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Review of Fifty things  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there, Mrs. Whatsit!
This is quite an extensive list, and I share quite a few of these with you. And I also loved (and also agree) with some of those ones that WOULDN'T bother you not to do!
As for me, I don't have that many, but I would like to see Australia and have a book published, preferably a novel that was at least decent.
I'd also like to see my youngest grandannachild graduate, but she's only 1 and 1/2 right now, and I'm not sure I'll live long enough to see that.
And like you, fame also doesn't appeal to me. Or sushi! *Sick*
Let me get back to you on this and I'll try to come up with a longer list, but for now, thanks for making me think about it! There's no time like the present, so I hope we both accomplish our goals while we still can!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Mrs. Whatsit! It was fun reading this, and have a wonderful day (and life!)
PS-Fudpuckers? I only just heard out this place(?) a few days ago! Yeah, I'd like to check that out too! *Bigsmile*

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Review of Head Games - FF  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Howdy, Ken!
This is cool. I wasn't sure how the title was going to fit into this until the very end, and even then I was a tad confused. But then I remembered watching The Clash of the Titans so very many years ago, and it all came flooding back to me!
I'm a little surprised Zach and Alan didn't just steal their prize outright instead of considering a higher fee, but that doesn't really matter. It would have really shown their greed, though!
Regardless, Perseus, slayer of The Kraken, will still prevail with Medusa's head!
Great job, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, good luck in the contest, and have abnormally fantastic day!

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Review of I Believe  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there, Norma Jean!
I thought this was pretty good, and not just because I AM a believer and I can relate to it. It’s because…well, you’re probably not going to believe this! *Laugh*
I’ve only seen one spirit in my life, and that was my mother shortly after she passed away when I was 11. I was in my bedroom one night and the only light on was coming from 12 inch B/W TV. The only other source of light for the room was a bare bulb in the center of the ceiling, and that one was off. Suddenly a bright light appeared over the television, but I wasn’t scared at all, because for some reason, I KNEW it was my mother! The light grew brighter, and I said, “Mom?” The light grew even brighter for a few seconds, and then slowly faded away.
My mother’s name was Gloria!
I’ve told this story to several people, and some of them said it was just the wishful imagination of an 11 year old kid. But I KNOW what I saw, and I KNOW it was my mother! It was too vivid and too memorable to be anything else.
Anyway, thank you for sharing this, Norma Jean, and thank you for the memories! *Heart*
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and have a wonderful evening!
By the way, you telling me that you smile when you see me reviewing you made ME smile! *Smile*

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Review of The Umbrella  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wuzzup, Bill?
This is good, but I’m still trying to figure out why it's good. Seriously, it’s kind of ambiguous, and I think different people are going to interpret it in their own particular ways. But I think that’s what you wanted, right? Unless I missed something here.
I see you have it under ‘death’ and ‘dark’, and I can interpret this man rushing through the rain to give this man an umbrella as having something to do with the Grim Reaper, but only vaguely. Don’t get me wrong, though; what I enjoy most about it is how open to interpretation you left it!
Or as I said before, maybe I just didn’t get it?
One comment, one niggle:
‘as if he were whispering a confession into the private chapel of his cupped hands’ (nice simile!)
‘a(n) acrid odor’
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and have a great day/evening/tomorrow!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Howdy, Paul!
This is good, and I like how you wrote it all in dialogue.
I have to agree that Phil is mental case, and if he's going to set parameters like those for his future girlfriend, he's going to be one lonely dude for a while! *Laugh*
Great use of the prompt words, and the conversation was natural and realistic.
One tiny niggle (I know, one day you're going to tell me not to read your stories anymore because I'm such a stickler for grammar—sorry):
“You are a true nut case(,) Phil."
Kee ponw ritin gon, Paul! Thanks for sharing this, have a fantastic evening, and good luck in the contest!

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Review of 2’s  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Jillian!
I'm not a poetry expert, but I thought this was good.
I agree that we were made to be in '2's, even though your poem seems a bit contrary to that (I peeked at a couple of your pieces, like "Prison" ). But I see what you mean.
I've had my share of lost loves over my lifetime, but it took me a long time to get over my last one. And even now I'm still not sure if I could go through that pain again. That last line of this pretty sums it up for me: that all I need is me.
I wish it weren't that way, but the idea of giving my heart to another and risk having it torn apart again is just too great at this stage in my life. Maybe, hopefully, I'll feel different one day.
Very nice poem, Jillian. I can tell you wrote it from the heart, and it says a lot for only so many words!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Kitty Litter  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Lori.
This story is weird. You’re weird. But in a good sense.
Oh, well. To quote Doris Day (who just turned 97 this month!), "Que sera, sera". *Laugh*
By the way, that song was actually introduced in Alfred Hitchcock's film The Man Who Knew Too Much (1956)!
The idea of Penelope taking her cat and going to funerals/wakes for the sole purpose of sexual gratification is bizarre, but I've heard of stranger things in this day and age. I read about one dude who went to a funeral every day (total stranger's funerals, no less), just because he had nothing else to do!
Truth is stranger than fiction...
I was a little surprised to find out that Penelope had to die at one, though. And having Marmalade defecate on the deceased was just plain wrong.
Still, a good story, and that bit of humor at the end was a nice touch!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and I hope to see you around "SCREAMS!!!"  more in the future!
Hope you're going alright!

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Review of my diary  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (3.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Hello there, pure-mase'!
I understand your situation, and I totally admire you for trying to perfect your English. It's not easy, but having worked around people that didn't speak the same language as I did, I slowly learned some of it. Not a lot of it, but enough to get me around.
However, writing in a foreign language isn't going to be easy, so I encourage you to keep trying. Perhaps read a lot pieces on here, or maybe even buy an online language learning service. They have a new one out now called 'Babbel'. Here's a link:

https://welcome.babbel.com/en/circular-flags-revie...

I can't vouch for how good it is, but there's several other ones out there. But you should definitely try to read as much English as you can to get familiar with how the English language works. I should warn you though, it's kind of a funny language, but please don't despair! You've already got the basics down, so you'll only get better as time goes on!
Keep on writing (and reading), my friend, and welcome to Writing.Com! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Young at Heart  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*

Hi there, Maryann, and happy 17th 'birthday' on here!
Other than the last lonely 8 years of my life, I honestly don't remember ever NOT having a dog! Since I was born and for 45 years after I constantly had a 'best friend' at my side, most of which were Great Danes (gentle giants). I watched them grow up from puppies and get old, but like you say, they were still young at heart.
Seeing that gray muzzle on your own 14 year old best friend there brings back a lot of memories, and I thank you for that!
For such a short poem, it still says a thousand words!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!
PS-the only reason I haven't had a dog for so long is because of my living situation, but as soon as I move back to the West coast (where I belong!) next year, that's going to change immediately! *Bigsmile*

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Review of What? Me Worry?  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Buenos dias, Paul!
This is good! Our parents were a lot wiser than we ever gave them credit for, and I wish I'd paid more attention to some of the axioms my folks handed down to me!
I'll say this though: having that drop of ice cream hit you in the leg and snap those memories back into your head was a different way of telling this, but it worked. And as for tying a piece of string around my finger? I was the same way! What the heck do I have this string tied on my finger for? *Laugh*
One niggle, one comment:
'several times I tied a string for something...' (Several)
'It’s all about how I feel, not how things make me feel.' (that's really good! I'm definitely going to start using that as my 'mantra'! 'What? Me worry?' pretty much belongs to Alfred E. Neuman of MAD fame! *Laugh* OK. In truth he was conceived as a campaign postcard for Roosevelt in the 1930's! I kid you not!)
Remember that saying, 'Out of the mouths of babes'? Maybe that should update that to say 'Out of the mouths of our elders'! *Rolling*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Paul! Thanks for sharing this, and have really gnarly evening!

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Review of What if...  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Ken!
I thought this was really, really good! I love the idea of you going back in time to your childhood and competing in that spelling bee, only to have some bizarre word like ‘squamulose’ thrown at you and get eliminated! And even though that was the focal point of the story, I also like how you brought it full circle with the older you sitting there at the beginning smoking a cigarette and drinking a cup of coffee while the dew covered cobweb lulls you into your reverie, and then finding out at the end that where you were sitting was an asylum!
The irony of that can be taken as either humorous or serious, but I understood it to be the latter, and I’ll tell you why.
Something just like this happened to me when I was participating in a school spelling bee in 6th grade! For two weeks I studied my a** off memorizing all these big words , and the very first time I was called up they gave me the word ‘zeal'! Now I’m guessing your story is also loosely based on a real life experience, (but perhaps sans that word ‘squamulose’), and if so, like you, I remember that like it was yesterday; I’ll never forget that word or what it means or where I was or how I felt when they gave me that damn word! Confused, embarrassed, angry! All because of a stupid 4 letter word that I’d never studied for or even heard of! *Angry*
Needless to say, it’s NOT spelled Z-E-L-E!
Excellent piece, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for chuckles (and the memories, I think!), and have a fantastic day!
By the way, your point about being over-pressured by parents was not lost on me!

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Review of Keep it Secret!  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi, Genipher!
This is pretty good! And I can totally understand how this could happen. I was once in the process of still editing one of my stories when I got an email. When I opened it there was a review of the story pointing out my errors (misspellings, etc.) before I was going to ‘release’ it to the masses! Normally I keep my items private before I release them, but on that one occasion I didn’t. I was also a little surprised that somebody would notice I was adding a story to my port so quickly!
I particularly like how you told this. You didn’t give too many descriptions of your surroundings, but I could picture you sitting there at your computer with your daughter trying to tell you what was wrong just by the conversation!
Flawless spelling and grammar, and the whole piece read smoothly. Great ending too!
On a side note, I know this was for a contest, but this really isn’t a bad idea! I don’t know anything about coding or programming, but I think something like this could be done, and it would be fun!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Genipher! Thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful day!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Bon jour, PureSciFi!
Hmm. This is different, but I've wrote some even stranger things.
The idea of the peanut butter and jelly having this argument was a neat concept, and even though they go together 'like peanut butter and jelly' (as opposed to water and oil), I can see why they'd be arguing over who was the favorite.
Some of their arguments seemed rather petty though, but then again, I can't really see what else they'd have to make their cases.
Overall, nice job!
I was a tad confused at the end though about just who was claiming to be the real victor, but I'm guessing it was the bread, right? You weren't exactly clear with that since you mentioned the bags and the knife there too.
A few tiny niggles:
'she picks randomly.' ('She'- 4th line from the top)
Would you two quick arguing. (quit)
We already settle(d) who she likes the best.
And the last of the lid's was being tightened (lids)
Otherwise, well done! I'll certainly be thinking about this piece and keeping my ears open the next time I make a peanut butter and jelly sandwich! *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, PureSciFI, and have a fantastic day!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Howdy, Xarthin!
This is really good for your first story here! And rather unique! Normally I see Newbie's stories being about their feelings (gag!) or their lost love (another gag!), but you wrote a piece about something very relevant in today's world!
Bravo on that count!
I like this conversation between these two ghosts, and whether you were trying for a surprise ending or not, you still did a nice job of writing it. And it appears you did a bit of research for this or have some previous knowledge of atomic bombs--the line about only the victim's shadows remaining is very true in the case of both Hiroshima and Nagasaki.
I'm not sure how old you are since you don't say in your bio, but I was born shortly after the Cuban missile crisis, but raised during the cold war, and the idea of superpowers having the ability to blow this world up a thousand times over is not only frightening, but insane as well! What the hell are these people thinking?!?
Sorry, I digress.
I like how you have these two discussing this subject. The conversation felt natural and realistic, and that back history you used of Rudolph crashing his fighter jet into her school was a nice touch.
God forbid the world ever has to experience something like this! A nuclear winter? *Shock2* Hopefully we learned our lesson with Hiroshima and Nagasaki! I'm keeping my fingers crossed, anyway!
Sorry to be so picky, but I did spot a couple of niggles in an otherwise really good piece:
‘the same(,) old uniform worn by students’ (don’t need that comma)
“And boom! We know the rest"(.) (should be inside the quotation marks)
“And mankind gets a permanent F in history." (Perfect line, and so very true! Even though the bombs in Japan did end the war more quickly.)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Xarthin! Thanks for sharing this, and have a really groovy day! *Wink*

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Review of Show & Tell  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Wuzzup, Laurie?
This is pretty freaky! To be honest, I wasn't sure where you were going with this at first and I was almost loosing hope for it, but then you got it up to speed by having Laura 'bring' Alex up to the head of the class.
(by the way, when I read the word 'shower' in the 3rd line, I thought you might have misread the prompt since this was a show and tell scene! *Facepalm*)
I also enjoyed Miss Wilkin's skepticism about Laura and Alex's 'display' and how Laura proved to her that it really happened! That description of the bloody flesh covered balloon was perfect!
One tiny niggle:
'The whole class stare(s) at Laura'
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! 'Twas a pleasure to read, and may your day be filled with bloody flesh covered balloons lots of sunshine, pretty flowers, and happy thoughts! *Smirk2*

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Review of English is Easy  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there, TGFisher!
I'm born and raised here in the United States, and I've never had a problem with the English language. BUT, I pity anyone who tries to learn it, and for exactly the poem you wrote here!
The English language, when it come to spelling anyway, is insane! Cough, tough, through, bough! And those are just the tip of the ice berg!
I remember seeing the comedian Gallagher doing a bit about this on one of his shows, and it was hilarious! And he did it the same way you did by telling a story!
Great job, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for the laughs, and have a wonderful day/evening/tomorrow!

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Review of The Bully  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello there, Izzyb!
This is a neat letter informing this horrible monster that you will no longer let it hold you prisoner, as it does with so many other people, and you did great job of just not writing this, but standing up to Depression as well!
And you couldn't have used a better metaphor for this!
Depression runs not just in individuals, but it's also been known to sometimes run in entire families! What's even worse is that a lot of other problems are either associated with this, or are caused by this! My oldest daughter has bipolar syndrome, and to say she's depressed a lot of the time would be a major understatement!
Anyway, you did great job with this, my friend! And I'm so happy for you that you stood up to it and didn't let it take you down any more! I just wish more people could see this and how you've done it!
Nice ending, too! *Smirk*
My only suggestion would be to maybe break this into paragraphs if that's possible, and maybe put it in a larger font?
Kee ponw ritin gon, Izzyb, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of “I Hate You!”  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Bon jour, Paul!
This is not just a nice piece, but it's also a nice educational piece about to get along with your children, and I did a great job of explaining it! Seriously! My daughters are both grown now, but I wish I'd known how to deal with their anger I situations like this! It would have so much easier!
I thought the idea of Dad negotiating with his daughter (give a little, take a little, so to speak) was a great idea, and I love how the piece starts with "I HATE YOU!" and ends with "I love you."
Kids. *FacePalm* What are you gonna do? You can't hate 'em, you can't eat 'em! *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! I can see why this won the contest. Congratulations!

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Review of Holding onto Hope  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello there, Kathy!
This is nice little piece about hope and having to live in a not-so-good environment, and you did a nice job of writing it. It's inspirational too. In fact, I think I've lived in that city once!
Great spelling and telling but I did spot a few comma niggles (sorry to be so picky):
“Why should if finish high school if I could get a job in the factory?”(,) I replied(.) (you need the period, but you don't need that comma-the question mark closes the quotation)
“God has bigger plans for you, and so do I”(,) Ma responded. (that comma should be inside the quotation marks since there isn't any other punctuation marks [a ? or ! or a period to close the quotation])
' with a steeple so high it looked like it pierced the sky' (nice simile!)
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Tell Me Again  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Osiyo, Pernell! (That's Cherokee for hello)
This isn't bad. I like the idea of Melvin bashing that raccoon's brains in, and you did a job with the prompt words, but I'm a little confused. I'm guessing that there was more than just the raccoon who had their brains bashed in, but how could she have made the call to the cops (if she did--you have a question mark at the end of that last sentence, as if the cop is asking him if she was the one who called)? See what I mean?
Or was there a raccoon at all?
Or did I miss something?
Hmmm. Looks like Melvin's going to down to the station for questioning either way...
Great spelling and telling, but I did spot a couple of tiny typos (sorry to be so picky!):
'against the doorway with on(e) hand on his hip'
"(I)'m not done with you yet."
Kee ponw ritin gon, Pernell! Thanks for sharing this, have a great evening/tomorrow, and good luck in the contest!

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello there, Wondering Why.
I can tell you're confused about an apparent relationship, and I wish I could help you more than these words. But maybe they'll ease your pain a little.
When we fall in love or get into a relationship, we often give too much of ourselves to the other one, and sadly, some people are more takers than givers. I've reviewed a lot of Newbie pieces like this, and it seems that almost of the time it's the givers who are writing!
People need to know when they get into relationships that it should be 50/50! Far too often I see people losing themselves because the other won't give any of theirselves!
It's not your position to be wondering why, WW. You shouldn't have to! If this other person is doing this to you and won't give you any answers, then is it really worth it?
Sorry, but that's my take on this.
I do hope things work out for you, but if not, please remember these words from somebody who's been in your shoes waaaay too many times!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review of The Pier  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Bon jour, Steve Michael!
This isn’t bad for your first piece on here. So far...
I like the plot idea and how you brought it full circle with you being on the pier, as well as the back story you gave us in the middle about ‘Big Top’ and his minions, but then you left us hanging. I don’t know if this is beginning of a longer work or if it was an assignment of some kind (you said in the byline ‘Using a writing prompt’).
The spelling and grammar were good for the most part, and as a lover/reader/writer and judge of horror ("SCREAMS!!!" ), I really think you’ve got something here. It’s just that ambiguous ending I have a problem with.
A few tiny niggles you might want to check:
‘While other badges were takin(g) favors...’
‘Cliché(,) right?’
‘Or it means I'm not maikn it back off this pier.’ (or are you using this as your dialect—‘slang’)
I pretend im not literally about to sh** myself...’ (I’m)
Please know that I’m not criticizing your work! These are just my suggestions and my own humble opinion, and I’m merely trying to help!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Steve, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you’re going to love it here!
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi, Shannon, and happy 13th ‘birthday’ on here!
And speaking of birthdays, this piece is amazing! I can’t tell you how much you’ve changed my outlook and philosophy on aging, and I now know that I will never look at the same again!
To be honest, until I turned 50 I never really had an opinion on aging. But these last few years has changed; I’m recognizing my mortality a lot more, and the thought of death comes to mind more frequently. But at the same time I feel lucky, having seen many of my friends pass on a lot younger than I am.
Sometimes I wonder why.
But this piece really opened my eyes, and your examples couldn’t have been any better. Granted, that example of little Brandon broke my heart and did bring a tear to this old Gargoyle’s eye, but I understand why you used it: you were trying to make your point, and you sure did!
You’re only 3 years younger (almost—35 months) than I am, and I absolutely love your outlook on life! It wasn’t too long ago that when somebody asked me how my day was, I’d say, “I woke up.” But I wasn’t thinking positively about it. I didn’t see that I was waking up to new sunrises, or hearing more laughs, or seeing more smiles!
What’s more is I wasn’t appreciating the time I’ll have left to enjoy my watching my 4 Grandannachildren grow up!
Thank you so much for sharing this, Shannon! I might even copy this (if that would be alright with you) and hang it up on my wall in case I ever lose my perspective again on how lucky I am each and every day to still be here!
Kee ponw ritin gon, have a wonderful life, and may you have many, many more wonderful birthdays both on WdC and in real life!

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Review of Chocolates  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Kyle!
Hmm. Well, I thought this was very well written, and you've done a heckuva job of getting our curiosity up, but then you left us high and dry. So I'm kind of at odds with how I should rate this.
Don't get me wrong; as I said, you're spelling and grammar are flawless (thank you!), and you've grabbed our attention, but you could have at least said 'To be continued', which is hopefully what you're going to do!
However, since I see that this is for a contest, I'll give you the benefit of the doubt because I do know that there's one contest on here (or was) that called for cliffhangers like this.
But now after checking, I don't see it anymore...
OK. Here's what I'm going to do. You finish this, or at least continue it, and I'll re-review this and raise my rating. You've got a good piece going here so far, Kyle, so don't keep us in the dark! I want to know if your dad was keeping a dead body in that office, or parts of dead bodies, or jars of eyeballs, or something!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Kyle, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Ahoy, Jennifer!
What a neat, albeit disgusting poem! *Laugh* But I really did enjoy it!
Yes, those carnival rides are fun, aren't they! Especially on a full stomach!
You did a great job of describing these abominable and terrorizing 'joy rides', and what's even better is that now I can share a memory of my own!
When I was about 7 or 8 my mother took me to the Alaska State fair. I ate a lot of cotton candy. I got on the 'Octopus', which in case you don't know, is a torture ride from Hell with a bunch of rotating arms on it with each arm having several cars that also rotate. So you're going around and around and around while you're going around and around and around...
Needless to say, that cotton candy didn't do much for me, and instead of trying to hold my stomach contents in or releasing them into said car, I just let loose, which resulted in a bunch of that half-digested cotton candy spewing out around and around and around on other folks who were on the ride!
Oh, lovely day that was! Funny thing is I didn't get anything on me, but there was a lot other folks weren't too happy! *Smirk2*
*Music1* Memories... *Music2* I still remember that day like it was yesterday!
Great job, Jennifer!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, have a wonderful day, and once again, CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR PROMOTION TO PREFFERED AUTHOR!

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