - easy for anyone to imagine! Keep up the great writing!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved reading this! I could feel the stress and anxiety! And sadly, in this day and age, sometimes it feels like it is machines taking care of us rather than people. The flow and rhythm of this poem seemed spot on to me. Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This poem was a blessing to me. I enjoyed reading it - and it helped to reaffirm my faith. The rhythm and flow were spot on, and the rhyming worked well, too. It's also nice to know I'm not the only one writing poems about God and His love! Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Dear Me (2013)  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Wonderful! I love how honest you are in this. And with it being a complaint letter to the 2012 Dear Me letter, (which I did read), it's the perfect let-down to the excitement from 2012 hype. Beautifully written with a very good lesson that arbitrary deadlines do more harm than good. Great job here! Write on!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Dear Me (2012)  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is absolutely brilliant! I love how you turned your Dear Me letter into an advertisement letter! The flow of the letter is great. The impact of the letter is awesome! True sales pitch here - if I hadn't learned a few hard lessons myself, I might just purchase a package..Keep up the wonderful writing!

B.M.Ray
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This is beautiful! I could feel the pain this child felt as he searched for love from his birth mother. I felt the pain as you, his new mother, felt the pain of not being able to get through. The struggle is real - but with diagnosis comes hope. The rhythm and flow of this poem felt spot on to me. Keep up the wonderful writing! Beautifully done - Keep your head up!

B.M. Ray
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Review of Heaven's Bed  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This had beautiful rhythm and flow. The rhyme scheme worked very well. There's a message in this poem - and it's easy for the reader to catch that message. I love how you describe amber clouds. Wonderful job on this poem. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Bonnie
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